Comments on Gavin's genre piece

1. Gavin Jeganathan
Overall
Try to space out the text more or split it up into more paragraph its hard to follow when there is
multiple lines of really small text with nothing to break it up.
Home page:
The information is clearly presented in what things are going to be talked about.
Methods:
Explain what /r/smashbros is you talk about it but you don’t explain what it is or the meaning it has. You
discuss it being a forum but you don’t say where the forum is or what website its located on. What is
melee explain what this is your are using to much specific terminology without explaining the meaning
of it for someone who has no idea what you are talking about it is hard to follow.
You should split up the thing in you method section into other pages to present thing information
separately. The method section should just explain how you got your research and why its credible.
The additional part you have added where you discuss your research should not be done in the method
section as I mentioned previously you should take those and discuss them on another page and give
them more space so their isn’t so much information on the one page.
The information and way you present it is good however and it wouldn’t take much to put them to
different pages. You also provide good point and support for each thing you are trying to show.
Additionally you may want to put more of how this relate to class in you piece as you don’t talk about
how each of those things is part of what make up a community.
Swales:
You have a good swales paragraph as you talk about each aspect that you are going to discuss I you
piece.
I would consider putting the swales before the methods piece if you don’t change it the way I described
above in the methods section.
History
This would be the place where you would move some of you information for the methods slide.
Conclusion
You may want to edit your conclusion slide as it currently just shows the different things that may not
relate to you topic.