Business Writing 3.0 
Evolve for the changing world 
Wrap-up presentation for six modules of 
business writing training 
By Barb Sawyers
What we covered 
1. Who’s talking to who? 
2. What’s your point? 
3. Making good email 
4. Push or pull? 
5. Shine online 
6. Look smart
Who are you talking to?
Who are you talking to? 
What gets her going in the morning? 
What keeps her awake at night?
Who are you writing as? 
How do you write for your brand’s personalities?
Who are you writing as? 
What’s their point?
What’s your key message? 
Your point in the dialect of 
the key audience 
+ what’s in it for me 
(WIFM)
What’s your call to action? 
What do you want your key 
people to think, feel or do?
How are you going to make 
your point? 
1. 
2. 
3.
How are you going to plan? 
Essay outline
How are you going to plan? 
Mind map
How are you going to plan? 
Imaginary conversation
How are you going to plan? 
Whatever works best for you
Let’s try this on email
Making good email 
Think about your key 
audience
Making good email 
Think about your key 
message
open 
read through 
remember 
feel differently 
think in a certain way 
take a specific action 
Making good email 
What do you want 
them to do?
How do you structure 
good email? 
Key message or 
Why I should open or 
What you want me to do 
think, feel or do 
Making good email 
Compelling subject line
How to leave the office on 
time -- with all your work done 
Making good email 
How do you structure 
good email? 
Compelling subject line
Making good email 
How do you structure 
good email? 
Tiny social opening 
including name where possible
Hi, Crystal 
Making good email 
How do you structure 
good email? 
Tiny social opening
How do you structure 
good email? 
Key message 
Making good email 
3 ways to speed claims 
so you can work easier, 
faster
We’ve come up with three 
ways to make claims easier, 
faster for you. 
Making good email 
How do you structure 
good email? 
Key message
How do you structure 
good email? 
Summary of links, 
attachments 
Making good email 
Support for 
key message
1. Elimination of level-two approvals 
2. New decision-making authority 
3. Simplified work-flow system 
The details are summarized on the 
attachment. 
Making good email 
How do you structure 
good email? 
Support
Making good email 
How do you structure 
good email? 
Call to action 
What you want them 
to think, feel or do
How do you structure 
good email? 
Please share this with 
your team. 
Making good email 
Call to action
Making good email 
How do you structure 
good email? 
Quick social close
How do you structure 
good email? 
Still snowing in Edmonton? 
Stay warm. 
Making good email 
Quick social close
Making good email 
Compelling subject line 
Tiny social opening 
Key message 
Support for key message 
Key message + call to action 
Quick social close
Making good email 
1. Be brief 
Tips
Making good email 
2. Write for F-shaped screen reading 
Tips
Making good email 
3. Think more about me and less about you 
Tips
Making good email 
Push: want them to think, feel or do something
Push or pull? 
Traditionalmarketing: push along the sales cycle
Push or pull? 
Traditionalmarketing: push along the sales cycle 
Content marketing: pull prospects into the sales funnel
Do you want to 
push them along 
the sales cycle 
or pull them in? 
Push or pull?
Push 
Traditionalmarketing: push along the sales cycle 
Learn Remember Call/click Buy Recommend
Push 
Traditionalmarketing: push along the sales cycle
Push 
Traditionalmarketing: perfect people
Push 
Traditionalmarketing: focus on product
Push 
Headline 
Key message 
Call to action
Push 
Headline 
• What your key audience loves/fears 
• Solve your problem/ realize your dream 
• Hey, you (target audience) 
• Threats 
• Rewards
Push 
Key message 
• clear 
• brief 
• relates directly to your key audience’s loves/fears 
• uses your key audience’s lingo 
• images that reflect your key audience
Push 
Call to action 
• strong verbs 
• stress benefits/threats 
• think, feel or do 
• focus on next step
Push 
Where are you on the chain of action? 
Learn Remember Call/click Buy Recommend
Push 
1. Write from the perspective 
of your key audience 
3. Focus on the next step 
Tips 
2. Keep it simple
Push or pull? 
Content marketing: pull in prospects
Push or pull? 
Don’t get your wires crossed 
What is your main objective?
Pull 
Content marketing: real people
Pull 
Content marketing: related to, but not 
directly about, the product
Pull 
Content marketing: educate or entertain
Pull 
often with stories 
Once upon a time The hero’s journey Murder first
Pull 
1. Think beyond the product, to related 
interests of the people you want to attract 
Tips 
2. Go beyond tried and true industry 
practices. The world is changing rapidly 
3. Have fun and your key audience will too
Pull 
Content marketing can 
use brochures, magazines, 
events and other 
traditional communication
Pull 
But you’ll meet way 
more new people online
Shine online 
People love to 
browse and research 
on the web
Shine online 
They read in an F pattern
Shine online 
Many combine online browsing, 
offline buying,
Shine online 
mobile apps
Shine online 
and social media
Shine online 
Expect to write for marketing 
models you haven’t imagined
Look smart 
Regardless of how marketing changes, the 
need for clear, concise and correct writing 
will continue
Look smart 
Don’t blow it by failing to check and tighten
Look smart 
Avoid the mistakes that spell check can’t catch 
It’s mission… Your welcome… 
Discreet/discrete
Look smart 
Be consistent in applying capital letters, punctuation 
and other style elements
Look smart 
Use punctuation that helps your readers
Look smart 
Lose the flab 
Tip 
Delete unnecessary words 
and information 
Pretend you’re being 
charged $$$ for each word 
Build tightening into your writing time
Four takeaways 
1. It’s all about your your key audience
Four takeaways 
2. Be clear, concise, correct and consistent
Four takeaways 
3. Think before and after you write anything.
Four takeaways 
4. Keep learning 
A few favourites 
Ann Handley 
Ann Wylie 
Barb Sawyers 
Canadian Press 
Content Marketing Institute 
Copyblogger 
Dan Ariely 
Donna Papacosta 
Grammar Girl 
Jakob Nielsen 
Strunk & White 
Sue Horner 
Ragan
Business Writing 3.0 
Evolve for the changing world 
By Barb Sawyers 
To Intact Insurance 
September 23, 2014

Business writing 3.0

  • 1.
    Business Writing 3.0 Evolve for the changing world Wrap-up presentation for six modules of business writing training By Barb Sawyers
  • 2.
    What we covered 1. Who’s talking to who? 2. What’s your point? 3. Making good email 4. Push or pull? 5. Shine online 6. Look smart
  • 3.
    Who are youtalking to?
  • 4.
    Who are youtalking to? What gets her going in the morning? What keeps her awake at night?
  • 5.
    Who are youwriting as? How do you write for your brand’s personalities?
  • 6.
    Who are youwriting as? What’s their point?
  • 7.
    What’s your keymessage? Your point in the dialect of the key audience + what’s in it for me (WIFM)
  • 8.
    What’s your callto action? What do you want your key people to think, feel or do?
  • 9.
    How are yougoing to make your point? 1. 2. 3.
  • 10.
    How are yougoing to plan? Essay outline
  • 11.
    How are yougoing to plan? Mind map
  • 12.
    How are yougoing to plan? Imaginary conversation
  • 13.
    How are yougoing to plan? Whatever works best for you
  • 14.
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    Making good email Think about your key audience
  • 16.
    Making good email Think about your key message
  • 17.
    open read through remember feel differently think in a certain way take a specific action Making good email What do you want them to do?
  • 18.
    How do youstructure good email? Key message or Why I should open or What you want me to do think, feel or do Making good email Compelling subject line
  • 19.
    How to leavethe office on time -- with all your work done Making good email How do you structure good email? Compelling subject line
  • 20.
    Making good email How do you structure good email? Tiny social opening including name where possible
  • 21.
    Hi, Crystal Makinggood email How do you structure good email? Tiny social opening
  • 22.
    How do youstructure good email? Key message Making good email 3 ways to speed claims so you can work easier, faster
  • 23.
    We’ve come upwith three ways to make claims easier, faster for you. Making good email How do you structure good email? Key message
  • 24.
    How do youstructure good email? Summary of links, attachments Making good email Support for key message
  • 25.
    1. Elimination oflevel-two approvals 2. New decision-making authority 3. Simplified work-flow system The details are summarized on the attachment. Making good email How do you structure good email? Support
  • 26.
    Making good email How do you structure good email? Call to action What you want them to think, feel or do
  • 27.
    How do youstructure good email? Please share this with your team. Making good email Call to action
  • 28.
    Making good email How do you structure good email? Quick social close
  • 29.
    How do youstructure good email? Still snowing in Edmonton? Stay warm. Making good email Quick social close
  • 30.
    Making good email Compelling subject line Tiny social opening Key message Support for key message Key message + call to action Quick social close
  • 31.
    Making good email 1. Be brief Tips
  • 32.
    Making good email 2. Write for F-shaped screen reading Tips
  • 33.
    Making good email 3. Think more about me and less about you Tips
  • 34.
    Making good email Push: want them to think, feel or do something
  • 35.
    Push or pull? Traditionalmarketing: push along the sales cycle
  • 36.
    Push or pull? Traditionalmarketing: push along the sales cycle Content marketing: pull prospects into the sales funnel
  • 37.
    Do you wantto push them along the sales cycle or pull them in? Push or pull?
  • 38.
    Push Traditionalmarketing: pushalong the sales cycle Learn Remember Call/click Buy Recommend
  • 39.
    Push Traditionalmarketing: pushalong the sales cycle
  • 40.
  • 41.
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    Push Headline Keymessage Call to action
  • 43.
    Push Headline •What your key audience loves/fears • Solve your problem/ realize your dream • Hey, you (target audience) • Threats • Rewards
  • 44.
    Push Key message • clear • brief • relates directly to your key audience’s loves/fears • uses your key audience’s lingo • images that reflect your key audience
  • 45.
    Push Call toaction • strong verbs • stress benefits/threats • think, feel or do • focus on next step
  • 46.
    Push Where areyou on the chain of action? Learn Remember Call/click Buy Recommend
  • 47.
    Push 1. Writefrom the perspective of your key audience 3. Focus on the next step Tips 2. Keep it simple
  • 48.
    Push or pull? Content marketing: pull in prospects
  • 49.
    Push or pull? Don’t get your wires crossed What is your main objective?
  • 50.
  • 51.
    Pull Content marketing:related to, but not directly about, the product
  • 52.
    Pull Content marketing:educate or entertain
  • 53.
    Pull often withstories Once upon a time The hero’s journey Murder first
  • 54.
    Pull 1. Thinkbeyond the product, to related interests of the people you want to attract Tips 2. Go beyond tried and true industry practices. The world is changing rapidly 3. Have fun and your key audience will too
  • 55.
    Pull Content marketingcan use brochures, magazines, events and other traditional communication
  • 56.
    Pull But you’llmeet way more new people online
  • 57.
    Shine online Peoplelove to browse and research on the web
  • 58.
    Shine online Theyread in an F pattern
  • 59.
    Shine online Manycombine online browsing, offline buying,
  • 60.
  • 61.
    Shine online andsocial media
  • 62.
    Shine online Expectto write for marketing models you haven’t imagined
  • 63.
    Look smart Regardlessof how marketing changes, the need for clear, concise and correct writing will continue
  • 64.
    Look smart Don’tblow it by failing to check and tighten
  • 65.
    Look smart Avoidthe mistakes that spell check can’t catch It’s mission… Your welcome… Discreet/discrete
  • 66.
    Look smart Beconsistent in applying capital letters, punctuation and other style elements
  • 67.
    Look smart Usepunctuation that helps your readers
  • 68.
    Look smart Losethe flab Tip Delete unnecessary words and information Pretend you’re being charged $$$ for each word Build tightening into your writing time
  • 69.
    Four takeaways 1.It’s all about your your key audience
  • 70.
    Four takeaways 2.Be clear, concise, correct and consistent
  • 71.
    Four takeaways 3.Think before and after you write anything.
  • 72.
    Four takeaways 4.Keep learning A few favourites Ann Handley Ann Wylie Barb Sawyers Canadian Press Content Marketing Institute Copyblogger Dan Ariely Donna Papacosta Grammar Girl Jakob Nielsen Strunk & White Sue Horner Ragan
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    Business Writing 3.0 Evolve for the changing world By Barb Sawyers To Intact Insurance September 23, 2014