First version treatment

1. Introduction Verse 1 Bridge 1 Chorus 1 Verse 2 Bridge 2 Chorus 2 Instrumental Verse 3 Bridge 3 Chorus 3 Chorus 4
Duration 0.00-0.33 0.33-0.51 0.52-1.09 1.10-1.29 1.30-1.51 1.52-2.11 2.12-2.30 2.31-2.48 2.48-2.50 2.50-3.25 3.26-3.40 3.41-4.04
Action -Before the
music starts to
play, seea
woman getting
ready to go
out, painting
her nails red
and applying a
variety of
lipsticks and
outfits one
after the other
in a series of
quick shots on
the sound of
the beat.While
this is
happening, we
see cuts cross
over to the bar
before shegets
there, a manis
setting upthe
bar, putting the
drinks away
and turning on
the music.
-The woman
walks down the
stairs (we see
her red
fingernails on
the staircase
handle) and
then into the
bar and sits
down, close up
of her red high
heel swinging
back and forth.
We then see a
- The woman
looks over
towards a
man in the
bar, “Meet
you
downstairsin
the bar and
heard.”
-She
continues to
look over,
flirting and
we see the
man rolling
up his sleeves
“your rolled
up sleeves.”
- “And your
skull t-shirt”
…the shot
pans to the
floor ofa
bedroom and
we see a t-
shirt being
thrown on
the floor.
-The shot
then changes
to an over
the shoulder
shot ofthe
woman
standing in
the mirror
singing to
herself“you
say why did
you do it
-The
woman is
looking at
some
polaroidof
her and her
boyfriend …
“cause
you’re my
fella, my
guy”
-The scene
will thengo
back to her
lying in bed,
she leans
over and
takes a sip
ofher
boyfriend’s
beer on the
bedside
table, she
quickly gets
changed and
then walks
towards the
bedroom
door “hand
me your
Stellaand
fly”
We see her
run out the
front door
and looks
behind her
looking
suspiciously
“By the time
I’m out the
- “I cheated
myself, like
I knew I
would. I
told yaI
was trouble,
yeah you
know that
I’m no
good.”
…she’s
stood on a
stage
singing
towards the
camera.
-The scene
flickers
betweenher
being on
stage and
her walking
down the
canal.
-The main
woman is sat
on the
staircase
singing
towards the
camera
“upstairsin
bed, with my
ex boy. He’s
in the place
but I can’t get
joy”
-High angle
showing the
main woman
looking
through
polaroid
pictures again
“Thinking of
you in the
final throes”
-Scene then
cuts to the
woman and
the boyfriend
happy-she
realises she’s
in the wrong
“thisiswhere
my buzzer
goes”
-Wide shot of
main woman
and boyfriend
looking happy,
she rests her
head on him.
“Run out to
meet you chips
and pitta”.
They start
getting slightly
confrontational
but then he
strokes her
hand and
there’s a close
up ofher
engagement
ring “you say
when we’re
married cause
you’re not
bitter”
-Vague
reflection ofher
wiping her
lipstick ofin the
kitchen knife
“they’ll be
none ofhim no
more”
-Camera zooms
out and sees
the main
woman have
makeup allover
her face “I cried
for you on the
kitchen floor.”
- “I cheated
myself, like
I knew I
would. I
told yaI
was trouble,
yeah you
know that
I’m no
good.”
…she’s
stood on a
stage
singing
towards the
camera.
-The scene
flickers
betweenher
being on
stage and
her walking
in forest/
fields.
A range of
quick cuts of
her in the
previous
locations
(canal,
woodland
area) and
looking
through
pictures,
sitting inthe
kitchen and
looking in the
mirror.
- “Sweet
reunion,
Jamaicaand
Spain. We’re
like how we
were again”
… we will see
the main
woman and
her boyfriend
looking happy
again,
laughing
together on
the sofa
- “I’m in the
tub, you’re
on the seat.
Lick your lips
as I soak my
feet” … they
look happy,
he’s holding
her hand and
stroking it.
“Then you
notice like
carpet burn.
My stomach
dropsand
my guts
churn”… the
boyfriend
strokes her
hand and
notices she
isn’t
wearing her
engagement
ring again,
they start
arguing .
“You shrug
and it’sthe
worst. To
truly stuck
the knife in
first”…scene
cuts backto
the main
woman in
the kitchen
crying
surrounding
by bottles
again.
- “I cheated
myself, like I
knew I would. I
told yaI was
trouble, yeah you
know that I’m no
good.” …she’s
stood on a stage
singing towards
the camera.
-The scene
flickers between
her being on
stage and packing
her bags/leaving
home as their
relationship has
ended. Shegets
her engagement
ring and leaves it
on the bedside
table along with a
teared up
polaroid.
- “I cheated myself,
like I knew I would. I
told yaI was trouble,
yeah you know that
I’m no good.” …she’s
stood on a stage
singing towards the
camera.
-The scene flickers
from her singing on
stage to walking down
the street.
For the last lineofthe
song she turns her
head roundand looks
at the camera and
sings “Yeah, yaknow
that I’m no good”

2. close up ofthe
woman taking
her wedding
ring off and
putting it inher
pocket-
symbolises she
is being
suspicious.
with him
today?”
-The scene
then changes
to a high
angle looking
down on the
woman while
she’s singing
towards the
ceiling,
looking
restless…she
then strokes
his face- close
up ofher
engagement
ring “And
sniff me out
like I was
Tanqueray.”
door, you
tear me
down like
Roger
Moore” …
we see her
boyfriend
wake up and
look around,
shakes his
head in
disbelief
she’s
cheating
again.
Cast -Hollie as the
lead woman
-The man at
the bar setting
up
-Lead woman
-The ‘other
man’
character
-The
boyfriend
-Lead
woman
-The
boyfriend
-Lead
woman
-Lead woman
-Boyfriend
-Lead woman
-Boyfriend
-Lead
woman
-Lead woman -Lead woman
-Boyfriend
-Lead
woman
-Boyfriend
-Lead woman -Lead woman

3. Costume/props -Main woman
will be wearing
a black dress,
red high heels,
red lipstick and
red nail
varnish; this
introduces her
to the audience
instantlyand
makes them
aware thatshe
not only has a
seductive
personalitybut
a dangerous
one as well.
-Engagement
ring
-Main woman
will stillbe
wearing black
dress, red
heels, red
lipstick and
red nail
varnishwhilst
she’s satin
the bar.
-The main
woman will
then be seen
in a baggy
pyjama liket-
shirt (black)
when looking
in the mirror,
makeup
down her
face and
when she’s
lying in bed.
-Black dress,
red heels for
lead woman
-The
boyfriend in
pyjamas
lying in bed.
-Black dress,
intense
makeup
Microphone
No shoes
-Black dress
-Baggy t-shirt
-Baggy t-shirt
(messy hair)
-Knife
-Empty alcohol
bottles
-Black dress,
intense
makeup
Microphone
No shoes
-A variety of
outfits in the
different
locations
-Mirror
-Casual
clothing
-White t-shirt
-White top
-Baggy top
-Knife
-Bags
-Baggy t-shirt
-Polaroidcamera
-Engagement ring
-Bag with her personal
items in
-Baggy t-shirt/ no
shoes/ smudged
makeup
Location -Bedroom
whilst she’s
getting ready
-Staircase
-Bar
-The bar area
-Her
bedroom
-The
bedroom
-The
staircase
-Downstairs
ofthe house
-Stage
-Canal
-Staircase
-Bedroom/
bathroom?
-Living area
-Kitchen
-Forest/
fields
-Stage
-Canal
-Woodland
-Kitchen
-Bedroom
-Living room
(sofa, floor)
- Bathroom
(in the bath)
-Bathroom
-Kitchen
-Stage
-Bedroom
-Downstairs of
the living room.
-Street
-Stage
Possible
problems
-There could
possibly bethe
reflection of
the camera in
the mirror.
-There could
possibly be
the reflection
ofthe camera
in the mirror
again.
-The main
woman has
to be careful
when
running
down the
stairs in high
heels.
-The main
woman
should be
careful
walking
around the
canal
-The polaroid
pictures may
not develop
properly
-The main
woman will
have to be
careful with a
knife involved.
-The main
woman will
have to be
careful
walking in
the woods
with no
shoes on.
-Reflectionof
camera being
in the mirror.
-The main
woman needs
to be careful
with the
depth ofthe
water.
-The main
woman
needs to be
careful with
the knife
-The polaroid
camera phots
may not develop
properly.
-The makeup won’t
smear properly and it
won’t look realistic.