The proposal is for a 9-10 page comic book telling the story of Herbie the racing car. Key details covered in the proposal include the dimensions and export format of PDF, an overview of the story, production methods using Photoshop, the intended audience of 2-6 year olds in the UK, and a deadline of October 16th. Strengths highlighted in the feedback include a well detailed description, a story suitable for children, and clear production methods. Areas for improvement include elaborating why children prefer images and providing more resolution to the story. The idea generation shows a relevant selection of images and characters are named, while further developing setting concepts could have strengthened it.

1. Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
name

2. Shape Task

3. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how my image came together at the end. I
got to use different techniques to create
different effects and I learnt how to add texture
from the real image to the photo shopped one.
What would you improve if you did it again?
Possibly improve the colour of my texture so it
blends in with the main colour more. I would
like to add different textures so it look abit more
detailed.

4. Rotoscope

5. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I got to use different colours and textures to create the
right effect which made me learn how to mix and
match the texture with the effects and colours. I also
learnt new techniques which became very useful.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would of liked the background not to be as plain as it
was, also I would of added more of the original pictures
texture but also blended it into the the image I created
so the image would have been more effective and
detailed.

6. Rotoscope

7. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how my image includes loads of different photo shopping
techniques such as color overlay, color range, and warp which
adjusted the picture to make the model’s facial features clear. I
also like how there is different shading of each color which
settled very well.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I was to do this image again I would pick a picture with more
color rather than just black gray and white so then the picture
could look more alive.

8. Text Based

9. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how good they all turned out to be. It was
interesting to create something that I would
usually see on websites/blogs like Tumbler.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would possibly add more colour and make it
stand out more by adding more detailed
pictures inside of the text to create a bigger
effect on the reader.

10. Comic Book

11. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked how I got to use different effects and see how much
one effect can help the image look so much different. My
images still show her facial features which means I didn’t
over-use the effects
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would possibly improve the sharpness of the
photo and maybe use more soft effects rather than
sharp effects because sometimes they make the
image look over edited.

12. Photography happy Excitement
Lonely

13. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
The images represented the emotions very well. We all
worked as a team to create the right atmosphere and make
the image look like the motions are real and not faked for
the camera.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I was to do this again I would of maybe replaced the
loneliness one with another place rather than a table just to
create a more dramatic effect, for example I would of
changed the two boys into a couple and then a 3rd person
sat away from them looking over and looking upset.

14. Photography (comic edit)

15. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked how I turned the real image into a comic image which
then created a strong effect so then if I were to use them for my
comic book they would create a strong atmosphere for the
reader.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I were to do this edit again, I would possibly use lighter edits
for some of the pictures so some of the image’s details would be
clearer e.g. facial features.

16. Illustration

17. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how I created different shading using the
same colour. Also my mountain has different
texture to the rest of the image which makes it
stand out.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I were to do this image again, I would add
more details and maybe add more different
shades of each colour in certain places such as
the sand to create a more realistic image.

18. Initial Ideas

19. Mood board of inspiration
The Little Mermaid

20. Mood board of inspiration
Herbie The Car

21. Herbie The Car

22. Mood board of chosen idea

23. Proposal
Dimensions
There will be 9-10 pages. Each page will be the size of a A5 page.
Export Format
P.D.F – Possible Document Format
Advantages: PDF files will always reproduce your original file without losing quality. It’s
very simple and fast to create a PDF file. Once you save your work as a PDF and you
wanted to email it to someone, they can no longer edit it, which means your original
piece will be the same everywhere.
Disadvantages: Large Files can take a while to download. The computer must have
Adobe Reader plug-in for a PDF file to work. It’s only supported by Mac and Windows
systems which means Linux and UNIX users can not view any PDF files.
Story Overview
Herbie the car is the fastest racing car around. Everyone got jealous of him and he
didn’t have many friends due to his amazing talent. One day, a big mean truck came
and destroys little Herbie because Herbie won him in a race. Herbie was found on the
side of a small road by a gorgeous mini called Millie. She saved his life, and he fell in
love. He went back to race and stood up for himself. Millie started racing as well and
supporting Herbie.

24. Production Methods
I'm going to use Photoshop to create my animated pictures through rotoscoping
them and that will help me create the main events of the story. I'm choosing to use
rotoscoping because the textures come through very well, so while the picture is
animated its also got realistic features. These animated photos will be telling the
story as well as showing the emotions. Once each picture gets finished, it will be
put onto PowerPoint with the writing to create the story.
Audience
I’m targeting 2-6 year olds. Simply because there is not much writing, its mostly
pictures. Children love pictures, they get intrigued by animated photos. I reckon
more boys will be interesting in my book due to how it involved racing and cars. For
the time being I’m targeting the United Kingdom due to the difference between
American English and British English.
Deadline
16th of October 2014.

25. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
Well detailed in your description, well done. The
story is generic as it comes but alas, isn’t that the
case with all children's story’s. Actually, I can’t
pinpoint that as a fault, the story is easy to follow
and that would probably be more suitable for
children.
The font you have used would be great for the tital
perhaps, but as the standard font throughout the
story it would probably be unwise to use (im just
nitpicking here, you seem to have covered
everything pretty good ).
The one thing I would say, in your overview for the
story………. DOES HE WIN THE RACE??
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
The pictures used are relevant.
Perhaps more variety, but there's not a lot you can
do about that, Herbie is just Herbie.

26. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The advantages and disadvantages of the PDF file
is expressed in detail. The story overview suggests
that you have chosen an audience well suited to
the story and that your story, although taken from a
movie, is original. The production methods are clear
and will show a range of technique.
Overall a very well covered proposal.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Lots of ideas considered in the mind map to go on
and develop a great mood board and story. A large
range of images collected from the internet and
shown in the mood board and then chosen to
match the story which is specific.
Images could be collected for the setting in which
the book is held and displayed in a mood board.

27. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The proposal shows a clear in depth description of
the story which shows that you have thought this
through in depth.
Audiences have been clearly thought out with
aspects such as age, sex, location etc. as well as
commenting on the differences between
international versions.
Maybe elaborate more on the statement “Children
Love pictures” say why this as appose to text.
Round the story off more as appose to just saying
they work together, give the story more of a
resolution.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Mood board shows some development of ideas
from the monster truck to the smaller car.
Both mind maps show clear development of the
thought not only with quantity but also with the
ideas explained.
Characters named and explained
Maybe add more concept-like ideas to the mood
board as appose to just the final thing. This will add
a sense of development.
Provide concepts of the other characters as appose
to just the protagonist.

28. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
I think overall my feedback was positive. I am well pleased with it, I thought my story
wasn’t going to be very good but now my mind has been changed. I enjoyed reading my
feedback, I feel like I know what I need to do now to achieve the right story.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
One of my reviews it says “Maybe elaborate more on the statement “Children Love
pictures” say why this as appose to text.” which I agree with. I need to explain why
children prefer images to text and go into more details. Another one is ‘Did he win the
race?’ which I should describe when I go the story and not forget the main aim of
Herbie’s life rather than the main aim of the story.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
One of my reviews said “Maybe add more concept-like ideas to the mood board as
appose to just the final thing. This will add a sense of development.” I don’t agree.
The children will get confused, that’s why stories for early childhood should always be
simple. A child’s mind has developed to understand a ‘concept-like idea’.

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Suddenly. Millie and
Herbie bump into
Crazy Dave! ‘lets race
little one’ said crazy
Dave.
So Crazy Dave and
Herbie had a race.
The race was so crazy
and they were so
fast.
Until something bad
happened! Crazy
Dave crashed into
the trees! Oh no!
Herbie doesn’t stop,
he carries on going
and getting faster.
Herbie won the race!
He did brilliant! At
the end of the race,
Millie was waiting for
him at the end of the
race. ‘Well don’t’ she
said.

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32. Original Script
Storyline:
When Maggie Peyton graduates from college, her father Ray Peyton Sr. gives an used
car from a scrap metal yard as a gift, and she takes a 1963 Volkswagen beetle with the
number 53. Maggie finds a letter in the glove compartment telling that the bug's name
is Herbie and she visits her friend and mechanic Kevin to check Herbie. They go to a car
show where they are challenged by the arrogant champion racer Trip Murphy for a race.
Maggie and Herbie win Trip, and the revengeful pilot plots a scheme to take Herbie
from Maggie. Trip’s eventual efforts to undermine Herbie lead to the very depressed
and abandoned-felling bug’s engagement in a demolition derby where he’s smashed up
by a monster truck before Maggie shows up to inspire him

33. Original Script
Trip: Amazing what a real car can do, isn't it? I got a little proposition. Why don't we
raise the stakes. My car for your car. Let's make tomorrow's race for pinks too. Huh?
Maggie: I don't know. I mean, Herbie's really special.
Trip: Come on. Nobody's gonna take you seriously in that thing. Now, if, uh,
you drive home in Trip Murphy's stock car, your dad would be an idiot not to put you on
the team. What do you say? For pinks?
Maggie: All right.
Maggie: I want to buy Herbie back.
Trip: Herbie?
Maggie: The Volkswagen.
Trip: Oh, yeah, the Bug. I'm sorry. I'd like to help you but you're a little late.
Crash just took him out for a little spin.
Maggie: Trip, what did you do with him?!
http://www.script-o-rama.com/movie_scripts/h/herbie-fully-loaded-script-transcript.
html

34. Final Script
Page 1:
Herbie was the greatest racing car ever. He loved winning but he didn’t have
anyone to share it with. He was very lonely.
Page 2:
There was a BIG truck that hated Herbie.
‘Lets race’ Crazy Dave said.
‘Ready, Steady, GO!’ said the Racing Car as he put threw the white flag onto the
floor.
Page 3:
The race started. They were both driving so fast.
Herbie won the race.
Crazy Dave was angry and he Hit Herbie really HARD.
Page4:
A beautiful Mini called Millie found Herbie in a dull road. She took him to the
hospital and the doctors made him feel better.
‘Who are you?’ said Herbie.
‘I’m Millie the Mini, I saved you from the big crazy truck.
‘Thank you so much’ he said.
Page 5:
Millie and Herbie left the hospital. They were both so happy. They drove to the
top of the road. AND…

35. Final Script
Page 6:
BANG! they run into Crazy Dave the Truck.
‘Hello little one, nice to see you alive’ said crazy Dave.
‘Leave him alone’ said Millie.
‘I wont leave him alone until he races me again’ said Crazy Dave.
‘Lets go’ said Herbie.
Page 7:
They go to race. Herbie takes over the big truck. Until something bad happens.
Page 8: BOOM! The big truck crashes into a tree.
‘OH NO’ said Herbie.
But he didn’t stop. He got faster and faster and he won!!
‘HEBIE HAS WON THE CHAMPIONSHIP’ shouted Millie.
Page 9:
After the race, Millie and Herbie took Crazy Dave to the hospital.
Later on in the evening, they were watching TV when the Daily News came on to
tell everyone that Crazy Dave will no longer be able to race.
Page 10:
Herbie and Millie are so happy with the Herbie wining the race. They celebrate with
all their new friends.
‘I will never stop racing’ said Herbie as everyone cheered.

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