Here are descriptions of the actions using strong verbs: - The man furiously pounded his foot against the door, trying to break it down. - The lion stealthily crept through the grass, silently stalking its prey. - The rabbit vigorously dug its paws into the dirt, rapidly tossing soil behind it as it burrowed a hole. - The getaway car wildly skidded around the corner, recklessly careening down the street to escape. - The dog frantically sprinted after the cat, hastily pursuing it across the yard.

1. Personal Narrative
Think of a time in your life that was particularly influential. Maybe you’ve
been on an amazing vacation or adventure. Maybe you learned a life
lesson from an unexpected source. Events from our life and the stories we
tell make us who we are and shape aspects of our personality. List a few
events from your life that have had an impact (changed the way you
see the world or yourself) either positively or negatively.

2. Characteristics of a Narrative
Essay
 involves readers in the story.
 relates events in sequence.
 includes detailed observations of
people, places, and events.
 presents important changes, contrasts, or
conflicts and creates tension.
 is told from a point of view--usually the author's
point of view. Focuses on connection between
past events, people, or places and the present.
 makes a point, communicates a main idea or
dominant impression.

3. More characteristics
 Generally written in the first person, that
is, using I.
 Rely on concrete, sensory details to
convey their point. These details should
create a unified, forceful effect, a
dominant impression.
 Include these story conventions: a plot,
including setting and characters; a climax;
and an ending.

4. Planning
 first, select an incident worthy of
writing about
 second, find relevance in that incident
(writers might ask themselves what
about the incident provided new
insights or awareness)
 finally, dredge up details which will
make the incident real for readers.

5. Suggestions for essay
 Did you ever have a long-held belief or assumption shattered?
 Can you trace the change to one event or a series of events?
 Is there a particular experience that you observed that has had
a profound influence on your life?
 Is there a person that who has greatly influenced you?
 Is there a decision that you had to make, or a challenge or an
obstacle that you faced?
 Was there ever a moment in your life when you decided to
reform, to adopt a whole new outlook?
 How would you characterize your attempt? (Successful?
Unsuccessful? Laughable? Painful?)

6. Features of
Narrative Writing

7. Develop a Personal Voice when Writing
VOICE shows your personality when writing. The writing has a sound different from
everyone else's. It has feeling and emotion so that it does not sound boring. The reader
should be able to tell if you are happy or sad. The writer should be writing from the heart
and bring the topic to life for the reader.
Funny One day my mom took me to the circus. I
LOVE the circus. There are always some
very funny clowns. My favorite clown
there came up to me and told me he had
a secret for me. He got real close to me
and I thought he was going to whisper in
my ear when POW he squirted me in the
face with his water flower. I never
laughed so much. I had a great time at
the circus and will remember it for the
rest of my life.

8. Serious It was the day for the big test. I studied
all week and knew I was ready. I was
still a little bit nervous, but knew once I
started I would be fine. The teacher
asked us to get some books out to
read when we were finished so we
wouldn't bother the other kids if we
finished early. The test was a
breeze. When I was done I started to
read my favorite book.

9. Mysterious Yesterday when I was on my way to
the grocery store I saw a very strange
man. He had on a brown trench coat,
red hat and was carrying a purple
umbrella. I'm sure he was some kind
of investigator. As he began walking I
noticed he was just peeking over the
top of his coat and I could only see his
eyes. He was very sneaky
looking. I'm sure he was watching
somebody, I just wonder who!

10. Frightening As a baseball let me tell you I have some
pretty frightening experiences. Imagine
being hit by a hard bat. OUCH, I want to
scream every time someone hits me.
Then for the flight through the air. You
can't believe how scary that is. I am
always asking myself three questions.
Will someone catch me? Will I fly over
the fence and land with a hard thud? Or
will I just go bouncing across the field?
The next time you are frightened, stop
a minute and think about how I feel.
That is the true meaning of frightened!

11. Opening Sentences
The Opening Sentence
To write an opening sentence which will grab the reader’s attention.
Stories can start using the following ways:
Dialogue: “Hands in the air this is a stick up!” he hollered roughly.
A statement: The school principal had to collect the boy from the roof.
Problem: David didn’t know what to do: the school bully, Ted was
expecting him to hand over five dollars and all he had
was fifty cents.
Action: Without a moments hesitation, Maude Drinkwater lifted
the revolver and fired.
Description of people: Mr Sherman looked ordinary for someone who had just
solved one of the world’s most difficult maths problems.
Description of place: The sky was the colour of dish water.
Description of time: As the clock struck twelve it echoed around the hall.

12. Active Beginings
In order to capture your reader’s attention, the beginning of your story must be
interesting and lively enough to make your reader want to keep reading. One way to do
this is to begin with an action.
Directions: Revise each story beginning. Put your main character in the setting, and have
the character do something relevant to the story.
Example: One rainy day I went to the mall.
Revision: I splashed across the parking lot, yanked open the tall glass
door, dripping wet, stepped into the mall.
1. Hi. My name is Kate. This is a story about the time I went to the zoo.
Put Kate at the zoo doing something
2. This is a story about the time I built a robort in my basement.
Put yourself in the basement doing something
3. I will tell you about my adventure swimming at the lake
Put yourself at the lake doing something

13. Write an opening sentence for one of these stories using
the different ways to start a story:
• A mysterious stranger
• An accident
• An act of bravery
• The arrival of a new pet
• A win
• A loss

14. Exercise 1: The Keeper
1. What is meant by unblemished?
2. What is an expedition?
3. Do you think this book is written about the past, the present or the future?
4. What were the clues that gave you the answer to question 3? Discuss the reason.
5. Does the opening paragraph make you want to read on? Why/why not?

15. Exercise 2: Rocco
Here is an orientation that gives a setting.
1. Is it daytime or night-time? How do you know?
2. Is the youth sleeping peacefully? Give reasons for your answer.
3. What do you think the story is going to be about? Making reference to the text, give
reasons for your answer.

16. Improve your Plot
Who are your story’s main characters?
What are their main needs?(motives)
Who or what tries to stop or thwart them from
achieving their needs? (conflict)
Do the characters succeed or fail in achieving their
goals?
How do they succeed or fail? (resolution)

17. Exercise 1: Plot Development
The folowing extract from The Keeper is an example of a crisis in a plot.

18. Plot development: The Keeper
1. What is the setting in this extract?
2. Name the people who seemed to be present.
3. Where were Jean and the narrator:
a. at the beginning of the text?
b. when they saw the tiger?
4. How do you think the group felt after this crisis?
This text gives a good example of the rise and fall of a crisis within the plot.
There is a build up with all the action of trying to get out of the way of the tiger
and it leaping, then the feeling of relief when the animal is dead. Short quick
sentences: “Then it looked at me. It did not see me.” keep the feeling of
excitement and suspense going.

19. Create a setting
Write a setting that vividly portrays the background to the plot.
The setting is where the action is happening and when the action occurs ie. Time of
day, month, year.
Choose one of the following and write a short description of it. The description should
include:
time of day,
the weather,
the sights,
sound and smells.
•The beach
•Inside a restaurant
•A city street
•A favourite park
•A swamp

20. Add Phrases
Phrases add information and interest to short, dull sentences.
To add an adjectival phrase, you can ask questions like ‘how’, ‘when’, or ‘where’.
Adjectival phrases: The boy was a culprit.
The boy with a cheeky grin was a culprit.
Adverbial phrases: We skipped.
We skipped across the playground.
We skipped across the playground with great abandon
after our win in soccer.
Add phrases to:
1. The girl cried.
2. The door opened.
3. They killed his parents.
4. We worked.

21. Join Short Sentences
Sometimes short sentences can be combined to create longer, more interesting sentences.
Example
First Draft: The rosella was feeding in the tree. It was attacked by
another bird. It flew away
Revised: Attacked by another bird as it fed in the tree, the rosella
flew away.
Rewrite the following examples to turn each example into one interesting sentence.
1. It was Sunday. The cricket match was cancelled. The pitch had been ruined by rain
2. I was not pleased with my sister Natalie. She scribbled on my homework. I told mom.
3. I’ve been working all day. I’m tired. I think I’ll take a rest.
4. Every night for dinner we have boiled rice. I don’t like boiled rice. It is my least
favourite food.

22. Vary Sentence Length
When you vary your sentence lengths, it creates a pleasant rhythm.
A story can become boring if all the sentences are the same length.
Example
Listen to what is happening. These sentences have five words. Here are another five
words. Five more words to follow it. The sentences begin to drone. There is no variety
here. It’s like a stuck record. It goes on and on.
1. Write a five sentence story; the first sentence should have one word, the second
two words, the third three words and so on.
2. Write a five sentence story with a different number of words in each sentence.
3. Study sentence lenghts in a page from a published story.

23. Create Similes
LEARNING INTENTION: To liken something to something else, by using similes.
Examples: My attention was as far away as love on a
battlefield.
Her skin is pale as eggshells.
Complete the following:
1. The sun sank in the west like…
2. The baby opened its mouth for food like…
3. When he left, it was quiet…
4. The shadow hung on the wall like…
5. His words were as painful as…
6. The sun on the water was like…
7. On roller skates she looked as awkward as…
8. The sky was as blue as…
9. The clouds rolled across the sky like..
10. After our huge dinner of fish and chips, we felt like…

24. METAPHORS
A metaphor is like a simile. That's because it is a comparison that is
made between things, which is not always likely or obvious. We
don’t use ‘like’ or ‘as’ in a metaphor.
We often use metaphors without realising it. For instance, when
we say that your parents 'bark a command' at you, you are
comparing them to a dog, and hence engaging in metaphor!
Other Metaphors
A heart of stone
He has the heart of a lion
You are the sun in my sky
You are the light in my life
She is my East and my West, my compass.
You had better pull your socks up
Love is a lemon - either bitter of sweet

25. IMPACT
Show Don’t Tell
To write what is happening in the story without explicitly stating it.
Telling sentence: Joe was old.
Showing sentence: Joe creacked when he moved, his arthritic limbs
bowed beneath the weight of his eighty years
Below are some telling sentences which simply state facts. Transform them into showing
sentences:
1. It was cold on the beach.
2. Dad was angry.
3. My friend is a great rugby player.
4. The house needed repairs.
5. The car braked suddenly.

26. Create Word Pictures
We can add details to a sentence to make an image more vivid and life-like.
Bland The man had a hairy face.
Interesting The hair on Mr Twit’s face didn’t grow smooth and
matted as it does on most hairy-faced men. It grew
in spikes that struck out straights like bristles of a
nail brush.
Rewrite these sentences using details to make the image live.
1. The room was dark
2. The girl ran
3. His dog was unwashed and smelly
4. The lady next door is a busy body.

27. Focus on the Facts
We can add on sufficient information to help the reader understand better.
Example A boat came to the island.
What kind of boat was it?
Who was aboard the boat?
What were the feelings of the passengers about reching
the island?
When did the boat arrive?
What was the purpose of the visit?
Read the following sentences. What questions would you ask the writer to ensure
that all the essential information was given.
1. I don’t like school.
2. My aunt is in hospital.
3. We like going out for dinner.
Select one of these sentences. Rewrite them with sufficient information.

28. Replace Overworked Words
LEARNING INTENTION: To think of as many different ways as you can to express the
same idea.
Example: Mary is a good person.
Mary is a lovely person.
Mary is a wonderful person.
Mary is a superb person.
Mary is a delightful person.
For my birthday I got lots of presents.
It was a lovely day.
We got off the train at Wellington.
My sister got fifty dollars a week.
In the war, lots of men got injured.
Feeling annoyed, the teacher went out of the room.
We had a nice holiday in Dunedin where we met many nice people.

29. Strong Verbs
By using strong verbs we can express movement and help to create a picture in the
reader’s mind.
Well-chosen verbs can give writing power.
With throttles open all the way, big bad bruce and his gang charge down the highway
on their Harleys. Bruce blasts along the highway at top speed. Icy wind whacks into his
face. He whacks it back, twice as hard. He zooms around corners and shoots up the
straight. He pushes his bike to the max.
from Big Bad Bruce by Dianne Bates
Write a description of the action in each of thes pharases using strong verbs.
• a man kicking a door
• a lion stalking prey
• a rabbit digging a hole
• a getaway car speeding around a corner
• a dog chasing a cat