This document provides feedback on the strengths and areas for improvement of a pitch for a new school-based film. It notes strengths in the narrative and characterizations created for the pitch. However, it identifies areas for improving the justification of choosing the UK as the location. It also recommends strengthening the description of resources and ensuring the style devices used are appropriate and well-explained. In general, the feedback aims to help enhance the pitch by addressing some narrative and structural aspects that require further development.