A Presentation by Holly French and Janet Ilko on using Googledocs as a tool for peer revision. Presentation at the SDCUE conference November 15, 2014.

1. SDCUE Fall 2014 Holly French and Janet Ilko

2. Consider the similarities and
differences between editing and
revision. How can using digital tools
enhance this process?

3. “IF STUDENTS ARE TO BECOME BETTER WRITERS, THEY NEED TO RECOGNIZE THAT SOMETIMES
THEIR FIRST IDEA IS NOT ALWAYS THEIR BEST IDEA….SADLY, THESE STUDENTS HAVE NOT
BEEN TAUGHT THAT THEIR BEST IDEA MAYBE YET TO COME. THEIR RICHEST THINKING MAY BE
FOUND IN THEIR SECOND, FIFTH, OR NINTH IDEA.” (229)
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4. “IN A NATIONAL SURVEY OF 560 OTHERWISE SUCCESSFUL SECONDARY
TEACHERS OF WRITING AND 715 OF THEIR STUDENTS, SARAH W. FREEDMAN
(THE ROLE OF RESPONSE IN ACQUISITION OF WRITTEN LANGUAGE, BERKELEY:
CALIFORNIA UP) FOUND THAT MANY TEACHERS GRIEVED OVER THE USE OF
PEER-RESPONSE GROUPS BECAUSE THEY HAD DIFFICULTY GETTING STUDENTS TO
RESPOND EFFECTIVELY TO ONE ANOTHER’S WRITING.”
THIS ARTICLE APPEARED ON PAGES 52-56
IN THE SEPTEMBER 1990
ISSUE OF ENGLISH JOURNAL.
COPYRIGHT
COUNCIL OF TEACHERS OF ENGLISH. REPRINTED WITH PERMISSION.

5. Holly French &
Janet Ilko
San Diego CUE
Conference
November 15, 2014
“Beyond Editing:
Using Googledocs
for Student
Revision Groups”
San Diego Area Writing
Project

6. My Story: Holly French
On the Digital Learning Continuum
My Past
 Learner vs Presenter
 Consumer, NOT producer
My Present
• Consumer: Educational sites
Presenter: SDAWP
• Mentor: Digital Editing
• Advocate: Digital Learning Days

7. My Story: Janet Ilko
On the Digital Learning Continuum
My Past
 Self-prescribed Technophobe
 Technology vs. Teaching
 Consumer, NOT producer
My Present
• Consumer: Social Media, Educational
Sites
• Producer: Writing in my Hand (Blog)
• Writingforchange.net
• Mentor: Student Blogs, Digital Editing
• Advocate: Digital Learning Days

8. 20th vs. 21st Century Pedagogy
No Child Left Behind Common Core

9. Digital Learning CONTINUUM
Consumer --- Producer Advocate----- Mentor ----

10. Mentor Text Inquiry APPROACH
Scientist Historian Mathematician WriterReader

11. Welcome to Cajon Valley Middle
Expect More, Achieve More!

12. Writing For Change
What if your district has all
the tools and resources
available for educators?
• Tipping Point
• Digital Continuum
• Integrated Pedagogy
• Impact On Students
Add Your Video!

13. Agency is
the capacity
of a person
to act in the
world.
Allows
individuals to
adapt,
persevere and
succeed despite
adversity.
On-going
opportunity
to
resources/ex
periences in
education.
NWP Values
• Real World Purpose
• Authentic Audience
• Personal Investment

14. The writer believes there is some
good in the original piece
The writer believes the writing
can be made better.
The writer has some reason to
make it better.
The writer has some plan for
figuring out how to make it
better.
Four Principles Toward Teaching the
Craft of Revisions

15. The Revision Process
Here is how most
students feel about the
revision process.

16. Students are asked to take the essay
they wrote and improve upon it.
They recopy the essay and edit
with correcting of spelling and
punctuation.

17. Peer revision in google-docs
allows student to receive
feedback from peers and
then begin to revise.

18. My Journey
• Revision struggles
• Finding mentor text
• Working through

19. My Journey
Use of Mentor Text
• One sentence from assigned text
• Daily practice with editing and revision

20. Fishbowl & Academic Commenting

21. Student Peer Editing

22. Welcome to Our Classroom

23. Mentor Sentences
Using mentor sentences for revision is a springboard to
the process.
Daily Warm Up:
SIMILE:
A boom of thunder startled them and like leaves before a new hurricane, they tumbled
upon each other and ran.
excerpt from “All Summer in a Day” by Ray Bradbury
Your Original Sentence:
They sent scientists and geographers to find human bones, using tools from their 4x4
truck.
Your Imitation Sentence:
The clank of the tools startled them and like kangaroos jumping in the air, they looked
down and found human bones and ran to the truck.

24. Mentor Text Practice for Today:
• Use the two mentor text sentences in
your packet as your springboard to
revising your writing.

25. Like my students you read text and created a summary of the article.
Now you will go through the process my students experienced in peer editing.
• Open document
• Share with a peer
• Each person reads his/her text to the group
• Members add comments
One Positive
One Constructive
• Repeat with all members
Your Turn to Comment

26. Sharing Googledocs

27. Peer Editing in Googledocs

28. REVISION

29. Don’t forget to give your feedback!