1. What could we improve?
There was a long black
pause near the beginning
that could be shortened and
also the audio at the end of
the girl was out to place
with the rest of it, could
change the sound level or
quality of her
The sound is bad at the
end where the second
girl’s voice is, the
music ends too
suddenly and that
voices come in and the
last voice over is too
quiet.
The 1 minute blackout at
the end.
Not having the
black screen at the
end.
The titles could have
been more fancy.
Maybe try blending
the music at the
start a little more.
Improve camera angle of teacher.
There is a long black section at
the end. The part where you see
the messages on the
phone because you
can’t see what the
messages say.
Where there is the shot of
the phone to have the
comments around the
side in the black font
makes the appearance
distracting. Could
possibly model it to look
like texts coming out of
The sound
should be
more
streamlined.
There could have
been a better
cliff-hanger at the
end.
2. What was your favourite section?
The emotional part where
the main character was
crying is my favourite
section as the shot was
really clear.
When the teacher
slammed the paper on
the desk and she ran out
before being left on a
cliff-hanger! Loved it
When the teacher slammed on the desk.
When the
victim was
saying how
she felt.
Favourite section is
the table slamming
and storming out of
the classroom –
shows the dramatic
genre.
The ending – cliff-hanger.
The bit where
you can hear
the voices.
The bit where
the main girl
was in her
room
(standing up).The inner
thoughts
section.
The voices in
her head being
heard out loud.
The narration by
the female
voice.
The bit where it
goes all hazy
where the main
girl is thinking.
THAT MADE ME
HAPPY.
