The document provides feedback on how to improve various pages of a draft magazine, including: 1) The front cover could stand out more by adding color to the main image and removing some compacted content to allow more spacing. 2) The contents page needs to be more formal with columns and some images/content could be replaced or modified for better readability. 3) The double-page spread has too much jumbled text and could be improved by rearranging images and text onto separate pages, changing the title to follow a consistent theme, and incorporating more of the color scheme and design elements from other pages.

1. Draft Pages What
Needs to be
improved

2. Front Cover
• This page is okay looking and has a good cover image on it
however the image hasn’t been used in the best way as it
should be more commanding and it should stand out more on
the page. I could improve this by adding a coloured background
to the image making it stand out a lot more in front of the dark
gradient background.
• The page is very tightly compacted and this is not a good thing
as it looks really squished and I could move things and even
remove some of the front page content to free space and allow
the page to breathe a little more.
• The circular text boxes are not good enough with the front cover
title because the title uses a lot of straight lines and the text
boxes don’t fit in with that style, I could use the straight lines as
text boxes instead of the circles to carry the theme through the
front cover making the page a lot better and also freeing some
space as mentioned above.
• The title is a good font and the colours of the subheading are
good to make these colours mean a little more I should outline
the main image with the red and possibly bring that image
forward a little as red contrasts with black really highly.
• The tagline also needs work too and I feel as though if I could
free space I could write a longer or better one which isn't so
squished in the corner, I could also relate the new tag line to the
title to keep the magazine theme.

3. Contents Page
• The contents page did look good at the start of the process but
after feed back I can see that the contents page is not
columned enough and the layout is not as formal or flush as it
could be and to correct the format I will have to get rid of some
of the content meaning that I will have to figure out what to
keep and what should be thrown away.
• The images use one person too much so I should take one or
two more images to use instead of the ones that I have to add a
bit of variety to the contents page. Also I will change the way
the text shows up on the pictures because if the reader cant
read it then there is no point it being there.
• I will carry the theme along through this page from the front
cover using the title line as a shape which carry's the theme, as
well as this I might decide to change the colour of the title on
this page or even on the front cover so that the colour scheme
runs through a lot more fluently.
• I will restructure the text I have and have a few specified boxes
and I wont include every single page and where it says the page
number I will have to remember to only write the page number
that it starts on and avoid writing the page that it goes up to.
• I will keep the band index and probably make the images
smaller and maybe find a new way to hold the text, perhaps
when I change the textboxes on the front cover I will copy these
forward onto this page and then use them here as well to bring
the theme forward.

4. Double Page Spread
• These two pages have a really good idea but need to
be rearranged as the text is too jumbled up, I will
get rid of most of the text and use some of the
smaller parts that I already have.
• the circular images wont be spreading across both
pages they will be on one page instead and a bit
smaller so that the effect is still there but
chronologically they are in the right place.
• The title needs to be changed as well because it
isn't as good as it could be also it could be improved
by following a theme which will be carried from the
front cover along to the contents and then to the
double page spread. This will mean the font will b
different and then also the title will take up a
different amount of space.
• The picture on the right hand side will be moved as well and relocated in the middle of that page the text will
the surround that image on the right hand side and the whole layout will then change, I could also then
change the font size to increase or decrease space if I need to.
• The quotation from jack will be moved to the left hand side with the images so people will read it quickly and
then want to go on to the next page and the movement of the images and the text will show a good
understanding of the magazine design industry.
• I may use text boxes that I used in previous pages to then this will add theme to the pages and I may add the
colour scheme a little more to improve the look of the page and to keep the colour shceme going throughout
as this page currently doesn’t have the red that both of the other pages do have.
• The title font will have to change if the fonts on the other pages changes.
• There will be small lines from the front cover to keep the theme going throughout and this will make the
magazine s theme shine through and they will serve as good graphics for my magazine.