After my first reading of your essay, it appears that you have only summarized and lifte parts of the article and have little arguments of your own. However you have structured the paper very well and I can see your topic of why Mary Shelley wrote Frankenstein quite clearly. As with just about everyone in our class, you did not come up with a creative title (neither did I, so it is quite fine!). Your first sentence, “Frankenstein was written by a young girl.” is not quite the attention grabber that engages the audience. I would explore ways to find a better opening sentence. Further into your introduction, I have become confused. What article are you writing about? You have no mention of the article title or author anywhere in your first paragraph and actually even incorrectly cited it as “Hunter.” Furthermore, it appears you have just lifted sentences from the just the text with not thesis of your own. The thesis statement is critical to the success of your paper and would advise you put one in your introduction paragraph. Furthermore, you cited wonderful examples from the text but have very little argument of your own. You do an excellent job in your third paragraph explaining Lord Byron challenging everyone but do not explain why. You have great construction of the essay but are missing the points to agree or disagree. Instead you only summarize (quite well though) the article with little of your own input. I would say that the number one suggestion I have is to work on less summarization and more of your own voice in the work However, I think you are on a great start and look forward to your next draft! Analysis paper 1 Project Overview Veronica Almodovar Analysis paper for the budget Project Overview Rasmussen College Company Overview The Urithi Real estate is a leader in asset management and property investment. Founded in 2012 by Keshi Jones, its multi-office and boutique real estate company that works towards matching potential investors with the best property matching their needs and taste. Keshi has over ten years’ experience in real estate and management experience, which has been matched with good investment skills which have enabled the company to complete about 3.4 billion dollars projects in the past 10 years. With investor and private capital, the company is looking at doing more urban real estate projects. Urithi provides the best real estate traditional methods of property management, selling and buying, rent and asset management but moving towards more modern ways of doing business. The company profile currently includes one to three houses for family use, mixed use buildings, luxury homes and apartments. Our goal is to be a globally diversified property and asset managers. Summary of all Transactions Completed. The purchase of a condo at the cost of $ 18000 and a retouch of the same at the cost of $ 7000, thus the total for the purchase of the condo would be termed as $25000. After looking at the financi.

1. After my first reading of your essay, it appears that you have
only summarized and lifte parts of the article and have little
arguments of your own. However you have structured the paper
very well and I can see your topic of why Mary Shelley wrote
Frankenstein quite clearly.
As with just about everyone in our class, you did not come
up with a creative title (neither did I, so it is quite fine!). Your
first sentence, “Frankenstein was written by a young girl.” is
not quite the attention grabber that engages the audience. I
would explore ways to find a better opening sentence. Further
into your introduction, I have become confused. What article
are you writing about? You have no mention of the article title
or author anywhere in your first paragraph and actually even
incorrectly cited it as “Hunter.” Furthermore, it appears you
have just lifted sentences from the just the text with not thesis
of your own. The thesis statement is critical to the success of
your paper and would advise you put one in your introduction
paragraph.
Furthermore, you cited wonderful examples from the text but
have very little argument of your own. You do an excellent job
in your third paragraph explaining Lord Byron challenging
everyone but do not explain why. You have great construction
of the essay but are missing the points to agree or disagree.
Instead you only summarize (quite well though) the article with
little of your own input. I would say that the number one
suggestion I have is to work on less summarization and more of
your own voice in the work However, I think you are on a great
start and look forward to your next draft!

2. Analysis paper 1
Project Overview
Veronica Almodovar
Analysis paper for the budget
Project Overview
Rasmussen College
Company Overview
The Urithi Real estate is a leader in asset management and
property investment. Founded in 2012 by Keshi Jones, its multi-
office and boutique real estate company that works towards
matching potential investors with the best property matching
their needs and taste. Keshi has over ten years’ experience in
real estate and management experience, which has been matched
with good investment skills which have enabled the company to
complete about 3.4 billion dollars projects in the past 10 years.
With investor and private capital, the company is looking at
doing more urban real estate projects. Urithi provides the best
real estate traditional methods of property management, selling
and buying, rent and asset management but moving towards
more modern ways of doing business. The company profile
currently includes one to three houses for family use, mixed use
buildings, luxury homes and apartments. Our goal is to be a
globally diversified property and asset managers.
Summary of all Transactions Completed.

3. The purchase of a condo at the cost of $ 18000 and a retouch of
the same at the cost of $ 7000, thus the total for the purchase of
the condo would be termed as $25000. After looking at the
financial positon of the company, we opted for the credit line to
purchase the condo because it was at zero percent financing and
the repayment mode was also favorable considering the fact that
the credit has a repayment period of 15 months. The cost of
repayment will be met by including the costs in the rent
charged, also being that the project will be through within one
month it will provide time for occupancy and thus the credit
will be easily repaid.
The house was also sold at a profit of $ 20000 to a willing
buyer. The decision to sell the house was reached because the
time was right and also consumer demands. The Condo would
have not had a good profit margin as the house because the
demand that was upcoming was for the house. The marketing
strategies that have been adopted by our company are quite
good and have assisted in making us experience profit. The
profit thus will be useful in ensuring that the company’s
financial improve by recording higher profits this year and
increasing the gross profit margin.
Summary of the financials generated
The income statement reflected the latest acquisition of a
condo. It was acquired through credit and thus the liabilities
increase. The rental income also increased due to the new rent
from the condo. The sale of the house increased the income of
the company. Due to this sale there was a spike in profit
reported by a considerable percentage.
The balance sheet has been balanced out. The transaction of
buying and selling has been reflected. We also have seen a rise
in the liabilities because of the credit that was used to acquire
the condo. But there is no interest expense on the same because
the credit was zero percent financing.
Overview, justification of the budget and how it was forecast.
The budget was much on the lower side. The economy has not
been doing well and thus we as a company decided to factor in

4. that. The real estate sector is usually affected easily by the
economy and thus the factoring in. The expenses were majorly
forecast using last year’s financials but the margins were a bit
higher while trying to incorporate the need for growth and
profitability in the company. The income was also forecasted
using considerations of the economy and last years budget.
Decisions made and why they were made.
The first decision was to purchase the condo using the credit
line of financing. This was done because it was an offer at zero
percent financing. This would allow the company to finance the
purchase at the cost of only repaying the loan. The decision of
selling the house was also done because of the consumer
demand and also the profitability.
Conclusion and summary
The decisions that were made were to the benefit the company.
The company is thus on a stable position looking at the
financials. The budget also reflects that the company is not
running under the budget but majorly over the budget, this is an
indications stability and profitability. Despite the fears that the
economy will not be doing the company has surpassed all this to
report good figures. The business owners are strategic
considering how the business is doing as at now shown by the
financials.
Forecasted Statement of income

5. AMOUNT
Income
New Condo
$ 25,000.00
house 2
$ 15,000.00
condo
$ 20,000.00
Reimbursements
$ 1,000.00
gain on sale of assets

6. $ 20,000.00
interest revenue
$ -
gross income
$ 81,000.00
less: vacancy and credit losses
$ 2,000.00
Net Operating Income
$ 79,000.00
Expenses

7. Property Acquisition
$ 18,000.00
Property Improvement
$ 7,000.00
Utilities
$ 1,000.00
Fees
$ 3,000.00
Property taxes and Licenses
$ 10,000.00
Insurance

8. $ 6,500.00
Maintenance
$ 15,000.00
Net operating expenses
$ 60,500.00
Income before taxes
$ 18,500.00
Taxes

9. $ 1,676.00
Net Gain
$ 16,824.00
URITHI REALTORS
BALANCE SHEET
FOR YEAR 2016
Assets
AMOUNT
Current Assets
Properties
100000
Cash in hand

10. 30000
Prepaid Expenses (insurance)
3000
Total Current Assets
133000
Fixed Assets
Machinery & Equipment
70000
Furniture & Fixtures
47000
Real Estate / Buildings
650000
Total Fixed Assets
770000
Total Assets
900000
Liabilities & Net Worth
Current Liabilities
Accounts Payable
25000
Taxes Payable
10000
Notes Payable (due within 12 months)

11. 15000
Total Current Liabilities
40000
Long-Term Liabilities
Bank Loans Payable (greater than 12 months)
425000
Less: Short-Term Portion
110000
Total Long-Term Liabilities
535000
Total Liabilities
575000
Owners' Equity (Net Worth)
325000
Total Liabilities & Net Worth
900000
When I read your essay for the first time, I had a hard time
identifying the topic and thesis of the paper. It seems like most
of your paper is a summary of the article that you read. Since I
could not identify the topic of your paper, I do not know what
you are trying to say about it or how you feel about it. I would

12. also consider redoing the title of your paper, as it is just a
restatement of the assignment. For this, I would suggest
reviewing what the topic of your paper is and then writing a
title based on that. I would also recommend creating a better
attention grabber.
For the introduction, I would first generate a thesis
statement to help the reader better understand the paper and be
able to follow it. Since I could not find a thesis in your paper, I
am going to assume that you did not necessarily have one. To
start, your thesis should be related to the prompt. It should also
include some sentences that support the idea of your topic, as
well as the names of the text that you are discussing in your
essay. Since I could not find the thesis, I would use these
couple of points I just made to help you create a thesis for your
introduction.
It was unclear how many arguments you made in your
paper. It will be easier to identify these arguments once you
have found a topic for your paper. I understand the prompt is
difficult to follow so it is fairly challenging to come up with a
topic, but it is easiest to find the author’s thesis (what they
wrote the article about) and explain everything from there. That
is what your arguments are supposed to do. Make sure that your
arguments are also clear and give plenty of information to
support your claims but more importantly, the author’s. When
you are forming your arguments, they also need to include
specific lines from the text, or direct quotes. These direct
quotes also needed to be properly cited using the mla format. If
you are unsure how to do this, here is the link for a website that
might help you:
Overall, my first suggestion would be for you to come up
with a more specific topic for your paper. Once you have done
that, create a thesis statement. This should be related to the
prompt and also be related to the author of the article’s thesis.
After these steps are completed, I would create at least two
body paragraphs to support your thesis and introduction.
Remember, these body paragraphs should have specific lines

13. from the article in them. When you are writing your conclusion,
make sure to restate your thesis in it as well. I see you had some
difficulty with this prompt and I hope this letter could help you
understand the assignment more.Your grammar was great and
your sentences flowed together so that was nice to see!