3. First Draft Feedback- By Ezreen
• You have used the appropriate A4 dimensions for the front cover.
You have thought about your colour scheme and kept it consistent
with your front cover. There is a good mix of light and dark colours.
• Camera angles have also been used to show you have thought
about the representation of the magazine. For example your use of
a skater model may represent indie skaters that may be interested
in that genre of music.
• You have included the key elements needed for the contents page. I
like the additional use of the subscription which will attract and
encourage a target audience.
• The eye flow is natural as the reader will look from left to right and
top to bottom as your images and texts are conventionally placed
with a large Masthead.
• Based on the colours and sizes chosen for the texts, the fonts
should be legible and eye catching to the audience.
4. Changes I made
• I added a band index to show the possible
content of the magazine.
• A news section was added so the reader will be
able to identify a certain article more easily.
• The website was not placed with the date
line, instead I put it in the subscription box
information.
• I included a picture of a miniature
magazine, showing the reader the next issue with
the subscription plan to encourage them to
purchase it.
6. Second Draft Feedback- By Ezreen
• You have chosen clear and bold fonts that stand out to the reader.
• However the overall text you have chosen is not consistent with the style of your front cover.
• The colour scheme you have chosen is clear and consistent with your front cover. They are a
good blend of bright and dark. The white was a good choice as it contrasts the black and gives
the page ‘breath’.
• The eye flow is good but could be improved by moving the information to the left and the
picture to the right.
• Mise en scene:
• The costumes the models are wearing are good as they are mainly black/ plain clothing which
is neutral enough to apply to readers that listen to all sub-genres of rock music.
• The background of the main image is good as it seems urban as there is graffiti on the wall
which goes with the idea that this is the magazine’s ‘graffiti’ addition as said in your plug on the
front cover. The graffiti wings on the wall also matches the pull quote you have used in an
informal jokey way.
• The model’s poses are good. Looking at the second image of the rock band, they appear to be
sitting down by another graffiti wall casually leaning against it and each other. The model on
the left is pulling a typical rockstar pose and encouraging the camera while the other is making
a rude gesture which is implied through your editing technique of pixilating the hand. This is
representative of the target audience as it shows two different and common personalities: the
positive encouraging model and the camera shy angry rockstar model that doesn’t want their
picture taken.
• There are no spelling mistakes.
• To improve try to change the text.
7. Changes I made
• I changed the overall text to ChineseRocks to
match my Front Cover and retain consistency
and ‘House Style’.
• The same graffiti background used in my front
cover is now used as the background for my
table of contents seem consistent and
interesting.
9. Changes I made
• I changed the format of the single digit numbers e.g.
from 5 to 05
• Another miniature magazine in the subscription offer
section was added to show the reader a variety of front
covers. Other conventions on the front covers have
also been used such as the extreme close up of the eye
and the close up of the face.
• I also changed the background to a graffiti wall that
was spray painted to look cracked, to differentiate the
contents page slightly from the front cover but stick to
the graffiti theme.
