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1. Explain the complete organization of the content in the document.
First, this document's theme is How to Install Sound Driver Hardware. This document is
divided five steps. The content of this step is about what you should do before you install
Sound Driver Hardware. And the content of the from 2 to 5 is about what order you should
do.

2. Do you think the individual sections and headings in the document clearly represent the
idea that was communicated. Explain the reasons behind your comments.
This document about How to Install Sound Driver Hardware is very good, because these
indivisual sections and headings in the document clearly represent the idea. But these 5
steps in the document is not named. Therefore, when I make the document, I give these 5
titles to these 5 steps.

3. What details are included in the document?
There are many sentences about How to Install Sound Driver Hardware in the document.
These senteces are written in detail. For example, the content of the first step is about
before you install Sound Driver Hardware. And there are many attention about How to
Install Sound Driver Hardware in this steps.

4. Was there anything that was confusing? If so, what is it?
There are many things that was confusing. First, there are too many advertisement that
have nothing to do with How to Install Sound Driver Hardware in this page. And the
advertisement that flash. The flash of the advertisement is bad for the reader of the
document's eyes. And the reader of the document is difficult to read the document
because of the flash.

5. What is good about the writing? Why is it good?
The author of the document is very good english writer, because these sentences in the
document are very beautiful and these sentences in the document is grammatically
correct. And these sentences in the document are moderate colorful. Therefore, these
sentences in the document is easy for the reader of the document to read.

6. Are there any errors that need to be corrected?
I could not find any errors in the document. And I could not find any grammatical errors.
But there is room for improvement of this document. For example, there are many
advertisement that have nothing to do with the How to Install Sound Driver Hardware.
Therefore, the author should reduce the number of the document.

7. What specific suggestions for improving the document can you make?
First, I am Japanese and I am not native American. But the content of the document is
very useful for many Japanese people. Therefore, if I can make the document, I want to
make the document in Japanese. And I want that many Japanese will read the document
in Japanese.
8. Identify three basic differences between how your group would author a similar
document and how
this author authored it (as you see it in the link).

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Peer reviewexercise1

  • 1. s1170209 Yuuya Furukawa 1. Explain the complete organization of the content in the document. First, this document's theme is How to Install Sound Driver Hardware. This document is divided five steps. The content of this step is about what you should do before you install Sound Driver Hardware. And the content of the from 2 to 5 is about what order you should do. 2. Do you think the individual sections and headings in the document clearly represent the idea that was communicated. Explain the reasons behind your comments. This document about How to Install Sound Driver Hardware is very good, because these indivisual sections and headings in the document clearly represent the idea. But these 5 steps in the document is not named. Therefore, when I make the document, I give these 5 titles to these 5 steps. 3. What details are included in the document? There are many sentences about How to Install Sound Driver Hardware in the document. These senteces are written in detail. For example, the content of the first step is about before you install Sound Driver Hardware. And there are many attention about How to Install Sound Driver Hardware in this steps. 4. Was there anything that was confusing? If so, what is it? There are many things that was confusing. First, there are too many advertisement that have nothing to do with How to Install Sound Driver Hardware in this page. And the advertisement that flash. The flash of the advertisement is bad for the reader of the document's eyes. And the reader of the document is difficult to read the document because of the flash. 5. What is good about the writing? Why is it good? The author of the document is very good english writer, because these sentences in the document are very beautiful and these sentences in the document is grammatically correct. And these sentences in the document are moderate colorful. Therefore, these sentences in the document is easy for the reader of the document to read. 6. Are there any errors that need to be corrected? I could not find any errors in the document. And I could not find any grammatical errors. But there is room for improvement of this document. For example, there are many advertisement that have nothing to do with the How to Install Sound Driver Hardware. Therefore, the author should reduce the number of the document. 7. What specific suggestions for improving the document can you make? First, I am Japanese and I am not native American. But the content of the document is very useful for many Japanese people. Therefore, if I can make the document, I want to make the document in Japanese. And I want that many Japanese will read the document in Japanese. 8. Identify three basic differences between how your group would author a similar document and how this author authored it (as you see it in the link).