1. [Name / all in group] CHEW UNG HENG
[Id] 0315397
[Module] ESSAY WRITING
[Session] APRIL, 2013

2. Introduction
Importance of leisure time for young people
Paragraph 1
High expectation of parent
-aimed high
-comparison about their result
Social relationship
-Build entertainment place
Paragraph 2
Heavier and tougher education system
-young people study 8 hours per day
-have extracurricular activities such as dancing school or sports
Reduce the number of hours
-community services
Paragraph 3
ineffectiveness of educational facilities
-repeat teaching in different department
Conclusion
grateful
-does not have such education system

3. In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of
pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes and
effects of this condition? Plan your response, and then write a cause and
effect essay.
Nowadays,young people spend a proportion amount of theirtime in the
education system which is already become the important part in their life.
“Education is very important for our future?” Basically, education provides the
essential and useful skills for young people to work knowledgeably in their
future work. Unfortunately, young people have little amount of leisure them
and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies in some countries.
Leisure time is atotally important part of student life.The main reason for this
is to relax your mind so the brain can build up, consolidate and put in order
material received during the educational day. So, there are some causes and
effect of this condition such as parent’s expectation leads their child to aimed
high, education system become more heavier cause them to have a lot of
assignments and ineffectiveness of educational facilities that wasting their
times.
Initially, young people work hard on their studies because of the high
expectation from their parents. They usually advise by their parent to study
hard to get the better education which may help them to get employed in their
future.Then, young people could enforce themselves to study just to have the
good result which may make their parent happy. By the way, if they didn’t get
the results that meet all the given goals after work so hard on it, they will feel
upset and stressful which may lead them to give up.On the other hands,
young people also prefer to make comparison with their result to others. From

4. my personal view point, young people should learn the new skills and
knowledge educated along their studies without make any comparison with
others. They should assume that the test is an assessment to measure their
knowledge and skills. Then, I suggest young people need to have social
relationships and of cause to enjoy their life. For instance, young people
should make some new friendsto release their stress by doing some activities
such as playing board or criminal games together. By the way, government
should also form or build certain entertainment places for young people to
gather and strengthen the relationship between them. So young people can
spend their leisure time to involve in social activities and learn about the new
skills which can give them a healthy life.
Secondly, some of the countries tend to change the education system
which is even tougher and heavier. Young people ought to spend almost 9
hours in their classes for different subjects every day. Sometimes, they have
another extracurricular activity and they haveto participate in martial
arts,orchestra or sports after finish their class. When they reach their home,
there are loads of assignments from different subjects given by the lecturers.
Noticeably, young people do not left any leisure time except for doing those
assignments as they need to submit some of it at the next day. On the other
hands, they have to participate the extracurricular activities after their mental
hard work at class lead them to tired physically which may affect their health.
So, they don’t have more time for their hobbies, communicating with
friends,parties,gym and so on. Young people may also feel boring in their life
by studying all the time without any entertainment for them to relax their minds.
I would like to recommend that government can reduce the number of hours

5. in school to 6 hours per day. Government may also include some activities
such as community service for them to experience more things that lead them
to live healthier in daily life.
Thirdly, another cause is the ineffectiveness of educational facilities
such as type of education and sometimes ineffective distribution of time by
students themselves. For instance, young people who are in engineering
course waste their times for doing research on the history. So, It not only
wasting their times and it is the previous things that they already done before.
Besides, the topics are repeat teaching in different departments but not look
for the other features of this subject. Then, the student becomes more
stressful as their have to do more assignment and they didn’t have enough
time to finish it. So, I recommend that the educational facilities could be
improved to drop the extra subjectsso that they won’t be wasting their time on
the unnecessary subjects.
To sum up, there are few of causes and effect of the young people who
have little leisure time and under a lot of pressure to work hard their studies in
some countries. So, I feel grateful that my country does not have this type of
education system and I always have my own leisure time to do my hobby.

6. References
http://orbisunumlana.wordpress.com/2012/10/27/in-some-countries-young-people-have-little-leisure-time-and-are-
under-a-lot-of-pressure-to-work-hard-in-their-studies/
http://ielts.studyhorror.com/writings/IELTS-Writing-Task-2-Study-Pressure-For-Young-People/12