80 ĐỀ THI THỬ TUYỂN SINH TIẾNG ANH VÀO 10 SỞ GD – ĐT THÀNH PHỐ HỒ CHÍ MINH NĂ...
feedback from client - log
1. 04/12/18
DRAFT 1 – FEEDBACK & IMPROVEMENTS
After meeting with the client I received some feedback on my first drafting of a script for my
short filmwith improvements that should be made to make the script more professional.
Some suggested improvements were to change the layout of the dialogue to centralise it.
This would help in the production of the filmwhere they are shooting. I was have been
advised to adjust the text on page two at the end of the call where Jane says "ok, speak to
you later" to something a bit more polite since the client felt she would be more grateful
considering her husband had just died.
Another improvement to be made is to put the emotions such as (sniffling) next to the name
of the character rather than underneath.
06/12/18
DRAFT 2 – FEEDBACK & IMRPOVEMENTS
Based on my second conversation with the client regarding my second draft script for my
short film, the client suggested adding a bit more information on Kate at the beginning
when first introducing the character. In the first section I have explained the age of Kate and
what she is wearing.
The client also thought that the first conversation between Kate and Jane was interesting
since the motive of the conversation is portrayed well – she wanted the documents rather
than actually caring for her.
She also suggested that in the second phone call I should adjust the dialogue where Jane is
asking how Kate wants to remember her late husband. This is to make it seem more
realistic.