- The document discusses how to provide useful feedback when revising one's own or others' work. It provides tips for effective revision. - The key aspects of revision are stepping away from the work before revising, reading it out loud to hear how it sounds, and revising others' work with the goal of improving it, not just finding errors. - When revising, the focus should be on making global changes to improve clarity, argument, and effectiveness, rather than just editing for grammar, spelling, or typos. Questions are provided to guide the revision process.

1. Revisions How to give relevant and useful feedback Drew Dondelinger

2. You should always revise your work before turning it in, even if it’s “just” a rough draft. When and Who to Revise Revise any work you plan to turn in, or share. However don’t revise immediately after finishing a draft. Always allow time to step back from your work before going back in and revising.

4. Revise others’ work with the attitude as if it was your own, in the fact that the most important part of revising is actually caring.Revising Tips

6. Revising should be used to make the piece better. Don’t be afraid to suggest, or make, changes. Pieces are not perfect the first time and every time you revise a piece it should get betterRevising Tips

7. Questions to Guide you Who is the author’s audience Does the author address his/her audience effectively What is the author’s argument/hypothesis What type of argument is the author making, and for what purpose What is the author’s evidence for his argument Is the piece focused and efficient on the authors goal(s)

9. How can the material be presented clearer

10. Does the author convince/persuade you

11. Was this an interesting/new concept to you

13. Differences Some editing was done (flow, structure, spelling, etc) but the biggest difference was in the overall feeling of the paper. The second piece is much more clear and to the point. The first draft left the reader wondering exactly what the author was looking for or trying to argue, because of a poorly defined hypothesis and other useless filling information that led readers off track from the main idea. Once the hypothesis was more clearly defined the overall piece reads much more focused.

14. Differences The first thing I did in revision was wait. Wait at least a day before you revise your own work, then read the piece out loud, reading out loud extrapolates mistakes and makes them very easy to pick out. Also when I read out loud it helps to understand and/or correct the flow of your paper, if you stumble over your words reading it, I guarantee someone else will struggle with what you are trying to say as well. I personally have this problem a lot and use the reading out loud method to try and assist that crutch.

15. Sample Paper Example Project Take this sample paper and go through and suggest revisions to the author. Specifically focus on the authors argument and his focus on his argument. There are no right or wrong answers here, your goal is to help the author better his project.

16. Questions to Guide You Decide if the author’s argument needsclarifying Analyze the flow and reasoning behind the author’s argument Does the author need a clear cut conclusion Does the piece work from broad to specific or vice versa How could the author be more convincing What other suggestions do you have for the author to improve his paper

17. Things to Remember Care (whether your partner’s or yours), if you don’t care you wont be a beneficial resource Revising isn’t editing, change the piece not fix sentences Revising is meant to make the piece better Revise anything you plan to turn in Always read from an outsiders point of view