This document provides feedback on a student's scriptwriting work. It identifies key strengths and areas for development in their character development, narrative, and formatting. The character could be more complex and consistent. The narrative would benefit from stronger scene structure and pacing. Formatting improvements include proper formatting of dialogue and action. Overall, the feedback aims to help the student strengthen essential elements of scriptwriting in their future work.

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