This document provides guidance on how to write an effective role model essay. It recommends focusing on one clear topic per paragraph, such as describing a characteristic of your role model and illustrating it with a relevant life event. Coherence is important - each sentence and idea should logically relate to the previous one. Substance should take priority over style. Grammar fundamentals like subject-verb agreement and proper punctuation are also emphasized. The conclusion should not introduce new information and should reiterate the lessons learned from the role model's attributes and accomplishments.

1. How to ace the Role Model essay
and excel grammatically

2. FOCUS ON THE OBJECTIVE
• To explain WHY someone has become
your role model
– His/her distinguished attributes
– Important life events that contribute/
illustrate to the person’s characteristics
– Achievements
– Lesson learned
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3. INTRODUCTION
• Who is your role model?
– Occupation
– Reasons s/he became your role model
– Characteristics
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4. BODIES OF PARAGRAPH
• Describe the characteristics through
the role model’s life event[s]
– That life event should illustrate the
characteristics mentioned in the
introduction
– Pick that life events that complement/
support your reasons in choosing your
role model
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5. CONCLUSION
• Lessons learned
– Should be congruent with life events and
accomplishments mentioned in the
bodies of paragraph
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6. Name, Occupation, Reason s/he is your role
model, CHARACTERISTICS e.g. passionate
about his work, generous
Describe how your role model is passionate
about his work through life events/
achievement, contribution
Demonstrate how your role
model is generous life events/
achievement, contribution
From the previous paragraphs, state what you
have learned from your role model

7. characteristics
Illustrate through life
events/ accomplishments
Lessons learned
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8. A GOOD PARAGRAPH
• One clear topic
– What attribute do you want to focus?
•Weak: He is respected in his line of work.
He is also a family man.
•Why: 2 unrelated topics in 1 paragraph
•Fix: Pick 1 topic, be it work or personal
life, and describe/illustrate on that
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9. A GOOD PARAGRAPH
• What if you have 2 topics you want to
write about?
– Write 1 topic in 1 paragraph
– Write ANOTHER topic in ANOTHER
paragraph
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10. COHERENCE
• A sentence • Idea
– Support the one – Logical
that comes before – Use Transition [In
– Relate to one addition,
another However,]
• The story
– Not skip back and
forth
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11. COHERENCE
• Stick to one main idea per paragraph
• Do not introduce a new angle in the
conclusion
• Omit any irrelevant information
– one that does not complete or add any
insight to the essay
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12. PAUSE & REFLECT
• Does the sentence you just wrote
contain important information?
– Does it contribute to the central idea of
the essay?
– Can you elaborate on that?
– Does it relate to the one before or after?
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13. SUBSTANCE OVER STYLE
• Your sentence must contain an actual
meaning. Do not write it simply
because it sounds cool.
– Can you explain what message you
want to convey?
•Yes: go ahead and explain it
•No: delete it since it takes up your
paragraph unproductively
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14. Grammar Focus
Academic Writing

15. CRACK THE CODE
• S/V
– Verb doesn’t agree • Singular/Plural
with its subject • every, a +
• Space singular n.
– Put a space • Punctuation
between words • Forget a
• Capital letter comma or a
– Used incorrectly period
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16. CRACK THE CODE
• N/V/Adj/Adv
– The part of speech of that word must be
N/V...
– Look up in the dictionary how such part
of speech spells.
• + V1
– Word that comes after must be V1
– Modals: will, can, may ...
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17. CRACK THE CODE
• Redundant
– Repeating information
• Be specific
– Your sentence/idea is too vague
• Incomplete sentence/Fragment/S?/V?
– Your sentence lacks a verb/a subject
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18. ACADEMIC WRITING
• At the beginning of a sentence
– But, use However,
– And, use In addition, Furthermore,
Moreover,
•Don’t forget a comma [,]
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19. SENTENCE
• Simple sentence
– Write a subject
•Begin with a capital letter
– Add a verb
– A verb must agree with
its subject
– End with a full stop [.]
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20. SENTENCE
• Write a complete
sentence
– Stop and start a new one
– Avoid dragging your
sentences on and on
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21. SENTENCE
• Not so simple sentence [aka
complex sentence]
• Use with a conjunction
– when, because, if, although,...
• Require 2 [TWO] clauses
– When he was born, his family
was destitute.
– Because she studied hard, she
got an A.
– If I were a billionaire, I would
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22. TENSE
• When talking about events
in the past or actions by
someone who passed away
– Use Past Tense
• Facts: Present Tense
• Be consistent
– Do not skip back and
forth between present &
past in 1 event
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23. TIDBITS
• To state your purpose
– To + V1 | For + Noun
• Noun
– Countable: add an article [a, an, the]
OR use plural
– Uncountable: leave as it
• Comma
– After adverb e.g. Then, Next,
– Before conjunction e.g. and, but, as
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24. CHECK LIST
• Complete sentence
• Part of speech
• Use Spellcheck
• Count words
• Correct format
DUE DATE: 20 August 2012
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25. WHAT TO SUBMIT
(1) The 1st draft
(2) The final draft
Not required
Supporting document, CD
Be neat
Your paper should be together,
not scattered in pieces
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26. Score
Coherence and relevance [3]
Logical thinking [2]
Grammar [5]
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