The document contains evaluations from a student on various digital graphic narrative exercises they completed. For their shape task, the student liked how they were able to incorporate shapes into the image to make it more lifelike, and would improve blending the shapes better next time. For their rotocope task, the student enjoyed how they captured the eyes to make the subject seem more human, and would make the edges less sharp. Across multiple exercises, the student provided feedback on strengths and areas for improvement.

1. Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
Robert Ryan

2. Shape Task

3. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked how I was able to make all the shapes work into
the nose and eyes as well as mouth to make it a lot more
life like.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would put a little more effort into making the image
resemble more of a polar bear and not something that
looks completely deferent by working on the shapes to
blend well with the original image

4. Rotoscope

5. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked how I did the eyes. It makes the man who I am
working on resemble a lot more of a living human being.
If I did not add in the eyes it probably would look really
lifeless.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I might try and I make the corners less sharp as I feel it
would bring the image one step further to looking a lot
more realistic and the celebrity a lot more recognisable.

6. Film Quotes

7. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how very little it tells the viewer about the film
but the dark grey look helps give off the dark tone
that is present in the actual film.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would probably add in a title so that the viewer
can get a understanding on what the film is.

8. Text Based

9. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how wired and stylish the fonts on this
page are.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would try and listen more because some of the
features on Photoshop where hard to find.

10. Comic Book

11. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how pretty and it looks and it has a
animated look which is completely to how it
looks originally
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would put all of the other features on
Photoshop to great affect.

12. Photo Story

13. Photo Story

14. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how it has a very easy to follow narrative and the presentation of each image is
not done in a confusing way. I feel like I have presented each frame in a way that
people can understand. and all of the images look really good in terms of lighting and I
feel like I have made great use of location with this project. I like how there are no
white spaces in the image. It looks very complete without any spaces left waiting to be
filled.

15. Illustration

16. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked how surreal and crazy the image is as I feel
being creative with a image is better than copying
and pasting pre existing ones.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I had more time I would try and put a lot more
detail especially in the colour like how everyone of
my group members have done to their own images.

17. Narrative Environment

18. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how pretty the images look and how well the
images of both the cityscape and the desert are
blended together. It looks very seamless and and
the line between the 2 images look lot less
noticeable when filtered.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would try to put more effort in the image rather
just use filter gallery.

19. Initial Ideas

20. Idea Generation

23. Proposal
Dimensions
7-8 Pages. 21cm by 29 cm
Story Overview
The story follows who as a massive flock of sheep which he uses to pasture in his
meadow. One day when taking them back home they come across a narrow bridge so
narrow that the shepherd decides that his sheep need to cross one by one. The Story
then grinds to a halt as the sheep cross the bridge. The children listening start to grow
impatient at the narrator for not moving the story forward. His excuse being that the
sheep have not crossed the bridge yet.
Export Format
JEPEG.
Advantages: They are very easy to save and are used for web formats.
Disadvantages: Loses compression after multiple edits.

24. Deadline
7th April
Audience
I am aiming for my target audience to be no older than 5 years old. Children who
are capable to have a good understanding of a simplistic story line but also reflect
when a message is being thrown at them. This story is perfect for them as its not
overcomplicated to where they cant follow everything and it is very short as well
which helps because kids have very short attention spans and can get very bored if
a story is overly long.
Production Methods
I am thinking of producing my images in a more rotoscope style as I feel as it makes
the images on the page a lot more surreal and detailed as opposed to a overly
cartoony drawing. I may do this by take already existing images of Sheppard and
sheep along with a narrator and children and manipulating them by using the
polygonal lasso tool. There are a few disadvantages to this as I might not get
permission to get already existing image for my own needs and I have had my own
troubles with this style in the past however this story is very short and would
require no more than 8 pages. If I can not do this then I may stick to other methods
such as illustrations or anything that Photoshop would allow.

25. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
A strength of your proposal is that you have thought
out a good idea for the story and have a good idea
on how you would like the story to be designed
within Photoshop.
Overall the proposal is well done and the only thing
which could be improved is about the dimensions of
the book where you could go into further detail
explaining why you have chosen to choose the
dimensions being 21 by 29cm.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
You have a good idea generation as you have
managed to cover a lot on what the story could be
like and the design etc.
The only thing which could be improved is the
layout of the spider diagram as it can be slightly
confusing on how to follow but the main thing is you
have managed to get the context in there.

26. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
You have a general idea of what you wish for you
story to be about. You also have a good
understanding of how you want to make the story
look, in terms of the Photoshop tools you wish to
use to create the characters and narrative.
Your proposal explains your choices and reinforces
your idea generation mood board however you
could mention possibly about why you have chosen
to make you book 21cm by 29cm and then further
explain how you are going to make your story
simplistic via the language or text used.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Detailed mind-map that explains how you want your
overall book to look in terms of visual style and
characters which is then reinforced by your mood
board.
Included text examples on your mood board.
Rearrange your mood board as well so that all the
images are clear, as quite a few are over lapping
each other – you could add another page instead.

27. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
A rotoscoping style is definitely ideal for having
detailing in two dimensional images.
The plan is well-structured and I can understand
clearly what you intend to do.
I would be a bit more specific as to how many
pages you intend to use.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
The simplicity of the story would definitely appeal to
a younger audience, as you intend.
There is a wide range of media to work from to
create a compelling story.
I also like the sense of humour in this proposal. The
idea is very clever.
The sense of humour at the end more appeals to
older audiences than younger audiences.

28. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
My feedback is mostly positive however one of the biggest criticisms is I could have gone
into a little more detail about the dimensions of my book and the layout on the mind
maps could have been better. I have also gotten a criticism about the humour being out
of place for younger audiences.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
Admittedly I am not an expert on dimensions but maybe if I did know a little bit more
about it I could have written about it and it was also down to the fact that I wasn’t sure
at the time on what dimensions to use. But the mind map could have looked a lot less
messy and more structured.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I disagree on the last joke being aimed more at older audiences as it’s a joke that both
and kids and adults can understand and it has a message behind that is aimed towards
children.

29. Original Script
http://www.worldoftales.com/European_folktales/Czechoslovak_folktale_15.html
(To be told very seriously)
Once upon a time there was a shepherd who had a great flock of sheep. He used to
pasture them in a meadow on the other side of a brook. One day the sun had already set
before he started home. Recent rains had swollen the brook so that he and the sheep had
to cross on a little footbridge. The bridge was so narrow that the sheep had to pass over
one by one.
Now we’ll wait until he drives them all over. Then I’ll go on with my story.
(when the children grow impatient and beg for a continuation of the story, they are told that
there are many sheep and that up to this time only a few have crossed. A little later
impatience again breaks out, they are told that the sheep are still crossing. And so on
indefinitely.)
In fact there where so many sheep that when morning came they where still crossing and
then it was time for the shepherd to turn around and drive them back to the pasture.

30. Story Breakdown
1. Opens with the Shepherd flocking his sheep as the narrator narrates.
2. The Sheep and the Shepherd come across a narrow bridge.
3. The Shepherd decides the sheep go one by one.
4. The Sheep continue cross the bridge as very few have gotten past the other
side.
5. The sheep continue going on.
6. The Sheep continue going over
7 Still going over.
8. Morning comes and its time to drive them back to the pasture.

31. Page 1. Once upon a time there was a Shepherd who had a great flock of
sheep. He used to pasture them in the meadow on other side of the brook.
Page 2. One morning the sun was just rising. Recent rains had swollen the brook
so that he and his sheep had to cross on a little footbridge.
Page 3. The bridge was so narrow that the sheep had to pass over one by one.
Page 4. Sheep are still crossing.
Page 5 Sheep are still crossing
Page 6. Sheep are still crossing.
Page 7. In fact, there where so many sheep that when evening came they were
still crossing.
Page 8. It was then time for the shepherd to turn around and drive them back
again.

32. Final Script
(To Be Told Very Seriously)
Once upon a time, there was a Shepherd who had a great flock of sheep. He
used to pasture them in the meadow on other side of the brook. One morning the
sun was just rising. Recent rains had swollen the brook so that he and his sheep
had to cross on a little footbridge. The bridge was so narrow that the sheep had
to pass over one by one. In fact, there where so many sheep that when evening
came they were still crossing. It was then time for the shepherd to turn around
and drive them back again.

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