The document discusses a group analyzing and improving a sentence about why fewer people die after earthquakes in high-income countries. Members of the group provide suggestions to enhance the vocabulary, add qualifying words or phrases, and include a specific example to strengthen the point being made.

1. Jasmin – why do fewer people
die after an earthquake in
High Income Countries?

2. Jasmin – why do fewer people
die after an earthquake in
High Income Countries?
Good start. Do we all agree?
What could we change “rich”
to so we improve our
vocabulary? Is it always the
case?

3. Jasmin – why do fewer people
die after an earthquake in
High Income Countries?
Good start. Do we all agree?
What could we change “rich”
to so we improve our
vocabulary? Is it always the
case?
Darren – the end of this
sentence is crying out for a
certain word. What would you
add?

4. Jasmin – why do fewer people
die after an earthquake in
High Income Countries?
Good start. Do we all agree?
What could we change “rich”
to so we improve our
vocabulary? Is it always the
case?
Darren – the end of this
sentence is crying out for a
certain word. What would you
add?
I like the use of “because” but
we never say “stuff” . Jasmin –
back to you.

5. Jasmin – why do fewer
people die after an
earthquake in High Income
Countries?
Good start. Do we all agree?
What could we change “rich”
to so we improve our
vocabulary? Is it always the
case?
Darren – the end of this
sentence is crying out for a
certain word. What would
you add?
I like the use of “because”
but we never say “stuff” .
Jasmin – back to you.
Bella – what do we add to
elaborate on our point?

6. Jasmin – why do fewer people
die after an earthquake in
High Income Countries?
Good start. Do we all agree?
What could we change “rich”
to so we improve our
vocabulary? Is it always the
case?
Darren – the end of this
sentence is crying out for a
certain word. What would you
add?
I like the use of “because” but
we never say “stuff” . Jasmin
– back to you.
Bella – what do we add to
elaborate on our point?
The next thing we need is an
example. Who can add one?

7. Good start. Do we all agree?
What could we change “rich”
to so we improve our
vocabulary? Is it always the
case?
Darren – the end of this
sentence is crying out for a
certain word. What would you
add?
I like the use of “because” but
we never say “stuff” . Jasmin
– back to you.
Bella – what do we add to
elaborate on our point?
The next thing we need is an
example. Who can add one?
One final tweak – how can we
show the examiner we aren’t
using a generic example?