The Crying Demon, In a Cold Sweat
by
Maxim Gummer
HeathPark Movies
HeathPark
FADE IN:
EXT. STREET CORNER - EARLY MORNING
We see two young boys in school uniform talking,
twiddling their thumbs and looking tired. They seem bored
and as if they are waiting for something.
BOY 1
…Yeah man she left mine at like 7.
BOY 2
I can’t believe you didn’t-
BOY 1
(interrupting)
I just don’t wanna rush anything,
man she’s alright.
BOY 2
Ok, mate but just know if you
don’t pull the trigger now-
BOY 1
It’ll be fine man just leave it…
Anyways did you hear about that
kid down the road at St. Peters
BOY 2
Nah what happened?
CUT TO BLACK
Title sequence - DJ Shadow “Rabbit in your headlights”
FADE TO:
INT. LARGE ROOM GROUP THERAPY SESSION - DAY
5 people are in a circle, discussing their grievances and
problems.
ALCOHOLIC
I didn’t mean to I just, I just
got angry. She was just, she
wouldn’t stop and I told her to
stop and she wouldn’t and what was
I supposed to do.
2.
THERAPIST
It wasn’t your fault we all know
that. Everybody say it with me
“It’s not your fault”
ALL (NOT INCLUDING JON)
“It’s not your fault”
Everybody joins into the chant, but Jonathan, our main
character, can’t bring himself to say something he
doesn’t believe. He shakes his head, sighs and buries his
chin into is chest.
PTSD MAN
I heard the smash. I wasn’t at
home anymore. Home was miles away,
and I was here. Fighting. Not for
any side, any country or anyone.
Fighting for my life.
We zoom slowly on the man talking, and suddenly footage
of people fighting a war in the background starts while
the begin notes of Gimme Shelter by the Rolling Stones
starts to play.
PTSD MAN
I tried I really did.
The man raises his hands to reveal bandages, the
presumption is that he punched through a glass window.
THERAPIST
Everybody…
The therapist ushers everyone to repeat the phrase said
earlier
ALL (EXCEPT JON)
It’s not your fault.
Jon continues to not join in. He looks down at his
thumbs, and seems disinterested in the rest of the group.
MAMBA ADDICT
Kicking it is damn hard. I ‘member
seein’ people wiv mamba and I
laughed at ‘em but now i’m waitin'
on them and relying on them. This
ain’t the life I wanted. Kicking
this just ain’t happenin. I wan’ed
kids, i wan’ed a life.
THERAPIST
Everybody It’s no…
3.
The therapist ushers everyone to repeat the phrase said
earlier
ALL (EXCEPT JON)
It’s not your fault.
They all turn and look at Jon after a third time of not
joining in. The therapist notices now and looks up and
down at Jon. He slowly raises his head, his eyes are wide
and he looks like he has seen a ghost.
THERAPIST
Jon what about you. What’s on your
mind?
Jon looks around and doesn’t appear to have heard the
therapist’s question.
THERAPIST
Jon?
The therapist places their hand on Jon’s shoulder which
he quickly whips away.
JON
She says there’s no point.
THERAPIST
No point to what?
JON
She says you won’t listen.
THERAPIST
We will that’s what were here for.
A random girl is dancing behind him in a cute but
sinister manner.
JON
She’s says if I let you in
something bad will happen.
THERAPIST
Something bad? What do you mean?
JON
She says I can’t tell you.
The girl twirls towards the frame covering the screen.
CUT TO BLACK:
4.
CUT TO
EXT. OUTSIDE SCHOOL - MID MORNING
The boys are back and they are talking
BOY 1
Wait tell me again he what?
BOY 2
I don’t wanna say it again, man,
it messed up!
BOY 2
C’mon! Tell me!
BOY 1
Look he, I dunno it just was… I
don’t the exact details.
BOY 2
Oh. But why?
FADE OUT
FADE IN
INT. BEDROOM - AFTERNOON
Jon is sleeping and is drenched in sweat. He looks around
and seems to realise where he is.
JON
Huh. Oh.
He gets out of bed slowly and as he looks up he sees the
scary figure of the girl, which makes him jump. She
quickly disappears.
JON
Oh, crap
He looks around and takes a bottle of water, he drinks it
half of the bottle and puts it down. He sits in his bed
for a while, looking around. He falls back to sleep
FALL WITH HIM
TRANSITION
5.
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT
We arrive in a classroom, which is lit naturally at first
but suddenly starts to glow red.
CUT TO
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
Jon is sleeping quite normally but he has scrunched up is
his face.
CUT TO
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT
The girl from earlier is in the middle of the room for a
moment. She is wearing a white dress and she seems very
pale.
CUT TO
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
Jon is squirming in his bead, looking very uncomfortable.
CUT TO
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT
The girl is close to the camera now, with a scared
expression.
THE GIRL
Do it.
The girl seemingly teleports to the back of the room.
THE GIRL
Do it.
She teleports to the left side of the room
THE GIRL
Do it-
She teleports to a closeup
THE GIRL
NOW!
CUT TO
6.
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
JON
NO!
CUT TO
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT
THE GIRL
Please… you know none of them care
about you.
At this point the girl starts to cry black demonic tears.
THE GIRL
None of them even remember your
name. I’m the only one! PLEASE!
The girls face is covered in the black tears. She
teleports to the back of the room.
THE GIRL
You have to do it. It’ll be easy.
THEY DESERVE IT.
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
JON
WHAT?
CUT TO
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT
THE GIRL
SACRIFICE THEM!
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
JON
FOR WHAT?
CUT TO
7.
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT
THE GIRL
FOR ME!
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
JON
WHY?
CUT TO
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT
THE GIRL
Because I love you, and I’m the
only one that does!
FADE TO
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
Jon gets up, in a robotic manner. Instead of looking
around like before he walks straight out of his door. He
walks back in with a shoe box. He lift’s the lid and
looks inside.
CUT TO
EXT. STREET - DAY
The boy walks to school. He walks in a robotic manner but
his face progressively gets more and more scrunched up.
He is holding the box in his hands. He walks to the song
“Building steam with a grain of salt”. Every now and then
he looks behind himself and sees the girl. He stands
before a school. Lingers for a minute and then enters in
box in hand.
FADE OUT
FADE IN
EXT. DIFFERENT STREET - MORNING
The boys discuss the events that just take place, just as
they walk into school.
8.
BOY 1
I don’t think he had any control.
people said he completely changed
in the weeks leading up to it,
BOY 2
Nah some part of him must of known
So you blame him?
BOY 1
Nah I mean. I guess it’s not his
fault.
BOY 1
I just can’t get over it.
BOY 2
Yeah we saw him all the time
walking to school.
BOY 1
I could never do that man. Kill
myself.
BOY 2
Yeah and it all happens so
quickly. With a click of your
fingers suddenly -
CUT TO BLACK
We hear the sound of a gun shot. “Rabbit in your
headlights” plays again.
FIN
9.
1.
SCENE INDEX
EXT. STREET CORNER - EARLY MORNING .....................1
INT. LARGE ROOM GROUP THERAPY SESSION - DAY ............1
CUT TO ................................................4
EXT. OUTSIDE SCHOOL - MID MORNING .....................4
FADE IN ...............................................4
INT. BEDROOM - AFTERNOON...............................4
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................5
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................5
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................5
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................5
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................5
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................6
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................6
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................6
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................6
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................6
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................7
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT............................7
INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT................................7
INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................7
EXT. STREET - DAY .....................................7
FADE IN ...............................................7
EXT. DIFFERENT STREET - MORNING ........................7

The Crying Demon, In a Cold Sweat

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    The Crying Demon,In a Cold Sweat by Maxim Gummer HeathPark Movies HeathPark
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    FADE IN: EXT. STREETCORNER - EARLY MORNING We see two young boys in school uniform talking, twiddling their thumbs and looking tired. They seem bored and as if they are waiting for something. BOY 1 …Yeah man she left mine at like 7. BOY 2 I can’t believe you didn’t- BOY 1 (interrupting) I just don’t wanna rush anything, man she’s alright. BOY 2 Ok, mate but just know if you don’t pull the trigger now- BOY 1 It’ll be fine man just leave it… Anyways did you hear about that kid down the road at St. Peters BOY 2 Nah what happened? CUT TO BLACK Title sequence - DJ Shadow “Rabbit in your headlights” FADE TO: INT. LARGE ROOM GROUP THERAPY SESSION - DAY 5 people are in a circle, discussing their grievances and problems. ALCOHOLIC I didn’t mean to I just, I just got angry. She was just, she wouldn’t stop and I told her to stop and she wouldn’t and what was I supposed to do.
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    2. THERAPIST It wasn’t yourfault we all know that. Everybody say it with me “It’s not your fault” ALL (NOT INCLUDING JON) “It’s not your fault” Everybody joins into the chant, but Jonathan, our main character, can’t bring himself to say something he doesn’t believe. He shakes his head, sighs and buries his chin into is chest. PTSD MAN I heard the smash. I wasn’t at home anymore. Home was miles away, and I was here. Fighting. Not for any side, any country or anyone. Fighting for my life. We zoom slowly on the man talking, and suddenly footage of people fighting a war in the background starts while the begin notes of Gimme Shelter by the Rolling Stones starts to play. PTSD MAN I tried I really did. The man raises his hands to reveal bandages, the presumption is that he punched through a glass window. THERAPIST Everybody… The therapist ushers everyone to repeat the phrase said earlier ALL (EXCEPT JON) It’s not your fault. Jon continues to not join in. He looks down at his thumbs, and seems disinterested in the rest of the group. MAMBA ADDICT Kicking it is damn hard. I ‘member seein’ people wiv mamba and I laughed at ‘em but now i’m waitin' on them and relying on them. This ain’t the life I wanted. Kicking this just ain’t happenin. I wan’ed kids, i wan’ed a life. THERAPIST Everybody It’s no…
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    3. The therapist usherseveryone to repeat the phrase said earlier ALL (EXCEPT JON) It’s not your fault. They all turn and look at Jon after a third time of not joining in. The therapist notices now and looks up and down at Jon. He slowly raises his head, his eyes are wide and he looks like he has seen a ghost. THERAPIST Jon what about you. What’s on your mind? Jon looks around and doesn’t appear to have heard the therapist’s question. THERAPIST Jon? The therapist places their hand on Jon’s shoulder which he quickly whips away. JON She says there’s no point. THERAPIST No point to what? JON She says you won’t listen. THERAPIST We will that’s what were here for. A random girl is dancing behind him in a cute but sinister manner. JON She’s says if I let you in something bad will happen. THERAPIST Something bad? What do you mean? JON She says I can’t tell you. The girl twirls towards the frame covering the screen. CUT TO BLACK:
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    4. CUT TO EXT. OUTSIDESCHOOL - MID MORNING The boys are back and they are talking BOY 1 Wait tell me again he what? BOY 2 I don’t wanna say it again, man, it messed up! BOY 2 C’mon! Tell me! BOY 1 Look he, I dunno it just was… I don’t the exact details. BOY 2 Oh. But why? FADE OUT FADE IN INT. BEDROOM - AFTERNOON Jon is sleeping and is drenched in sweat. He looks around and seems to realise where he is. JON Huh. Oh. He gets out of bed slowly and as he looks up he sees the scary figure of the girl, which makes him jump. She quickly disappears. JON Oh, crap He looks around and takes a bottle of water, he drinks it half of the bottle and puts it down. He sits in his bed for a while, looking around. He falls back to sleep FALL WITH HIM TRANSITION
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    5. INT. CLASSROOM -NIGHT We arrive in a classroom, which is lit naturally at first but suddenly starts to glow red. CUT TO INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT Jon is sleeping quite normally but he has scrunched up is his face. CUT TO INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT The girl from earlier is in the middle of the room for a moment. She is wearing a white dress and she seems very pale. CUT TO INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT Jon is squirming in his bead, looking very uncomfortable. CUT TO INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT The girl is close to the camera now, with a scared expression. THE GIRL Do it. The girl seemingly teleports to the back of the room. THE GIRL Do it. She teleports to the left side of the room THE GIRL Do it- She teleports to a closeup THE GIRL NOW! CUT TO
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    6. INT. JON’S BEDROOM- NIGHT JON NO! CUT TO INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT THE GIRL Please… you know none of them care about you. At this point the girl starts to cry black demonic tears. THE GIRL None of them even remember your name. I’m the only one! PLEASE! The girls face is covered in the black tears. She teleports to the back of the room. THE GIRL You have to do it. It’ll be easy. THEY DESERVE IT. INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT JON WHAT? CUT TO INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT THE GIRL SACRIFICE THEM! INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT JON FOR WHAT? CUT TO
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    7. INT. CLASSROOM -NIGHT THE GIRL FOR ME! INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT JON WHY? CUT TO INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT THE GIRL Because I love you, and I’m the only one that does! FADE TO INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT Jon gets up, in a robotic manner. Instead of looking around like before he walks straight out of his door. He walks back in with a shoe box. He lift’s the lid and looks inside. CUT TO EXT. STREET - DAY The boy walks to school. He walks in a robotic manner but his face progressively gets more and more scrunched up. He is holding the box in his hands. He walks to the song “Building steam with a grain of salt”. Every now and then he looks behind himself and sees the girl. He stands before a school. Lingers for a minute and then enters in box in hand. FADE OUT FADE IN EXT. DIFFERENT STREET - MORNING The boys discuss the events that just take place, just as they walk into school.
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    8. BOY 1 I don’tthink he had any control. people said he completely changed in the weeks leading up to it, BOY 2 Nah some part of him must of known So you blame him? BOY 1 Nah I mean. I guess it’s not his fault. BOY 1 I just can’t get over it. BOY 2 Yeah we saw him all the time walking to school. BOY 1 I could never do that man. Kill myself. BOY 2 Yeah and it all happens so quickly. With a click of your fingers suddenly - CUT TO BLACK We hear the sound of a gun shot. “Rabbit in your headlights” plays again. FIN
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    1. SCENE INDEX EXT. STREETCORNER - EARLY MORNING .....................1 INT. LARGE ROOM GROUP THERAPY SESSION - DAY ............1 CUT TO ................................................4 EXT. OUTSIDE SCHOOL - MID MORNING .....................4 FADE IN ...............................................4 INT. BEDROOM - AFTERNOON...............................4 INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................5 INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................5 INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................5 INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................5 INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................5 INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................6 INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................6 INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................6 INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................6 INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................6 INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT.................................7 INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT............................7 INT. CLASSROOM - NIGHT................................7 INT. JON’S BEDROOM - NIGHT.............................7 EXT. STREET - DAY .....................................7 FADE IN ...............................................7 EXT. DIFFERENT STREET - MORNING ........................7