This document provides feedback on a student's scriptwriting assignment. It identifies strengths and areas for improvement in the script's narrative, characters, and format. For narrative, the script effectively tells the story but could expand more on certain parts. The characters are well-developed though more depth could be added. The format follows conventions but minor adjustments would enhance readability. Additional comments suggest developing character relationships and adding more emotional engagement for readers.

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