The document provides an evaluation of a presentation to clients and suggestions for improvement. It states that the presentation went reasonably well but could have been improved by providing more information about the organization, making more eye contact, and speaking more clearly. Feedback indicated the sixth form script lacked depth and persuasiveness. More needed to be done to sell the organization and show what sets it apart. The production schedule and equipment list were also incomplete. For the advertising scripts, using a more enthusiastic actor or directing them to speak more enthusiastically could make the ads more persuasive and reflective of the school environment. James' school advert and Eren's sixth form advert were praised for effectively pairing the music with the actors' voices.

1. Evaluation
I believe that went reasonably well and that we did a good job in presenting our scripts and
ideas to the panel of professional that we presented too, I also believe that we all spoke
loud enough so that the clients could understand well what we were trying to get across.
However I think that we could’ve been a lot better if we had given the clients more
information about our organisation and what we are setting out to do, and if we had made
eye contact with the people we were presenting to as we are the ones trying to sell our
product to them and we weren’t as confident as we could’ve been towards them and
though we spoke loud enough we needed to speak a bit more clearly as we for a lot of the
presentation just looked down and spoke into our scripts instead of looking up and
projecting our voices clearly.
Also our Sixth form script needs a little work on it as we got praise for the school advert
being good but we received criticismfor the sixth form advert lacking depth and not being
as persuasive as the school advert. And from the feedback that we received we found out
that we needed to sell our script and organisation more to them and show them what sets
us apart from other organisations, more information about how our customers would
contact the school and we also didn’t include our Production schedule for the day of
recording so we would need to add that to our presentation so that the panel has an idea of
what we will be doing on the day of recording. And lastly we could probably include more
information about the equipment and actors that we would use as our list on our
PowerPoint was a bit scarce and we would use a lot more equipment than what we listed.
Post production of the advert.
If we had produced our adverts again I would either have gotten someone with a more
enthusiastic voice than our actors or got them to speak a little more enthusiastically
because in our adverts we weren’t enthusiastic enough and therefore it makes the advert a
little bit dull and I think that could potentially make it harder to make people come to
Ringwood sixth form and school because the advert doesn’t reflect the school environment
that well.
James Had the best school advert because he puts the music with the Actors voice really
well and I think that it really would persuade people to come to Ringwood School and the
information in the advert is very clear.
Eren had the best sixth form advert as similarly he had fit the music with the actors voice
really well and also made it really easy to understand what the actor is trying to say in the
advert.