1. Interns were instructed to review feedback from the project director on their outline and background research and discuss how to strengthen their design decision paragraphs with colleagues. 2. They were then directed to write the three design decision paragraphs for their proposal, using their outline, feedback, and other resources as guides. 3. Interns were reminded to save their work in progress but not submit, as they will continue working on the introduction and conclusion sections during their next workday. They should review tasks and determine if any unfinished work needs completion after hours.

1. Fighting Drug-Resistant Malaria

2. Read the Daily Message and record notes of
important points and deliverables. (5 min)
Open and re-pin Daily Message Notes
• Add today’s date and subject of the message
(Outlines to Paragraphs) at the top of the note.
• Add (Copy/Paste) summary of deliverables
and/or important information under heading.
• Make sure today’s tasks are clear.
NSEI 8.1 WARM-UP

3. NSEI – 8 PROCESSING OUTLINE FEEDBACK
Interns read the project director’s feedback and discuss with colleagues about other examples
to include and which are the strongest. (20 min)
• Your Design Decisions
paragraphs should include
multiple pieces of evidence
from different sources,
• Ken Tapaha only
commented on the
background research they
provided.

4. NSEI – 8 PROCESSING OUTLINE FEEDBACK
• You will first read the
feedback letters from Ken
Tapaha carefully, making
notes on how you can use
the feedback to write your
Design Decision paragraphs,
then discuss their ideas with
a colleague.

5. NSEI – 8 PROCESSING OUTLINE FEEDBACK
• Take notes, or make
annotations.
• These notes can include
questions they might have, or
items you want to be sure to
include in each paragraph.
You should also make notes
on how to use the feedback to
strengthen your proposals.

6. NSEI – 8 PROCESSING OUTLINE FEEDBACK
• The purpose of this
discussion is for you to
share the background
research evidence you
submitted to the project
director, as well as to
analyze what kinds of
changes you need to
make in order to write a
successful proposal.

7. NSEI – 8 PROCESSING OUTLINE FEEDBACK
• Does this example of
feedback (on the right)
indicate whether there is
enough evidence?
• Yes, because it says
“examples”; there is more
than one example, and he
doesn’t say there are not
enough examples.

8. NSEI – 8 PROCESSING OUTLINE FEEDBACK
• Is the evidence specific to
the criterion of patient side
effects?
• No, there’s some extra
information that is not
needed—the example
about cost; it needs
another example that is
specifically about side
effects.

9. NSEI – 8 PROCESSING OUTLINE FEEDBACK
• Are there other
suggestions for
improvement?
• Remember to use the
Dossier and isolated tests
to look for things specific
to side effects.

10. NSEI – 8 PROCESSING OUTLINE FEEDBACK
• Shares one example of
background research and
discusses the assessment
of Ken's feedback, using
the Analyzing Feedback
Letters questions as a
guide.

11. NSEI – 8 PROCESSING OUTLINE FEEDBACK
• When assessing whether the
examples are specific, YOU
should replace the bold text in
the example questions with
the other criteria: drug
resistance or cost.
• For example, if you are
discussing an example about
drug resistance, you should
ask, “What did the Dossier
tell you about drug resistance
for each drug?” And, “What
did you learn about drug
resistance using MalariaMed?

12. NSEI – 8 PROCESSING OUTLINE FEEDBACK
• Group members should
respond by helping to
identify the additional
pieces of evidence, the
strongest pieces of
evidence, and/or if the
evidence is specific to the
criterion. They should also
help suggest additional
specific evidence to support
the criterion being
discussed.

13. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
• Your writing must be
adjusted to address each
type of audience
appropriately and
effectively.
• It is important to
convince your audience
that you’ve considered
research, evidence, and
feedback in your optimal
design.
Interns write the three Design Decisions paragraphs. (20 min)
Interns will only be writing their Design Decisions paragraphs today, using their outline, notes, and
feedback from the project director, as well as the Proposal Rubric as a guide.

14. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
• Using topic-specific
vocabulary—like drug
resistance, mutation,
natural selection,
selection pressure—can
be one way to show that
you know your science
for this malaria treatment
project.
Interns write the three Design Decisions paragraphs. (20 min)
Interns will only be writing their Design Decisions paragraphs today, using their outline, notes, and
feedback from the project director, as well as the Proposal Rubric as a guide.

15. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
• You want your final
proposal to be
convincing,
demonstrating how and
why your design is
optimal. An outline of
facts and examples is
not as convincing as a
well-written argument. In
other words, you will
want to make your
reasoning about your
choices clear to people
who are reading it.

16. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
• Identify where the
information from the
outline ended up in the
paragraph.
• The first sentence “Our
design has a clean-
mouth rating of 84%
which is better than
our goal of 80%” shows
how the final result and
the goal were combined
into one strong
sentence.

17. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
• Point out which evidence
was not relevant, and
therefore not used in the
paragraph.
• Bamboo handles are
better for the
environment.

18. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
• All the pieces of
evidence from the Data
Analysis section should
go into the final
paragraph, and you
should aim for at least
two strong pieces of
evidence from the
Background Research.

21. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
There is a specific sequence they will need to follow before
they begin writing their Final Proposals in the Futura
Workspace:
•Open and pin the Proposal Outline form in Futura
Workspace.
•Open the Final Proposal form. Point out that the first section of
the Final Proposal is for the Introduction, but that interns will not
write this today. Note that there are three separate sections for
the Design Decisions.
•Copy sections from the Proposal Outline form and paste
them into the Final Proposal form. Alternatively, interns can
retype the basic information from the Proposal Outline into the
correct Design Decisions section of the Final Proposal.
•Select SAVE on the Final Proposal form. Interns do not submit
work at this time.

22. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
There is a specific sequence they will need to follow before
they begin writing their Final Proposals in the Futura
Workspace:
•Open and pin the Proposal Outline form in Futura
Workspace.
•Open the Final Proposal form. Point out that the first section of
the Final Proposal is for the Introduction, but that interns will not
write this today. Note that there are three separate sections for
the Design Decisions.
•Copy sections from the Proposal Outline form and paste
them into the Final Proposal form. Alternatively, interns can
retype the basic information from the Proposal Outline into the
correct Design Decisions section of the Final Proposal.
•Select SAVE on the Final Proposal form. Interns do not submit
work at this time.

23. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
• Remind interns about other
resources they could use while
writing these sections, such as
the Proposal Rubric and the
“Help with your Proposal” Tips
message in your inbox.

24. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
• Remind interns about other
resources they could use while
writing these sections, such as
the Proposal Rubric and the
“Help with your Proposal” Tips
message in your inbox.

25. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
• Remind interns about other
resources they could use while
writing these sections, such as
the Proposal Rubric and the
“Help with your Proposal” Tips
message in your inbox.
• Save your work often, but make
sure interns do not submit,
since you will be work on the
Introduction and the
Conclusion during their next
workday.

26. NSEI – 8 REVISING DESIGN DECISIONS
• Remind interns about other
resources they could use while
writing these sections, such as
the Proposal Rubric and the
“Help with your Proposal” Tips
message in your inbox.
• Save your work often, but make
sure interns do not submit,
since you will be work on the
Introduction and the
Conclusion during their next
workday.
• When you have completed the
Design Decisions paragraphs,
they should save your work
once more.

27. NSEI – 8 AFTER-HOURS WORK
Interns review the Daily Message Notes in Futura
Workspace to determine if they have unfinished tasks they
need to complete.