The document provides feedback on a proposal for a children's book about a racing car character named Lauda. The strengths noted are the detailed storyline and use of rotoscoping animation on car images. Areas for improvement include further developing the background design, using varied eye designs for different characters, and mentioning parents reading the book. The idea generation is praised for its clear details, though the mood board could include more elements like the race track or other characters.

1. Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
Duncan Warren-Rix

2. Shape Task

3. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
As huskies are a furry animals, I like the way I added a furry texture to it
which created a more 3D effect. Also the use of texture through colour range
was really helpful for adding a shade of colour to my Husky. Creating shapes
that fit round the Huskies body is not easy and for my first go I think the end
result was quite good. When adding a surface for the husky non of them
looked quite right as they are animals from a cold snow covered country. So in
the end I used the colour range effect on an image of snow to created a
slightly shaded version of it to place under the husky, as a surface.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would have tried to make the out line of the Husky more accurate and
create a more furry effect. The Huskies forehead was to bold I would have like
the edges to be faded so it didn’t stand out as much.

4. Rotoscope

5. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
It had simple colours which helped add to the cartoon effect which I think I
created much better with this animal. The paws on this animal were much
more accurate then the last one an really helped create a better image.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would have tried to round out the edges of the Panda so they were less
jagged and much smoother. I also would have done this with the Pandas eyes,
nose and ears.

6. Text Based

7. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the way I have placed an interesting and eye catching photo in the text. I
also used a large and bold font so the image is more visible in the text. Toni
Bou is the 6 time world champion trials biker. I like the fact that I presented
his skill as well as his name through he text.
What would you improve if you did it again?
The end of the photo has a small image placed in the end letter, I, in order to
fill a gap. However this image does not fit in the gap appropriately as the one
I replaced it with was not the right colour and stands out to much. I would
have also enlarged the text to fit more of the photo in so you could see the
image better.

8. Comic Book

9. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
The image was much darker and when adding my effect I manage to lighten
the background and then added some dark contrast the the bike, so it stands
out from the background. I liked the way I kept the colour of the image whilst
giving it a cartoon effect.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would have liked to get rid of the dark colours, mainly black, from the
background especially the dark contrast placed over the people. This would
have lightened the background creating a more comic effect, also the rider
and bike would have stood out more.

10. Photography
Happiness loneliness
Excited

11. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked the way we got each photo to represent the subject matter through the facial
expression of the person. We used a light background and close up shot to represent
happiness, as the white background presented the colour of her skin better and teeth. We
used motion to create the feeling of excitement in one photo, by someone jumping in the
air. I like the way created loneliness from a birds eye view. We had two people talking and
the other sitting on there own representing loneliness.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would have used a faster shutter speed as this would have captured a still, focused image
for the excitement photo. This would have presented the image better creating a more
exaggerated effect of excitement. For the loneliness photo I would have liked to try other
option rather then just the birds eye view. I think that if we had tried taking the photo from
the tables level so you can see the facial expressions on the peoples faces, this would have
given a better sense of loneliness. The happiness photo was one that I quite liked but I
would have taken the photo with a plain background rather then the annoying line in the
background. This could almost cut the photo in half.

12. Illustration

13. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
The character that I have drawn from my imagination could be seen as a
“Bady” in a child eyes. It is colourful and would catch a child's attention a
begin to make there imagination work. The bright colours I used made the
drawing stand out well. The colours fitted in well as I made the drawing quite
simple as this created a cartoon effect much better. I also used his facial
expression in this drawing to present an evil mysteries effect. To finish of his
evil master look I added a hover board or floating device for him to stand on.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would have given him a background to present his image better. Also I would
have designed a better hovercraft for him to stand on, as this would have
made the image more appealing to a child. The background needed to be
much more interesting with missiles and lots evil things as this would capture
a child's attention very easily.

14. Initial Ideas

15. I am using Niki Laudas 1976 F1 car as
a starting point for my cartoon
character based on Roary the racing
car.

16. Idea Generation

17. Nurburgring race
track
Niki Lauda just before his crash at
Roary the racing car is the Nurburgring
main bases of my idea.
I will try and create a
background like this for
my book

18. Proposal
Dimensions
8 Pages
Export Format
PDF
Advantages: A PDF file can be opened on most computers and devises unlike PSD files.
When sent to another person they can not edit the file in any way.
Disadvantages: PDF files are large file types and can take up a lot of space on memory
sticks and on your computer.
Story Overview
Lauda is a racing car who is in a race championship and and wins his first race. Then in
his second race he is pushed of the track by a mean car who then wins the race. Lauda
was told he couldn’t win the championship as he would not be fixed in time. But
Lauda races after staying in the garage over night and the mean car try's to push him
of the track again but this time Lauda was expecting it and dodges him and then goes
on to win the race. All because he believed in himself.

19. Production Methods
For the illustrations in the children's book I will use images of Niki Laudas 1976 F1
Car and then rotoscope over the top of them to create a cartoon effect. I will have
to create some eyes which I can use on every illustration. Once I have done this I
will have cartoon character based around Niki Laudas car hence the name, Lauda
The Racing Car. Although using Niki Laudas car as a base for my cartoon character
the book is made around Roary The Racing Car.
Audience
My book is aimed at children in the age range of 5-8 years. The book is written
mainly for the male audience. However at a young age this want affect many
children's interests in the book. To the younger audience the book will have to be
read to the child. However to the older audience they may be able to start reading
the book their selves
Deadline
16th October

20. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The story is a strong aspect of this proposal. Since
cars a a solid shape and do not distort it is a clever
idea to use rotoscoping to animate them.
I am unsure about how you plan to create the back
ground of the book. I would also recommend that
you use several different eye designs, rather than
just one for every car. Eyes give the characters
characteristics, if Lauda has bright and wide eye it
would portray him in a positive light, whereas the
villain could have more narrowed eyes.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Are you planning to add effects to show the
movement of the cars?

21. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The strengths of this proposal is that it has a very
detailed storyline. It is very clear on what is
happening in your story which makes it easier for
children to understand and not get bored.
The parts of your proposal that need further work is
that you haven’t mentioned that the parents might
buying it or reading it.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
The strengths of the idea is that you have a lot of
detail within your Mindmap but at the same time it
is simple and easy to understand.
The areas could have been more developed would
have been the mood board because you haven’t
got the race track, or any other character accept the
main one.

22. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The strengths of this proposal are that it is a good
bases for a book and it is also based on slightly real
events, Niki Lauda, which will appeal to adults
buying the book for their children.
You haven’t mentioned the parents or adults buying
or reading the book for their children.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
You have a strong bases for the car that you will
use and you can either keep this life like or make it
very animated like Rory the racing car.
You could mention the bad car and use inspiration
from the cars that Niki Lauda was racing against at
the time.

23. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
My feedback has been very helpful and given me a many ideas which I will incorporate
into my proposal and book.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I need to write about what the parents will think about the book. Also I should create
different type of eyes.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
Some one asking me a question how do I answer it ?

24. Storyboards

25. Storyboards

26. Storyboards

27. Storyboards

28. Storyboards

29. Storyboards

30. Final Script
Page One: Lauda the racing car enters a 3 race championship.
Page Two: Lauda speeds past all the other cars and wins the first race.
Page Three: Then next day when Lauda is winning the second race, a mean race car catches him up and pushes him off
the track and Lauda crashes into a tree.
Page Four: Lauda is then rushed to the mechanical emergency room. After being fixed the race car nurse says he needs
to rest for two days. BUT THE RACE IS ON THE SECOND DAY!
Page Five: Lauda gets a good nights sleep that night and feels much better in the morning so he goes down to the race
track to practice.
Page Six: when Lauda is practising he doesn’t feel well and goes to his mechanic which makes him feel much better.
Page Seven: Lauda goes home and goes to bed early to get a good nights sleep. In the morning he has a big breakfast
so he has lots of energy for his race.
Page Eight: Finally the last race has comes and when the flag drops all the other cars race away and Lauda is left behind
as he his scared of crashing again.
Page Nine: Then Lauda hears all his family and friends cheering him on and he begins to go faster and faster.
Page Ten: Lauda catches up the first race car and whizzes past him, and then he catches the second race car and shoots
past him. He then catches the mean race car who pushed him off the track.
Page Eleven. The mean race car try's to push Lauda off the track again but this time Lauda was expecting it. He braked
and the mean car flew passed Lauda and crashed into a tree. Lauda drove away and won the race.
Page twelve: Lauda finishes first and wins the Championship and is then presented with a big trophy. All Laudas friends
and family are all really proud of him.

31. Final Developed Script
Page One: Lauda the racing car enters a 3 race championship.
Page Two: Lauda speeds past all the other cars and wins the first race.
Page Three: Then next day Lauda is winning the second race when a mean race car catches him up and pushes him off
the track.
Page Four: Lauda is then rushed to the mechanical emergency room. After being fixed the race car nurse says he needs
to rest for two days. BUT THE RACE IS ON THE SECOND DAY!
Page Five: Lauda gets a good nights sleep and feels much better in the morning. So he decides to go to the race track to
practice.
Page Six: When Lauda is practising he doesn’t feel well and goes to his mechanic, who makes him feel much better.
Page Seven: After wards Lauda goes home and goes to bed early to get a good nights sleep. In the morning he has a big
breakfast so he has lots of energy for his race.
Page Eight: Finally the last race has comes and when the flag drops all the other cars race away. However Lauda is left
behind because he his scared of crashing again.
Page Nine: Then Lauda hears all his family and friends cheering him on and he then begins to go faster and faster.
Page Ten: Lauda catches up the first race car and whizzes past him, and then he catches the second race car and shoots
past him. He then catches the mean race car who pushed him off the track …
Page Eleven. The mean race car try's to push Lauda off the track again but this time Lauda was expecting it. He braked
and the mean car flew passed Lauda and crashed. Lauda raced away and won the race.
Page twelve: Lauda finishes first and wins the Championship and is then presented with a big trophy. All Laudas friends
and family are all really proud of him.

32. Digital Flat Plans
My illustration of Lauda the racing
car entering the 3 race
championship will go here.
My text for page one will go here.
My text for page two will go here.
My illustration of Lauda winning
the first race will go here.

33. Digital Flat Plans
My illustration of Lauda crashing
will go here
My text for page three will go here.
My text for page four will go here.
My illustration of Lauda in the
mechanical emergency room
will go here.

34. Digital Flat Plans
My illustration of Lauda waking up
in the morning feeling much
better will go here.
My text for page five will go here.
My text for page six will go here.
My illustration of Lauda going to
his mechanic to get fixed will go
here.

35. Digital Flat Plans
My illustration of Lauda eating a
large breakfast will go here.
My text for page seven will go here.
My text for page eight will go here.
My illustration of Lauda being
left be hind at the starting flag
will go here.

36. Digital Flat Plans
My illustration of Laudas family
and friends cheering him on will
go here.
My text for page nine will go here.
My text for page ten will go here.
My illustration of Lauda
overtaking all the cars will go
here.

37. Digital Flat Plans
My illustration of Lauda dodging
the mean car and winning the race
will go here.
My text for page eleven will go here.
My text for page twelve will go here.
My illustration of Lauda
celebrating his win will go here