Here are the key success criteria for responding to this text: - Analyse how specific language techniques are used to influence the reader's feelings and reactions - Support your analysis with well-chosen evidence from the text - Comment on how the writer sets the scene, describes the creature, and shows Frankenstein's reactions - Explain clearly how the language choices create effects such as mood, tension, horror - Structure your response with clear paragraphs addressing each success criteria - Use appropriate subject terminology when discussing language techniques The model answer demonstrates meeting these success criteria through its close analysis, use of evidence, explanation of effects, and clear structure. A successful response would aim to similarly unpack the text through a focused exploration of the

1. Frankenstein
Learning Objectives:
• To analyse the narrative techniques used by the
author to affect the reader;
• To read a model answer and agree on Success
Criteria.
• To write my own response to the text (assessed)
Reading Level:
Where am I? Where do I want to be? What do I need to do to get there?

2. How the author influences how we feel…
Some narrative techniques
Questions / Contrasting beautiful and
exclamations / ugly features to echo his
Long sentence to own chaotic and
incomplete sentences
create a shock contrasting feelings about
to reflect the tumult
revelation at the the creature. Vocabulary
(chaos) in his mind –
end. contrasts life and death.
shows he is trying to
make sense of the
situation.
Unreliable narrator Carefully selected Paragraph
– careful selection descriptive details to structure –
of words and facts create a gloomy reflection followed
to gain sympathy. mood, full of by action.
impending horror.
(Underline relevant
evidence) (underline relevant details)

3. It was on a dreary night of November that I beheld
Carefully the accomplishment of my toils. With an anxiety that
selected
descriptive
almost amounted to agony, I collected the instruments
details to create of life around me, that I might infuse a spark of being
a gloomy mood,
full of impending into the lifeless thing that lay at my feet. It was
horror.
already one in the morning; the rain pattered
dismally against the panes, and my candle was nearly Long
sentence to
burnt out, when, by the glimmer of the half- create a
shock
extinguished light, I saw the dull yellow eye of the revelation
creature open; it breathed hard, and a convulsive at the end.
motion agitated its limbs.

4. Questions /
exclamations /
incomplete How can I describe my emotions at this
sentences to
reflect the tumult catastrophe, or how delineate the wretch whom
(chaos) in his mind
– shows he is with such infinite pains and care I had
trying to make
sense of the
endeavoured to form? His limbs were in
situation. proportion, and I had selected his features as
beautiful. Beautiful! Great God! His yellow skin
scarcely covered the work of muscles and arteries Contrasting
beautiful and
beneath; his hair was of a lustrous black, and ugly features to
flowing; his teeth of a pearly whiteness; but these echo his own
chaotic and
luxuriances only formed a more horrid contrast contrasting
with his watery eyes, that seemed almost of the feelings about
the creature.
same colour as the dun-white sockets in which Vocabulary
they were set, his shrivelled complexion and contrasts life
and death.
straight black lips.

5. […] I had worked hard for nearly two
years, for the sole purpose of infusing
Unreliable
life into an inanimate body. For this I had
narrator –
careful deprived myself of rest and health. I had
selection of desired it with an ardour that far
words and facts exceeded moderation; but now that I had
to gain
sympathy. finished, the beauty of the dream
vanished, and breathless horror and
disgust filled my heart. Unable to Paragraph
structure –
endure the aspect of the being I had reflection
created, I rushed out of the room and followed by
continued a long time traversing my bed- action.
chamber, unable to compose my mind to
sleep.

6. Paragraphs 4-5
Long Change of Narrator’s
sentence to sentence choice of
create a structure / change words to gain
shock of pace sympathy
revelation at (long to short or short
the end. to long)
Extremely long Unreliable narrator – Descriptive
sentence – list of careful selection of details to show
actions to reveal a words and facts to how he feels.
state of panic – no gain sympathy.
time to think.
(Underline relevant evidence)

7. At length lassitude succeeded to the tumult Narrator’s
I had before endured, and I threw myself on
the bed in my clothes, endeavouring to seek a choice of words
few moments of forgetfulness. But it was in to gain
vain; I slept, indeed, but I was disturbed by sympathy
Descriptive the wildest dreams. […] I started from my
details to sleep with horror; a cold dew covered my
forehead, my teeth chattered, and every limb
show how he became convulsed; when, by the dim and yellow
feels. light of the moon, as it forced its way through
Change of sentence
the window shutters, I beheld the wretch structure / change of
--the miserable monster whom I had pace (long to short or
created. He held up the curtain of the bed; short to long)
Long sentence to and his eyes, if eyes they may be called, were
create a shock fixed on me. His jaws opened, and he muttered
some inarticulate sounds, while a grin wrinkled
revelation at the
his cheeks.
end.
He might have spoken, but I did not hear;
one hand was stretched out, seemingly to
detain me, but I escaped and rushed
downstairs. I took refuge in the courtyard
belonging to the house which I inhabited, where
I remained during the rest of the night, walking Narrator’s choice
up and down in the greatest agitation, listening of words to gain
Extremely long attentively, catching and fearing each sound as sympathy
sentence – list of if it were to announce the approach of the
actions to reveal demoniacal corpse to which I had so miserably
given life.
a state of panic –
no time to think.

8. • So, how does the author make me feel during
the extract?
• How does she do it?
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9. AF5: Can I explain why writers choose to use particular
words and sentences?
A Model Question and Answer
In the whole text, how does the writer’s use of
language show that Dr Frankenstein’s dreams
have been shattered?
You should comment on how the writer:
– sets the scene;
– describes the creature;
– shows Dr Frankenstein’s reactions.

10. The November night is described in the opening sentence as
Point ‘dreary’. This creates a bleak atmosphere from the outset. The
writer darkens the mood further with details like, ‘the rain
pattered dismally’. On top of this, we are told that there is very Ev
little light. All of this descriptive detail creates a sense of
foreboding – we get the sense that things are sure to go wrong. Ex
In the second paragraph, the birth of the creature is described as a
‘catastrophe’ which suggests that the narrator’s dreams are
completely shattered. He conveys his horror with exclamations like
‘Great God!’ His description of the monster allows us to see why he
feels such revulsion: it has thin ‘yellow skin’ which makes it appear
sickly. There are fine features, like pearly teeth, but these only
form a ‘horrid contrast’ with the ‘watery eyes’, the ‘shrivelled
complexion and black lips.’
In the final paragraph, Frankenstein reflects on how his whole life
over the past two years has been devoted to the creation of his
dream: ‘For this I deprived myself of rest and health.’ This creates a
sense of great loss. All he now feels is ‘breathless horror and
disgust’. ‘Breathless’ creates the impression that Frankenstein is
overpowered by the strength of these emotions. He rushes from
the room, unable to face his creation a moment longer.

11. Your assessment
How does the author make you feel in
the extract (last 2 paragraphs) and how
does she achieve it?
Phrases to use to improve attainment:
This suggests…
This creates the impression…
This makes the reader feel…
This emphasises…
This shows…
This indicates…

12. Success Criteria
What are they?