The document summarizes revisions made to the storyline of a short film from a first draft to a final version. The first draft focused more on dialogue and character movements, but did not deeply analyze characters or fully describe settings. The final version aims to better portray the connection between characters and include more vivid descriptions of scenery to accurately convey the film's mood and technical aspects through imagery when produced.

1. Final Short Film Storyline
Development
By Ana Vasilescu & Mima Micic

2. First Draft

3. Evaluation
The first version focuses more on the dialogue and movements of the characters in
order to portray them easily. However, it predominantly illustrates their main physical
characteristics and portrays their appearence to the audience instead of giving an
indepth analysis of their persona. This version was good for establishing a general idea
of the setting and how the story will unfold. However, for the final version we wanted
to portray the connection and closeness that the characters share. Moreover , we
wanted to better describe the visual aspects of the scenery which will better help us
convey the mood and atmosphere of the film when we produce it. The final version of
the story contains vivid descriptions that create such imagery, which would provide
the reader with a more accurate representation of visual, thematical and technical
characteristics our film wil have.

4. Final Version