Development pro forma V2

Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
JJ Rae

Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like that my image has multi textures from an
eagle on its body, which defines where the
colours of its feathers change.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would mainly spend more time trying to
improve the edges of the body, as well as
smoothing out the shape to create a feather
texture on the edges.

Evaluation
I like about my image that I have managed to
create multiple textures for the background as
well for the dolphins skin.
I would mainly change the colours & use
different colour ranges to create a more suitable
dolphin image.

Evaluation
I like about my 2 text based images, are that I have
managed to give them both a colourful look, and
embed and image within the text itself.
I would improve what images I used in my text,
making them more clearer and having specific
snapshots to accommodate my quotes. I would also
change the outline colour to try make the image
and the text have a clash, but it is not too intense
for the audience.

Evaluation
I like how my images have changed context and become more
abstract. This shows me I am able to create a wide range of imagery
using different abilities and textures to enhance how they look. I also
like how I have managed to maintain facial features & major details
while changing the appearance of the image.
I would create an image which is close to a real image which has been
used, like a comic book image, or something more extraordinary. This
would change my ability to create more images to a realistic look. I
would also use a different image to try have mixed lighting in my
image, which would show the flaws in the image when I edit.

Evaluation
I like how we captured each motion in multiple images.
This helps to show the different emotions which are going
through people all the time. It also has difference scene
settings which also add a good effect to show emotion.
I would likely change the way I operated for the task as I
didn’t tend to find a lot of happiness & excitement. Since
it was limited to a small area, it is harder to capture the
emotions what are running through people.

Evaluation
I like that my illustration shows detail into the body
& characteristics from what it is. I have added small
details which give it a more effective look, and I
have used the similar colour schemes to the image.
If I was to improve, I would maybe of chosen an
easy picture to illustrate, with a wider range of
colours in the picture. I would also change the fact
that I have used similar colours to do the image and
not that actual colours needed.

Proposal
Dimensions
10 pages, with the size of an A5 sheet with dimensions; 14.8 x 21 cm.
Export Format
PDF – Portable Document Format
Advantages: Usually non editable after saved. Can be opened by almost anything. Can
flick through the document in ‘page like’ format.
Disadvantages: File size can become quite large. User must have Adobe Reader plug in
to read document. Formatted to print vertically, monitors show horizontally.
Story Overview
Goldilocks is out for a walk & gets lost in the woods. She stumbles across a large wooden log hut, so she enters. She finds 3
different cakes on a table side, the first one covered in white icing and covered with sugary sweets, the 2nd cake covered in pink
icing and covered in small hearts, and the 3rd one covered in chocolate. She tastes the first one & second one, which she spits out
as it is not to her liking, one being too sweet, and the other too dry. Tries the 3rd cake and loves it, she eats it all. After feeling full
she moves on to finding somewhere to sit, she comes across 3 bean bags. The first one is too mushy and she sinks inside it, the 2nd
is too hard and she cant be comfy, the 3rd is just right until she pops it and all the beans come out. Then she feels tired so she goes
to find a bed to sleep in. Instead she finds 3 hammocks in the garden, and decides to sleep in them. The first one is too low down
when she is in it, the 2nd one is too springy, and the 3rd just right, she sleeps in the hammock. Later the owners come back to their
house, 3 wolves. They notice that their cakes have been eaten, bean bags sat on and broken, and hammocks touched. Goldilocks
wakes up and see’s the wolves, and decides to run away from them. The wolves, in a hurry, chase her out of the woods. END.

Production Methods
To produce my pages, I will be including an image of some sort related to the text,
and the images will have rotoscopes & shapes on them to create a more defined
look for my own characters. I have chosen to do this as illustrations and
photographic methods would consume more time than I have to create my book.
Also I have more skills with rotoscoping & shapes to create & edit tasks, which can
give me an edge on my images.
Audience
I am targeting an audience of both children & adults. I need my book to appeal to
both groups to generate more popularity for my book. The ages I will focus on are
between ages 5-8, so children can read the book with an adult or with help from
the adult. The location my book will be aimed at is around the world, as the original
story is a popular fairy tale in the English language. I will also focus on trying to
create a rhythm for the book, to keep it at a nice pace.
Deadline
Thursday 16th October 2014.

What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The proposal is very well thought out and has had a
lot of detail put in to it, which always goes down
smooth. I like how the time and effort seems to
already be paying off as you have gathered a nice
and appropriate set of images.
Although the book is on a flying start and I already
want to read it, everything seems a little bit too
original. Maybe write it from somebody else’s angle
and not goldilocks’s? but I love the wolf idea, good
shout. But nevertheless, I’d buy this book.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
One big strength is the time and effort the writer
has put into the planning of the book. It seems you
have already put in staggering amounts of thought
into it as the images you have gathered seem to
have taken a lot of effort.
I honestly cannot think of anything that could be
improved.

The story overview is extremely detailed and
imaginative; it seems like a lot of thought was put
into it. Good range of information on target
audience.
I can’t really see any areas that need further
improvement.
further developed?
Idea generation presents lots of information. Mood
board has an assortment of images. Lots of
information on the initial mind map.
Maybe find more images for the mood boards, for
example more pictures that can be used to base a
setting off.

The proposal is extremely well detailed, with a lot of
clear explanations and reasoning for all the creative
decisions involved in the book.
You could include some more details in the
audience section of the proposal, looking into more
criteria by which you can assess what your
audience will be. Such as by the criteria’s of gender
or social class, or you could state that the book is
appropriate for people of any gender or social
class.
further developed?
The idea generation mood board spans multiple
pages and covers a vast array of important features
of the book, as you have created individual mood-boards
for multiple aspects of the book, and
therefore can use them as a good source of
inspiration.
You could possibly look at a few more different
fonts in each of the mood boards rather than just
limiting it to one, so that you will have a larger
range that you have looked at already when it
comes to choosing your fonts in the project.

Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
My feedback I received was very good, & has made me think about the positives &
negatives to my book. I do have some feedback which is there to help me with more
ideas & to have a better range on what I can do to the idea generation & enhance my
book as a whole.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I got a lot of feedback which focuses on the detail & explanations for my book. I would
agree with this feedback as I have targeted to look into ideas with great details & note
down everything I think of/use within my book. I would also agree with the feedback
given about improvements, which include about adding more detail towards the range
of how the story is played out & details on my target audience. I also agree on some of
the improvement comments which refer to adding different styles & more font, more
images to show my general idea & to give it a boost to start it off.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I would disagree with how some of my feedback says that some more information
should be added on my mood boards, & how some more images would create a bigger
idea. I disagree with this as I have thought through what is the initial story, and how I
want to adapt it to be my own unique story.

Storyboards
Change the ending to have the wolves
only chasing Goldilocks.

Original Script
Original Script goes here with link to where it came from

Final Script
Final script goes here.
Page 1: Goldilocks is walking in a forest, finds a house as it is getting dark.
Page 2: Goldilocks enters the house, and smells cake. She goes to the kitchen & eats
a bit of each cake, & eats the whole 3rd cake.
Page 3: She goes to find somewhere to sit as she is full. Wonders into the living
room, and sits on a bean bag, 1st too mushy, 2nd to hard, 3rd just right but pops.
Page 4: Heads outside to find some hammocks, she decides to sleep in them. She
dislikes the first and second hammock as one is too low down, and the other is too
tight and high up. She sleeps in the third hammock which is just right.
Page 5: Wolves are coming home from shopping. They enter the house
Page 6: Wolves see cakes have been eaten, thrown on the floor and baby wolf’s
cake all gone.
Page 7: They follow the crumb trail to the living room, to find their bean bags sat in,
and baby wolf’s popped.
Page 8: They follow the trail of beans into the garden to see their hammocks have
been occupied. They stumble to baby wolf’s hammock which Goldilocks is still
sleeping in. Baby wolf screams to her to get out.
Page 9: Goldilocks see’s the wolves, gets up and runs away, wolves chase her into
the forest & Goldilocks never returns again.
(NOTE) Can add individual pages for the cake, bean bags & hammock scenes.

Digital Flat Plans
Text will be at the top & bottom
of the pages. Images in the
middle of the page.
Text will be at the top & bottom
of the pages. Images in the
middle of the page.
Text will be at the bottom of the
pages. Images will be in the
top/middle of the page.

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