Here are concise revisions of the wordy sentences:
1. He dropped out of school because he needed to help support his family.
2. The bus company will announce the new schedule within the next few days.
3. Students can meet in many ways.
The document provides the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. It includes sections on writing workshop, reviewing MLA formatting, revision strategies for wordiness, submitting assignments to Kaizena, and answering questions. It discusses integrating quotations, setting up a works cited page, eliminating wordiness through reducing clauses and phrases, avoiding redundancies, and submitting essays electronically. The homework includes posting revised essay sections, submitting Essay #2 through Kaizena in MLA format, and revising Essay #2 based on comments.
The document provides the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. It includes discussions on revision strategies, MLA formatting, editing for wordiness and compound sentences, and in-class writing. It reviews strategies for revising essays, setting up papers in MLA format, identifying and correcting wordy and redundant writing, fixing run-on sentences, and submitting essays electronically for feedback. Students are assigned to revise Essay #2 based on peer comments and submit it before the next class.
This document provides an agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. It covers writing workshop revision strategies, reviewing MLA format, and editing strategies to reduce wordiness and improve compound sentences. It also discusses in-class writing and homework assignments which include revising Essay #2 based on peer feedback and submitting it electronically before the next class.
The document summarizes the agenda and content for Class 18 of an EWRT 1A course. It includes presentations on MLA format and reducing wordiness in writing, as well as an in-class writing workshop. It provides guidance on proper MLA formatting for elements like paper format, headings, citations, and quotations. It also discusses common writing errors like wordiness and provides strategies for eliminating extra words to improve clarity and concision.
This document provides an agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. The agenda includes a writing workshop, reviewing MLA formatting, and discussing revision strategies like eliminating wordiness. The notes cover how to set up a paper in MLA format, including headings, margins, and creating a works cited page. Strategies for reducing wordiness like removing redundant words and phrases are also outlined. Students are instructed to find a wordy sentence in their essay and edit it, and the document concludes with directions for homework assignments.
The document outlines an agenda for a class that includes a presentation on MLA formatting, discussions of editing strategies like compound sentences and dangling modifiers, and an in-class writing workshop. It then provides details on MLA formatting guidelines, examples of citing sources, and strategies for avoiding common writing errors like wordiness, misused words, punctuation issues, and dangling modifiers.
Here are the sentences with corrections for dangling modifiers:
1. After reading the original study, I found the article remains unconvincing.
2. If relieved of your responsibilities at your job, you should relax at home.
3. Not having studied the lab manual carefully, the experiment was a failure.
Here are revised versions without unnecessary words:
1. He dropped out of school because he needed to help support his family.
2. The new schedule is expected to be announced by the bus company within the next few days.
3. [I did not provide a revision for the third example because no wordy sentence was provided.]
The document provides the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. It includes sections on writing workshop, reviewing MLA formatting, revision strategies for wordiness, submitting assignments to Kaizena, and answering questions. It discusses integrating quotations, setting up a works cited page, eliminating wordiness through reducing clauses and phrases, avoiding redundancies, and submitting essays electronically. The homework includes posting revised essay sections, submitting Essay #2 through Kaizena in MLA format, and revising Essay #2 based on comments.
The document provides the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. It includes discussions on revision strategies, MLA formatting, editing for wordiness and compound sentences, and in-class writing. It reviews strategies for revising essays, setting up papers in MLA format, identifying and correcting wordy and redundant writing, fixing run-on sentences, and submitting essays electronically for feedback. Students are assigned to revise Essay #2 based on peer comments and submit it before the next class.
This document provides an agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. It covers writing workshop revision strategies, reviewing MLA format, and editing strategies to reduce wordiness and improve compound sentences. It also discusses in-class writing and homework assignments which include revising Essay #2 based on peer feedback and submitting it electronically before the next class.
The document summarizes the agenda and content for Class 18 of an EWRT 1A course. It includes presentations on MLA format and reducing wordiness in writing, as well as an in-class writing workshop. It provides guidance on proper MLA formatting for elements like paper format, headings, citations, and quotations. It also discusses common writing errors like wordiness and provides strategies for eliminating extra words to improve clarity and concision.
This document provides an agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. The agenda includes a writing workshop, reviewing MLA formatting, and discussing revision strategies like eliminating wordiness. The notes cover how to set up a paper in MLA format, including headings, margins, and creating a works cited page. Strategies for reducing wordiness like removing redundant words and phrases are also outlined. Students are instructed to find a wordy sentence in their essay and edit it, and the document concludes with directions for homework assignments.
The document outlines an agenda for a class that includes a presentation on MLA formatting, discussions of editing strategies like compound sentences and dangling modifiers, and an in-class writing workshop. It then provides details on MLA formatting guidelines, examples of citing sources, and strategies for avoiding common writing errors like wordiness, misused words, punctuation issues, and dangling modifiers.
Here are the sentences with corrections for dangling modifiers:
1. After reading the original study, I found the article remains unconvincing.
2. If relieved of your responsibilities at your job, you should relax at home.
3. Not having studied the lab manual carefully, the experiment was a failure.
Here are revised versions without unnecessary words:
1. He dropped out of school because he needed to help support his family.
2. The new schedule is expected to be announced by the bus company within the next few days.
3. [I did not provide a revision for the third example because no wordy sentence was provided.]
This document provides an overview of a feasibility study that tested a novel gravity-induced exercise intervention for individuals with Postural Tachycardia Syndrome (POTS). The intervention consisted of 7 progressively difficult exercises performed once a month over 5 months. 7 patients with POTS participated in the study. Results were variable among patients, but 3 out of 7 patients saw improvements in measures like cumulative exercise repetitions, orthostatic symptoms, and fatigue. The document discusses why some patients improved and others did not, and considers how the intervention may fit into future multifaceted POTS management. It meets the aims of the study by evaluating the intervention's effects and compliance.
El documento presenta un taller de evaluación de Ciencias Naturales para sexto grado que incluye preguntas sobre factores abióticos que afectan el crecimiento de los productores, la importancia de los productores en las cadenas alimenticias, qué sucedería si se eliminaran los productores, definiciones e ilustraciones de interacciones intra e interespecíficas, la construcción y explicación de una red trófica, el tipo de interacción entre humanos y piojos, el movimiento de la Tierra y las estaciones del año.
Fernando was born with microtia, a condition where the outer ear is underdeveloped or absent. He was missing his entire right ear. Doctors at CHKD reconstructed Fernando's ear using a novel two-step process. First, Dr. Moody created an ear canal and eardrum, allowing Fernando to hear from his right ear for the first time. Then Dr. Hoerr built an outer ear using a synthetic implant, giving Fernando a natural appearance. Six months after surgery, Fernando's ear had healed beautifully. He gained confidence from his new ear and haircut, and was thrilled to hear his classmates at school.
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To set up a WordPress account for a class, students can create a free account at WordPress.com and follow the setup steps. They can also sign in with their Facebook or Twitter accounts instead of using their own name. Students should email their WordPress username to the instructor once their account is established, as most class work will take place online and having an account is required. If any student needs help setting up their account, they should see the instructor.
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This document provides an agenda and guidance for students completing the final draft of an essay. It includes sections on sentence strategies, self-assessment, preparing the final draft, reviewing MLA style for integrating and citing sources, and formatting a works cited page. Students are instructed to work through slides 12-19 to prepare their essay for an in-class writing workshop, ensuring their essay is ready to submit for a grade. The document offers questions for students to consider about different elements of their essay, such as the beginning, defining the problem, describing the proposed solution, and ending. It also provides examples and guidelines for integrating quotations and summarizing sources in the correct MLA style.
Este documento describe cuatro tipos principales de multimedia: educativa, publicitaria, informativa y comercial. También discute las plataformas multimedia offline y online, y los tipos de aplicaciones multimedia como publicaciones electrónicas, tratamiento de información, educación multimedia, entretenimiento digital, páginas web y comercio electrónico.
Dokumen tersebut memberikan informasi mengenai layanan penyediaan media luar ruang digital berupa LED yang ditawarkan oleh PT Mahaka Media, Tbk melalui unit bisnis Mahaka Advertising. Dokumen tersebut menjelaskan lokasi, ukuran, cakupan penonton, dan harga sewa berbagai LED yang dioperasikan Mahaka Advertising.
This document provides a mock-up of an ecommerce check-out page design and lists various digital advertising placements including display network ads, mobile and desktop leaderboards, skyscrapers, squares, rectangles, and clickable banner ads from companies like LivingSocial and Groupon.
The document provides the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. It includes sections on writing workshop, reviewing MLA formatting, revision strategies for wordiness, submitting assignments to Kaizena, and answering questions. It reviews integrating quotations, setting up a works cited page, sentence-level writing errors, and submitting essays electronically. Students are assigned to post revised essay sections to the class discussion board and submit their Essay #2 through Kaizena by the due date while continuing to work on revising and editing based on feedback.
Class 7 1 a add mla formatting videos and integrating videojordanlachance
This document contains the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. The agenda includes a writing workshop on revision strategies, a presentation on MLA format, and an editing workshop on wordiness, compound sentences, and dangling modifiers. The notes provide guidance on these topics, including how to identify and correct common writing issues. For homework, students are assigned to read chapters of assigned texts, write a revised draft of Essay #2 based on peer feedback, and post excerpt comparisons to the online discussion board.
This document provides an agenda and instructions for an English writing class. It discusses MLA formatting style, including how to format a paper, integrate quotations, and create a works cited page in MLA style. It also covers topics like using signal phrases, formatting long quotations, and writing tips. Students are assigned to submit paragraphs from their Essay #2 and complete reading for the next class.
This document provides an agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. The agenda includes a writing workshop on revision strategies, a review of MLA format, and an in-class writing assignment. The notes cover topics like using revision strategies with a partner, setting up a paper in MLA format including headings, margins and pagination. It also discusses reducing wordiness, identifying and correcting run-on sentences and compound sentences, and submitting essays electronically for feedback.
The document provides the agenda for an EWRT 1A class. It includes discussing revision strategies, reviewing MLA format, and editing for wordiness and compound sentences. Students will work with partners to provide feedback on essays and determine revisions. The class will also cover properly setting up a paper in MLA format, including headings, margins, and a works cited page. Sentence-level writing issues like wordiness will be addressed, and strategies for reducing wordy writing presented. Homework includes revising Essay #2 based on peer feedback and submitting it electronically by the end of class.
This document provides an overview of a feasibility study that tested a novel gravity-induced exercise intervention for individuals with Postural Tachycardia Syndrome (POTS). The intervention consisted of 7 progressively difficult exercises performed once a month over 5 months. 7 patients with POTS participated in the study. Results were variable among patients, but 3 out of 7 patients saw improvements in measures like cumulative exercise repetitions, orthostatic symptoms, and fatigue. The document discusses why some patients improved and others did not, and considers how the intervention may fit into future multifaceted POTS management. It meets the aims of the study by evaluating the intervention's effects and compliance.
El documento presenta un taller de evaluación de Ciencias Naturales para sexto grado que incluye preguntas sobre factores abióticos que afectan el crecimiento de los productores, la importancia de los productores en las cadenas alimenticias, qué sucedería si se eliminaran los productores, definiciones e ilustraciones de interacciones intra e interespecíficas, la construcción y explicación de una red trófica, el tipo de interacción entre humanos y piojos, el movimiento de la Tierra y las estaciones del año.
Fernando was born with microtia, a condition where the outer ear is underdeveloped or absent. He was missing his entire right ear. Doctors at CHKD reconstructed Fernando's ear using a novel two-step process. First, Dr. Moody created an ear canal and eardrum, allowing Fernando to hear from his right ear for the first time. Then Dr. Hoerr built an outer ear using a synthetic implant, giving Fernando a natural appearance. Six months after surgery, Fernando's ear had healed beautifully. He gained confidence from his new ear and haircut, and was thrilled to hear his classmates at school.
Liu Guanzhong_Sustainable Thought Of Ancient Chinese CultureCarlo Vezzoli
The document discusses sustainable thought in ancient Chinese culture. It covers 6 main concepts: 1) long continuance, 2) balance and proportion, 3) cycle and period, 4) relation of all things, 5) use but not hold, 6) open source and save spending. These concepts emphasized harmony between humanity and nature, balance in resource use, and following natural cycles and orders to achieve sustainable development.
To set up a WordPress account for a class, students can create a free account at WordPress.com and follow the setup steps. They can also sign in with their Facebook or Twitter accounts instead of using their own name. Students should email their WordPress username to the instructor once their account is established, as most class work will take place online and having an account is required. If any student needs help setting up their account, they should see the instructor.
Características físicas y químicas de las botellas de plástico PETArturo Velazquez
El documento describe las características físicas y químicas del plástico PET, incluyendo su cristalinidad, transparencia, resistencia al desgaste, claridad, y capacidad para ser termoformado e impreso. También discute los procesos de biorientación y cristalización que mejoran sus propiedades mecánicas y de barrera, así como su resistencia a la esterilización. Finalmente, presenta gráficas sobre el uso promedio y uso en envases de alimentos y bebidas de diferentes materiales plásticos
This document provides an agenda and guidance for students completing the final draft of an essay. It includes sections on sentence strategies, self-assessment, preparing the final draft, reviewing MLA style for integrating and citing sources, and formatting a works cited page. Students are instructed to work through slides 12-19 to prepare their essay for an in-class writing workshop, ensuring their essay is ready to submit for a grade. The document offers questions for students to consider about different elements of their essay, such as the beginning, defining the problem, describing the proposed solution, and ending. It also provides examples and guidelines for integrating quotations and summarizing sources in the correct MLA style.
Este documento describe cuatro tipos principales de multimedia: educativa, publicitaria, informativa y comercial. También discute las plataformas multimedia offline y online, y los tipos de aplicaciones multimedia como publicaciones electrónicas, tratamiento de información, educación multimedia, entretenimiento digital, páginas web y comercio electrónico.
Dokumen tersebut memberikan informasi mengenai layanan penyediaan media luar ruang digital berupa LED yang ditawarkan oleh PT Mahaka Media, Tbk melalui unit bisnis Mahaka Advertising. Dokumen tersebut menjelaskan lokasi, ukuran, cakupan penonton, dan harga sewa berbagai LED yang dioperasikan Mahaka Advertising.
This document provides a mock-up of an ecommerce check-out page design and lists various digital advertising placements including display network ads, mobile and desktop leaderboards, skyscrapers, squares, rectangles, and clickable banner ads from companies like LivingSocial and Groupon.
The document provides the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. It includes sections on writing workshop, reviewing MLA formatting, revision strategies for wordiness, submitting assignments to Kaizena, and answering questions. It reviews integrating quotations, setting up a works cited page, sentence-level writing errors, and submitting essays electronically. Students are assigned to post revised essay sections to the class discussion board and submit their Essay #2 through Kaizena by the due date while continuing to work on revising and editing based on feedback.
Class 7 1 a add mla formatting videos and integrating videojordanlachance
This document contains the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. The agenda includes a writing workshop on revision strategies, a presentation on MLA format, and an editing workshop on wordiness, compound sentences, and dangling modifiers. The notes provide guidance on these topics, including how to identify and correct common writing issues. For homework, students are assigned to read chapters of assigned texts, write a revised draft of Essay #2 based on peer feedback, and post excerpt comparisons to the online discussion board.
This document provides an agenda and instructions for an English writing class. It discusses MLA formatting style, including how to format a paper, integrate quotations, and create a works cited page in MLA style. It also covers topics like using signal phrases, formatting long quotations, and writing tips. Students are assigned to submit paragraphs from their Essay #2 and complete reading for the next class.
This document provides an agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. The agenda includes a writing workshop on revision strategies, a review of MLA format, and an in-class writing assignment. The notes cover topics like using revision strategies with a partner, setting up a paper in MLA format including headings, margins and pagination. It also discusses reducing wordiness, identifying and correcting run-on sentences and compound sentences, and submitting essays electronically for feedback.
The document provides the agenda for an EWRT 1A class. It includes discussing revision strategies, reviewing MLA format, and editing for wordiness and compound sentences. Students will work with partners to provide feedback on essays and determine revisions. The class will also cover properly setting up a paper in MLA format, including headings, margins, and a works cited page. Sentence-level writing issues like wordiness will be addressed, and strategies for reducing wordy writing presented. Homework includes revising Essay #2 based on peer feedback and submitting it electronically by the end of class.
The document outlines the agenda for an EWRT 1A class which includes a writing workshop, presentation on MLA format, and an in-class writing session. It provides details on peer evaluation during the writing workshop and guidelines for formatting papers in MLA style, including setting margins, headings, and creating a works cited page. It also discusses strategies for reducing wordiness, such as shortening clauses and phrases, avoiding empty phrases, and removing redundant language. Students are assigned to revise their draft using peer feedback and submit it in MLA format by the next class.
This document provides the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. It includes presentations and workshops on revision strategies, MLA formatting, editing for wordiness, compound sentences, and dangling modifiers. It also provides guidance on developing revision strategies like reading aloud, isolating specific problems, and using surface level techniques. Students are assigned homework to revise their draft essay using feedback, and submit it in MLA format along with posting drafts and revisions of descriptive passages.
This document contains the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A college writing class. The agenda includes a writing workshop on revision strategies, a presentation on MLA formatting, and an in-class writing assignment. The notes provide guidance on revising essays, setting up papers in MLA format, common writing issues like wordiness, compound sentences, and dangling modifiers, and homework assignments which include reading, revising an essay draft based on peer comments, and posting drafts/revisions online. Students are expected to apply the editing strategies covered to improve their writing.
Class 7 1 a add mla formatting videos and integrating videojordanlachance
This document contains the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. The agenda includes a writing workshop on revision strategies, a presentation on MLA format, and an in-class writing assignment. The notes provide guidance on revising essays, proper MLA formatting of papers, identifying and correcting wordiness, run-on sentences, dangling modifiers, and common writing errors. Students are assigned homework of revising their draft essay based on peer feedback, reading chapters of two books, and posting drafts/revisions of descriptive sections to an online discussion board.
This document contains the agenda and notes for an EWRT 1A class. The agenda includes a writing workshop on revision strategies, a presentation on MLA format, and an in-class writing assignment. The notes provide guidance on revising essays, proper MLA formatting of papers, identifying and correcting wordiness, run-on sentences, dangling modifiers, and common writing errors. Students are assigned homework of revising their draft essay based on peer feedback, reading chapters of two books, and posting drafts and revisions of descriptive passages to an online discussion board.
This document provides guidance on writing essays, including key parts and steps in the writing process. It discusses the importance of a clear thesis statement, using a direct approach in the introduction, including relevant details and examples in body paragraphs, and restating the thesis without new information in the conclusion. It also outlines various prewriting techniques like free writing, brainstorming, mapping ideas, and outlining. Finally, it emphasizes the importance of clarity through eliminating ambiguity, using modifiers, being specific and concise, avoiding unnecessary repetition, and making word choices for concise writing.
This document provides guidance on writing an essay about a memorable personal event. It discusses using quotations from another text to introduce the topic and transitioning to discussing one's own experience. It offers tips on using descriptive details, dialogue, and figurative language like similes and metaphors to engage readers. The document also emphasizes establishing a clear timeline through temporal transitions and verb tenses. Integrating quotations using signal phrases and formatting long quotes is reviewed. Finally, checklist questions are provided to help structure the beginning, middle, and end of the essay draft.
How to write scientific papers correctly, clearly, and concisely - Part III W...Sajid Iqbal
The goal of any piece of writing is effective communication to readers This oral presentation will actually be a conversation, a dialogue and we will talk about rules, tips and tricks for writing scientific papers correctly, clearly, and concisely
This document provides an agenda and instructions for Essay #4. Students are asked to write a 4-6 page essay proposing a solution to a well-defined problem faced by a community or group. They should describe the problem in detail, generate multiple potential solutions, and choose the most promising solution to explore further. The document gives guidance on refining the problem description, listing solutions, exploring solutions in paragraphs, and choosing a thesis statement about their preferred solution. It also covers implementing solutions and common writing issues like wordiness.
This document provides guidance on writing a complete draft of a remembered event essay. It reviews key elements that should be included such as an introduction with a quotation, a thesis, narrative descriptions, dialogue, and a conclusion discussing significance. It also covers skills like using metaphors and similes, time transitions, integrating quotations following MLA style, and ensuring proper formatting. Students are assigned to write a complete draft of their essay applying these elements and skills, and to post examples from their introduction and body paragraphs for feedback. The document emphasizes crafting a well-structured narrative through literary devices and following MLA conventions.
This document provides guidance on writing a complete draft of essay #2. It reviews proper use of pronouns like me/myself and I/me. It introduces new skills like using figures of speech such as metaphors and similes, as well as time transitions and verb tenses to establish a clear chronology. Guidelines are provided for integrating quotations using MLA style, including different types of signal phrases and formatting long quotations. The document walks through checking that all elements are included in the beginning, story, and ending sections. It emphasizes preparing a complete draft with two copies and formatting the paper and works cited page according to MLA style. Students are assigned to read further in their text, post specific parts of
The document provides information on the proper uses of the pronouns "me" and "myself". It explains that "me" is an object pronoun that refers to the recipient of an action, while "myself" is a reflexive pronoun used with the subject "I", not in place of "me". It also discusses when to use "I" versus "me" in sentences with multiple subjects. The document then shifts to discussing writing techniques like using similes, metaphors, time transitions and verb tenses, integrating quotations in MLA style, and MLA formatting. It provides examples and guidelines for integrating these elements effectively into a story or essay.
The document provides information and instructions for an EWRT 1A class. It discusses revising essays #2 or #4 for a class, with revisions due before Friday of week 9. It offers tips for revising, including reading instructor comments, and notes there is no penalty for revisions and the new grade will replace the original. It also discusses revising problem essay #5 to use for essay #6, highlighting areas to check like the topic, thesis, causes, consequences, examples, and citations. Finally, it covers eliminating wordiness in writing through reducing clauses and phrases, avoiding empty openers and overworked modifiers, and removing redundancies.
This document provides guidance on integrating quotations, revising essays, and submitting essays electronically. It discusses using signal phrases to introduce quotations, having a partner read and comment on essays using questions from a handout, addressing formal writing elements like thesis and evidence, and submitting essays through a Google Drive add-on called Kaizena that allows for audio and written feedback. Students are provided with their group code to submit essays for review and grading.
This document contains notes from an English writing class. It discusses revising essays, choosing which essay to revise, and strategies for reducing wordiness in writing. Students have the option to revise either their second or fourth essay for a new grade by the deadline of Friday in week 9. The document provides tips for revising essays, including clarifying the topic, strengthening the thesis, ensuring all necessary causes and consequences are included, and properly citing sources. It also discusses different types of wordy or redundant language that can be trimmed, such as long clauses, phrases, empty sentence openers, and overused modifiers. Examples are given and students are instructed to practice identifying and shortening wordy sentences.
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This document provides information for the first class of EWRT 1A taught by Dr. Kim Palmore. The class will include reviewing the introduction, brainstorming activities, and introducing essay #1 on choosing survival supplies. Students will engage in a group activity to choose supplies from lists to argue for in a 750 word essay. The essay should have an introduction with a clear thesis, body paragraphs with topic sentences and examples supporting each supply choice, and a conclusion. Homework includes posting an outline with thesis and being prepared for an in-class essay exam in the next class.
This document provides an overview and instructions for a hybrid English composition course. It introduces the instructor and outlines the course format, which includes both in-person and online components. Students are instructed on how to access course materials and assignments through the Canvas online platform. Key policies like attendance, late work, and academic honesty are also summarized. The document concludes by directing students to familiarize themselves with the course website and syllabus in preparation for the next class.
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- The website, Canvas, will be used for communication, submitting assignments, accessing course materials and viewing grades.
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1. Find the essay assignment and submission requirements
2. Highlight required sections of the essay using the specified colors
3. To add a comment, highlight text and type the comment in the box that appears, then click "Post to Highlight"
4. Use one consistent color for your own highlights so the instructor can use a different color for feedback
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2. The essay should objectively explain the chosen concept for readers who may or may not be familiar with it already. Students are encouraged to reveal uncommon details about the concept and use examples and imagery to illustrate it clearly.
3. The document outlines learning outcomes, previously learned skills, best practices, and traps to avoid like choosing an inappropriate topic or failing to support arguments with evidence
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2. AGENDA
Writing Workshop: 20
points: You need two clean,
complete copies of your draft
Review: MLA Formatting
Revision strategies:
Wordiness
Kaizena Submission
Questions
3. Writing Workshop: Revision strategies
Choose a partner
Read both essays aloud before you start
to write about or discuss the essays.
On separate sheets of paper, answer all
of the questions from the handout for
your partner’s essay.
When you finish, return your comments
to the writer.
When you get your essay back, read the
comments and determine how you might
remedy any issues.
5. MLA format: on our website under
“MLA Guidelines.”
MLA (Modern Language Association) style is most commonly used to write papers
and cite sources within the liberal arts and humanities.
MLA style specifies guidelines for formatting manuscripts and using the English
language in writing. MLA style also provides writers with a system for referencing
their sources through parenthetical citation in their essays and Works Cited pages.
Writers who properly use MLA also build their credibility by demonstrating
accountability to their source material. Most importantly, the use of MLA style can
protect writers from accusations of plagiarism, which is the purposeful or
accidental uncredited use of source material by other writers.
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/01/
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8xAc4yZ8VSA
7. Margins and
Formatting
Double Click in
Header Area
Type your last name
Justify right
Go to “insert” and click
on “page number
Header: Last Name 1
1” all around
Go to “Layout” and
adjust margins or
use custom
settings
Times New Roman
12
Indent body
paragraphs ½ inch
from the margin
8. Heading: Double
Spaced
Your Name
Dr. Kim Palmore
EWRT 1A
25 October 2016
Title
Original Title (not the title of
the essay we read)
No italics, bold, underline, or
quotation marks
Centered on the page
No extra spaces (just double
spaced after your heading and
before the body of your text.
11. According to the St. Martin's Guide, there are
three main ways to set up a signaling phrase:
1. With a complete sentence followed by a colon.
The effects of Auld's prohibition against teaching Douglass to
read were quite profound for Douglass: "It was a new and special
revelation" (29).
2. With an incomplete sentence, followed by a comma.
Douglass argues that Auld's prohibition against literacy for him
was a profound experience, saying, "It was a new and special
revelation" (29).
3. With a statement that ends in that.
The importance of Auld's prohibition to Douglass is clear when
he states that "It was a new and special revelation" (29).
12. Using Signal Phrases:
One common error a lot of people make
when they include a quotation is that they
tend to put the quotation in a sentence by
itself. Unfortunately, we cannot do this. We
need to use what Diana Hacker calls a signal
phrase to introduce the quote and give our
readers a context for the quote that explains
why we are taking the time to include it in
our paper.
13. Take, for example, this section from a student
paper:
Incorrect: Katniss doesn’t respond to Cinna’s statement, but she agrees
in her head. “He’s right, though. The whole rotten lot of them is
despicable” (65).
Correct: Katniss doesn’t respond to Cinna’s statement, but she agrees in
her head: “He’s right, though. The whole rotten lot of them is
despicable” (65).
Or
Correct: Katniss doesn’t respond to Cinna’s statement. However, she
thinks, “He’s right, though. The whole rotten lot of them is despicable”
(65).
14. The classroom was noisy as the MUN students filed in[. . .] Mr. Mustard began in
the middle of the program, and the room quieted down as we strained to hear the
narrator’s voice:
I look up at the buildings, these immense buildings They are so
enormous. And along the edges of each enormous building are the nets.
Because right at the time that I am making this visit, there has been an
epidemic of suicides at the Foxconn plant. Week after week, worker after
worker has been climbing all the way up to the tops of these enormous
buildings, and then throwing themselves off, killing themselves in a
brutal and public manner, not thinking very much about just how bad
this makes Foxconn look. Foxconn's response to month after month of
suicides has been to put up these nets. (Mr. Daisey and the Apple
Factory)
When citing more than four lines
of prose, use the following
example:
Hanging indent
for long
quotation: 10
spaces
15. When citing two or more paragraphs, use block quotation format, even if
the passage is fewer than four lines. Indent the first line of each quoted
paragraph an extra quarter inch.
Katniss thinks about how difficult it would be to get a meal like this in District 12:
What must it be like, I wonder, to live in a world where food
appears at the press of a button? How would I spend the hours I now
commit to combing the woods for sustenance if it were so easy to
come by? What do they do all day, these people in the Capitol, besides
decorating their bodies and waiting around for a new shipment of
tributes to roll in and die for their entertainment?
I look up and find Cinna’s eyes trained on mine. ‘How despicable
we must seem to you,’ he says. (65)
Katniss doesn’t respond to Cinna’s statement, but she agrees in her head: “He’s
right, though. The whole rotten lot of them is despicable” (65).
Although our world does not really…..
Indent 12.5
Indent 12.5
Indent 5
Indent 10
16. Making A Works Cited
Page MLA Style
Ensure that you have a properly formatted works cited page
17. Review: Here is an overview of the process:
When deciding how to cite your source, start by consulting the list of core elements. These
are the general pieces of information that MLA suggests including in each Works Cited
entry. In your citation, the elements should be listed in the following order:
Author.
Title of source.
Title of container,
Other contributors,
Version,
Number,
Publisher,
Publication date,
Location.
Each element should be followed by the punctuation mark shown here. Earlier editions of
the handbook included the place of publication, and required punctuation such as journal
editions in parentheses, and colons after issue numbers. In the current version,
punctuation is simpler (just commas and periods separate the elements), and information
about the source is kept to the basics.
18. Collins, Suzanne. The Hunger Games. Scholastic Press, 2008.
Student 6
Author
Title of
Source
Publisher
Publication
Date
Citing a single author text in MLA Style
21. Many people write wordy papers because they are trying to make
their ideas sound important by using long words and intricate
sentences. They think that their writing must be complicated to
seem professional. Although these writers are trying to impress
their readers, they often end up confusing them. The best writing
is clear, concise, and easy to understand. Your ideas are much more
impressive when your reader does not have to fight to understand
you.
Wordiness: using more words than
necessary to express thought.
22. Often writers use several words for ideas that can be expressed in one.
This leads to unnecessarily complex sentences and genuine redundancy as
the following examples show:
Redundant
The printer is located adjacent to
the computer
The printer is located in the
immediate vicinity of the computer
The user can visibly see the image
moving
He wore a shirt that was blue in
color
The input is suitably processed
Not Redundant
The printer is adjacent to the
computer
The printer is near the computer
The user can see the image moving
He wore a blue shirt.
The input is processed
23. Now you try it. Write this sentence in as few words as
possible without changing the meaning!
The available receptacle, in any
case, was of insufficient size to
contain the total quantity of
unnecessary waste.
24. How to reduce wordiness!
1. Reduce Long Clauses
When editing, try to reduce long
clauses to shorter phrases:
Wordy: The clown who was in
the center ring was riding a
tricycle.
Revised: The clown in the
center ring was riding a tricycle.
2. Reduce Phrases
Likewise, try to reduce phrases
to single words:
Wordy: The clown at the end
of the line tried to sweep up
the spotlight.
Revised: The last clown tried
to sweep up the spotlight.
25. Eliminating Wordiness: Strategies
3. Avoid Empty Openers
Avoid There is, There are, and
There were as sentence openers
when There adds nothing to the
meaning of a sentence:
Wordy: There is a prize in every
box of Quacko cereal.
Revised: A prize is in every box
of Quacko cereal.
Wordy: There are two security
guards at the gate.
Revised: Two security guards
stand at the gate.
4. Don’t Overwork Modifiers
Do not overwork very, really,
totally, and other modifiers that
add little or nothing to the
meaning of a sentence.
Wordy: By the time she got home,
Merdine was very tired.
Revised: By the time she got
home, Merdine was exhausted
Wordy: She was also really hungry.
Revised: She was also hungry [or
famished].
26. Eliminating Wordiness
5. Avoid Redundancies
Replace redundant expressions (phrases that use more words
than necessary to make a point) with precise words. Remember:
needless words are those that add nothing (or nothing
significant) to the meaning of our writing. They bore the reader
and distract from our ideas. So cut them out!
Wordy: At this point in time, we should edit our work.
Revised: Now we should edit our work.
27. Try these!
1. He dropped out of school on account of the fact that it was necessary
for him to help support his family.
2. It is expected that the new schedule will be announced by the bus
company within the next few days.
3. There are many ways in which a student who is interested in meeting
foreign students may come to know one.
4. It is very unusual to find someone who has never told a deliberate lie on
purpose.
5. Trouble is caused when people disobey rules that have been established
for the safety of all.
28. Possible Answers
1. He dropped out of school to support his family.
2. The bus company will probably announce its schedule during
the next few days.
3. Any student who wants to meet foreign students can do so in
many ways.
4. Rarely will you find someone who has never told a deliberate lie.
5. Disobeying safety regulations causes trouble.
29. Find a Wordy Sentence
Check your essay for wordiness. Look for a
sentence that falls into one of the categories
we just discussed. Edit it for clarity and
conciseness.
30. Writing Tips
Write about literature in present tense
Write about your experience in past tense
Avoid using “thing,” “something,” “everything,” and
“anything.”
Avoid writing in second person. (Don’t use “you” unless it is in
dialogue.
31. Surface Revision Strategies
Read Aloud
Reading the paper aloud slowly can
often bring to attention large and
small mistakes missed in the writing
and typing process. Read each
sentence and ask does it make
sense? Is it awkward? Am I
including words that are not actually
written on the paper? Sometimes
reading the paper out of order can
help isolate problems. Try reading
the paragraphs starting with the last
sentence and then reading the
previous sentence and so on; this
can reveal problems in the
sentences.
Isolate Specific Problems
Isolating specific problems can help
give objectivity to one's personal
work. One way to isolate specific
issues is to circle them on a paper
draft and look at them one by one.
For example: circle all commas and
then go back and look at each
comma asking if it is in the
appropriate place with the correct
usage. Another example would be
to circle all verbs and then go back
one by one and identify the tense
and verify subject verb agreement.
32. Essay Submissions
All out of class essays are to be submitted to me
electronically before the class period in which they are due.
1. Before you submit your essay, please save your file as your
last name and the number 2, like this: Smith 2. This will
help me keep your essays organized.
Smith 2
33. 2. Submit your essay through Kaizena at
https://kaizena.com/palmoreessaysubmissiongmail.
Or simply use the link on our class website home
page.
This system allows me to respond to your essay with both voice and written
comments and to insert helpful links.
34. Group Codes
Students will be asked to enter a code to join the appropriate group.
Here is your code.
Tuesday Thursday
35. When you join a
group, a
conversation will
automatically be
created.
36. After joining a group, you
will be able to add a file. That
is it! You are done
You may add from your Google Drive or
directly from a saved file on your desktop.
Using a PDF file will help maintain your
formatting, so I suggest that if it is possible.
37. Please Note!!
There are two conversations taking place in Kaizena.
One is “Broadcast” conversation, which includes the
entire class. The second is a private conversation
between each student and me. Please make sure to
upload your essay to the private conversation. If you
see an accidental upload to the entire class, please let
me or that student know immediately!
38. Once I have graded your paper, you may view it by going to the
conversations between us on the Kaizena page.
39. Click on the highlighted sections of the paper to find both audio and
written comments concerning your essay and links to materials that
will help you improve your writing.
40. If you cannot submit your paper through
Kaizena before the due date and time:
Email your essay as an attachment (don’t share it as a Google doc) to
palmorekim@fhda.edu.
You must send the attachment before the due date and time, or your
essay will be considered late, so do not dawdle.
You must still submit it as a Kaizena document; the attachment
merely gets you time to figure out the process if you are having
trouble.
I suggest planning ahead. Do not wait until the last minute!
You may submit a test document if you want to do an early run
through to avoid problems.
41. HOMEWORK
Read: SMG 134-148 Writing a Concept Essay
Write: Using the comments you received from your
readers, revise and edit Essay #2.
Post #9: Post two versions of a section (a paragraph
or two) of your essay that demonstrates your
revision and editing strategies.
Submit Essay #2: Due electronically via Kaizena.
Please see due date above this panel. Your paper
must be in MLA format.