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Business Writing Workshop
Developing Powerful Sentences
Business Writing Workshop
Developing Powerful Sentences
Introduction
This course has discussed how to capture your ideas, organize them into an effective document, and use those ideas to tell a powerful story. The last important element in successful writing is your mechanical skill: how well you construct and use clear, logical sentences.
A disciplined writer has the ability to write well-crafted sentences with variety and clarity. This session will discuss basic sentence construction, including sentences structure, clauses, and phrases. It will also describe how to troubleshoot your sentences: to recognize and apply techniques for improving your sentences so you say what you mean.
When you complete this session, you will be able to do the following:
· Define the terms “phrase” and “clause” and explain how each is used in sentences.
· Name, define, and give examples of the four types of sentences.
· Define and give examples of dependent and independent clauses.
· Name and give examples of the three types of phrases.
· Uses phrases and clauses as nouns and modifiers in sentences.
· Analyze and rewrite sentences with problems in construction.
· Name symptoms that indicate problems with sentence structure.
Activity
Here are some words in disarray. Use the space below to arrange these words into a logical sentence.
Use only the words that are here and use all of them!
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The Structure of the Sentence
Definition: Sentence
The sentence combines words to express a complete thought. The sentence is the basic structure of written English.
Sentences have two required elements: the subject and the predicate.
1. The subject is the actor or the object of action in the sentence. The subject tells what or whom the sentence is writing about.
Example: The chairman reviewed the report.
2. The predicate is the action or activity of the sentence. The predicate normally tells what the subject is doing or what is happening to the sentence.
Examples: The chairman reviewed the report.
The report was reviewed by the chairman.
In many sentences, the verb requires an object or a complement to complete the thought. The type of verb determines whether the word that completes the sentence is a noun or a modifier.
Example: The chairman reviewed the report.
This answer is incomplete.
Here are some examples of simple sentences.
The managersattended the meeting.
subject predicate direct object
The meetingwas held at 4:00.
subject predicate
Margaretdid not have the information for her report.
subject predicate
Paulpresented a report.
s p
The reportwas long.
s p
Paulhad told me the results.
s p
Weadjourned the meeting at 5:45 without a decision.
s p
Modifiers
Many sentences also contain modifiers. Modifier ...
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3. Writing Workshop: Revision strategies
Choose a partner
Read both essays aloud before you start
to write about or discuss the essays.
On separate sheets of paper, answer all
of the questions from the handout for
your partner’s essay.
When you finish, return your comments
to the writer.
When you get your essay back, read the
comments and determine how you might
remedy any issues.
5. MLA format: on our website under
“MLA Guidelines.”
MLA (Modern Language Association) style is most commonly used to write papers
and cite sources within the liberal arts and humanities.
MLA style specifies guidelines for formatting manuscripts and using the English
language in writing. MLA style also provides writers with a system for referencing
their sources through parenthetical citation in their essays and Works Cited pages.
Writers who properly use MLA also build their credibility by demonstrating
accountability to their source material. Most importantly, the use of MLA style can
protect writers from accusations of plagiarism, which is the purposeful or
accidental uncredited use of source material by other writers.
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/01/
7. Margins and
Formatting
Double Click in
Header Area
Type your last name
Justify right
Go to “insert” and click
on “page number
Header: Last Name 1
1” all around
Go to “Layout” and
adjust margins or
use custom
settings
Times New Roman
12
Indent body
paragraphs ½ inch
from the margin
8. Heading: Double
Spaced
Your Name
Dr. Kim Palmore
EWRT 1A
3 May 2012
Title
Original Title (not the title of
the essay we read)
No italics, bold, underline, or
quotation marks
Centered on the page
No extra spaces (just double
spaced after your heading and
before the body of your text.
9.
10. Making A Works Cited
Page MLA Style
Ensure that you have a properly formatted works cited page
13. Many people write wordy papers because they are trying to make
their ideas sound important by using long words and intricate
sentences. They think that their writing must be complicated to
seem professional. Although these writers are trying to impress
their readers, they often end up confusing them. The best writing
is clear, concise, and easy to understand. Your ideas are much more
impressive when your reader does not have to fight to understand
you.
Wordiness: using more words than
necessary to express thought.
14. Often writers use several words for ideas that can be expressed in one.
This leads to unnecessarily complex sentences and genuine redundancy as
the following examples show:
Redundant
The printer is located adjacent to
the computer
The printer is located in the
immediate vicinity of the computer
The user can visibly see the image
moving
He wore a shirt that was blue in
color
The input is suitably processed
Not Redundant
The printer is adjacent to the
computer
The printer is near the computer
The user can see the image moving
He wore a blue shirt.
The input is processed
15. Now you try it. Write this sentence in as few words as
possible without changing the meaning!
The available receptacle, in any
case, was of insufficient size to
contain the total quantity of
unnecessary waste.
16. How to reduce wordiness!
1. Reduce Long Clauses
When editing, try to reduce long
clauses to shorter phrases:
Wordy: The clown who was in
the center ring was riding a
tricycle.
Revised: The clown in the
center ring was riding a tricycle.
2. Reduce Phrases
Likewise, try to reduce phrases
to single words:
Wordy: The clown at the end
of the line tried to sweep up
the spotlight.
Revised: The last clown tried
to sweep up the spotlight.
17. Eliminating Wordiness: Strategies
3. Avoid Empty Openers
Avoid There is, There are, and
There were as sentence openers
when There adds nothing to the
meaning of a sentence:
Wordy: There is a prize in every
box of Quacko cereal.
Revised: A prize is in every box
of Quacko cereal.
Wordy: There are two security
guards at the gate.
Revised: Two security guards
stand at the gate.
4. Don’t Overwork Modifiers
Do not overwork very, really,
totally, and other modifiers that
add little or nothing to the
meaning of a sentence.
Wordy: By the time she got home,
Merdine was very tired.
Revised: By the time she got
home, Merdine was exhausted
Wordy: She was also really hungry.
Revised: She was also hungry [or
famished].
18. Eliminating Wordiness
5. Avoid Redundancies
Replace redundant expressions (phrases that use more words
than necessary to make a point) with precise words. Remember:
needless words are those that add nothing (or nothing
significant) to the meaning of our writing. They bore the reader
and distract from our ideas. So cut them out!
Wordy: At this point in time, we should edit our work.
Revised: Now we should edit our work.
19. Try these!
1. He dropped out of school on account of the fact that it was necessary
for him to help support his family.
2. It is expected that the new schedule will be announced by the bus
company within the next few days.
3. There are many ways in which a student who is interested in meeting
foreign students may come to know one.
4. It is very unusual to find someone who has never told a deliberate lie on
purpose.
5. Trouble is caused when people disobey rules that have been established
for the safety of all.
20. Possible Answers
1. He dropped out of school to support his family.
2. The bus company will probably announce its schedule during
the next few days.
3. Any student who wants to meet foreign students can do so in
many ways.
4. Rarely will you find someone who has never told a deliberate lie.
5. Disobeying safety regulations causes trouble.
21. Find a Wordy Sentence
Check your essay for wordiness. Look for a
sentence that falls into one of the categories
we just discussed. Edit it for clarity and
conciseness.
23. Compound Sentence
A compound sentence is made up of two or more simple
sentences joined by one of the following:
A comma and a coordinating conjunction
I like to study grammar, and I love this class.
A semicolon
I like to study grammar; I love this class.
A semicolon and an adverbial conjunction
I like to study grammar; therefore, I love this class.
26. COMPOUND SENTENCE:
CONJUNCTIVE ADVERBS
I don’t think you understand punctuation;
therefore, we need to review.
.
I taught you how to write with adverbial
conjunctions last week; however, most of you
did not do it correctly in your essays.
Clause 1 Clause 2
Independent Independent
27. Look for Run-On Sentences
Look for compound sentences in your essay. Make sure you
are using both a comma and a conjunction.
Example: , and
Look for adverbial conjunctions; make sure you have
punctuated those sentences correctly.
Example ; however,
29. Dangling Modifiers
A dangling modifier is a word or phrase that modifies a word
not clearly stated in the sentence. A modifier describes,
clarifies, or gives more detail about a concept.
Having finished the assignment, Jill turned on the TV.
"Having finished" states an action but does not name the
doer of that action. In English sentences, the doer must be
the subject of the main clause that follows. In this sentence, it
is Jill. She seems logically to be the one doing the action
("having finished"), and this sentence therefore does not have
a dangling modifier.
30. The following sentence has an incorrect usage:
Having finished the assignment, the TV was turned
on.
"Having finished" is a participle expressing action,
but the doer is not the TV set (the subject of the
main clause): TV sets don't finish assignments. Since
the doer of the action expressed in the participle has
not been clearly stated, the participial phrase is said to
be a dangling modifier.
31. Strategies for revising dangling
modifiers:
1. Name the appropriate or logical doer of the action as the
subject of the main clause:
Having arrived late for practice, a written excuse was needed.
Who arrived late? This sentence says that the written excuse
arrived late. To revise, decide who actually arrived late. The
possible revision might look like this:
Having arrived late for practice, the team captain needed a
written excuse.
32. 2. Change the phrase that dangles into a complete introductory
clause by naming the doer of the action in that clause:
Without knowing his name, it was difficult to introduce him.
Who didn't know his name? This sentence says that "it" didn't know
his name. To revise, decide who was trying to introduce him. The
revision might look something like this:
Because Maria did not know his name, it was difficult to introduce
him.
The phrase is now a complete introductory clause; it does not
modify any other part of the sentence, so is not considered
"dangling."
33. 3. Combine the phrase and main clause into one:
To improve his results, the experiment was done
again.
Who wanted to improve results? This sentence says
that the experiment was trying to improve its own
results. To revise, combine the phrase and the main
clause into one sentence. The revision might look
something like this:
He improved his results by doing the experiment
again.
34. 1. After reading the original study, the article remains
unconvincing.
1. Relieved of your responsibilities at your job, your home
should be a place to relax.
1. The experiment was a failure, not having studied the lab
manual carefully.
Are these correct?
35. Incorrect: After reading the original study, the article remains unconvincing.
Revised: After reading the original study, I find the article unconvincing.
Incorrect: Relieved of your responsibilities at your job, your home should be
a place to relax.
Revised: Relieved of your responsibilities at your job, you should be able to
relax at home.
Incorrect: The experiment was a failure, not having studied the lab manual
carefully.
Revised: They failed the experiment, not having studied the lab manual
carefully.
36. Look for Dangling Modifiers
Check your introductory clauses to
make sure that the doer is the subject
of the main clause that follows it.
37. Writing Tips
Write about literature in present tense
Write about your experience in past tense
Avoid using “thing,” “something,” “everything,” and “anything.”
Avoid writing in second person. (Don’t use “you” unless it is in
dialogue.
38. Surface Revision Strategies
Read Aloud
Reading the paper aloud slowly can
often bring to attention large and
small mistakes missed in the writing
and typing process. Read each
sentence and ask does it make
sense? Is it awkward? Am I
including words that are not actually
written on the paper? Sometimes
reading the paper out of order can
help isolate problems. Try reading
the paragraphs starting with the last
sentence and then reading the
previous sentence and so on; this
can reveal problems in the
sentences.
Isolate Specific Problems
Isolating specific problems can help
give objectivity to one's personal
work. One way to isolate specific
issues is to circle them on a paper
draft and look at them one by one.
For example: circle all commas and
then go back and look at each
comma asking if it is in the
appropriate place with the correct
usage. Another example would be
to circle all verbs and then go back
one by one and identify the tense
and verify subject verb agreement.
39. HOMEWORK
Read: HG through chapter 15
SMG 134- 148
Write: Using the comments you received from your
readers, revise your draft. Improve your essay! Revise and
Edit Essay #2. Due electronically before the next class.
Send a MSWord document to Palmorekim@fhda.edu. Your
paper must be in MLA format.
Post #7: Post two versions a section of your essay that
vividly describes a place AND two versions of a section that
vividly describes a person. (One draft version and one
revised version of each)
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