3. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how bright and colourful I have made my animals. I like the shapes I have
created to design these animals. My favourite animal I made was the panda this is
because I added a glow effect and it looks like a hypnosis panda.
What would you improve if you did it again?
To improve I would make the first image look cuter and more furry to make it look
more eye-catching and a bit more realistic. I would also improve the sand hills in the
background because they don’t look very accurate and I think they should be the
same colour as the sand in the foreground.
4. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked the inner shadows I used to make the walls and floor look
realistic. I also like the 3D I added it adds depth to the background and
it makes it more interesting then a 2D room. I like the colour gradients
I used on the window to make It look more like a window and it not
just a one colour rectangle.
What would you improve if you did it again?
Next time I would add more objects to make the rooms look
more exciting because there isn't much going on in them and
that makes it quite boring.
6. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I really like this image because I think I did really well making it look like Walter white off of breaking bad. I also
like the breaking bad title I made, this is because it looks almost exactly like the proper title of breaking bad. I
really like the smoke effect in the background because it brings out Walter's suit and head. I also like how I
have made It so you can look through the lenses and see his eyes. I have made the wrinkles look as accurate as
possible so you have a good indication that it is Walter white. The shadows bring out his nose and the way its
actually shaped and I really like that because it adds realism.
What would you improve if you did it again?
To improve I would add more shadow to his face and a few more wrinkles
8. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
i like the 3D i added it adds depth and it makes the picture way more interesting. i
also like that gradients i used on the window, as it makes i look more like a window
then just using one colour. i used inner shadows on the walls and floor to make it look
more realistic. Rooms normally have darker corners so I included that into my
background.
What would you improve if you did it again?
i would add more objects to the images to make it look more interesting, for example
i would and a bed to the bedroom I did or add cupboard.
10. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
i like the picture i put in the text instead of a colour, it makes the text more
interesting. i like the word ‘bang’ i did. This is because i rasterized it and warped it to
make it look like it's going to go bang. i also used a red font to symbolise danger.
What would you improve if you did it again?
i don't think there is anything that needs improving.
16. Things i like about the illustration.
Things that need to be improved.
Next time I would add colour to my cartoon character to make the
character more eye catching for children.
I like this cartoon character i drew because it looks appealing to young children
more aimed at girls as she is wearing a dress and has styled hair and long
eyelashes
17. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the effects i put onto the picture it made superman look
like he was drawn in a comic book. i also like how the effects
made the environment look like a cartoon world.
What would you improve if you did it again?
Next time I would make the text stand out more. I would do this
placing it into a speech bubble to make it look more like an
extract from a comic book.
19. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I really like this photo story because it looks a lot like a comic book. I like the way I
positioned my images and the borders around them. I also like the key I
PhotoShopped into the photos. To do this I got a picture of a key from the internet
and i scaled it down to a smaller size using the transform tool. Another thing I like is
the door that my friend falls into, i think it's very comical. I like the text ‘aaaahhhhhh’
and the shape of the picture on the last page of my photo story. To do both of these
things I had to rasterize, transform and warp. I like it, it adds a very cool effect and it's
very eye-catching as it looks like the vortex is sucking the other photos in.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I don't think there needs to be any improvements.
21. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I really like this image because I added a picture of blood on the text to make it look as gory as the image. I also
made the text big and bold because it's quite a violent film and i didn't want a pretty font. I took a picture from
the internet of the main character, I got an image of blood and I put a layer of blood over his face to make the
photo more interesting. I did this by making the blood transparent so you can still see the character.
What would you improve if you did it again?
next time I would add some blood splatters on the white background to make it look for eye-catching and gory.
23. MIND MAP
Pablo pan and his sidekick
Robert the raven, Has to
save his girl friend laquisha,
who has been captured by
captain bananas and his evil
army of monkey’s.
The three little sheep. Somone, sally and
Susan. The evil dragon Jeff try's to burn
their huts down to eat them.
Fire red and the seven
camels.
Harry and Georgia stumble
across a cave made from I
pads, gaming systems and
sweets. They stay there for 2
years and they get fat. The
evil apple witch try's to eat
them.
24. STORY
The story is about a pizza deliver man called Pablo Pan who
has a flying pizza delivery bike. Pablo has a girlfriend who is
called Laquisha and a magic talking raven called Robert as his
sidekick.
One day Pablo and laquisha are enjoying a lovely pizza and
suddenly the evil captain bananas comes out of nowhere and
captures laquisha with his evil army of monkeys.
Pablo’s mission is to recue her with Robert from the evil
jungle tree house laquisha is captured in….
25. Characters
• Pablo pan the pizza delivery man
• Captain bananas (gorilla)
• raven the talking bird
• Laquisha (the lady that needs to be rescued)
• Captain bananas monkey army
32. Proposal
Dimensions
There will be 8-12 in my book and each page will be size 30cm x 20cm.
Story Overview
The story is about a pizza deliver man called Pablo Pan who has a flying pizza delivery
bike. Pablo has a girlfriend who is called Laquisha and a magic talking raven called
Robert as his sidekick. One day Pablo and laquisha are enjoying a lovely pizza and
suddenly the evil captain bananas comes out of nowhere and captures laquisha with
his evil army of monkeys. Pablo’s mission is to recue her with Robert from the evil
jungle tree house laquisha is captured in….
Export Format
JPEG
Advantages: compresses images so the file size is reduced.
Disadvantages: when you compress the images they can lose quality.
33. Deadline
15th of January 2016
Audience
My audience will be 4-7 years. It will also be unisex (for girls and boys) I will
be selling my books to anyone and I will be selling them online.
Production Methods
To produce my pages I will be using Photoshop. This is because I can create
my illustrations in high quality and I be as creative as possible. I will be
building my characters from scratch using the shape tool and the polygon
tool. I will Add strokes to my text to make it stand out more and I will also
rasterize my text so I can warp it to add an eye catching effect. I will also
add drop shadow to my characters to bring them out the page.
34. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
I think that your story is very imaginative and has a
brilliant story, you have told me the size of your
book and pages which is good to have an idea of
what you want your book to be. It is good that you
aren’t targeting a single audience so every one can
enjoy your book and you will have a wider
audience.
Using JPEG might be a bad idea as it looses
quality over time and might loose some quality in
production. Say what size text you will be using and
font.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
I think your idea generation is very fleshed out and
has given me many ideas of what your main
characters are and what they look like.
I don’t get were you got you inspiration from and I
don’t understand on how you came to this
conclusion.
35. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
I feel that your strengths is that you have produced
a story which has never being done before, as the
you used the media stereotypes names to make
your characters this gives humour.
Personally I wouldn't of used JPEG has you like be
doing a lot of post-production and saving of the
images this makes the quality of the JPEG poor
over time as you will constantly manipulating it and
saving it into different files.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
I feel that you have considered many factors and
have the generic narrative, i.e. ‘hero saves damsel
in distress’ I feel this will be popular with your target
audience as they are old enough to under stand
more feelings etc.
I feel you should develop the ending, does Pablo
save the love of is life? Does the women fall wall in
love with the monkey in the end?
36. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
• Good advantages/disadvantages of your export
format.
• Nice level of detail on the production method
section.
• Sensible audience.
• Maybe think of some more advantages and
disadvantage for your export format; or expand
on some of the points you already have.
• Add a few more sentences of the methods that
you will use to create your children’s book.
• Be more specific with your demographic and
think about the exact type of child that would
read your book. This will help you make choices
in the creation of your book.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
• Really nice ideas for the story. Very creative.
• Strong character mood boards, helps me
imagine what your story is going to be like.
• Include a mood board for all of the different
scenes that are going to be in Pablo Pan. This
will help you imagine how everything will look
together and will give you ideas for your actual
book.
37. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
I think my feed back is very informative I will take it all in and do
what they have told me to do.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I agree with all of it and I am going to improve and rectify all my
work for the best grade.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I don’t disagree with any of it.
38. Original Script
One night Peter Pan took Wendy, John, and Michael to his home,
Never Never Land. His fairy friend Tinker Bell dusted the children
with fairy dust so they could fly.
The children were very happy playing there. Suddenly they found
themselves surrounded by pirates! They huddled together in fear.
“Put your hands by your side. March in a line!” ordered the captain.
All the children followed the captain as he led them to an old ship.
Tinker Bell was passing through and saw them. She rushed to
inform Peter Pan.
Peter and Tinker Bell found the children tied to the mast of the ship.
They got ready to attack. “Beware! Here I come!” said Peter with a
great cry as he jumped on the railing and challenged the captain to
a fight. “Help me!” cried the old captain losing his balance and
going overboard. “Hurrah!” the children and Tinker Bell cheered
heartily for Peter Pan.
http://shortstoriesshort.com/story/peter-pan/
39. Final script
Page 1: Pablo and laquisha are enjoying a romantic meal at Pablo's house.
Page 2: captain banana comes out of nowhere with his army of moneys and captures laquisha.
Page 3: Laquisha is a hostage in captain bananas tree house
Page 4: Pablo pan shouted Robert the raven and Robert comes flying through the window
Page 5: Pablo asked Robert to help him rescue his beloved laquisha.
Page 6: Pablo is on his flying delivery pizza bike with Robert flying by his side.
Page 7: Pablo looks through his binoculars of laquisha crying in captain bananas tree house.
Page 8: Pablo swooped in on his bike throwing pizza in the eyes of captain bananas army.
Page 9: Pablo wants to get into the room Laquisha is in but captain banana is block the way.
Page 10: Robert the raven pecked captain bananas face and Pablo ran into the room laquisha is in.
Page 11: Pablo flying out the window on his pizza bike with laquisha.
Page 12: Pablo, laquisha and Robert flying off into the moonlight.
