The document provides feedback on a student's scriptwriting assignment. It identifies strengths in the script's narrative, characters, and format. Areas for improvement include making the narrative more engaging, developing the characters further, and focusing the story. Additional notes recommend concentrating on key story elements and balancing plot development with character growth.

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Unit 19 Scriptwriting
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