This document provides feedback from a teacher on a student's pre-production tasks for a film project. The teacher provides positive feedback on many areas and notes some areas for improvement. They note the student analyzed film openings well but could add what they learned. They also need to clarify actor information and equipment details. The student makes all the requested improvements, reshoots their preliminary film to meet requirements, and receives an improved final mark of 15/20.

1. AS Pre-production Tasks Feedback
Student Name: PINDER Joseph
Task 1 – Pre-production: Research & Planning Evidence on
blog
1. Similar Products – film beginning analysis Yes
2. Genre Analysis yes
3. Target Audience Yes
4. Script Yes
5. Drafts Yes
6. Storyboard Yes
7. Shotlist Yes
8. Layouts – floor plan Yes
9. Locations Yes
10.Costumes Yes
11.Props Yes
12.Actors Yes
13.Equipment Yes
14.Production schedule Yes
Teachers comments
1. 2 excellent analyses of film openings Limitless and Mission Impossible.
Clear and confident use of technical language used throughout. You
could add what you have learnt from these openings that you will use in
your product. You are missing 1 more film opening. Please add this.
Analysis of Hot Fuzz now added to a proficient level.
2. Good research into the history of the genre, presented well using
powerpoint. You could add more images to this to make it more visual.
3. Good research on target audience. Good use of NRS scale and avatar
creator to show stereotypical audience members.
4. Great script, builds mystery well. However, it needs some formatting
tweaks, please look at your scene directions at the start of each scene,
take out the camera shots and just describe what you need the actors to
do. Script now formatted and uploaded correctly.
5. Clear evidence of drafting of ideas throughout.
6. An excellent set of clear storyboards showing your vision well. Some of
the writing is quite hard to read, you may need to go over with a pen and
re-scan.
7. Excellent shot list, well done. Clear, precise and shows your vision.
8. Good clear floor plans of main locations, please state where these plans
are for.
9. Great set of photos showing where you will shoot, however, you need to
add a sentence for each one saying what scene will be shot there and
why you chose it. Choice of locations now added alongside the images.
10.Costume choices explained well with images.
11.Prop choices explained with images.
12.You need to re-read this post as the opening sentence does not make
sense. You have stated you will need 3 actors. Who will play these

2. characters? Add names and photographs. Now re-written to make sense,
however no images added.
13.Equipment is detailed very briefly in the production schedule. You need
to do this as a separate post with more detail. What camera will you use?
What else do you need? Equipment list now added, good use of images.
14.A comprehensive production schedule detailing all stages of production
well. You could add the evaluation stages to complete the year’s work.
Overall this is a proficient body of work, Joey. Good use of technology
throughout. Your blog is well organised with good use of labels.
Please see notes above for improvements. Focus on 1, 12 and 13
Preliminary tasks – script uploaded. FILM NEEDS TO BE RESHOT AND
EDITED AS DID NOT MEET REQUIREMENTS
Preliminary film now re-shot, edited and meets requirements.
All work has now been uploaded and improved at a proficient level.
Mark out of 20: 13/20 15/20
Teacher name: A Jones Date: 18/12/16 07/02/17
Student action plan for improvement
1. I have added my missing film opening to my blog
2. I have updated my script and re-blogged
3. I have added some brief detail to my shots for my recce
4. I have created an equipment list and blogged it
5. I have made sure my Actors and Props section makes sense
Final mark out of 20: 15 Date: 07/02/17