Dear Sir: Would you please go over the following essay? Omit or insert words or sentences as you see necessary to improve the quality of the paper and develop an essay relevant to the question. I would like to have two different essays: One with 800 word counts and another with 500 words counts. Thank you for your help. ESSAY 1 (UNIVERSITY OF VIRGINIA) As in past years, students applying to UVa’s College of Arts and Sciences are asked to discuss a work of art, music, science, mathematics, or literature that “surprised, unsettled, or challenged” them in some way. Mathematics and Economics Mathematics has always been the only thing which surprised and challenged me throughout my life. Mathematics is a subject place of my refuge from my dark thought, stress or any other issue bothering me. It is my favorite place in the world. Whenever, I feel the need to relax and unburden my soul, I resort to Math The beauty of mathematics has always challenged my mind. It has the power to solve real life problems. It explains real observations, and appeals to intuitions most of the time. And it takes us aback with the counter-intuitive results. It produces exact answers. It is abstract, yet purely objective and absolute. It’s man-made, yet the entire universe is modeled by math. It is incorruptible. It can create art. It can inspire creative thinking, and in that even solving problem is an art of its own. It has practical uses, and helps us understand, for example, how the petals on a rose or the stripes on a zebra can arise from a tissue of living cells growing together. It can even help us understand the diversity of life that has evolved on earth. Mathematical logic and concepts underlie functionality of practically every process from rocket science to the budget of a household. It is this diversity of application that intrigues me and makes me want to study it in depth. I feel it will give me logical and reasoning abilities that are pivotal for virtually all areas of study, consequently giving a very strong base for a wide range of careers. My interest in mathematics dates back to primary school. I have enjoyed the challenge ever since. I received merit certificates not only for math but for all other science subjects as well. I have always marveled at the interrelation between these and math, and have always sought to explore their common underlying principles. I remember my junior high school years very well. I participated in the Balkan Junior Mathematical Olympiad. Turkish team placed first out of the 21 countries competing in the Olympiad. Our team has received highest number of gold medal. It was a very rewarding experience for me. Currently, I am a member of the school's Maths team and we are regularly successful in competing against teams from other schools in the area The idea of proof has always held a real fascination for me. The process of starting from a simple set of axioms and deriving almost any mathematical is what truly separates M.

1. Dear Sir:
Would you please go over the following essay? Omit or insert
words or sentences as you see necessary to improve the quality
of the paper and develop an essay relevant to the question. I
would like to have two different essays: One with 800 word
counts and another with 500 words counts. Thank you for your
help.
ESSAY 1 (UNIVERSITY OF VIRGINIA)
As in past years, students applying to UVa’s College of Arts
and Sciences are asked to discuss a work of art, music, science,
mathematics, or literature that “surprised, unsettled, or
challenged” them in some way.
Mathematics and Economics
Mathematics has always been the only thing which surprised
and challenged me throughout my life. Mathematics is a subject
place of my refuge from my dark thought, stress or any other
issue bothering me. It is my favorite place in the world.
Whenever, I feel the need to relax and unburden my soul, I
resort to Math
The beauty of mathematics has always challenged my mind. It
has the power to solve real life problems. It explains real
observations, and appeals to intuitions most of the time. And it
takes us aback with the counter-intuitive results. It produces
exact answers. It is abstract, yet purely objective and absolute.
It’s man-made, yet the entire universe is modeled by math. It is
incorruptible. It can create art. It can inspire creative thinking,
and in that even solving problem is an art of its own. It has
practical uses, and helps us understand, for example, how the
petals on a rose or the stripes on a zebra can arise from a tissue
of living cells growing together. It can even help us understand
the diversity of life that has evolved on earth.
Mathematical logic and concepts underlie functionality of

2. practically every process from rocket science to the budget of a
household. It is this diversity of application that intrigues me
and makes me want to study it in depth. I feel it will give me
logical and reasoning abilities that are pivotal for virtually all
areas of study, consequently giving a very strong base for a
wide range of careers. My interest in mathematics dates back to
primary school. I have enjoyed the challenge ever since. I
received merit certificates not only for math but for all other
science subjects as well. I have always marveled at the
interrelation between these and math, and have always sought to
explore their common underlying principles.
I remember my junior high school years very well.
I participated in the Balkan Junior Mathematical Olympiad.
Turkish team placed first out of the 21 countries competing in
the Olympiad. Our team has received highest number of gold
medal. It was a very rewarding experience for me.
Currently, I am a member of the school's Maths team and we are
regularly successful in competing against teams from other
schools in the area
The idea of proof has always held a real fascination for me. The
process of starting from a simple set of axioms and deriving
almost any mathematical is what truly separates Mathematics
from any other subject. It is the closest we can ever get to
absolute truth, and therein lies its sheer beauty and the reason it
is the only subject for me.
I have tried to extend my Maths as much as possible beyond the
classroom, and whenever I do so I uncover either some
completely new and intriguing area of Mathematics or a very
neat trick. Geometry and number theory gave me a good
opportunity to explore new mathematical ideas myself, and gain
a much deeper appreciation of the interconnections within
Mathematics and the creation of proofs. My problem solving
skills and ability to manipulate algebraic variables have since
been enhanced.

3. I feel my background has given me an internationally diverse
outlook. In my travels, I have met with both the affluence of
Europe and the poverty existing in other countries. The Turkish
economy is a fascinating topic for me, not just due to my
heritage, but because of the juxtaposition between rapid
increases in wealth on the one hand and the poverty on the
other. Such contrasts have compelled me to seek an
understanding of the forces that drive the world economy. <
With the help of my teacher I have developed an interest in
economics and scrutinzed economic theories and numerical
analysis involved in economics. I frequently read articles on
economics in various newspapers. Reading books by
economists, has led me to appreciate better how concepts have
developed over time. I am surprised how mathematical model
can simplfy the enormous complexity of economic process. I
used to find them perplexing.
I am always surprised to see how mathematical models predict
economic outcome. Mathematics and economy have similar
levels of complexity. I saw that forecasts migh mail if
mathematical models cannot capture the full detail of the
system. Predictions of things like economic recessions are still
highly inaccurate, despite the use of enormous models running
on fast computers.
The recent economic turmoil has reinforced my belief in how
economics is truly an integral part of mathematics. I am sure the
university will provide the ideal environment in which to
strengthen and test my understanding of such a discipline,
where I can formulate and contribute my own theories to the
subject. However, I recognize that my passion for economics
will lead me to many more career horizons. I am particularly
interested in the behavior of firms and organizations from an
economic point of view. I have developed a keen interest in
analyzing and understanding how the world of business is
influenced by economics. I am able to use my mathematical and
analytical skills to apply different economic and financial

4. theories. I have found economics to be a challenging and
diverse discipline and I am interested in both macro and micro
economics. I believe that I will gain a highly marketable set of
skills from the study of economics and business at university.