Development pro forma(3) (1) [autosaved]

Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
name

Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked how I was able to simply make an image
using only shapes and colours and how I could
easily create details within the image in order to
make it look more professional.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I were to do this task again with the same image I
would spend more time on doing the mouth of the
panda as a I think that this could have been done
better and decreases the look o the whole image.

Evaluation
I like how I was able to use the original image as a template,
this made it easier to get the detail with the shading on the
skin and the creases in the clothes, which I think added a lot
of character to my image and made it look very professional.
If I were to repeat this part of the project I would spend more
time on improving the background, I would add shading to
certain areas and detail within certain parts to differentiate
objects from one another as with my current image the
background is blocks of colour with hardly any detail.

Evaluation
In the first image I liked how I was able to use the gradient
overlay and outer glow settings on Photoshop in order to
recreate text that is similar to the text used in the films title.
In the second image I liked how I was able to use images
relative to the quote in order to greater explain it.
If I were to do it again I would add more to my first image, I
would probably add the back of the delorean at the end of the
fire lines as I feel that this would make the image easier to
understand in case some people aren't as familiar with the
film.

Evaluation
I liked how I was able to use Photoshop settings in
order to turn boring normal text into something a
little more extravagant, my favourite part was
creating a clipping mask over a piece of text
enabling me to place an image within the text.
If I were to do this again I would spend more time
on warping the green luminous text as I feel that
more exciting things could be done with it.

Evaluation
I liked how I was able to incorporate multiple colours into my
image, by creating multiple layers all with different dominant
colours, this enable me to easily add all different colours to
large areas making the photo really pop out the screen and
give some character to this standard portrait image.
If I were to produce this image again I would make the
subjects look more cartoon and less realistic, as I feel this
would be more setting with the comic book theme I am trying
to achieve.

Evaluation
I liked how I used a series of images to easily create a story that is easy
to follow without the need of text, I also liked how I used facial
expressions to help portray the thoughts and emotions of the
character within the story.
If I were to do this part of the project again I would remove slide 5
and replace it with slide 6, I would then add a new slide six which
would show the character half way through the door and looking at
the ground, as I feel this would better explain the last two slides
which is meant to portray him opening the door and discovering
another key, causing him to sigh.

Evaluation
I liked how I was able to use simple pencils and colours to
draw a satisfactory piece off illustration especially seen as I
am not very skilled in drawing, and I feel like with drawing I
am given more freedom to create more imaginative
illustrations as it is so easy to do.
If I were to do it again I would add more detail to the
chipmunk with things such as shading in certain areas which
would help give the chipmunk a more realistic look.

Evaluation
I like how I used abstract textures in order create objects
and still have them look realistic due to the colour
overlays I added to them, my favourite part of the image
is the bird above the tree. As it also looks like a fish and as
the sky is made from water texture it fits with both.
I would add more objects as this would help to show the
skills I have in Photoshop and help to fill out the image
more and give it more character.

The two
brothers
The two
brothers
The two brothers
The two brothers
The two brothers

Proposal
Dimensions
Number of pages: 8-14 page size: 30x21 cm (A4)
Story Overview
Two brothers live on a farm and want to find work as their father is having trouble with the farm, one of the
brothers goes in to the city to find work and on his way is asked for help by three people, he helps them all and
goes on his way, he finds a big house which belongs to a rich & rude businessman, he asks if he can work for him
and gets given the job of the house cleaner, one day he finds bags of money and steals them and is chased by
the businessman on the way home he gets help from the people he helped and makes it home with the money,
the other brother then goes out and and does the same but does not help the people along the way he
becomes a cleaner at the businessman's house and steals his money, when he tries to get away he asks one of
the people he did not help for help, they hide him but tell the business man where he is, the businessman beats
the boy and takes back the money the boy returns home beaten and with nothing
Export Format
PDF
Advantages:
• can be opened on any device in the same form in which it was created
• Easy for viewing and takes up little space in hard drive
Disadvantages:
• Hard to edit after being created because PDF files must be edited in specialised
programmes

Deadline
9th June
Audience
As my book is a children's book with a slightly detailed storyline I will be aiming it at
3-6 year olds as I think at these ages the children will be able to easily understand
the book as it is effectively illustrated but it will not be to easy for them, which
could mean evidently ending in the children being bored of the book before
finishing it, the book I intend to make is an adaptation of an old English fairy-tale
which suites an audience of young middle class children as middle class family's are
known to like old fashioned fairy tales but as it is a product aimed toward children
the demographics of it do not really apply.
Production Methods
I will plan out my entire book on scrap paper as this will make it easier to fix any
mistakes or make any changes as I go through the production process, ones I have
planned out my book on scrap paper I will then copy it up on Photoshop and use
the shape and rotoscope methods to illustrate the book as through doing these
methods already on other projects I know that these are effective methods when it
comes to making detailed illustrations on Photoshop.

What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
Detailed explanation of the story easy to recognise
and simple to understand, you definitely know who
your audience is and what they like I did also like to
read old fairy English tales apart from the scary
ones when I was young and good understanding of
the format.
There are some missing parts to the second half
mainly the production method and the deadline but
that could be down to given information and time I
can relate to that.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
The idea that you have for this story is the fish out
of water situation which with this tale is a good idea
modernising it so the audience can easily relate to
it and the description of the character’s shows the
thought and care you have put into it and the text
looks really good.
The mind map is a bit confusing as the connections
aren’t properly marked and the information about
the city/town is a bit vague same thing can be said
about the other locations specifically the business
mans home.

Good clear storyline with detail such as characters
and events throughout the story. The story also has
a message of helping other people which is good
for the audience which you have chosen. Good
detail about the audience which you are aiming at.
Complete the production methods box to show how
you are going to create your books graphics. Also
just include the deadline.
further developed?
Great how you have modernised this story to one
that is more relevant to the current day. Good detail
on how the characters are going to look and all the
things that are going to happen, very well thought
through. I like the type of graphics that you have
chosen in your mood board.
The mind map is a bit confusing and it is hard to
see your thought process. Maybe colour code
some parts or add darker arrows to group together
your ideas.

You have chosen a good story of which will be
interesting for young children and maybe also teach
some kind of life lesson as to helping people (not
the stealing part). You also know your audience and
the age range they will come from which will help
you to write your book and choose the appropriate
vocabulary.
Completing your production methods will help you
and the people reading your proposal as it creates
a better vision for what your book is going to look
like.
further developed?
Your mind map is very detailed and focuses on the
most important elements to the story. I also like how
you have considered what the characters are going
to look like, the locations and also the text font.
I think if you added more characters e.g. the
helpers, your mind map and mood board would
give a clearer image as to what the story is about
and how you’re going to present these characters.

Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
My feedback was mostly good as it was repeated that I had modernised the story well
and my overview was well detailed although it was also repeated that I should add to my
production method as it was unfinished and that my mind map was confusing to follow.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I agree that my mind map was confusing as it is not colour coded and a lot of the arrows
cross over making it hard to follow, and that my production method was not satifactory
as at the time of the work analysis it was unfinished.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I disagree with the comment of adding more characters to my mind map and mood
board as I have added all off the characters who are imperative to the story and have
shown what I want them to look like with multiple images within the moodboard and
have also described them in the mind map.

Original Script
Once upon a time there were two sisters who were as like each other as two peas in a pod; but one was good,
and the other was bad-tempered. Now their father had no work, so the girls began to think of going to service.
"I will go first and see what I can make of it," said the younger sister, ever so cheerfully, "then you, sis, can follow
if I have good luck."
So she packed up a bundle, said good-bye, and started to find a place; but no one in the town wanted a girl, and
she went farther afield into the country. And as she journeyed she came upon an oven in which a lot of loaves
were baking. Now as she passed, the loaves cried out with one voice:
"Little girl! Little girl! Take us out! Please take us out! We have been baking for seven years, and no one has come
to take us out. Do take us out or we shall soon be burnt!"
Then, being a kind, obliging little girl, she stopped, put down her bundle, took out the bread, and went on her
way saying:
"You will be more comfortable now."
After a time she came to a cow lowing beside an empty pail, and the cow said to her:
"Little girl! Little girl! Milk me! Please milk me! Seven years have I been waiting, but no one has come to milk
me!"
So the kind girl stopped, put down her bundle, milked the cow into the pail, and went on her way saying:
"Now you will be more comfortable."
By and by she came to an apple tree so laden with fruit that its branches were nigh to break, and the apple tree
called to her:
"Little girl! Little girl! Please shake my branches. The fruit is so heavy I can't stand straight!"
Then the kind girl stopped, put down her bundle, and shook the branches so that the apples fell off, and the tree
could stand straight. Then she went on her way saying:
"You will be more comfortable now."
So she journeyed on till she came to a house where an old witch-woman lived. Now this witch-woman wanted a
servant-maid, and promised good wages. Therefore the girl agreed to stop with her and try how she liked service.
She had to sweep the floor, keep the house clean and tidy, the fire bright and cheery. But there was one thing the
witch-woman said she must never do; and that was look up the chimney!

Original Script
"If you do," said the witch-woman, "something will fall down on you, and you will come to a bad end." Well! the
girl swept, and dusted, and made up the fire; but ne'er a penny of wages did she see. Now the girl wanted to go
home as she did not like witch-service; for the witch used to have boiled babies for supper, and bury the bones
under some stones in the garden. But she did not like to go home penniless; so she stayed on, sweeping, and
dusting, and doing her work, just as if she was pleased. Then one day, as she was sweeping up the hearth, down
tumbled some soot, and, without remembering she was forbidden to look up the chimney, she looked up to see
where the soot came from. And, lo and behold! a big bag of gold fell plump into her lap.
Now the witch happened to be out on one of her witch errands; so the girl thought it a fine opportunity to be off
home.
So she kilted up her petticoats and started to run home; but she had only gone a little way when she heard the
witch-woman coming after her on her broomstick. Now the apple tree she had helped to stand straight
happened to be quite close; so she ran to it and cried:
"Apple tree! Apple tree, hide me
So the old witch can't find me,
For if she does she'll pick my bones,
And bury me under the garden stones."
Then the apple tree said, "Of course I will. You helped me to stand straight, and one good turn deserves another."
So the apple tree hid her finely in its green branches; and when the witch flew past saying:
"Tree of mine! O Tree of mine!
Have you seen my naughty little maid
With a willy willy wag and a great big bag,
She's stolen my money—all I had?"
The apple tree answered:
"No, mother dear,
Not for seven year!"

Original Script
So the witch flew on the wrong way, and the girl got down, thanked the tree politely, and started again. But just
as she got to where the cow was standing beside the pail, she heard the witch coming again, so she ran to the
cow and cried:
"Cow! Cow, please hide me
So the witch can't find me;
If she does she'll pick my bones,
And bury me under the garden stones!"
"Certainly I will," answered the cow. "Didn't you milk me and make me comfortable? Hide yourself behind me
and you'll be quite safe."
And when the witch flew by and called to the cow:
"O Cow of mine! Cow of mine!
Who stole my money—all that I had?"
She just said politely:
"No, mother dear,
Not for seven year!"
Then the old witch went on in the wrong direction, and the girl started afresh on her way home; but just as she
got to where the oven stood, she heard that horrid old witch coming behind her again; so she ran as fast as she
could to the oven and cried:
"O Oven! Oven! hide me
So as the witch can't find me,
For if she does she'll pick my bones,
And bury them under the garden stones.”
hen the oven said, "I am afraid there is no room for you, as another batch of bread is baking; but there is the
baker—ask him."
So she asked the baker, and he said, "Of course I will. You saved my last batch from being burnt; so run into the
bakehouse, you will be quite safe there, and I will settle the witch for you."

Original Script
So she hid in the bakehouse, only just in time, for there was the old witch calling angrily:
"O Man of mine! Man of mine!
Who's stole my money—all I had?"
Then the baker replied, "Look in the oven. She may be there."
And the witch alighted from her broomstick and peered into the oven: but she could see no one.
"Creep in and look in the farthest corner," said the baker slyly, and the witch crept in, when——
Bang!——
he shut the door in her face, and there she was roasting. And when she came out with the bread she was all crisp and
brown, and had to go home as best she could and put cold cream all over her!
But the kind, obliging little girl got safe home with her bag of money.
Now the ill-tempered elder sister was very jealous of this good luck, and determined to get a bag of gold for herself. So
she in her turn packed up a bundle and started to seek service by the same road. But when she came to the oven, and
the loaves begged her to take them out because they had been baking seven years and were nigh to burning, she tossed
her head and said:
"A likely story indeed, that I should burn my fingers to save your crusts. No, thank you!"
And with that she went on till she came across the cow standing waiting to be milked beside the pail. But when
the cow said:
"Little girl! Little girl! Milk me! Please milk me, I've waited seven years to be milked——"
She only laughed and replied, "You may wait another seven years for all I care. I'm not your dairymaid!"
And with that she went on till she came to the apple tree, all overburdened by its fruit. But when it begged her to
shake its branches, she only giggled, and plucking one ripe apple, said:
"One is enough for me: you can keep the rest yourself." And with that she went on munching the apple, till she
came to the witch-woman's house.
Now the witch-woman, though she had got over being crisp and brown from the oven, was dreadfully angry with
all little maid-servants, and made up her mind this one should not trick her. So for a long time she never went out
of the house; thus the ill-tempered sister never had a chance of looking up the chimney, as she had meant to do
at once. And she had to dust, and clean, and brush, and sweep ever so hard, until she was quite tired out.

Original Script
But one day, when the witch-woman went into the garden to bury her bones, she seized the moment, looked up
the chimney, and, sure enough, a bag of gold fell plump into her lap!
Well! she was off with it in a moment, and ran and ran till she came to the apple tree, when she heard the witch-
woman behind her. So she cried as her sister had done:
"Apple tree! Apple tree, hide me
So the old witch can't find me,
For if she does she'll break my bones,
Or bury me under the garden stones."
But the apple tree said:
"No room here! I've too many apples."
So she had to run on; and when the witch-woman on her broomstick came flying by and called:
"O Tree of mine! Tree of mine!
Have you seen a naughty little maid
Who's stolen my money—all I had?"
The apple tree replied:
"Yes, mother dear,
She's gone down there."
Then the witch-woman went after her, caught her, gave her a thorough good beating, took the bag of money
away from her, and sent her home without a penny payment for all her dusting, and sweeping, and brushing, and
cleaning.

Story Breakdown
page 1
two brothers work and live on a farm but the crops aren't growing and the family needs money so one brother goes out to make some money
page 2
along the way he comes across an old lady that needs help with chores so he helps her and goes on his way
page 3
he then comes across a car that needs refilling so he refills it and goes on his way
page 4
he then come to a big house where a very rich and rude business man lives and asks for a job to which the man says “yes, you may clean my house but never go
in that room”
page 5
one day whilst the businessman is asleep he goes into the room to find bags of money which he steals, but is caught by the businessman so he runs away
page 6
he comes across the car whilst running away and asks for help, the car is grateful for the help that he had received the other day from the boy so he drives him
home and gets away from the businessman.
Page 7
the boy comes home with the money and is loved by his father for saving the family, the selfish brother is jealous so he goes out to get a job and make money
page 8
he comes across the car that has run out of petrol on its way back from dropping off the boys brother, the car asks for help but the selfish boy says no
page 9
he comes across an old lady who needs help with more chores to which he says no
page 10
he then come to a big house where the very rich and rude business man lives and asks for a job to which the man says yes “ you may clean my house but never
go in that room”
page 11
like his brother he goes in the room and steals the money, the businessman sees the boy run out the house with the money bags and catches him
page 12
on his way he comes across the old lady who he refused to help earlier and asks for help the old lady says no as he did not help earlier when she asked for it.
Page 13
he is found by the businessman who takes the money and sends the boy home beaten and with nothing

Draft Script
pg1
kind boy: “father I will go into the city to make money and save the family”
pg2
old woman: ”hey there, young boy can you please help me I have a lot chores to do and am only an old woman”
kind boy: “ yes of coarse I will help
pg3
car: “hey there, young boy I am out of petrol and am unable to refill myself, please may you use that petrol over there to
refill me so I am able to move”
kind boy: “yes of coarse I will help”
pg4
kind boy: “hello there sir, I am desperate for money and need to help my family please may I have a job, I would be very
grateful”
businessman: “yes, you may clean my house but whatever you do never go in that room”
pg5
kind boy: “oh no he’s awake”
businessman: “you boy stop there”
pg6
kind boy: “car! Oh car!, please help me a rude businessman is after me and if he catches me god knows what he will do”
car: “of coarse I will help, for you helped me to move and one good gesture deserves another, get in!”
pg7
kind boy: “father! Father! I have returned and with money to save the family”
father: “oh boy you have made me more happier than I have ever been”

Draft Script
pg8
car: “hey there young boy, I seem to of run out of petrol, please may you use the petrol in the boot to help me get home”
selfish boy: “I have better and more important things to do today, so no”
pg9
selfish boy: “ I will not get paid for it as I don’t work for you so what is the point”
pg10
selfish boy: “hello there sir, I am desperate for money and need to help my family please may I have a job, I would be
very grateful”
pg11
selfish boy steals money, business man comes back from work and sees the boy leaving with money.
pg12
selfish boy: “old lady! Old lady!, please hide me, a rude businessman is after me and if he catches me god knows what he
will do”
old lady: “why should I help you as when I asked for help earlier, you gave me none, you do not deserve my help”
pg13
selfish boy: “please don't hurt me, I really needed the money to make my father proud”
businessman: “you are a thief and a liar, go home!”

Final Script
pg1
there once was was two brothers one kind and one selfish who lived on a farm with their father, the farm
needed money as the crops weren't growing quick enough
father: “what am I going to do, all my cops are not growing”
kind boy: “father I will go into the city to make money and save the family”
so the kind brother went to the city to find work.
pg2
along the way he comes across an old lady who needs help with chores
old woman: ”hey there, young boy can you please help me I have a lot chores to do and im only an old woman”
kind boy: “ yes of coarse I will help
so the boy helps her and goes on his way.
pg3
he then comes across a car that needs petrol and asks him for help
car: “hey there, young boy I am out of petrol and am unable to refill myself, please may you use that petrol over
there to refill me so I am able to move”
kind boy: “yes of coarse I will help”
so the kind boy picks up the petrol tank, refills the car and goes on his way.
pg4
he then comes to a big house and knocks on the door, a very rich and rude businessman answers.
kind boy: “hello there sir, I am desperate for money and need to help my family please may I have a job, I would
be very grateful”
so the kind boy goes in the house and starts his job.

Final Script
pg5
one day whilst the businessman is asleep the kind boy goes into the forbidden room and finds bags and bags of money,
but the business man wakes up
businessman: hey boy!, get out of there!”
kind boy: “oh no he’s awake”
so the boy grabs what he can and runs away, chased by the businessman.
pg6
“he comes across the car he had helped the other day and asks for his help”
kind boy: “car! Oh car!, please help me a rude businessman is after me and if he catches me god knows what he will do”
car: “of coarse I will help, for you helped me to move and one good gesture deserves another, get in!”
so the boy gets in the car and is driven home, having escaped the businessman.
Pg7
the kind boy returns home with the money.
kind boy: “father! Father! I have returned and with money to save the family”
father: “oh boy you have made me more happier than I have ever been”
the kind boys selfish brother is jealous so he goes out to get money for the family in order to get his fathers
attention.
Pg8
along the way he comes across the car that had helped his brother and it has run out of petrol.
car: “hey there young boy, I seem to of run out of petrol, please may you use the petrol in the boot to help me
get home”
selfish boy: “I have better and more important things to do today, so no”
and the boy goes on his way
pg 9
back at the farm the father asks the kind boy how he got the money
kind boy: “I stole it from a very rich and very rude businessman”
father: “stealing I never the right thing, I'm very disappointed in you son”
the father sends the kind boy to his room

Final Script
pg. 10
he then comes across an old lady who needs help with chores
selfish boy: “ I will not get paid for it as I don’t work for you so what is the point”
and the boy goes on his way
pg11
he then came to the big house that was owned by the rude and rich businessman and like his brother he went up to the
door and knocked and again the businessman answered.
selfish boy: “hello there sir, I am desperate for money and need to help my family please may I have a job, I would be
very grateful”
so the selfish boy goes in the house and starts his job
pg12
one day whilst the businessman is at work the boy goes into the room to find bags of money, like his brother he steals the
money and runs, but is seen by the businessman on his way back from work.
but the boy keeps running and the businessman chases him
pg13
whilst running away he comes across the old lady who he had refused to help the other day
selfish boy: “old lady! Old lady!, please hide me, a rude businessman is after me and if he catches me god
knows what he will do”
old lady: “why should I help you as when I asked for help earlier, you gave me none, you do not deserve my
help”
pg14
with nowhere to hide the boy is caught by the businessman
selfish boy: “please don't hurt me, I really need the money to make my father proud”
businessman: “you are a thief and a liar, go home!”
the businessman hits the boy with a stick and takes back his money, the selfish boy walks home beaten and
with nothing

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