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1. Evaluation
Andreas Mina

2. Production Process Evaluation

3. ResearchStrengths:
The one thing which worked with the research would be the primary research. Setting up the survey was
easy, as I just needed to ask relevant questions that I'm wanting to find out about my audience. I would say
“and why” at the end of written questions so that I could find more information on the answers to why the
decision was made. The open question gave me a better understanding to why the audience feel the way
they do so I can see the effect that the answer gives them. This then helped me to think of ways to create
that effect they have suggested to impress the audience again. It also helped me understand why the
audience said what they said, so I can realize what specific items my target audience are looking for. Another
strength with the research would be the results that I got out from researching into the film. This section of
the research helped me with thinking about the intentions of presenting the story to the film. This includes
how to apply the colour filter and the camera shots to stick with the theme and the mood of the film, as the
films I looked at happened to have intention and meaning when filming the scenes of the film. Lastly, the
secondary research. In the secondary research, I looked into the the audience and ratings of a few films. This
helped me understand who the films are aiming their audience to, which helped me try to figure out who
my audience is rated to. The way it helped me is because I researched into why the audience stands the way
it does, which gives me an understanding to why the certain film audience flows the way it does.

4. ResearchWeakness:
The first weakness from the film would be involving the film research. I only looked into one poster, which
was the home alone minimalist one. I wish I looked at two more of different styles of poster so that I can
have more inspiration into making a poster. If I had done more research into the posters, I would have had a
better idea in making a normal style poster, rather than playing it safe and going for minimalist. I would have
understood the intentions and techniques within the standard posters to make one. Another weakness
would be trying to collect the survey research together. I struggled to link the answers together, as it was a
long process of me having to look at the answer activity of the surveys, to which I linked up how they
responded to show me if they were the target audience I was looking for. Even though I got an answer, it was
really time consuming to find out. I should have done less questions on the survey which still gave an open
question. This would have aloud me to save a bit more time on linking the questions together. Lastly the
interviews. I don’t really believe that It helped me as much as the survey did. It only represented two
individual people who didn’t really give a strong feed back, as one wouldn’t say what they didn’t like and the
other would say stuff which defeats the object of the film. If I could have improved it, I should have linked
the interview questions to my survey, so that they were somewhat similar. I should have also explained what
I want answered in the question too. This would have aloud me to link the interviews to the surveys better,
as I’d have a response that I can link to the other survey answers to have a better answer for my target
audience, and to make the interview more useful to the project.

5. Planning
Strengths:
The first strength goes for the floor plan. With the floor plan, it showed me where to place the equipment
and crew when coming to filming. It really helped me when directing the film, as it told me exactly where to
place everything which prevented me from becoming lost when filming the current next scenes. Another
strength goes to the shot list. The shot list is something I had edited afterwards to show the additional
scenes I added onto the film last minute. The shot list helped me with knowing the types of shots I was
making, and the order that they are in. it prevented me from filming the wrong type of shot and helped me
with knowing what happens in the shot that I'm filming, as it has directions on the side to tell me what to do
in the shot. Lastly, the style sheet. This showed the colours that I used in my film. The style sheet helped me
understand the colour schemes that the films get for the dark setting, which showed me what colours I need
in order to get my colour scheme right. Even though I still used the RGB curves, it still helped me get an idea
of what I want the tense scenes to look like.

6. Planning
Weakness:
The first weakness goes to the poster plan. I don’t believe I've done enough planning for it, as I haven't really
mentioned the colour scheme properly, or many intentions in it. To improve the poster plan, I should have
made a pallet of the colours I want to use for it. This would have pre prepared me for making the poster, as it
would have showed me the colours to use, rather than picking and choosing colours when actually making it.
Also, the storyboard. This was something that I had to completely re-make online, as the first copy was too
roughly sketched. The storyboard took way too long to make (about roughly two hours), as it required me
having to make it on the storyboard website, and refreshing it to get a clean pallet. This was time consuming.
I should have gotten a storyboard template and neatly drawn on that. This would have saved me time from
creating it online, and would have aloud me to draw it neat as there are frames I can keep the image within.
Lastly the sound slide. To be honest, this gave me barely much help, as I didn’t properly state all the sounds
I'm collecting. What I should have done is make a list of all the sounds and music that I recorded and created,
so that I was reminded of what to make, as I tended to forget to get some sounds for my production.

7. Time Management
In terms of time, I went across a few bumps but I did manage to deliver the work towards the end. With the
slides, I don’t believe I managed my time properly, as I never really competed incomplete work at home
when I really should have. This made my slides become piles of incomplete work which I needed to finish. I
did eventually manage to finish the slides just before handing them in. With the reflection, I got behind with
that too, as I didn’t really do as much work at home, but I did eventually get myself back on track towards
the end of the reflection. I could have used additional time with the pre production slide. I could have added
more planning with the poster and a list of the sounds I collect. This would have given me better preparation
for creating the poster, and I would have been more organized with collecting sounds. I could have also done
with research additional time. I could have looked into more posters to inspire me better when creating my
own. With the filming, I had re shot the whole film again which delayed me a week of production time. This
did give me chance to re plan the new version of the film, but gave me less time to edit the film. I managed
to edit the film on time and before handing the work in, but I could have used additional time to sort out the
poster. With additional time, I could have thought of ways to add on extra details about the film onto the
poster, which would have applied better detail on who made the film and who stars in it.
If I were given additional time, I would have created my intro using after effects. My current intro is too slow.
If I had more time, I would have planned out what my intro is to look like, and created it using after effects
which would have made it look less slow and better presented. I would also use additional time to sort out
the texting icons. I would have linked the text icons to my phone using after effects, so that the texts look
like they are coming from the phone.

8. Aesthetic Qualities shots
For the conversation scene, the shot is is cleverly shown, as its showing where the
characters are placed clearly in the scene. The shot places each character on the side that
they are next to on the shot where they are both seen. This makes it look like the two
characters are facing each other when talking. Id only improve on the length of the
scene, I could have ended with a long shot of the two at the end to show the character
have a better exit at the end. For the strength, it would be the communication. The shot
gives a spotlight to the two characters when they talk, which makes it clear who is
talking. The weakness is involved with the beginning transition with the scene the
character doesn’t come from anywhere, as the scene before isn't in the same area. This
may have caused a bit of confusion to the audience.
For the dolly zoom, the shot over exaggerates the characters facial expressions. The shots visual makes
it seem like everything is moving behind the character. This is something I like about the shot, as it
makes it look like the character is focusing on what he has just seen, as everything next to him swoops
behind him. If I were to improve it, id probably keep the camera a bit more strait in the sequence, so
that the shot has a better and smoother look into the characters face. I would do this by using a
shoulder mount, so that the camera operator can walk towards the character, without effecting the
shots focus. The shoulder mount is supported from the shoulder, so it will be more steady and have
extra support seen as the camera operator wont just be holding the camera gear. The strengths with
this scene would be the dramatic feel it shows. It shows the shock in the character, and shows how he
is only focusing on the one thing that he has just seen. The weakness would be the zoom in. it starts as
a medium shot to a short shot, which doesn’t give a full effect of the background whooshing behind
him. It makes it a bit blurry at beginning, which doesn’t show a clear transformation of the characters
face.
For the insert shot, the shot makes a clear presentation with the actions that the character is
doing. The shot is well thought out, as it its tense, seen as you can only see these dangerous items
that the character wants to attack someone with. The character pretty much touches every single
one, making you think he is going to go for the weapon he touches. If id improve anything, id put
the camera closer to the bench, so that the only thing in shot would be the weapons. There are
too many distracting objects around the scene, for example the bike. The strengths of this scene
would be the tense feel it gives. The shot only shows the character picking up items; you cant see
his face meaning that you cant tell if he is certain about using the item he picks up. The weakness
would be the length of the shot. The shot is too long, and could have done with only a few items to
be picked up, as the scene eventually gets boring after a while and you want to go back to the
normal shots.

9. Aesthetic Qualities colours
• Does your work look good? Was it creative? What aspects of your films visuals do you like? What would you improve? How would you improve it?
• Discuss the strengths and weaknesses
• Put your final piece(s) in the centre of a page and analyse them
• Use text boxes and arrows…......
The colour intended for the inside scene is suppose to be a dark looking colour to make the room look
isolated and dark. The effect does look good, seen as it makes the environment look dark which makes
it look like more of a dangerous place for the character to be in. I wouldn’t say it was very creative, as
it only required me to change the colour percentage, but it was a clever idea to change the colours to
present this illusion that he is in the dark, as it was more of a simple process. The visual I like is the
blocked lighting In the video. The brightness can clearly be seen from the window, but it doesn’t seem
to effect the inside shot. This effect prevents the bright light that destroys the tense environment
from appearing. The only thing id improve with the scene would be to make it a bit more dark. Id like
it to be shadowy so that no sunlight is reveled at all. to do it, I would play around with the rgb curves
to make sure the darkness isn’t highlighted. The strengths from this would be the outcome. It presents
a dark-ish atmosphere that presents a negative vibe. The weakness was getting I right. It was hard to
balance the colors to make the scheme look the same for every scene.
For the surprise scene, I toned down the RGB curves to revile this party. It removes the tension and
brings the situation back to normal. It looks good, as the bright colours add the positive feel to the
film, to allow the situation to be a comedy. It was a creative decision to make, as it breaks the tension
without any communication from the characters to tell the audience. I like how the colour of the
balloons stand out most to this scene to add to the colour scheme. If anything, id add in more balloons
around the frame, to show off more colour and to make it even more clear that it’s a party. The
strengths of this scene would be the outcome that it has. It clearly shows broken tension, as the film
changes from the dark setting to the bright and colorful comedy. The weakness from this shot would
be the fact that it doesn’t look filtered. It looks like no editing has gone into this scene, as there is
nothing about the shot that looks very cinematic.
For the outside sequence, I darkened the colours and added blue to filter over the rest of the colors
to make them look bland. It did work, as it stopped bright colours from entering the shot to break the
bland tension. It was a creative choice, as it created this tense environment to the film by blocking out
any possible colour out of the shot to make it look dark and eerie. The aspect I like about the colour
scheme would be the dark effect it presents during the hot and nice looking weather the shots are
filmed in. The colour scheme makes the audience ignore the positive weather that may show a
brighter side to the film, as the colour blocks the bright skies colour, making it seem more dull. The
only thing id improve on would be the blue filter. I feel like the blue was too strong in the shots. I could
have toned it down a bit, so that it isn’t too reveling. The strength with the colour would be the
tension it added. It created a negative environment to the film and made the shots seem more creepy
seen as its dark. The weakness is that it didn’t completely block out bright colours. Some colours still
stand out a bit to the frame, which does remove a bit of tension.

10. Aesthetic Qualities comparison: The hit
Similarities
For mise en scene, the films both try to communicate
meaning through the costumes. My film is a character
wearing a polo and jeans to make him look smart for
college and to make him seem like an ordinary person,
which shows why he is un confident about whacking
someone. The hit shows one guy in a hood up and sun
glasses to make him look anonymous, one guy is in a black
jacket, to show how he is serious and tough, and another
guy is in a white and black polo. Two colours in one makes
him stand out as a target.
Another similarity goes for the set. They both have outside
scenes in them. The hit is set in a park bench, whilst mine
is set in a street. The outside makes the films seem more
realistic, as we can see natural objects and environment in
the shots. This stops the film from looking fake and stops it
from feeling like its in enclosed certain areas , like indoor
buildings which doesn’t completely prove a film from
looking realistic.
Differences
The first difference with the films would be the colour
schemes in the shot between the two. The hit is more
brighter and greener, which shows that it’s a light
heartened film, seen as it’s a comedy. My film uses darker
colours and a blue tint in the shot. The darkness makes
the film seem more serious and dark humored which
together makes the tension.
Another differences would be how the shock factor is
created. In my film, its done through a blackout and sound
effects, to later revile what that sound was. This gives a
shock to when the lights turn on to see what trouble the
character has caused with hitting a party member
unconscious. The hit does it by fast acting and slow
motion. The slow motion, shows the bullet fly and the
ringing effect it has on the character, whilst the fast
motion shows the skill from the hit man catching this guy.

11. Aesthetic Qualities comparison: SNL
Similarities
One similarity would be the colour of the two films. They
both use a blue tint in their films. SNL use it to create a
dull and hopeless atmosphere for Ryan Gosling, as only he
realizes how bland the avatar logo is. I use it to create a
tense atmosphere that doesn’t look positively exiting, and
looks quite tense to watch. They both use the colour scene
to create an atmosphere to the two Shorts.
Another similarity comes down to the costume. Both films
dress the characters a certain way. In SNL, Ryan is dressed
in a shirt and bomer jacket, to make him look like a normal
civilian, not a role model. He is made to look like a civilian,
to show how he is an independent whose voice isn’t
heard. My film makes the character dressed like a normal
civilian, in a polo and jeans to show how he is an ordinary
person that isn’t used to be put in the situations he is in.
Differences
The first difference goes for the story. They both have
different build ups to the end of the films. SNL shows the
trouble Ryan has gone through to prove that the font is over
rated, then flashes forward to the character confronting the
designer. Mine is done in present day, with the character
preparing to hit the enemy. Basically, SNL shows flashbacks of
the mess Ryan goes through, and mine shows the present
day of the character going in the house.
Another difference with the two would be the effects that
appear in the two films. In SNL, they show demonstrations of
stuff with papyrus in it. They make it fade across the screen,
to show what Ryan was talking about earlier. Mine shows text
icons stood in one position, showing what the two characters
are saying. SNL had more smoother and easier to read
transitions with the icons, as the next one suddenly appears
when the other disappears, making it more sudden to read.
Mine shows it all together with slide transitions. The issue is
that they are either delayed, or disappear too quick.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jVhlJNJopOQ = SNL papyrus

12. Technical Qualities 1: Jaws
Similarities
Differences
The first similarity with jaws would be the
audio of the film. The films like to use the
audio to build up the tension in the film.
Jaws uses two notes which gets played
faster and faster to increase the tension, as
it makes the disaster seem like it will
appear quicker. My film uses a sharp violin
sound to transition to the disaster situation.
Its an unsettling sound to hear and for that,
it perfectly represents a tense situation.
The second similarity would be the colour
scheme. The films seem to lack some
colours. Jaws shows bland colours in the
beginning part of the scene, making the film
seem more serious and tense. The same
goes for my film, as it blocks bright colours
from effecting the shot to prevent positive
light from effecting the serious scene.
The third similarity comes down to the shots.
Firstly, they both use a dolly zoom to exadurate the
characters feelings. But they also use pov like shots
in the film. In jaws, it is used to show what the
shark is looking at, to see what his target is. In my
film, it is to show how the character is getting
closer and closer to the door, to show how he is
getting closer and closer his fear. They both shake
a bit when moving towards the object. This effect
makes it look like the shot is coming from
someone, as shakings more of a human or animal
action to do.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rW23RsUTb2Y = Jaws
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PO4weirhl3w = surprise
The difference between the two films
would come from the Dolly shots. They
both produce the dolly zoom in different
ways. Mine is edited through premier pro;
which was of footage moving inwards,
whilst Jaws use a camera on wheels, whilst
moving in and zooming out. The Jaws dolly
zoom has more of a smooth zoom in
when going into the characters face, whilst
mine is more delayed when moving into
the characters face.
The difference between the two films would
also come from the colour intentions. My
film blocks all bright colour from entering the
shot to create this negative environment.
Jaws dos block colours, except from red. This
allows the colour red to be more noticeable
making it uncomforting to look at, as it’s the
only bright colour in the scene which isn't
used for an enlighten theme.
The third difference comes from the effects. In my
film, I added in some texting icons, to show
communication from the isolated character about
the situation. In jaws, there isn't any edited icons to
communicate a conversation, seen as the situation
had many witnesses to see what happened, and
texting wasn’t around during the 70s.

13. Technical Qualities 2: The shot
Similarities Differences
One of the differences involves the filming. The
two films do include camera movement, but
have different ways of producing. The film the
hit use a lot more camera moving in a short
shot, to move from one character to move to the
other. This adds an introduction to the new
characters and how close they are to the
existing. Mine only uses pan shots to show the
character leaving an area in the scene.
Another difference between the film would be
the colours added to the film. The hit seemed to
have made the colour scheme emesis the green
and turned up the brightness to make the scene
more brighter. To fit the all comedy theme My
film does the opposite by turning down the
brightness and adding a blue tint to the film to
make it more darker. This makes it more tense.
One similarity that the two films have
would be the bland look the films have.
They both seem to block out bright
colours from entering the shot. The
make a colour more dominant than the
other and have adjusted brightness in
order to block other colours from
shining in. this effect makes you focus
more on the plot.
Another similarity with the two films
would be the use of audio. The two
films use background audio to make
the scenes more tense. The hit use a
tense beat like soundtrack in the
background to build up to the action.
For my film its slow beats to make it
more tense; it yet again builds up to
the action.
Another similarity involving the sound would
be the diegetic sound. The films seem to over
emphasise the main sounds in the films. The
hit does it with the ringing, to show the
horrible sound the character is hearing. Mine
has the whack sound effect which is highly
noticeable seen as there is no footage. This
shows that the character has finally taken
action to someone.
Lastly, there is differences with the rule of thirds in
the films. Both include the technique in the film,
but indifferent ways. The hit did it so that the
camera did a side view of the characters to revile
that they were sat facing behind each other. Mine
does it so that it’s a diagonal facing shot, to make it
more clear what the characters position is like, and
to show that he is facing the other character.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JJkFYllhcf4= film

14. Technical Qualities 3 black hole
Similarities Differences
The similarities would be the colour
boldness added to the two films. They
both have this blue filter applied to the
two films to remove any bright colours and
to make the area look dull in both films.
Black hole makes it seem like a boring
office environment with no excitement,
and my film does it to increase the tension
in the film.
Another similarity would be the placing
the character. Seen as they are both main
characters and are alone in scenes
majority of the times, both films put the
characters centre frame of the shot a lot of
the time in the film. This makes them the
centre of attention and makes the
audience ignore the unnecessary
background that is wasted in the shot.
Lastly, the sound. The films both use non diegetic
sounds in the films. they don’t use music in the scene
to make the sound effect more noticeable and more
of a shock. My film does it in the last scene, where
there is no music and a whack is heard. This adds
more of a shock, as this vicious sound appears all of a
sudden. For Black hole, you hear an echo whenever
the man puts his hand inside of the black hole.
Without the music, the echo seems mysterious and
intriguing. This is because it’s the only non naturalistic
sound that appears in the film.
The first difference with the films would be the
sound. My film uses non diegetic sounds whilst the
black hole doesn’t. the music is used to build up
the tension to the disastrous scene at the end.
Black hole is very silent and consists of a lot of real
life sounds, for example the printer in the
background. They build up the interest in the film
through the sound of the black hole, as it gets
louder and louder when the character enters the
vault.
Another difference would be the camera
techniques. Black hole tend to use more simple
shots, for example long-short shots and one insert
for the door. My film uses more dolly zooms and
walkthroughs and POV like shots, as mine is more
about capturing the characters reaction and
feeling. Black hole is showing what the character is
doing with the black hole.
Lastly, another difference between the two films
would be the amount of medium shots and long
shots used. My film does consist of a lot of long
shots to show the character moving, and medium
shots to show his reaction. Blackhole seem to lack
using a much long shots, seen as the character only
moves to one room to the other, and so that the
piece of paper is in clear shot.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P5_Msrdg3Hk = Black Hole

15. Audience Appeal
In the survey, most people said that they focus on the plot of the
film, with the second popular answer being camera work. To stick
with the main appeal being the plot, I had to make the audience
more intense and focused when watching the film. I made the
colour bland, so that the audience wont get distracted when in the
serious part of the film. It makes the environment more tens, as it
stops positive brightness from distracting the tense scenes. This
makes the audience more focused to the actions that the character
does.
In the survey, most people said that they would rather have a lot of
dialogue in the film. I didn’t manage to include much dialogue seen
as the character is mainly by himself. In order to win over the target
audience, I scripted different communication. I made the character
have moments where he texts someone. This is so he has someone
to talk to when he is in disastrous situation. This shows dialogue
between the character and someone else, which shows why the
character makes the decisions he makes.
In the survey, I asked whether a comedic twist works with a film.
The majority said that it would work well together, whilst others
were skeptical that it would ruin the buildup to the plot. I managed
to make it un expected, by adding a blackout sequence, to make the
incident more surprising, as we begin to think that the character
has got the person, till we found out that its only a party guest. This
makes it into a funny situation, as there is no dialogue to stop the
over dramatic reactions. This makes a working twist, as there is
nothing cringe about the scene.

16. Audience Appeal
For the gender, I said that it would target the male gender. I appealed to this audience by including the violent actions in
the film, which males are seen to like more than women. Also, its an all male cast in the film. This shows that is a more
masculine film seen as the audience are watching men.
For the class, I aimed ABC1, to my target audience. There wasn’t
much that was referenced in terms of welfare, but some stuff is
referenced which you can tell that the character is more upper class.
For example his house and estate. The area is a standard suburban
area, in which the higher class would live in. the higher class
audience would relate to more.
For the age, I made the audience age between
16-19. I said that its because they will
appreciate the violence shown in the film. The
bit which would specifically target to this age
range would be the characters lifestyle of
going to college, and they can completely
handle the tension between the violence and
the walkthrough, seen as there is no blood or
gore.
I classed my audience as the emulator. this is someone who responds to messages about
achieving something. The character tries to be a hero, by being brave and tries to sort out the
issue he is facing. The character takes his friends advice about being brave and from this, he
thinks he is successful by being the hero.

17. Peer
Feedback

18. Feedback 1
• What did you like about the product?
• Love the story idea! Its so clever and really well told in the film. Its clear what is happening when and flows well to make a
complete story.
• I like the title. Its really well animated and fits with the theme of the film well. And has a cool sound effect of a balloon
popping which is clever.
• The texting is clever and really well done. And sound effects for the texts are accurate making it seem more realistic.
• Its really well filmed. The camera angles and shots are clear and portray each scene well giving a good visual effect overall.
• I like the music of the film. Especially when he is in the house with a possible intruder it makes it tense
• When you are talking to will the camera angles are good, it is clear you are talking opposite each other are gives a nice flow
to the convocation.
• I like the walking after you leave college when it fades to you walking and texting. It is a good saver of time and keeps it
visually interesting while showing the movement of the character and the story. I think it would have been better if it were
also like this in the first half when he is walking to college too.
• I love the ending. Its so well filmed and funny. Its great.
• What improvements could have been made to the product?
• Some parts of the story are a little odd for example why would you open the garage when you were so far away and them go
through the front door anyway. It doesn’t really make sense.
• When you are first texting your friends as you leave the house I think you should add some pictures next to each text so you
can tell its different people in a group chat.
• The walking scenes are a little long and slow the story down. I can see you tried to speed them up but I think you should
either cut them down of have more shots of different perspectives of him walking to make it more visually interesting. I
think it would have been better if it was like the second half when he is walking home walking and texting. You could have
texted a convocation with will talking about meeting up in break. This would give context to you meeting up and show you
spent a full day at college instead of just going in to see will then leaving again.
• When you are talking to will the dialogue is hard to make out at the start when will says hi and wishes you a happy birthday.
• You spelt enough wrong in the texts. But I guess that makes it more natural.
Evaluated By: Clara Johnson

19. Feedback 2
• •What did you like about the product?
• I really liked the shots that set up the locations. One of he best
shots was the one were your dad walks behind you, and you have
no idea. I found it to be amusing, and also reminded be of many
films/ TV shows. My most liked part s the end, when the punch line
hits you. Or in this case, punch shot.
• •What improvements could have been made to the product?
• I think i would have used more jump cuts, because the shots that
aren't in your house gone a bit too long. Besides that, i think it
worked well, i don't think id make any other changes/
improvements.
Evaluated by: Will Cave

20. Feedback 3
• What did you like about the product?
Good storyline
Good camera angles and colour to build up the tension
• What improvements could have been made to the product?
– The final scene could have been extended to see what happens next.
Text could have been slower so I could read it.
Evaluated by: Nick Mina

21. Peer Feedback Summary
What I agree with from the peer feedback
Firstly, I agree with what Clara has said about the flow of conversation. The character being centre made it
clear for the conversation texts to be visible side by side. I agree with Clara again for when she says
about the walking scenes slowing down the film. I had to add it to how where the character was
heading, but I couldn’t think of a way to make the walking to collage montage more interesting to the
audience. It was getting a bit boring as it was roughly 30 seconds of someone walking to college. I agree
with wills positive feedback with my dad walking behind me. I believe that this scene gave a jump to the
audience. It also gives a shock at the end, when you realise that the background character was only a
party guest. Also, I agree with what Clara says about the messages not being clear enough. The names
on the text were blurry, so you couldn’t tell who was sending which text. I lastly agree with Wills
improvement suggestion. I feel like more jump cuts would have made the scene more stressful to watch,
as it would go to the door, then back to the character, but really fast. It makes you focus on two negative
things at once.
What I disagree with from the peer feedback
The first thing I disagree with is Clara’s suggestion with the garage door. She said that it didn’t make
sense of me opening the door. I believe that it was made clear in the previous scene with the
texting that the character was going through the garage instead of the front door through text. And
he goes back to the door, as that’s where the random person is nearest. Also, I disagree with Nick’s
suggested improvements. He suggested extending the last scene to revile what happens after the
incident. The whole point is that the film ends on an awkward cliff hangar to make the audience
question what will happen now that the character has hit someone unconscious.

22. Peer Feedback Summary
What changes would I make and why?
The first change I would make would be the beginning walkthrough sequence. This is responding from what
Clara said about it being too long. I would shorten it down to the character just going into college with no
hallway scene. This would save 14 seconds of shots that don’t lead up to anywhere. Id change this so that
the walkthrough doesn’t get as boring, and doesn’t drag on like mine did. Another change that I would make
would be the text icons. I would add a block with a name in bold letters next to the text messages that have
been sent. This would make it a lot more clearer who sent what text. Id do this change, seen as the current
text messages have either blurry or no names on the icons. This made it hard to tell who sent which text. Id
also correct the word enough on the text icon, as its distracting against the main storyline of the film. From
what Will said about the jump cuts, I could have added that for when the character opens the door in the
hallway. I could make the handle appear, then switch to a shot of the character approaching his hand to the
door handle. By doing this, it would have built up more tension, as everything is happening really slowly. I
feel like the door handle scene may have been too fast now seeing that feedback. Lastly, the text icons again.
Even though I disagreed with what Clara said about the garage door, I could have made the text messages
appear on screen longer. This would leave time for the audience to get a proper read through of the text
messages without it cutting away all of a sudden. If I had done that, then maybe Clara wouldn’t have left
that as an improvement, as she would have known that he was going to go through the house through the
garage.