JOURNALISM	
  370	
  

  OCTOBER	
  10,	
  2011	
  
 
                         NEWS	
  RELEASE	
  GRADES	
  	
  
                                	
  BY	
  THE	
  NUMBERS	
  
•    13	
  A	
  (93	
  and	
  above)	
           	
  
•    6	
  A-­‐	
  (90-­‐92)	
  
•    4	
  B+	
  (87-­‐89)	
  
•    4	
  B	
  (83-­‐86)	
  
•    1	
  B-­‐	
  (80-­‐82)	
  
•    1	
  C+	
  (77-­‐79)	
  
•    1	
  C	
  (73-­‐76)	
  
•    C-­‐	
  (70-­‐72)	
  
•    D+	
  (67-­‐69)	
  
•    D	
  (63-­‐66)	
  
•    D-­‐	
  (60-­‐62)	
  
•    F	
  	
  
Follow	
  DirecPons 	
  	
  
•  We	
  had	
  a	
  specific	
  slide	
  addressing	
  the	
  memo.	
  
•  No	
  memo…you’re	
  at	
  D+	
  before	
  I	
  ever	
  read	
  a	
  
   word	
  of	
  your	
  copy.	
  
•  The	
  book	
  says	
  double	
  space	
  releases.	
  
•  I	
  don’t.	
  	
  
HOW	
  CAN	
  WE	
  GO	
  FROM	
  	
  
               GOOD	
  TO	
  GREAT?	
  
•  Lead	
  Sentence	
  
   –  What	
  is	
  the	
  most	
  important	
  element	
  of	
  the	
  story?	
  
       •  The	
  Person	
  
       •  The	
  Event	
  
       •  The	
  Place	
  
   –  You	
  need	
  to	
  really	
  think	
  about	
  this	
  answer.	
  
   –  However	
  you	
  answer	
  the	
  quesPon,	
  I	
  would	
  make	
  
      that	
  the	
  subject	
  of	
  your	
  lead	
  sentence.	
  
HOW	
  CAN	
  WE	
  GO	
  FROM	
  
                 GOOD	
  TO	
  GREAT	
  
•  Many	
  of	
  you	
  focused	
  on	
  the	
  event.	
  
•  Few	
  of	
  you	
  focused	
  on	
  the	
  benefit	
  of	
  said	
  
   event.	
  
•  Which	
  is	
  more	
  important?	
  
    –  If	
  the	
  event	
  is	
  different,	
  pickle	
  eaPng	
  contest,	
  who	
  
       really	
  cares?	
  
    –  If	
  it’s	
  helping	
  keep	
  kidens	
  alive,	
  tweak	
  your	
  lead.	
  
    –  Think	
  beyond	
  your	
  organizaPon	
  when	
  wriPng	
  the	
  
       lead	
  sentence.	
  
HOW	
  CAN	
  WE	
  GO	
  FROM	
  	
  
                 GOOD	
  TO	
  GREAT?	
  
	
  
•  A	
  local	
  gas	
  staPon	
  has	
  a	
  new	
  way	
  to	
  help	
  people	
  
     dealing	
  with	
  rising	
  gas	
  prices.	
  
•  Rising	
  gas	
  prices	
  have	
  a	
  local	
  gas	
  staPon	
  coming	
  
     up	
  with	
  creaPve	
  ideas	
  to	
  help	
  people	
  at	
  the	
  
     pump.	
  
•  People	
  sick	
  of	
  high	
  gas	
  prices	
  have	
  a	
  new	
  way	
  to	
  
     save	
  a	
  few	
  bucks.	
  
•  Saving	
  money	
  at	
  the	
  gas	
  staPon?	
  Really.	
  	
  	
  
HOW	
  CAN	
  WE	
  GO	
  FROM	
  	
  
                    GOOD	
  TO	
  GREAT?	
  
•  Watch	
  your	
  release	
  gefng	
  too	
  commercial.	
  
       –  Reporters	
  like	
  to	
  talk	
  about	
  pricing,	
  not	
  prices.	
  
       –  Reporters	
  think	
  about	
  industry	
  first,	
  business	
  
          second.	
  
	
  
       	
  
FACT	
  SHEET	
  THOUGHTS	
  
•  Organize	
  you	
  points	
  into	
  two	
  or	
  three	
  main	
  
   themes.	
  
    –  The	
  person	
  
    –  The	
  place	
  
    –  The	
  event	
  
•  Take	
  all	
  of	
  those	
  great	
  points	
  you	
  have	
  and	
  
   put	
  them	
  into	
  those	
  secPons.	
  
•  It	
  gives	
  the	
  document	
  a	
  beder	
  look	
  and	
  
   organizaPonal	
  feel.	
  	
  
WRITING	
  IDEAS	
  
•  Watch	
  forcing	
  the	
  present	
  tense,	
  especially	
  in	
  
   the	
  lead.	
  
       –  This	
  can	
  create	
  passive	
  voice.	
  
       –  It’s	
  also	
  not	
  accurate.	
  
       –  A	
  group	
  is	
  hosPng	
  an	
  event.	
  
       –  A	
  group	
  will	
  host	
  an	
  event	
  
	
  
WRITING	
  IDEAS	
  
•  I	
  like	
  the	
  use	
  of	
  links.	
  Add	
  the	
  hyperlinks.	
  
    –  www.twider.com/danfarkas	
  
    –  hdp://scrippsjschool.org/	
  
    	
  
•  Vary	
  sentence	
  length.	
  	
  
    –  Short	
  sentences	
  can	
  pack	
  a	
  punch.	
  
    –  Count	
  how	
  many	
  words	
  in	
  each	
  sentence.	
  
    –  Avoid	
  cadence.	
  
WAYS	
  TO	
  GO	
  FROM	
  GOOD	
  TO	
  GREAT	
  
•  Commitment	
  Statement	
  
    –  One	
  sentence	
  that	
  explains	
  everything	
  happening	
  
       in	
  a	
  story.	
  
    –  It	
  could	
  involve	
  emoPon.	
  
•  A	
  fundraiser	
  isn’t	
  a	
  good	
  commitment	
  
   statement.	
  
•  A	
  Southeast	
  Ohio	
  group	
  is	
  pulling	
  an	
  all	
  
   nighter	
  on	
  school	
  night	
  to	
  help	
  kids	
  learn	
  how	
  
   to	
  read.	
  This	
  can	
  have	
  some	
  emoPon.	
  	
  
Reading	
  Memo	
  
•  Memo	
  format.	
  Use	
  one.	
  
    –  One	
  page	
  max.	
  
    –  To,	
  from,	
  subject	
  and	
  date	
  
•  Every	
  memo	
  has	
  a	
  beginning,	
  middle	
  and	
  end.	
  
   Many	
  of	
  you	
  didn’t	
  have	
  space	
  for	
  an	
  end.	
  
   Create	
  that	
  space,	
  and	
  explain	
  what’s	
  next.	
  
•  Every	
  memo	
  should	
  outline	
  the	
  «	
  what	
  »	
  and	
  
   the	
  «	
  how	
  »	
  this	
  impacts	
  me.	
  	
  
PASSIVE	
  VOICE	
  
•  THINK	
  SVO	
  
•  Avoid	
  “By”	
  
•  Avoid	
  “To	
  Be.”	
  
What	
  is	
  due	
  Wednesday	
  at	
  5 	
  	
  
•  A	
  feature/bio.	
  
•  An	
  op-­‐ed.	
  
•  Your	
  Third	
  reading	
  memo.	
  
How	
  am	
  I	
  grading	
  the	
  feature?	
  
•    WriPng	
  
•    Is	
  it	
  news?	
  
•    How	
  is	
  it	
  news?	
  
•    I	
  need	
  to	
  see	
  you	
  did	
  some	
  digging	
  to	
  find	
  
     interesPng	
  content.	
  
How	
  am	
  I	
  grading	
  the	
  op-­‐ed?	
  
•  Did	
  you	
  follow	
  the	
  format	
  we	
  talked	
  about	
  in	
  
   class?	
  
•  Did	
  you	
  make	
  a	
  convincing	
  argument?	
  
•  How	
  well	
  did	
  you	
  write	
  it?	
  
Wednesday	
  
•    Class	
  is	
  open.	
  
•    You	
  don’t	
  have	
  to	
  be	
  there.	
  
•    I	
  am	
  around	
  via	
  Skype	
  dan.farkas1.	
  
•    Your	
  Feature,	
  reading	
  memo	
  and	
  op-­‐ed	
  are	
  
     due	
  in	
  ONE	
  word	
  file	
  by	
  5:00	
  
•  www.slideshare.net/danfarkas1975	
  for	
  slides.	
  
	
  

370 October 10 Review

  • 1.
    JOURNALISM  370   OCTOBER  10,  2011  
  • 2.
      NEWS  RELEASE  GRADES      BY  THE  NUMBERS   •  13  A  (93  and  above)     •  6  A-­‐  (90-­‐92)   •  4  B+  (87-­‐89)   •  4  B  (83-­‐86)   •  1  B-­‐  (80-­‐82)   •  1  C+  (77-­‐79)   •  1  C  (73-­‐76)   •  C-­‐  (70-­‐72)   •  D+  (67-­‐69)   •  D  (63-­‐66)   •  D-­‐  (60-­‐62)   •  F    
  • 3.
    Follow  DirecPons     •  We  had  a  specific  slide  addressing  the  memo.   •  No  memo…you’re  at  D+  before  I  ever  read  a   word  of  your  copy.   •  The  book  says  double  space  releases.   •  I  don’t.    
  • 4.
    HOW  CAN  WE  GO  FROM     GOOD  TO  GREAT?   •  Lead  Sentence   –  What  is  the  most  important  element  of  the  story?   •  The  Person   •  The  Event   •  The  Place   –  You  need  to  really  think  about  this  answer.   –  However  you  answer  the  quesPon,  I  would  make   that  the  subject  of  your  lead  sentence.  
  • 5.
    HOW  CAN  WE  GO  FROM   GOOD  TO  GREAT   •  Many  of  you  focused  on  the  event.   •  Few  of  you  focused  on  the  benefit  of  said   event.   •  Which  is  more  important?   –  If  the  event  is  different,  pickle  eaPng  contest,  who   really  cares?   –  If  it’s  helping  keep  kidens  alive,  tweak  your  lead.   –  Think  beyond  your  organizaPon  when  wriPng  the   lead  sentence.  
  • 6.
    HOW  CAN  WE  GO  FROM     GOOD  TO  GREAT?     •  A  local  gas  staPon  has  a  new  way  to  help  people   dealing  with  rising  gas  prices.   •  Rising  gas  prices  have  a  local  gas  staPon  coming   up  with  creaPve  ideas  to  help  people  at  the   pump.   •  People  sick  of  high  gas  prices  have  a  new  way  to   save  a  few  bucks.   •  Saving  money  at  the  gas  staPon?  Really.      
  • 7.
    HOW  CAN  WE  GO  FROM     GOOD  TO  GREAT?   •  Watch  your  release  gefng  too  commercial.   –  Reporters  like  to  talk  about  pricing,  not  prices.   –  Reporters  think  about  industry  first,  business   second.      
  • 8.
    FACT  SHEET  THOUGHTS   •  Organize  you  points  into  two  or  three  main   themes.   –  The  person   –  The  place   –  The  event   •  Take  all  of  those  great  points  you  have  and   put  them  into  those  secPons.   •  It  gives  the  document  a  beder  look  and   organizaPonal  feel.    
  • 9.
    WRITING  IDEAS   • Watch  forcing  the  present  tense,  especially  in   the  lead.   –  This  can  create  passive  voice.   –  It’s  also  not  accurate.   –  A  group  is  hosPng  an  event.   –  A  group  will  host  an  event    
  • 10.
    WRITING  IDEAS   • I  like  the  use  of  links.  Add  the  hyperlinks.   –  www.twider.com/danfarkas   –  hdp://scrippsjschool.org/     •  Vary  sentence  length.     –  Short  sentences  can  pack  a  punch.   –  Count  how  many  words  in  each  sentence.   –  Avoid  cadence.  
  • 11.
    WAYS  TO  GO  FROM  GOOD  TO  GREAT   •  Commitment  Statement   –  One  sentence  that  explains  everything  happening   in  a  story.   –  It  could  involve  emoPon.   •  A  fundraiser  isn’t  a  good  commitment   statement.   •  A  Southeast  Ohio  group  is  pulling  an  all   nighter  on  school  night  to  help  kids  learn  how   to  read.  This  can  have  some  emoPon.    
  • 12.
    Reading  Memo   • Memo  format.  Use  one.   –  One  page  max.   –  To,  from,  subject  and  date   •  Every  memo  has  a  beginning,  middle  and  end.   Many  of  you  didn’t  have  space  for  an  end.   Create  that  space,  and  explain  what’s  next.   •  Every  memo  should  outline  the  «  what  »  and   the  «  how  »  this  impacts  me.    
  • 13.
    PASSIVE  VOICE   • THINK  SVO   •  Avoid  “By”   •  Avoid  “To  Be.”  
  • 14.
    What  is  due  Wednesday  at  5     •  A  feature/bio.   •  An  op-­‐ed.   •  Your  Third  reading  memo.  
  • 15.
    How  am  I  grading  the  feature?   •  WriPng   •  Is  it  news?   •  How  is  it  news?   •  I  need  to  see  you  did  some  digging  to  find   interesPng  content.  
  • 16.
    How  am  I  grading  the  op-­‐ed?   •  Did  you  follow  the  format  we  talked  about  in   class?   •  Did  you  make  a  convincing  argument?   •  How  well  did  you  write  it?  
  • 17.
    Wednesday   •  Class  is  open.   •  You  don’t  have  to  be  there.   •  I  am  around  via  Skype  dan.farkas1.   •  Your  Feature,  reading  memo  and  op-­‐ed  are   due  in  ONE  word  file  by  5:00   •  www.slideshare.net/danfarkas1975  for  slides.