99 development pro forma

Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
Joseph McGonigal (99)

Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
It looked cartoon like. It was very simple but all the main details were there. I
like that the Panda looks cute and cuddly whilst chewing a celery stick. I like
that the background colour scheme has a forest feel because it works well
with the Panda in the production. I like that I used a drop shadow around the
shape of the snout because I think it gives the production a good effect by
making it seem more detailed and believable.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would get better at warding and make sure I cover all gaps so as my final
production looks as professional as possible. Also, I will have the stroke
covering all the bear face. I would add an outer layer around the Panda’s
whole face and not just some because I feel this would help it stand out.

Evaluation
I like that the simple colours paint a portrait of a lizard walking on a branch in
the night. I dislike that the whole image looks plain like something you would
find in a baby’s nursery rhyme book. I like the way the image looks calm and
gentle; just having the lizard walking on a branch.
I would not waste my time doing something that is wrong like how I
was using Hue Saturation and instead spend more time working
correctly. I would work fast and manage to complete the same picture
but in far better detail. I would use the Polygon Lasso tool to go around
much more of the finer details on the tree, background and lizard and
add an appropriate colour to them so as the image looks detailed and
better quality.

Evaluation
I like that my name looks very abstract with all the effects done to my name, like pattern overlay,
warping, compressing my first and last name together etc… I dislike the warping technique
because I think it looks a bit simple, plain and amateur. Also, it has no other effects on it so
additionally it looks boring. I also dislike the way it angles downwards and basically think the
whole text has no structure to it and doesn’t stand out well either.
I like that on the “Joey Mcgonigal” font it has someone jumping confidently of a cliff into the
ocean because this is a good way to express that “Joey Mcgonigal” is lively and extravagant. I also
like the colour contrast and where the jumping person has been placed on the font because it is
somewhere he/she can be seen as well as all the necessary parts in the background.
Furthermore, I like that the font is very bold so as a lot of image can be seen
I would play around with the warp tool more until I get better at using it, so I can produce some
better effects, like making it look like the text is coming out from a distance or something cool like
that. I will scale up the “Joey” so as it is larger and in line with my second name, so as the text
looks more complete and my first name stands out more.

Evaluation
I like the way using the threshold emphasised the eyes by really
recognising the shadows because this make the eyes stand out and look
cool. I like the colour contrast on the face and the way the colour gets
darker where the cut out tool on the filter gallery recognised the
shadows because it gave it that slightly realistic effect.
I would increase the number of levels on the cutout tool in the filter gallery to
ensure more of the background can be seen because I don’t like how his hair
blends into the background; I feel this adds to much emphasis on the face.

Evaluation
I like that I have captured all the emotions; sad, lonely, happy and excited. I like the
effect we used on the ad photo with Tom looking out the window because captures
the emotions of sadness. For example, when you are sad you tend to think and the
photo portrays thinking through gazing out a window. Additionally, the fact that the
weather outside is grim and bleak adds to the vibe of the scene. I like the way in the
lonely photo Tom is in a shadowy area because this adds more of a depressing and
darker vibe to the photo.
I would do better posses for happy. I would take the images in better surroundings.
For example, I think in the happy photo where I have the lonely portrait of the woman
staring at me badly effects the scene because it does not look happy.

Evaluation
I like the shading I did because it makes the drawing realistic
and detailed, also you can see where the light is coming from.
I like the way I have used darker shades of grey to represent
how dark the colours are in the real image. I like that it is
black and white because illustrations are captured how the
artist wants them.
Try not to rub out so much times so as the picture doesn’t begin to look
scruffy. I would also make sure hat when I am drawing a large area in
with a very dark shade that I use long strokes of the pencil as a pose to
small because then I won’t end up with scruffy rows and the colour
would be more consistent. For example, I did this on the jacket she is
wearing.

This image makes the major of
Hamelin look evil, which he is, so I
want to portray this.
This image inspires my production
because at the beginning of my
story the Piper is in jail for
stealing the towns money.
I chose this image because
the character looks like the
boy in my story who becomes
the “Fried Piper”.
This pipe
resembles
the Pipers
Pipe in
my story.
This is how I want my font to look
for the title and also the first letter
of every knew scene in my story.
This is an image of Pied Piper. I
like this image because it has a
comic book type of look and this
is how I am going to go about
making my own book.

Idea Generation
THE FRIED PIPER is a story that takes of after the original. I think I will add a darker
theme to it than its original. For example, the story will involve an evil boy who acts as
the Pipers companion and friend at first until it is revealed that he only intended on
being the pipers friend to get hold of he magic pipe.
I will use rotoscoping to produce my comic book affect and intend to go around all
objects and characters with the shape tool or sometimes the quick selection tool. I will
then add color to that part. I will try to make the colors contrast by having them all
similar shades, probably mildly dark.
Another idea I have is the big bad wolf because it is a well known fairytale
that could be fun to create. The wolf would be an excellent character to
create on Photoshop. I will probably make the wolf black, extra hairy with a
fierce, snarling snout.
I think I will make my children's book rhyme as this follows a common trait in
olden children's folk tales.

I like this font because it has go a medieval theme to it with the
crowns, and also the letters are bubbly and skew-whiff which
could represent abused power and the pipers reluctance in the
story.
I like this font because I can play around
with it. I think a good thing I can do with it
is make one of the buttons (circles around
the letters) the top part of the pipe.
I like that this font looks like the Pied Pipers clothes; hat etc…

I will make my piped Piper children's
book. With a slightly darker theme
than the original.

Proposal
Dimensions
About 12. Perhaps I will use 20- 24 cm pages.
Story Overview
My story takes off after the original. The Pied Piper steals the towns money and gets
caught in the process, leading him into jail. Whilst in jail the Piper blows his pipe and
rats come to the sound and rescue him buy biting away at the steal bars. The Piper
runs to a river and plays a song whilst a boy is hearing it and becomes uplifted by the
sound. The boys name is Wu-Tang and Wu-Tang goes up to the Piper and begs him to
teach him the songs. The two become friends and Wu-Tang hides the Piper away in his
room so he will not be seen by the towns people, for if he is, he will be killed. Soon the
power of the pipe takes control of Wu-Tang and he wants it all to himself. So in the
night he steals the pipe whilst the Piper is sleeping and goes off into the night to
Export Format
PDF
Advantages: It is a good file to store work in because it is accessible and can compress
loads of work. Also, it can save large file sizes.
Disadvantages: This file takes up a lot of file space and can take a while to download.

Deadline
Audience
I am targeting my folktale at children but also teenagers and adults because I feel
like my story is a great folks tale for kids, however it is quite dark which is why I
think older people could enjoy it too. I think children (probably aged between 8-14)
would enjoy the tale whatever gender they are because it is just your average folks
tale with magic and bodacious character. They would also like the dialect of the
story and all the illustrations to look at. I think it might be a bit to dark for any child
under 8. I think the older audience would mainly be male because the tale features
violence, which is a trait in the media we normally associate with male interests. I
think the class of my audience will be mainly middle class but also upper class. This
is because it is an original story and a lot of people know it. think people in the UK
will like my folktale because they like all the olden day based folk tales; additionally,
countries around Europe too. I think my audience would most likely be into all the
Production Methods
I am going to use Adobe Photoshop to make my pages. I will use the shape tools
and hen rotate and warp them after I have made a shape around something. I will
lower the opacity when I am warping so as I can see what I am trying to cover
because this will make my work tidier and look better. Then I will double click on the
layer picture so as I can chose a colour, then I will turn the opacity up to 100% so as
it is just one clear colour and this is how I will get my comic book effect. I want my
colours to all be fairly bleak and nothing to luminous because I want the pages to
have an excellent contrast of colours and represent a dark theme.

What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The detail of the plot of the story. Interesting idea of
continuing the story from the original.
A lot of detail is used for the target audience.
A good idea, targeting your book at adults as well
as children.
Areas of the proposal are missing such as the
production methods box and the disadvantages of
PDF. Also more detail is needed for the advantages
of
The plot dilemma of him being trapped in the jail is
solved very easily . “chewing through iron bars”.
Some spelling mistakes made throughout.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Every image has been evaluated to some extent
which is good… (didn’t have enough time, sorry)
Very detailed mind map with interesting points
used.
More detail is needed for your mind map. For
example on one of the images it says “this is an
image of the Pied Piper” however evaluation is also
needed to accompany the image like why did you
use this image? How did it inspire you?

Your story overview shows clearly how the story will
go.
You need to talk about the advantages and the
disadvantages of a PDF in more detail.
You need to check your spelling in your proposal,
“buy” should be “by”.
further developed?
Your mind map shows how you want the story to
be. It gives a good overall view on the ideas you
want to imbed in your children’s book.
On your mood board you need to add more detail
as to why you have chosen the image. You also
need to explain why you want to use the text you
want, and evaluate how this will suit the age group
you have chosen.
You could add picture to your mood board that
show layouts and the illustration to text ratio.
You need to make sure that you finish off parts that
are only half completed and make sure you add
more detail to them.

Good detailed storyline and a well thought out
target audience.
I feel like you have a good original idea, and a good
starting point in which you can create your book.
You have not finished the disadvantages for the file
format, or the methods that you want to use.
You also haven’t specified the size dimensions of
your book
further developed?
You have chosen good and relevant images to
portray your ideas, as well as good annotation
which explains why you chose the images.
Your mind map has good detail and shows your
thought process well.
You could maybe add more detail to your
annotation in your mood board, as well as other
ideas on your mind map instead of it just being
focused on your chosen fairytale, for example
different techniques and methods you could use.

Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
I feel as thought my feedback makes sense because the negatives were about the fact
that I have some work missing which I can understand because I do.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I agree with person 3 who says I have an “original idea”. I agree with everyone's
comments on my Story Overview part because I did put some thought into how the
story will go etc…
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I disagree with person 3 who said my mood board shouldn’t be 100% focussed on my
story because I think it is good my mood board is 100% about the story as it shows I
have a clear idea about what book I want to make.

Storyboard
After the ambitious pursuit the Pied Piper faced to lead the troublesome rats far far away from
the town of Hamelin, he has now been thrown into jail. Full of rage and fury, with a gigantic
puff, the piper uses his pipe to call back the rats. Scurrying through the town, frightening all
the people, the rats climbed through the jail windows and bit through the doors. When they
arrived at the pipers cell, they nibbled through the bars like a wave of piranhas until…
Running through the town, surrounded by the rats for protection, the piper made haste to the
river which divided the town from the miles of misty mountains that surround it. He ran until
his green shoes were painted with dirt and his skinny twig like legs tired and ached. Staring at
the flowing river from the top of a large rock, he blew a tune from his pipe and took himself to
a captivity of tranquility through the beautiful notes.

A young child, bird watching, gasped in amazement when he heard the tune and caught sight of the
piper. He walked up to the mysterious man and asked him if he would teach him how to play. The
Piper, alone and in need of a friend, said “yes” to the boy and took him through all the steps of
mastering the art of the pipe. He told the boy that it is all about freeing your mind and going to that
special place deep within the imagination, where you can be at one with the music and how it will
then come naturally.
“What’s your name, boy”, said the piper. “Wu-Tang”, the boy replied with a grin on his
face. The piper went on to explain his situation to Wu-Tang. “Then come and stay at my
house, I could hide you away in my room and, and bring you food…” With that Wu-Tang
lead the way to his house and both kept watch to avoid being noticed by anyone until
they arrived.

Original Script
Original Script goes here with link to where it came from
Once upon a time…on the banks of a great river in the north of Germany lay a town called Hamelin. The
citizens of Hamelin were honest folk who lived contentedly in their Grey stone houses. The years went by,
and the town grew very rich. Then one day, an extraordinary thing happened to disturb the peace.
Hamelin had always had rats, and a lot too. But they had never been a danger, for the cats had always
solved the rat problem in the usual way- by killing them. All at once, however, the rats began to multiply. In
the end, a black sea of rats swarmed over the whole town. First, they attacked the barns and storehouses,
then, for lack of anything better, they gnawed the wood, cloth or anything at all. The one thing they didn’t
eat was metal. The terrified citizens flocked to plead with the town councilors to free them from the
plague of rats. But the council had, for a long time, been sitting in the Mayor’s room, trying to think of a
plan. “What we need is an army of cats! ”But all the cats were dead. “We’ll put down poisoned food then .
. .”But most of the food was already gone and even poison did not stop the rats. “It just can’t be done
without help!” said the Mayor sadly. Just then, while the citizens milled around outside, there was a loud
knock at the door. “Who can that be?” the city fathers wondered uneasily, mindful of the angry crowds.
They gingerly opened the door. And to their surprise, there stood a tall thin man dressed in brightly
colored clothes, with a long feather in his hat, and waving a gold pipe at them. “I’ve freed other towns of
beetles and bats,” the stranger announced, “and for a thousand florins, I’ll rid you of your rats!” “A
thousand florins!” exclaimed the Mayor. “We’ll give you fifty thousand if you succeed!” At once the
stranger hurried away, saying: “It’s late now, but at dawn tomorrow, there won’t be a rat left in Hamelin!”
The sun was still below the horizon, when the sound of a pipe wafted through the streets of Hamelin. The
pied piper slowly made his way through the houses and behind him flocked the rats. Out they scampered
from doors, windows and gutters, rats of every size, all after the piper. And as he played, the stranger
marched down to the river and straight into the

Original Script
water, up to his middle. Behind him swarmed the rats and every one was drowned and swept away by the
current. By the time the sun was high in the sky, there was not a single rat in the town. There was even
greater delight at the town hall, until the piper tried to claim his payment. “Fifty thousand florins?”
exclaimed the councilors, “Never…”” A thousand florins at least!” cried the pied piper angrily. But the
Mayor broke in. “The rats are all dead now and they can never come back. So be grateful for fifty florins,
or you’ll not get even that . . .”His eyes flashing with rage, the pied piper pointed a threatening finger at
the Mayor. You’ll bitterly regret ever breaking your promise,” he said, and vanished. A shiver of fear ran
through the councilors, but the Mayor shrugged and said excitedly: “We’ve saved fifty thousand florins!”
That night, freed from the nightmare of the rats, the citizens of Hamelin slept more soundly than ever.
And when the strange sound of piping wafted through the streets at dawn, only the children heard it.
Drawn as by magic, they hurried out of their homes. Again, the pied piper paced through the town, this
time, it was children of all sizes that flocked at his heels to the sound of his strange piping. The long
procession soon left the town and made its way through the wood and across the forest till it reached the
foot of a huge mountain. When the piper came to the dark rock, he played his pipe even louder still and a
great door creaked open. Beyond lay a cave. In trooped the children behind the pied piper, and when the
last child had gone into the darkness, the door creaked shut. A great landslide came down the mountain
blocking the entrance to the cave forever. Only one little lame boy escaped this fate. It was he who told
the anxious citizens, searching for their children, what had happened. And no matter what people did, the
mountain never gave up its victims. Many years were to pass before the merry voices of other children
would ring through the streets of Hamelin but the memory of the harsh lesson lingered in everyone’s
heart and was passed down from father to son through the centuries.
http://shortstoriesshort.com/story/pied-piper-of-hamelin/

Final Script
Page 1: After the piper had rid the town of rats. He was thrown in a jail cell where alone he sat.
The piper needed something to save him. So he picked up his pipe and started playing.
Page 2: The rats scurried through the jail doors and towards where they knew the piper would be.
They chipped their way through the dirty steel bars and set the piper free.
Page 3: In need of a friend, the piper wept and played a magic tune.
Feeling so blue, and tired too, he stood in the midst of the bloom.
Page 4: A jolly young lad, with red shoes and a bag, heard the piper play.
So he skipped towards him, feeling awesome and asked him for his name.
Page 5: The piper cried his name, proud and loud and all his lonely feelings were gone.
With a dance and a breathe, and a chance to impress, he played the boy a magic song.
Page 6: “You can stay here”, said the boy full of cheer. “You’ll be safe and hidden”, he promised.
And with that the boy went to fetch the piper a bowl of porridge.
Page 7: Night-time came and the piper slept. Unaware the boy had crept into his bed.
The boy made off with the pipe, in the dead of the night, to tell the mayor the place the piper hides.
Page 8: The furious mayor heard the news and awakened the piper who now felt like a fool.
The mayor grabbed his arm and flung him out of bed and with a huge thud the piper hit the ground on his head.
Page 9: Full of anger and once again trapped, the piper had took one step forward and another step back.
He was feeling lots of sorrow, for he was once a man of many morals. Now a two bit crook with no pride left to
swallow, for once locked up there is no hope for a tomorrow.

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