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Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
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Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the cartoon stile this image has and it was
very fun to make.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would put more detail around his face because
right now it looks pretty bland and plain.

Evaluation
I really like my use of texture and colour. I also
made his body part bubble and stick out of the
page.
I would Want to put more detail and shapes in to
give the frog more shape.

Evaluation
I like how much detail I put in to his face and also the
detail in the eyes,this was my first time applying
shading like i did and i think it turned out well.
I would have wanted to use a wider range of colours
but the original image doesn't have that many.

Evaluation
I like the over all style of the image and the selection of
colours used. I like how I put in the suns radiation of light,
I did this by lowering the opacity on two circles placed
behind the centre circle.
I would have put a lot more detail into all of it especially
things like the trees or the grass . I also can improve by
including shadows and light on areas that have it in the
original image.

Evaluation
I like how the image under the text seems to be
peering through the text, I also like how big and
blocky the text is so you can see more of the image.
I would get a better resolution image so you cant see
all the pixels, I also want to space the letters more
from each other so it doesn't all just become one big
blob.

Evaluation
I like the swerve and the font for the first ‘Bob George Trelfa’ I think
this looks cool and gives some movement to the text. I also like the
tilt on ‘ Star Wars’ because it actually looks like it does in the movie. I
like the show on the last text because it makes it look like the text is
floating off the page.I like the multi coloured effect I used for the
skeleton of the text in the last piece I think it makes the text look
really playful.
I didn't like what I did to the last piece of text i think it looks too
bulky and if it wasn't for the thin writing on the inside you wouldn’t
be able read it at all

Evaluation
I really like the First image (Bane) and the third image (Shia) you can really
see the detail of their faces and clothes this is good because it helps the
reader under stand what they’re looking at. I like the colour on Bane
because he is a very dark character who would use light and happy colours
and I think the colour palette used for this image was just right.
I really don’t like the second image because you can barley see the out
line of the face or any detail at all. If I was going to improve any of the
images i would improve the second one by adding more detail to his face
also I would try to add more colours to all of them because I think that all
of them look a little too bland.

Evaluation
I like how You can tell there is a small story loop that I believe is easy to
follow. I like how I had to edit the same person kicking himself twice, I
had to crop and change some details of his foot to make it fit and the
same with the image of him bent over. I didn't want to include text
because I felt like the images told the story well enough.
I would have edited the images a bit more to make them look more like
a comic book, I believe this would have smoothed some edges were my
editing made the images look a bit off. I also wanted to make the key
more noticeable because at first glance it is not clear what he picks up.

Proposal
Dimensions
Seven to Fourteen Pages depends on how I decide to lay it out.
Story Overview
Space dragon is making space cakes and she is so proud of her work she wants to share them with her
grandmother the emperor of space. Space dragon makes her way towards grandma's house, on her way she is
confronted by a giant crab, the crab of bad thoughts.The crab tries to persuade her to eat the cakes and to
come with him, but she says no and continues her journey.She arrives at her grandmas house, and she doesn't
know it but the crab got there before her and ate her grandmother the emperor. The space dragon and the
crab talk for a bit and then when the crab is fed up he reveals him self to the space dragon as a crab, he tries to
eat the space dragon. Alligator of life bursts through the door and eats the whole crab at once, but sadly the
emperor could not be saved. The space Dragon is crowned the new emperor of space and her rule was fair, she
had a long happy life eating space cakes until the end of her days.
Export Format
PNG
Advantages: The images with have a higher quality.
Disadvantages: Can not store multiple images in one file.

Deadline
15th January 2016
Audience
I am targeting children between 4 - 7 and I’m not really targeting either gender
because I think this story isn’t really gender specific.
Production Methods
I will draw my characters using shapes on photoshop, I will make the animals 3D
and textuThe Little Space Dragon to make them feel more real and help the child
imagine them. I will also be creating my backgrounds and objects in the same
manor.

What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
That you have used a popular children's folk tale,
however put a very surrealistic take on it, by
changing the characters into a complete different
species
the mood boards could have more inspiring
pictures of the chapter you want to make
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
that this has never been done before and it will
suit many peoples interest
that what happens after the ending ??

the story is very clear and it flows very well,
there isn't much deviation from the original story
which is good because it has just modernised it
for the youth of today.
the main thing that i feel needs work on is the
name of the cakes that the space dragon has
made because space cakes is a name for cakes
that contain cannabis. i think your production
methods could use some work by going into
more detail about each aspect of the project.
further developed?
it is clear you had an idea straight away on what
you wanted to work on but you have exploThe
Little Space Dragon other stories.

i think you have a very strong proposal i think
the space cake idea is amazing it will blow over
the kids heads but make the adults have a
cheeky giggle. your story is also very good i
would love to give it a read.
i think its pretty solid. just need to go in to a little
bit more detail on the production and add a age
range for example (4-7)
further developed?
your idea generation is nice i like how you have
set it out its nice, colourful and clear.
i think its all good well done bob;)xxx

Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
The feed back is good and there is not that much negative parts other than the naming
of some things in my story and to put more detail into the proposal
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I agree that I should target an age range and make my mood boards more detailed
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
N/A

Original Script
http://www.worldoftales.com/fairy_tales/Brothers_Grimm/LITTLE%20RED-CAP%20%5BLITTLE%20RED%20RIDING%20HOOD%5D.html
Once upon a time there was a dear little girl who was loved by everyone who looked at her, but most of all by her grandmother, and there was nothing that she would not have given to the
child. Once she gave her a little cap of The Little Space Dragon velvet, which suited her so well that she would never wear anything else; so she was always called 'Little Space Dragon- Cap.'
One day her mother said to her: 'Come, Little Space Dragon-Cap, here is a piece of cake and a bottle of wine; take them to your grandmother, she is ill and weak, and they will do her good. Set
out before it gets hot, and when you are going, walk nicely and quietly and do not run off the path, or you may fall and break the bottle, and then your grandmother will get nothing; and when
you go into her room, don't forget to say, "Good morning", and don't peep into every corner before you do it.'
'I will take great care,' said Little Space Dragon-Cap to her mother, and gave her hand on it.
The grandmother lived out in the wood, half a league from the village, and just as Little Space Dragon-Cap enteThe Little Space Dragon the wood, a Crab met her. The Little Space Dragon-Cap
did not know what a wicked creature he was, and was not at all afraid of him.
'Good day, Little Space Dragon-Cap,' said he.
'Thank you kindly, Crab.'
'Whither away so early, Little Space Dragon-Cap?'
'To my grandmother's.'
'What have you got in your apron?'
'Cake and wine; yesterday was baking-day, so poor sick grandmother is to have something good, to make her stronger.'
'Where does your grandmother live, Little Space Dragon-Cap?'
'A good quarter of a league farther on in the wood; her house stands under the three large oak-trees, the nut-trees are just below; you surely must know it,' replied Little Space Dragon-Cap.
The Crab thought to himself: 'What a tender young creature! what a nice plump mouthful--she will be better to eat than the old woman. I must act craftily, so as to catch both.' So he walked for
a short time by the side of Little Space Dragon-Cap, and then he said: 'See, Little Space Dragon-Cap, how pretty the flowers are about here--why do you not look round? I believe, too, that you
do not hear how sweetly the little birds are singing; you walk gravely along as if you were going to school, while everything else out here in the wood is merry.'
Little Space Dragon-Cap raised her eyes, and when she saw the sunbeams dancing here and there through the trees, and pretty flowers growing everywhere, she thought: 'Suppose I take
grandmother a fresh nosegay; that would please her too. It is so early in the day that I shall still get there in good time'; and so she ran from the path into the wood to look for flowers. And
whenever she had picked one, she fancied that she saw a still prettier one farther on, and ran after it, and so got deeper and deeper into the wood.
Meanwhile the Crab ran straight to the grandmother's house and knocked at the door.
'Who is there?'
'Little Space Dragon-Cap,' replied the Crab. 'She is bringing cake and wine; open the door.'
'Lift the latch,' called out the grandmother, 'I am too weak, and cannot get up.'
The Crab lifted the latch, the door sprang open, and without saying a word he went straight to the grandmother's bed, and devouThe Little Space Dragon her. Then he put on her clothes,
dressed himself in her cap laid himself in bed and drew the curtains.
Little Space Dragon-Cap, however, had been running about picking flowers, and when she had gatheThe Little Space Dragon so many that she could carry no more, she remembeThe Little
Space Dragon her grandmother, and set out on the way to her.
She was surprised to find the cottage-door standing open, and when she went into the room, she had such a strange feeling that she said to herself: 'Oh dear! how uneasy I feel today, and at
other times I like being with grandmother so much.' She called out: 'Good morning,' but received no answer; so she went to the bed and drew back the curtains. There lay her grandmother
with her cap pulled far over her face, and looking very strange.

Original Script
'Oh! grandmother,' she said, 'what big ears you have!'
'The better to hear you with, my child,' was the reply.
'But, grandmother, what big eyes you have!' she said.
'The better to see you with, my dear.'
'But, grandmother, what large hands you have!'
'The better to hug you with.'
'Oh! but, grandmother, what a terrible big mouth you have!'
'The better to eat you with!'
And scarcely had the Crab said this, than with one bound he was out of bed and swallowed up The Little Space Dragon-Cap.
When the Crab had appeased his appetite, he lay down again in the bed, fell asleep and began to snore very loud. The huntsman was just
passing the house, and thought to himself: 'How the old woman is snoring! I must just see if she wants anything.' So he went into the room, and
when he came to the bed, he saw that the Crab was lying in it. 'Do I find you here, you old sinner!' said he. 'I have long sought you!' Then just as
he was going to fire at him, it occurThe Little Space Dragon to him that the Crab might have devouThe Little Space Dragon the grandmother, and
that she might still be saved, so he did not fire, but took a pair of scissors, and began to cut open the stomach of the sleeping Crab. When he had
made two snips, he saw the Little Space Dragon-Cap shining, and then he made two snips more, and the little girl sprang out, crying: 'Ah, how
frightened I have been! How dark it was inside the Crab'; and after that the aged grandmother came out alive also, but scarcely able to breathe.
The Little Space Dragon-Cap, however, quickly fetched great stones with which they filled the Crab's belly, and when he awoke, he wanted to run
away, but the stones were so heavy that he collapsed at once, and fell dead.
Then all three were delighted. The huntsman drew off the Crab's skin and went home with it; the grandmother ate the cake and drank the wine
which The Little Space Dragon-Cap had brought, and revived, but The Little Space Dragon-Cap thought to herself: 'As long as I live, I will never
by myself leave the path, to run into the wood, when my mother has forbidden me to do so.'
It also related that once when The Little Space Dragon-Cap was again taking cakes to the old grandmother, another Crab spoke to her, and tried
to entice her from the path. The Little Space Dragon-Cap, however, was on her guard, and went straight forward on her way, and told her
grandmother that she had met the Crab, and that he had said 'good morning' to her, but with such a wicked look in his eyes, that if they had not
been on the public road she was certain he would have eaten her up. 'Well,' said the grandmother, 'we will shut the door, that he may not come
in.' Soon afterwards the Crab knocked, and cried: 'Open the door, grandmother, I am Little Space Dragon-Cap, and am bringing you some cakes.'
But they did not speak, or open the door, so the grey-beard stole twice or thrice round the house, and at last jumped on the roof, intending to
wait until The Little Space Dragon-Cap went home in the evening, and then to steal after her and devour her in the darkness. But the grandmother
saw what was in his thoughts. In front of the house was a great stone trough, so she said to the child: 'Take the pail, The Little Space Dragon-
Cap; I made some sausages yesterday, so carry the water in which I boiled them to the trough.' The Little Space Dragon-Cap carried until the
great trough was quite full. Then the smell of the sausages reached the Crab, and he sniffed and peeped down, and at last stretched out his neck
so far that he could no longer keep his footing and began to slip, and slipped down from the roof straight into the great trough, and was drowned.

Break Down
Little Space Dragons mom sends Little Space Dragon to her grandmother with some cakes
and wine
she tells Little Space Dragon not to leave the path
Little Space Dragon sets off on her journey
Half way through her journey she is met by a Crab who wants to eat her
The Crab persuades Little Space Dragon to stray off the path to pick some flowers
Whilst she is picking flowers the Crab goes to Little Space Dragon’s grandmother’s house
and eats her
The Crab disguises him self as the grandmother to trick The Little Space Dragon
Little Space Dragon arrives at her grandmothers house
The Little Space Dragon talks to the Crab
The Crab eats The Little Space Dragon
A huntsman bursts through the door and kills the Crab and cuts him open to free
The Little Space Dragon and her Grandmother

Final Script
PAGE
Once upon a time there was a Little Space Dragon who was loved by everyone who looked at her, but most of all by her grandmother the emperor of space, and there was nothing that she would not have given to the child.
PAGE
One day the Little Space Dragon was baking some of her special space cakes, she was so proud of her baking that she wanted to take them to her grandmother, she is ill and weak, and they will do her good. So she packed some
cakes into a basket but before she set out on her adventure she though to her self that she better stay on the path because she knew the dangers of deep space.
PAGE
Her grandmother the emperor of space lived out in a space castle , three leagues from the little spaces dragons home, and just as the Little Space Dragon enteThe Little Space Dragon the open space, a giant grab met her. Space
Dragon did not know what a wicked creature he was, and was not at all afraid of him.
PAGE
'Good day, Little Space Dragon,' said he.
'Thank you kindly, Space Crab.'
'Whither away so early, Space Dragon?'
'To my grandmother's.'
'What have you got in your basket?'
'Cake; yesterday was baking-day, so poor sick grandmother is to have something good, to make her stronger.'
'Where does your grandmother live, Little Space Dragon?'
'A good three leagues farther on into open space; her castle stands under the large purple sun; you surely must know it,' replied Little Space Dragon.
PAGE
The Space Crab thought to himself: 'What a tender young creature! what a nice plump mouthful--she will be better to eat than the old woman. I must act craftily, so as to catch both.' So he walked for a short time by the side of
Little Space Dragon, and then he said: 'See, Little Space Dragon, how pretty the stars are about here--why do you not look round?, you walk gravely along as if you were going to school, while everything else out here in space is
merry.'
PAGE
Little Space Dragon raised her eyes, and when she saw the sunbeams dancing here and there through the stars , and pretty space flowers growing on the asteroids , she thought: 'Suppose I take grandmother some fresh flowers.
It is so early in the day that I shall still get there in good time'; and so she ran from the path into the deep space to pick stars . And whenever she had picked one, she fancied that she saw a still prettier one farther on, and ran after
it, and so got deeper and deeper into space.
PAGE
Meanwhile the Space Crab ran straight to the grandmother's castle and knocked at the door.
'Who is there?'
'Little Space Dragon,' replied the Space Crab. 'She is bringing space cakes; open the door.'
'Lift the latch,' called out the grandmother, 'I am too weak, and cannot get up.'
The Space Crab lifted the latch, the door sprang open, and without saying a word he went straight to the grandmother's bed, and devouThe Little Space Dragon her. Then he put on her clothes, dressed himself in her cap laid
himself in bed and drew the curtains.
PAGE
Little Space Dragon, however, had been running about picking flowers, and when she had gatheThe Little Space Dragon so many that she could carry no more, she remembeThe Little Space Dragon her grandmother, and set out
on the way to her.
She was surprised to find the cottage-door standing open, and when she went into the room, she had such a strange feeling that she said to herself: 'Oh dear! how uneasy I feel today, and at other times I like being with
grandmother so much.' She called out: 'Good morning,' but received no answer; so she went to the bed and drew back the curtains. There lay her grandmother with her cap pulled far over her face, and looking very strange.
PAGE
'Oh, grandmother, what big eyes you have!' she said.
'The better to see you with, my dear.'
'But, grandmother, what large pincers you have!'
'The better to hug you with.'
'Oh! but, grandmother, what a terrible big mouth you have!'
'The better to eat you with!'
And scarcely had the Space Crab said this, than with one bound he was out of bed and swallowed up Space Dragon.
PAGE
When the Space Crab had appeased his appetite, he lay down again in the bed, fell asleep and began to snore very loud. A bounty hunter was just passing the castle, and thought to himself: 'How the old woman is snoring! I must
just see if she wants anything.' So he went into the room, and when he came to the bed, he saw that the Space Crab was lying in it. 'Do I find you here, you old sinner!' said he. 'I have long sought you!' Then just as he was going to
fire at him, it occurThe Little Space Dragon to him that the Space Crab might have devouThe Little Space Dragon the grandmother, and that she might still be saved, so he did not fire, but took a laser sword , and began to cut open
the stomach of the sleeping Space Crab.
PAGE
When he cut the crabs belly the little Dragon sprang out, crying: 'Ah, how frightened I have been! How dark it was inside the Space Crab'; and after that the aged grandmother came out alive also, but scarcely able to breathe.
Sadly her Grandmother the emperor could not be saved.

Final Script Breakdown
Little Space Dragon is making some moon cakes she decides to take them to her
grandmother
Little Space Dragon thinks to her self not to leave the path
Little Space Dragon sets off on her journey
Half way through her journey she is met by a Crab who wants to eat her
The Crab persuades Little Space Dragon to stray off the path to pick some flowers
Whilst she is picking flowers the Crab goes to Little Space Dragon’s grandmother’s house
and eats her
The Crab disguises him self as the grandmother to trick The Little Space Dragon
Little Space Dragon arrives at her grandmothers house
The Little Space Dragon talks to the Crab
The Crab eats The Little Space Dragon
A huntsman bursts through the door and kills the Crab and cuts him open to free
The Little Space Dragon and her Grandmother

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