The document summarizes feedback from the filmmaker's sister and father on a film noir opening sequence they created. The sister, aged 19, thought the lighting, shots, and music were conventionally film noir style and added tension. However, she felt the credit editing could be improved. The father, aged 57 and within the target audience age, agreed the costumes, props, and music had authenticity. He noticed small continuity details and felt the creaking door needed to be quieter. Both felt the sequence successfully captured the conventions of the genre and created the right atmospheric tone. The filmmaker was pleased to receive feedback from different generations to improve future work.

1. Question 4 & 5 Evaluation Writing – Ella Amoroso
When I showed my dad and sister my film noir opening sequence – BUST – I got a
very mixed but also a great response from them.
My sister, aged 19, thought that overall the film noir was very conventional. She
looked overall at the whole film noir opening sequence. She mainly commented on
the shots we used, e.g. close ups, and the lighting. She thought that the lighting was
very conventional for a film noir, and we displayed this well in our opening sequence.
My sister also thought that we showed a variety of shot types, which she thought
added tension and created a mysterious atmosphere in the opening sequence. My
sister thought the same of the timing of the music that we used in the sequence,
especially how dramatic the music got when the title came onto the screen. This was
something that we hoped the audience would like and notice, as we payed a lot of
attention to detail to this part of the sequence. She also thought that the costumes
and props were very authentic in the sequence, and were conventional for a film noir
set. However, she did think that the editing on the credits was not as good as it could
of been, and she thought that the editing of this part could be improved by avoiding
overlap of words as they fade in and they fade out. However, she thought that the
fading of the credits should still be included because the idea of fading was
appropriate for the sequence. This could therefore enhance viewing experience in
her opinion.
However, my dad who is aged 57 which was the target audience of our film noir
opening sequence, commented a lot on effective continuity; for example with the
positioning of the glasses and drink. He also agreed with the comments made by my
sister about the authenticity of the music, the costume, and the props. He also
noticed the loud creaking of the door; both my sister and my dad agreed that the
creaking added to the conventionality and tension of the sequence. However they
thought it needed to be a little quieter. This was something Gvidas and I thought
wasn’t a good element. Therefore, I wasn’t surprised by this criticism. My dad also
thought that the lighting of the set created the right atmosphere for the film noir. He
also said that he has seen films similar to this opening sequence in his time, and he
said that he thought that it looked very conventional as an opening sequence. My
dad also thought that the sequence was ‘very conventional and very representative
of the genre.’
I am pleased with the feedback of my sequence, especially as I used two people from
completely different age groups. This is something I am glad I have achieved and
definitely found the feedback helpful for the future.