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1. Millie Nelmes
Client FeedbackLog
Thursday 5th December
Today I met with the client with my first script draft. We discussed the format of the
script itself, as well as the plot. Overall, the client enjoyed my script. However, a few
corrections were needed. This included, labelling each scene (scene 1, scene 2, etc.)
As well as adding in additional information on the title page (email, address etc.) The
only adjusted made to the dialogue was in scene 6, where the Inspector’s dialogue
was slow, and I needed to adjust the Inspector to demand back up immediately
rather than the next day.
Friday 6th December
Today I met with the client again. I found more feedback to enhance my script. This
included a discussion upon the automatic capitalisation which I had to remove, and a
few dialogue pieces to edit and crop to fit the semantics. I have completed all of my
adjustments to my script, in hope the client will be happy to continue onto my
shooting script.
DATE FEEDBACK CORRECTIONS
5/12/19  Format Changes –
include personal details
(address/email) & add
number scenes (scene 1)
 Dialogue changes – edit
scene 6 dialogue.
All of the corrections can be
seen on draft 2 of my script. I
have taken on board the client’s
feedback and I have adjusted
the script.
6/12/19  Dialogue changes to
scene 4, to Sebastian’s
reply to the Inspector.
 Remove automatic
capitalisation on lines.
 Remove unnecessary
sentence from the
Inspectors dialogue.
All of the corrections can be
seen on my draft 3. I have
taken this additional feedback
to help enhance my script and
to fit the client’s brief.