The document provides feedback on a script. It notes strengths in the narrative, character development, and format. Areas for improvement are also outlined, including making the narrative more focused, developing the characters further, and improving consistency in formatting.

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Unit ll Scriptruriting
AO4 - Script Feedback
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Strengths with the Script
Narrative
Areas for Improvement
Narrative
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Strengths with the Script
Character
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Strengths with the Script
Format
Areas for Improvement
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