The document outlines Grace Kennedy's digital graphic narrative development project which involved creating various images using different techniques like shapes, rotoscoping, and comic books. Grace provides evaluations of each image describing what she liked and opportunities for improvement. The feedback received praised the descriptions and ideas but suggested adding more details and images.
4. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
Image 1-I like how my spider does actually look like a spider. Also. I like that
my spider is eye catching because it is has bright colours like blue and orange
on it.
Image 2- I like how my crab has beach imagery within it; there is ocean water,
rocks, shells, seaweed and sand. The outline of the crab is sharp so you can
tell exactly what it is.
What would you improve if you did it again?
Image 1-I would have done more with the background. I would add a colour
like green to make the spider come forward. Also I would use a black stroke
on all the layers, to give the spider definition.
Image 2- I could of used more pictures relating to crabs and beaches, I think
that would create a mosaic effect in the image.
6. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like that you can tell which person I have rotoscoped: Nicki
Minaj. I like the eyelashes in the image because even though
they are small, there are still defined. I think the shadowing in
the image is good because it creates more of a realistic feel to
the image.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would improve the image by adding more shadows to the face
and body, to make the image closer to the original one. Also I
would add more highlights to her hair.
8. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the way the facial features have turned
out, especially the teeth; they all stand out and
are defined.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would have added more detail to the picture
,especially to the background of the picture and
Raoulâs face.
11. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
1- I like that I have made lots of variations of the
same text. I especially like the multi-coloured one
2-I like how you can tell what the picture is
showing.
What would you improve if you did it again?
1-It could be more colourful.
2-I would potentially try having a separate picture
for each letter, like I would have bacon for the letter
G, eggs for the letter R and so on.
15. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
Image 1- I like how the image looks somewhat realistic. I like how you can see
clearly who the picture is of: Black Widow from Avengers.
Image 2- I really like the black shadows within the image in contrast with the light
and bright colours surrounding them.
Image 3- I like that this image is eye-catching because of the bright colours used. It
has a nice pop art feel to it.
What would you improve if you did it again?
Image 1- the image is rather dark so I would do something to soften those harsh
shadows.
Image 2- there is a big chunk of blue towards the left side of the image so I would
add in other colour ; this would give more visual variety.
Image 3-I think that the image may be too bright as there is no contrast between
light and dark.
17. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the story board is easy to follow because it
reads like a book, from left to right. I like that my
story shows what the characterâs thoughts as well
as what is happening in the picture.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would maybe of laid the page out differently it
makes it look more visually appealing. I think it
would look a lot better if I increase the comic book
effect; it isnât very noticeable in the story board.
28. Proposal
Dimensions
(number of pages and page size) My book will be 8-12 pages.
Story Overview
(Provide an outline of your story)
The story is of two teenage twin girls. They were separated because of a curse which
was put place by Hydrella, the sea witch, due to an agreement with the Sea King to
save his wife. The curse meant that the girls would be pulled apart -one of them would
live as a human and the other as a mermaid. They have no clue each other exist.
The purpose of the story is them meeting each other and how to lift the curse. The
human twin, Belle, goes swimming and discovers her sister ,Arielle ,underneath the
water but the sea witch tries to stop this.
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29. Deadline
Audience
(Think about who you are targeting as your audience. Consider age, gender, class,
location and other characteristics which could define your audience.)
Seen as my main character are female, the story may appeal more to girls as they
can sympathise and relate to them easier than a male. I want my story to be
interesting but I want it to read simply because my target audience are about 5-10
years old. The class of my audience are likely to be ABC1 because the parents will
have a lot of money to buy their children the book, however I feel my book still
appeals to children and parents of lower classes.
Production Methods
(Explain the methods you are going to use to produce your pages. Show us the
thinking behind your decisions for a more detail response
Seen as my story takes place under water so I canât really use the photography and
comic book effect; I donât have a mermaid and I canât go to a tropical beach in the
time I have. I feel like using shapes rotoscoping will be the best option for me; I will
be able to create the shapes for my book more easily. I could circle shapes for their
faces. I could create the mermaid tail through rotoscoping as it may be hard to
create using shapes.
30. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
-good description
-easy to understand the plot
- Well thought out idea
-could explain page size
-some grammar error
-describe more about the curse
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
-good idea generation well explained and detailed
-good use of schemes to separate different
characters/ideas
-Add more images to the mood board such as
realistic images.
31. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
- It strongly explains the basis of the story
- They ideas for the creation for the graphics is
ideal for the situation
- Maybe explain how the sea witch tries to stop
things
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
- The 5 intial ideas all have a large amount of detail
in them and show a lot of thought processes
- Add a few more images into the mood boards,
possibly showing how you think the characters
might look like, or extra characters
32. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
33. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
My feed back was mostly positive because they said I had a good description and story.
The only negatives was that I could add more photos to mood board and add more
detail about the curse and the sea witch.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I agree about the good description because I feel like I did provide a lot of detail in my
mind map. I also agree with the negatives too because I could add a lot more photos to
my mood board. I could add more photo to do what g
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I was told that my grammatical errors but even though this is true, I donât think it really
affect the quality of my idea generation. Other than that ,there are no other
disagreement; all of the rest was constructive criticism.
34. Original Script
Original Script goes here with link to where it came from
http://nldslab.soe.ucsc.edu/charactercreator/film_corpus/film_2012xxxx/imsdb.com/Little-
Mermaid,-The.html
1-Sailors are on a ship with prince Eric ,they talk about the sea king, King Triton. One sailor
believes him however the sailor doesnât.
2-The seen cuts under water with the seaâs king. Ariel is meant to be doing a performance for him
but she is too busy looking at a sunken ship.
(seen cut to her looking at the ship) she and flounder are chased by sharks.
3-Ariel talks on the shore to a seagull called scuttle. He shows her a human item-a fork. Their
conversation is cut short because Ariel remembers her fatherâs concert.
4-Cut to Ursula, the sea witch. She gets her assists to keep an eye on Ariel. She feels that she
(Ariel) may be âthe key to Tritonâs undoingâ.
5-Cut back to the underwater palace. Triton is annoyed with Ariel. He warns her that she could
have been seen by âthe barbarians', he means humans. She defends the humans but her father
sayâs âtheyâre dangerousâ.
6-She starts to sing. She then shows Sebastian her collection of human belongings, âitâs my
collectionâ she says. Sebastian wonders why she has all of this stuff.
7- Ariel hears a ship with fireworks so she swims out to it. Eric is on the ship. A storm starts and
ship explodes. Eric sinks in the water unconscious and Ariel saves him.
8- She brings him to shore and his eyes are closed however he is still breathing. The sea witch
watches this from her chamber. âThe child is in love with a humanâ ,she sayâs .
35. Original Script
Original Script goes here with link to where it came from
http://nldslab.soe.ucsc.edu/charactercreator/film_corpus/film_2012xxxx/imsdb.co
m/Little-Mermaid,-The.html
9-Ariel sisterâs tells their father that Ariel is in love. Ariel decides she need to see
Eric tonight.
10-Triton has a word with Sebastian
triton turns Arielle into a human because he realise
36. Story Breakdown
Final script goes here.
The little mermaids â
In my story there will be two twins except one is a mermaid (Arielle) and one is living as a
human (Belle). The plot is basically bringing the twins back together and lifting the curse
that separating them in the first place.
The background of the story is âŚ.. When their mother was giving birth to them ,she is
struggling and he likely to die. The sea witch witnesses this and offers
her help. She sayâs she will be able help but at a price. One twin will have to live as a
human while the other continues as a mermaid. He agrees reluctantly but he loves his wife
too much. The sea witch tries to save the wife but she can't, although he still has to one
child.
1-The story starts in the castle with the human twin princess and she wonders what lies
beneath the ocean.
2-The story cuts to under the water, to belle swimming in the ocean and find something
interesting that belongs to a mermaid. She shows her maid.
4-She has a dream about being a mermaid and is curious to find out more.
She decides to go in the water again and she sees the mermaid. She watches her from a
5- She decides to go in the water again to gather more information. The sea witch tries to
get assist to stop this .As a result ,Belle loses her breath and her sister finds her, she
saves her-which actually brings them closer.
6-They realise they look the same so they donât really what to do about it. The story
rewinds back to 16 years ago to when curse had been placed. That twins had to be
separated to save their mother despite her dying.
37. Draft Script
Page 1: Belle looks out of window of the castle to the ocean.
âWhat lies under the ocean?â ,she asks her maid.
âIâm not sure my dear', replies the maid.
âI think thereâs a lot more than we knowâ, the girl says.
Page 2: Belle curiously swims in the ocean. She come across a scale so she picks it up.
Page 3: âWhatâs is this?', she asks her maid ,with her hands out.
âBelle be careful! the ocean is a dangerous place. I may have to tell your mother.â
âPlease donâtâ
âJust this onceâ
Page 4: Belle dreams about being a mermaid. (however she isnât aware this is her twin mermaid
sister).
Page 5: She goes in the ocean again. This time she sees a mermaid, she watches her from afar.
She look similar to the one in her dream.
Page 6: The sea witch see this on her globe.
âThe human girl is getting too close to the ocean!â. âYou must try stop herâ ,the sea tells her assist.
âThey must not meetâ
Page 7: The assistant travels down to the girls. He captures the girls and takes them back to the
sea witch.
Page 8: There is something your father has been keeping from you, ArielleâŚ
Page 9:The story goes back 16 years to when they first got separated. They are sisters but one
is human and one is a mermaid. The curse got placed so that their mother would survived but
she died. The witch changes Belle from a baby mermaid into a human baby.
38. Draft Script
Page 10-
Both girls are shocked by what they heard.
But, before they can talk to each other witches starts to cast another spell.
Page 11-
The sea king senses that belle and Arielle is in trouble and goes to the rescue.
Page 12-
The sea king barges through the cave and destroys the sea witch with his powers.
He also destroy the spell book, freeing the girls from the curse.
Page 13-
The family hug each other.
They are glad to be together again, after all these years.
Page 14-
The Sea King casts a spell , every time Belle enters the water she becomes a
mermaid.
The sisters can finally swim together as Mermaids.
39. Final Script
Final script goes here.
Page 1:
Princess Belle is very curious about the ocean, she stares out her castle window.
âI wonder what lies beneath the ocean?â, Belle asks her maid.
âHonestly Belle, Iâm not sure,â replied the maid.
âI think there is more than we know,â Belle insisted.
Page 2:
Belle leaves the castle and goes for swim in the ocean. She spots something lying on the sea bed.
She picks up the mysterious object and heads back to shore.
Page 3:
She shows her maid her findings.
âLook what I found!â, Shouted Belle with her palms out.
âBelle where did you find this?â the maid cautiously questioned.
âThe ocean!â Belle replied excitedly.
âYou ought to be careful! The ocean is a large and dangerous place my dear.â
Page 4:
The maid leaves the room. Belle jumps in bed and has a dream about being a mermaid.
Page 5:
She wakes up and decides to go swimming in the ocean. She sees a mermaid for the first time
ever.
Page 6:
The sea witch, Hydrella, watches them on her globe, in her deep dark cave.
âThe human girl is getting too close to the ocean. I must stop her!â, insists the witch.
Page 7:
She sends out her assistant, her puffer fish to stop this. He swims out and steals belleâs snorkel.
This results in belles losing her breath and falling unconious in the bottom of the ocean.
40. Final Script
Final script goes here.
Page 8-
Arielle was unsure whether to help her, she had never seen a human before! However she
decides save her.
âWhat should I do?.... I must save her!ââ
Page 9-
Arielle swims Belle to shore. Belle slowly opens her eyes and two girls come face to face for the
first time.
âWhat happened?ââ Belle asked.
âYou almost drown but I saved you,ââ Arielle replied.
âThank you! I havenât seen a mermaid before,ââ Belle admitted.
âNor have I seen a human!ââ
âIâm Belle by the way.â
page 10-
The more the girls talked and gazed upon each other faces. They both realised somethingâŚ
âWe look very similar, don't you think?ââ Belle exclaimed curiously.
However their conversation is cut short.
Page 11-
âBELLE!BELLE!â the maid shouted from the entrance of the castle.
âI have to go but thank you! I owe you my life,â Belle said graciously.
Page 12-
Arielle swims backs to see her father
41. Final Script
Page 1:
A 16-year old princess named Belle had always been curious about the ocean. One day she leaves the walls of
her castle to go for a swim in the ocean.
She realises she can breath underwater.
Page 2:
She spots something unusual in the water.
It is a tail!
She watches in shock from behind a rock.
Page 3:
It is a MERMAID-her name is Arielle!
Belle is completely amazed by what she sees.
Page 4:
The sea witch, Hydrella ,watches this on her magical globe.
She moans to her pufferfish assist, Sharpy ,âThis could ruin EVERYTHING! You must bring the girls back to me!â
page 5:
Sharpy find the girls and captures them, takes them back to the sea cave.
âPage 6:
âThereâs a secret your father has been keeping from you Arielle!â confessed the witch.
âWhat secret?â Arielle asked nervously.
Page 7:
16 years agoâŚ
The sea queen was carrying two twins-Arielle and Belle.
The sea queen was very ill following their birth.
The Sea king brought in the sea witch to try save her.
However there was a catch; one twin would live as a human and one as mermaid-they wouldnât be allowed to
trespass on each other's territory or they would face the consequences.
The Sea King agreed but unfortunately it wasnât enough to save his wife.
However, the curse still went ahead therefore Belle was changed into human.
42. Final Script
Final script goes here.
Page 8-
Both girls are shocked.
But, before they can talk to each other witches starts to cast another spell.
Page 9-
The sea king senses that belle and Arielle is in trouble and goes to the rescue.
Page 10-
The sea king barges through the cave and destroys the sea witch with his powers.
He also destroy the spell book, freeing the girls from the curse.
Page 11-
The family hug each other.
They are glad to be together again, after all these years.
Page 12-
The Sea King casts a spell , every time Belle enters the water she becomes a mermaid.
The sisters can finally swim together as Mermaids.