Veganism is a philosophy and lifestyle that seeks to avoid exploiting and causing harm to animals. The Veganuary campaign encourages people to try going vegan for the month of January, with over 3,200 people committing to participate in 2014. Veganism not only helps reduce animal suffering and benefits the environment, but also improves personal health as vegans consume more fruits and vegetables. However, vegans need to ensure they get enough vitamin B12, which is found in animal products, through supplements or fortified foods. The meat industry has a large environmental impact through greenhouse gas emissions and water use.

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Veganism: A philosophy and way of living.
Veganismisawidelycontroversial wayof livingthatseekstoexclude the exploitationof animalsfor
food,clothing,testingandentertainment. Veganuaryisaglobal campaignthat launchedin (the UK
in) January 2014 to helpencourage peopletotry (becoming) veganforJanuary. Withasuccess of
3,200 people readyto commit in January 2014, the campaignhas gone fromstrengthto strengthto
helpraise awarenessof thislifestyle. The campaignraisesawarenessof Veganism.
Veganismnotonlyhelpstoreduce the sufferingof animalsand help(helps) the planetbutalso
improvespersonal health.Due tothe factvegansdo noteat animalsor theirproducts (animal based
products), theymustfindthe essential nutrientstheyneedfrom plantbased (plant-based)sources,
veganalternativesandfortifiedfoods. Thismeansthat veganseat a lot more fruitsand vegetables
than omnivores. Vegansgetthe mostamountof nutrientstheycanfromtheirfoodandare keento
make sure theyknowhowto get everythingtheyneedsuchasiron. Due to a vegan’slifestyleof
avoidingmeatanddairy,alternativelytheywilleatlotsof fruit,vegetables,nuts,andpulses.This
meanstheywill getplentyof the nutrientstheyneed. However, vitaminB12 is a vitaminthat can be
hard for vegansto obtain as it is foundin meat, fish,dairy,andeggs. whichiscreatedbybacteria
but isalsoaddedto fortifiedfoodssuchasbreakfastcereals.Therefore,veganscanbe more
susceptibletoB12 deficiency. Althoughb12is added to fortifiedfoodssuch as breakfast cereals,
plantmilks,andsoyproducts. A supplementof B12 is the easiestwayto(veryimportant,andpeople
must) make sure you(they) donot lackit in your (their) diet. VitaminB12 isan essential nutrientfor
our redbloodcells,nerve function,andisvital forDNA synthesisinourcells.
Notonlydo veganstendto be more well informedof whattheirbodyneedsandwhattheirfood
contains but avoidingmeat and animal products can helpto virtually eliminate (prevent) the most
severe diseasessuchas cardiovascular disease,obesity,type 2 diabetes,diverticulosisand e.coli
(E. coli) infections.Avegan dietcan be more beneficial towomen as PMS symptoms become less
intense or disappearaltogether.This is due to the eliminationofdairy from their diet.
Veganismhelpsthe environmentand helpsto stop excessgreenhouse gases.Over70 billionland
animals such as cows, pigs and chickensare specificallybred,farmedandkilledforfoodeveryyear.
all of whichneedvastamountsof foodand water,theyemitmethane andothergreenhouse gases
and produce mountainsof physical waste. These animalsare thenfarmed and killedfor foodevery
year. Thisdoesnot include seacreaturesandotheranimalsbredforfurand skintrades. In2006, the
UN calculatedthatthe combinedclimate change emissionsof animalsbredfortheir meatwere
about18% of the global total – more than cars, planesandall otherformsof transportput together.

2. The meat industryhasa bigimpact onthe environmentandhow (to) use ournatural resources. 70%
of the freshwaterproducedisusedforthe meatindustryand agriculture usesabout70 percentof
the world’savailable freshwater,andone thirdof thatis usedtogrow the grain fedtolivestock. (it)
takes 2500 gallonsof water for 1 pound of beef.This(,this) isequivalentto100 poundsof wheat.
70% of the worlds (World’s) grain harvest is fed to livestock whilethe other 30% is (are) used
for the entire worlds (population. (for the population of the entireworld.) Only50% ofgrain
harvest could feedall the starving people inthe world if only people wouldstopeating meat.