Karen S. Wright
For writing to be as effective as possible,
paragraphs and essays need to include unity,
coherence, and deliberate paragraph
development.
A paragraph has unity when each sentence
develops the idea stated in the topic sentence.
An essay has unity when each paragraph has
unity, AND when the topic sentence of each
paragraph develops the essay’s main idea (thesis).
It is difficult to follow an
essay where thoughts
leap from topic to topic.

                                         Really??

  Did you
  say
  spoiled?                     Unity is spoiled when
                               sentences do not
                               support the topic
                     Who’s
                   spoiled?    sentences.
Hey
                                    guys
                                    !



                     Which sentence doesn’t fit?
By 1000 BC, horse-drawn chariots were standard equipment in
most armies and a great nuisance. The chariot was hard to use. A
two-man chariot team could manage nicely if one man drove while
the other bombarded the enemy with spears and arrows. Arrows
were very difficult to make during this time. But when a soldier
drove along in the chariot, he had to tie the reins around his waist
and control the horses with his body to keep his hands free for
fighting.
                   from Suzane Jurmain Once upon a Horse
Notice how each sentence supports the topic
sentence to produce unity.
 Topic Sentence      By 100 BC, horse-drawn chariots were standard
 equipment in most armies, and soldiers had discovered that
 the world’s greatest weapon was also the world’s greatest
 nuisance. The chariot was hard to use. A two-man chariot
 team could manage nicely if one man drove while the other
 bombarded the enemy with spears and arrows. But when a
 soldier drove along in the chariot, he had to tie the reins
 around his waist and control the horses with his body to
 keep his hands free for fighting.
 Suzane Jurmain Once upon a Horse
When sentences in a paragraph flow together in
such good order, and the relationships between
the details are so clear, then a paragraph has
coherence.
Coherence is achieved in several ways:
        Chronological order
        Spatial order
        Oder of importance
        Logical sequence
        Connections—direct
        references and transitions
“Keep all of your ducks in a row.”


                                     Logical Order=Coherence.
                                           Your Turn
Chronological order and clear relationships between the details produce
coherence. Which words bind these sentences together cohesively?
 By 1000 BC, horse-drawn chariots were standard equipment in
 most armies, and soldiers had discovered that the world’s
 greatest weapon was also the world’s greatest nuisance. In the
 first place, the chariot was hard to use. Secondly, a two-man
 chariot team could manage nicely if one man drove while the
 other bombarded the enemy with spears and arrows. But when
 a soldier drove along, he had to tie the reins around his waist
 and control the horses with his body to keep his hands free for
 fighting.
 Suzane Jurmain Once upon a Horse
“Keep all of your ducks in a row.”


                                      Logical Order=Coherence.

 Chronological order and clear relationships between the details produce
 coherence. Which words bind these sentences together cohesively?

   By 1000 BC, horse-drawn chariots were standard equipment in
   most armies, and soldiers had discovered that the world’s
   greatest weapon was also the world’s greatest nuisance. In
   the first place, the chariot was hard to use. Secondly, a two-
   man chariot team could manage nicely if one man drove while
   the other bombarded the enemy with spears and arrows. But
   when a soldier drove along, he had to tie the reins around his
   waist and control the horses with his body to keep his hands
   free for fighting.
   Suzane Jurmain Once upon a Horse
After developing a
strong focus
through unity and
coherence, the
next step is to
paint a picture in
your reader’s mind
with examples and
detail. How can
this be done?
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Paragraph Development




                   Word Picture




Explanation                           Analogy
What technique develops this paragraph?
A process, definition, story, statistics, word picture,
an analogy, or an explanation?

Melton was one of those miserable in-between little
places, not large enough to be a town, nor small enough
to be a village -- that is, a village in the rural, charming
sense of the world. Melton had no charm about it. It was
merely a nondescript collection of houses and buildings in
a region of farms -- one of those sad American places with
sidewalks, but no paved streets; electric lights, but no
sewage; a station, but no trains that stopped, save a jerky
local, morning and evening. And it was 150 miles from any
city at all -- even Sioux City. “Cora Unashamed,” Langston Hughes
In the following paragraph, there are elements
that diminish development. What are they?
                 Although many people scorn the idea
                 of having one or two four-legged pets
                 thinking they require so much care,
                 there are actually quite a few
                 advantages to keeping pets. First of
                 all, pets welcome their owner home
                 from a long day of work. Related to
                 this, is the second advantage of having
                 pets is that they are incapable of being
                 disloyal. Perhaps pets require some
                 care, but it would be wise to look at all
                 they add to life.
In the following paragraph, there are elements
that diminish development. What are they?
                 Although many people scorn the
                 idea of having one or two four-
                 legged pets thinking they require
                 so much care, there are actually
                 several advantages to keeping
                 pets. First, pets welcome their
                 owner home from a long day of
                 work. Second, pets are incapable
                 of being disloyal. Perhaps pets
                 require some care, but it would be
                 wise to look at all they add to life.
Put it All Together
Unity, coherence, and
deliberate paragraph
development produce
organized paragraphs
and essays—this kind
of “sticking together”
makes a unified
whole.

Unity, coherence, development 1

  • 1.
  • 2.
    For writing tobe as effective as possible, paragraphs and essays need to include unity, coherence, and deliberate paragraph development.
  • 3.
    A paragraph hasunity when each sentence develops the idea stated in the topic sentence. An essay has unity when each paragraph has unity, AND when the topic sentence of each paragraph develops the essay’s main idea (thesis).
  • 4.
    It is difficultto follow an essay where thoughts leap from topic to topic. Really?? Did you say spoiled? Unity is spoiled when sentences do not support the topic Who’s spoiled? sentences.
  • 5.
    Hey guys ! Which sentence doesn’t fit? By 1000 BC, horse-drawn chariots were standard equipment in most armies and a great nuisance. The chariot was hard to use. A two-man chariot team could manage nicely if one man drove while the other bombarded the enemy with spears and arrows. Arrows were very difficult to make during this time. But when a soldier drove along in the chariot, he had to tie the reins around his waist and control the horses with his body to keep his hands free for fighting. from Suzane Jurmain Once upon a Horse
  • 6.
    Notice how eachsentence supports the topic sentence to produce unity. Topic Sentence By 100 BC, horse-drawn chariots were standard equipment in most armies, and soldiers had discovered that the world’s greatest weapon was also the world’s greatest nuisance. The chariot was hard to use. A two-man chariot team could manage nicely if one man drove while the other bombarded the enemy with spears and arrows. But when a soldier drove along in the chariot, he had to tie the reins around his waist and control the horses with his body to keep his hands free for fighting. Suzane Jurmain Once upon a Horse
  • 7.
    When sentences ina paragraph flow together in such good order, and the relationships between the details are so clear, then a paragraph has coherence. Coherence is achieved in several ways: Chronological order Spatial order Oder of importance Logical sequence Connections—direct references and transitions
  • 8.
    “Keep all ofyour ducks in a row.” Logical Order=Coherence. Your Turn Chronological order and clear relationships between the details produce coherence. Which words bind these sentences together cohesively? By 1000 BC, horse-drawn chariots were standard equipment in most armies, and soldiers had discovered that the world’s greatest weapon was also the world’s greatest nuisance. In the first place, the chariot was hard to use. Secondly, a two-man chariot team could manage nicely if one man drove while the other bombarded the enemy with spears and arrows. But when a soldier drove along, he had to tie the reins around his waist and control the horses with his body to keep his hands free for fighting. Suzane Jurmain Once upon a Horse
  • 9.
    “Keep all ofyour ducks in a row.” Logical Order=Coherence. Chronological order and clear relationships between the details produce coherence. Which words bind these sentences together cohesively? By 1000 BC, horse-drawn chariots were standard equipment in most armies, and soldiers had discovered that the world’s greatest weapon was also the world’s greatest nuisance. In the first place, the chariot was hard to use. Secondly, a two- man chariot team could manage nicely if one man drove while the other bombarded the enemy with spears and arrows. But when a soldier drove along, he had to tie the reins around his waist and control the horses with his body to keep his hands free for fighting. Suzane Jurmain Once upon a Horse
  • 10.
    After developing a strongfocus through unity and coherence, the next step is to paint a picture in your reader’s mind with examples and detail. How can this be done?
  • 11.
    P A R A G R A P H Process D Definition E V E L O P M E N T Statistics Story
  • 12.
    Paragraph Development Word Picture Explanation Analogy
  • 13.
    What technique developsthis paragraph? A process, definition, story, statistics, word picture, an analogy, or an explanation? Melton was one of those miserable in-between little places, not large enough to be a town, nor small enough to be a village -- that is, a village in the rural, charming sense of the world. Melton had no charm about it. It was merely a nondescript collection of houses and buildings in a region of farms -- one of those sad American places with sidewalks, but no paved streets; electric lights, but no sewage; a station, but no trains that stopped, save a jerky local, morning and evening. And it was 150 miles from any city at all -- even Sioux City. “Cora Unashamed,” Langston Hughes
  • 14.
    In the followingparagraph, there are elements that diminish development. What are they? Although many people scorn the idea of having one or two four-legged pets thinking they require so much care, there are actually quite a few advantages to keeping pets. First of all, pets welcome their owner home from a long day of work. Related to this, is the second advantage of having pets is that they are incapable of being disloyal. Perhaps pets require some care, but it would be wise to look at all they add to life.
  • 15.
    In the followingparagraph, there are elements that diminish development. What are they? Although many people scorn the idea of having one or two four- legged pets thinking they require so much care, there are actually several advantages to keeping pets. First, pets welcome their owner home from a long day of work. Second, pets are incapable of being disloyal. Perhaps pets require some care, but it would be wise to look at all they add to life.
  • 16.
    Put it AllTogether Unity, coherence, and deliberate paragraph development produce organized paragraphs and essays—this kind of “sticking together” makes a unified whole.