Research Papers, Day Seven: Drafting, beginning to write, bringing it all together, and sample text about salt mining.

1. Research Papers
Drafting

2. Writing a First Draft
• Now that your research is done and you’ve made a
good plan in your outline, it’s time to begin actually
putting words to paper.
• Don’t worry about making everything perfect this
first time around—that’s why they call it a draft.
• Just get all of your ideas down in a way that makes
sense.

3. Keys to Effective Drafting

4. Keys to Effective Drafting
1. Write with your purpose, form and audience in mind. Ask
yourself these questions as you write:
a) What do I want my readers to learn from my report?
b) How will I organize my writing to make it easy to understand?
2. Use your first paragraph to introduce your topic, get your reader’s
attention, and present your thesis statement.
3. In the next few paragraphs, tell about what is important for your
topic.
4. Remember to cite your sources in your paper and list those
sources alphabetically on a works cited page (more details later).

5. Citing Sources Within the Paper
• When you have all the information:
• The most common citation lists the author’s last name and the page
number in parentheses:
• “Marco Polo discovered that Tibetans used salt cakes stamped with the
imperial seal of the great Kublai Khan as money” (Kemper 70).
• If you already named the author in your sentence, or if you’re quoting
from the same item for a second time within the same paragraph, just
include the page number in parentheses.
• Steve Kemper explains that during the Civil War, the North sent troops
to attack the South’s salt producers in order to make the South weaker
(71).

6. Citing Sources Within the Paper
• When you DO NOT have all the information:
• Some sources do not list an author. In those cases use the title (or a
shortened version of it) and the page number:
• At first, the salt was used mainly for storing meat and fish and for making ice
cream (Detroit 167).
• Some sources, especially websites, do not use page numbers. In those cases,
just list the author:
• The seven-foot-tall tires for the dump trucks had to be compressed and bound
with straps to fit down the shaft (Zacharias).
• IF a source does not list the author or page number, use the title.
• Early settlers would collect that liquid and boil away the water to get the salt
(“Dry”).

7. 5-Paragraph Essay Form
Say what you’re going to say, say it, then say that you said it.
1. Opening Paragraph
a) Remember the funnel!
b) End with your thesis statement.
2. First Body Paragraph (first point about topic)
3. Second Body Paragraph (second point about topic)
4. Third Body Paragraph (third point about topic)
5. Conclusion Paragraph
a) Reverse the funnel.
b) Start by restating your thesis.

8. Opening Paragraph Approaches
• Start with an interesting fact with broad appeal.
• Twelve hundred feet below the ground, an enormous mine has been
operating almost nonstop for more than a century.
• Ask an interesting question.
• How many people know that there are cars and trucks driving on roads
more than 1,200 feet below the city of Detroit?
• Start with a quotation.
• “The only dirty part of this job is getting to work,” says salt miner Joel
Payton.

9. Opening Paragraph Example
Twelve hundred feet below the ground, an enormous mine
has been operating almost nonstop for more than a century. A
hundred miles of tunnels connect its huge chambers. It has
underground roads for cars, trucks, and mining machines. This
mine produces hundreds of tons of “rock” every day.
However, the rock from this mine is not gold, or iron ore, or
even coal; it is salt. This enormous, hundred-year-old salt mine
lies beneath the city of Detroit, Michigan.

10. Developing the Middle Part
• The middle part of your paper should start by stating why
your topic is important.
• Each paragraph should focus on one aspect of your topic.
• Each paragraph should begin with a topic sentence covering one
main point about your overall topic. This sentence is sort of a mini-
thesis sentence for just this paragraph.
• Use your outline to help you keep your focus.

11. First Body Paragraph Example
Salt is more important than most people realize. Wars have been
fought over it. In ancient China, salt coins were used for money, and
Roman soldiers were often paid in salt, which is where the word
“salary” comes from. Bettina Werner, an artist known as the “Salt
Queen” says, “Salt is like a fifth element, it’s so important to life”
(Lin). In the human body, salt carries electrical signals that keep a
person alive. To stay healthy, a person needs to eat about three
pounds of salt a year (Modern). Salt is also used to preserve meat
and fish, to tan leather, to soften water, and to make many different
chemicals. However, most of the salt from the Detroit mine is now
used to melt ice and snow on streets and highways (Zacharias).

12. Second Body Paragraph Example
Scientists say that the Detroit mine digs into a bed of salt that is
several hundred million years old. From 600 million to 230 million
years ago, seawater flooded the middle of North America many
times. As sun and wind evaporated the water, sea salt was deposited
on the submerged land. According to the Salt Institute, “Trillions of
tons of salt, collected in a layer 400 to 1,600 feet thick, reached from
western Michigan all the way to New York . . . . Eventually, it was
covered by silt that became rock more than 1,000 feet thick” (“Dry”).
Later, when people came to the area to settle, they found springs of
salty water bubbling from the ground. They would collect that liquid
and boil away the water to get the salt.

13. Third Body Paragraph Example
In 1896, the Detroit salt mine was started in order to dig the salt out of
the ground. It began as a shaft 1,200 feet deep and about six feet wide. At
first, the salt was used mainly for storing meat and fish and for making ice
cream (Detroit 167). In 1940, though, Detroit became the first city to use
rock salt on icy roads. Other cities soon followed Detroit’s example, and the
mine began selling most of its salt to road crews (“Dry”). In 1983, however,
low sales and competition from Canadian mines caused the Detroit mine to
close. Crystal Mines bought the mine, hoping to store hazardous wastes
there. In 1985, while waiting for a permit, they ran public tours of the mine.
“Crystal Mines permit was declined in 1997 and [they] then sold the mine to
the Detroit Salt Company,” explained Kim Roberts, manager of the mine
(Roberts). The mine was reopened, and it again become one of the main
sources of road salt in the United States.

14. This Example Continues . . .
• This example paper continues beyond what I ask for
in your assignment. I ask only that you write three
body paragraphs.
• This sample paper was divided into history of the
mine, the mine today, and the mine’s future.
• I will share the rest of the example paper so that you
have further examples of well-written paragraphs,
and you can see how the conclusion fits into the
whole.

15. Fourth Body Paragraph Example
Some people call the Detroit salt mine a city beneath a city.
It covers 1,400 acres under Detroit and its suburbs. That’s
equal to 1,300 football fields. Also, it has more than 50 miles
of roads where construction equipment, trucks, and cars drive.
To get these vehicles down the shaft, they had to be taken apart,
carried down in pieces, and reassembled in underground
workshops. The seven-foot-tall tires for the dump trucks had
to be compressed and bound with straps to fit down the shaft
(Zacharias).

16. Fifth Body Paragraph Example
The mining equipment includes many different types of big
electric trucks. One type has a giant chain saw on the front, which
cuts a deep groove into a salt wall at floor level. Then a drilling-
machine truck bores a pattern of holes 20 feet deep into the wall to
hold dynamite or other explosives. The blast from these explosives
breaks hundreds of tons of rock from the wall in huge chunks.
Trucks with giant shovels then scoop up tons at a time and trop them
into dump trucks. The dump trucks carry the chunks back to the
shaft, where a crusher breaks them into smaller pieces and sorting
machines separate the pieces by size. Finally, buckets that can hold
nine tons of salt run up a conveyor to the surface. There the salt is
packaged and shipped (“Dry”).

17. Sixth Body Paragraph Example
The Salt Institute explains that the mine is carved out in a
“room-and-pillar” method. Each room is as big and high as a
school gymnasium. Between rooms, the miners leave pillars of
salt about 60 feet wide to hold up the ceiling. This type of
mining gets about 70 percent of the salt from the ground,
leaving the other 30 percent as support pillars. Because the salt
bed has never had an earthquake or other shock, it lies very flat,
so the pattern of rooms and pillars stretches level from one end
of the mine to the other. According to the Salt Institute, this
mine “has never experienced a collapse or mine fatality”
(“Dry”).

18. Seventh Body Paragraph Example
Miners say that the mine is a very clean and healthy place to
work. The temperature stays a cool 58 degrees year-round.
There are no bugs, rats, or other animals living in the mine,
because there is nothing for them to eat (Zacharias). “I love
working here. The air you breathe in the mine feels great. It’s
very clean, with no allergens or mold like on the surface. I’ve
worked here for 15 years, and I wouldn’t want to be anywhere
else,” shared Mike Yeling, a miner (Yeling).

19. Conclusion Paragraph
• Your final paragraph should sum up your report and bring it
to a thoughtful close.
• State any conclusions you have drawn and the reasons for
them.
• Other possible endings include:
• Remind the reader of the overall main idea (your thesis sentence).
• Provide information about the future of your topic.
• Make a final observation for the reader.

20. Conclusion Paragraph Example
The Detroit salt mine could have a very interesting future.
According to geologists, there is enough salt to last for 70
million years (“Dry”). Many people worry, though, that the
runoff from road salt is having a negative effect on our rivers
and lakes. If people stop using salt on icy streets and highways,
there may not be enough business to keep the Detroit mine
open. In that case, the mine could be used to store important
documents, films, and artwork, as some other salt mines do
(Tanner). If nothing else, the Detroit salt mine could be turned
into a public museum because it is an important part of the
city’s history.

21. Don’t Forget the Homework
• Write your opening paragraph, complete with thesis
statement.
• Create an outline to give me the direction of where
you are going on the paper.
• Due on Friday, January 25th, 2013 at the beginning of
class.
• Worth 100 points. Do not earn a zero!