Development pro forma(3)

Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
Amelia France

Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
The building of the house which I have made is just by using the shapes. The particular parts which I like with
this image is that I have made it to represent a house properly. Of how the shapes have been varied from
through this house has been represented to be like this. By adding in the additional windows and so on.
However with the other image which is shapes which have been created to make a animal, meant to
enhance a bear. The things which I like about this image of what I have done is that it looks clearly like a bear
holding on to the tree branch. Both of these images I have made the colours have been made simple so it
relates back to the original image of what it was before.
What would you improve if you did it again?
The specific the things which I will improve to both of these two images is by firstly looking at the house one.
The further improvements which I would make is by putting into my house is shadows of where would need
to make it seem more realistic. As well as by doing this I would also make changes to more of the
background. As this needs more things disturbing to it, to make the image seem more for filled. However the
second image which I have made out of shapes of the bear I would make improvements is by making the
ears and paw of the claws more obvious and to make it seem that more linked into the animal itself. Instead
of being separated.

Evaluation
With my rotoscope I like the way I have shadowed into various colours of how the original once looked
before. As I have made the right colours in the right types of places for the Deadpool character which I have
chosen. As by having the various darker areas against the lighter colours makes it seem like it has been
brought out of the picture itself and also been made to seem that it links in with the image. By having the
various of colours gathered together just looks like one picture been stuck together, of his armour and face.
The definition of the darker colours also make it seem like he has got darker shadows against his clothing of
how it has been enhanced in to the Rotoscope to come through to life. The red colour which I have chosen
all collide into each other as by meaning this that all the reds work all good together. As they bring out one
dark red or light red out of picture. Also I like the way I have made the eyes of the mask part of Deadpool.
The way I have marked them out from else of this rotoscope, of the eyes. As you can see one side is made to
seem much darker than the other side. I have done this for a specific reason because I would think that one
side of Deadpool face would be in a shade of how the light has been reflected, but however, the other side
of Deadpool’s face wanted to make that seem light a bit brighter than the other side of how it would it to
imagine to be not in the shade.
I would improve with this image is with Deapool’s back sword which is covered just in one colour. As this
colour is just pure black. I would improve this by making shading on to it. As this would make it seem like the
picture will come more real looking of the shading I would project going down his sword going down behind
his back. Instead of just having one plain black colour. Should have made a pattern on it across as lighter
colours. This would have this type of item of his clothing of his outfit to stand out more. Also you can see
one of his hands seems a bit of rushed as you can see from the way the patches of colour have come
together. Also the outline of the hand could have been improved by doing some final shading towards it.

Evaluation
What I like about this image is that the way I have made the shark from each individual shapes by warping the shapes that
they are meant represent of the shark. Making all the colours of the shark the same as just one colour of a dark blue to
represent the colour of the shark. As this relates to the shark of from Finding Nemo. The shape of the shark is so recognised
by people who have watched the film Finding Nemo. I have used this quote which is within the shark. The font is in light
orange colour. As this is referring to the Nemo the fish that they shouldn’t eat, as they are his friends. As Nemo is a Clown
fish this represents him as the font. I have chosen this type of font as it is clear and easy to read from the background of the
shark. As well with this font I have a made a gap between fish are friends (gap) not food. The reason I have made a gap
between these words is because I thought it would define the words much better as the fish mean one thing and another to
not eat them. The reason I have made the word ,‘Food’ in bigger size to the other words in this quotation is because
defining that you can’t fish. The colours which I have chosen I like because they go so well together as both contrast well
together.
I need to improve for this image by making the eyes much better, as to make them more curved. Also making a jaw outline
of where the mouth would be good to show the teeth and to show that it is from shark from Finding Nemo. As the main
part of this character is his mouth of his teeth.

Evaluation
The types of things I like which I did to the text which was the way that for each one of these texts of my
name you could make different to previous one. As this shows that it gives the text more interesting features
towards whatever piece which it is for heading for it projects it across the page. Is I have been using the
leading and tracking. These make that I have spaced out the words and letters both equally horizontally and
diagonally. Across the page. As by doing this to some of the texts. I have also used the clipping mask tool is
by adding a picture from the internet of the Matterhorn in Zermatt landscape photography. As which this is
placed in font of the text which I have made bold and also to made the spaces between each letter going
both horizontally and diagonally should be close together. However they should be able to read the text of
you have written the text behind this picture. As you have made the picture big to cover the text then you
should use the clipping mask as then it reveals the the picture to appear in the texted writing. As projects a
amazing effect over looking the writing now as makes it seem more different just a boring old colour as it
has been changed to be photograph represented in the the text.
The improvements that I would make towards for the following texts. The first changes that I would make
towards the text which has the clipping mask over it. The following changes that I would make changes
towards this text is by adding shadows around the outside or the inside the letters as this would make the
text bring it out of the page. As this text has been made very light as the way the photograph has been taken
with loads of artificial lights which have come from the streets lights. So I would have bring this down by
using the darker tools around on Photoshop to make it more vibrant to notice it more.

Evaluation
With in this image what I like about making these images is the effect of having a comic book effect. Over
the top of them. By making from what they were to this. By having the comic book effect on top of the
current picture makes different elements of the details which have been enhanced within their faces. As this
types of effects has been effected by how much has been reflected onto their skins to their faces, depending
it is in light or dark. However also I like the way I have kind made these two pictures a bit unrecognisable to
others who were looking at these images. As I don’t think that they will know who these actor where or
even this footballer is. This makes within this image it keeps it more mysterious, of who could it be. Also I like
the way it just has chosen three or four colour’s to be only seen mostly. As they have just chosen these types
of colours is because they have been most frequent colours which had been noticed in the original picture of
these people.
However the things that I could improve within this image, is the following. Firstly by making the facial
expression be more noticed as this the image that you going to see than everything. So I would like to make
more noticed is around the eyes, mouth and nose. As these are the key parts of the face that become
represented into facial features. Also I could have changed the way that the black and white levels have been
made, to edit them even more, to show the brightness and the darkness.

Evaluation
The particular part I like to do with this image is that the way that it has all been shown in just in pictures
instead of it being illustrated by written text. As the way they have all been illustrated just through pictures
images tell the audience of what's happening through the whole story. Gives the sense of looking at it
through your eyes as this gives a clear point of view of what’s happening through each stage of the story.
From my plan of the drawing of what I did gave me simple way of how each stage of the story is going to be
set out in the camera of the photograph. However, also with the drawing plan of how I have planned out my
sketch for it showed me how to represent this kind of structure onto photoshop of when I was making them
all into position, to lay them all out. This made it looked more like a one of those kinds of books that you just
get pictures on with out text and which it was easy and simple to create 8 boxes for each stage.
However the things which I could improve for next for this type of project. Firstly is that when I am taking
each photograph from the camera is that I should take all the images one way. For mine I have made a
mixture of landscape and portrait. These two very different compositions didn’t work. So I should for next
time I should have just to take these kind of style of photograph to be taken one way which was going to be
portrait. Plus the other reason of taking these kind of photographs portrait is that I could make it easy fit on
to my board of the story. So I just needed to change the way I have taken the picture.

Evaluation
The types of things which I like with this piece of image is the way that you can see the darker shading
around the image which have come out more obvious in the scanning process. As the way it has been made
out that the shading around the main characters more obvious to see from the eye. Also the shading has
been made more effective as which this has been shown to be made more obvious. The way the different
formats of shading has took place with has been brought out of the picture. So by doing this has made the
darker colours be more appealing of the way I have gone over it over and over again. To make it stand over
the rest of the image which has been created.
The things that would improve on to this image. The following things are that you can see the very high light
bits like the background it had been covered in blue dots all over the white background. As this has gone on
to the scanner it has made to not show it as, it should be. As with the other light colours have been made
not noticeable as they should be. So I think I should have made the lighter colours much more darker by
going over it. As the lighter colours haven’t been done that well so as this will be something to improve on.

Evaluation
For this image which I have done here I like the way that I have made the sky come through of the clouds. As
the sky has been made in to the texture of clouds which has been converted through the dark blue sky
colour which I have picked before applying this clouds texture on to it. Also with this image I like the way that
I have used the rotoscopping all the objects and things inside the car. As with this it makes it look more
effective by having this texture of sky above it make it more dramatic. The way it looks for what I have
produced.
For this image I would improve is that I would put more textural elements of the car. As this would make it
seem more different and applying towards the audience to look at this image. As this would make it seem
more different to any other image of inside of rotoscopped car, by having these added features within it.

Proposal
Dimensions
The number pages that I will make is around 8 pages to 10 in total, for my type of storyline. As the page size will be A4, by
doing this on Photoshop I will make this on landscape as I want to show all my images like this that would be able to fit the
page. As most of the basis of my story is landscaped formed as I thought it would be better to make it like this instead of
having it on portrait.
Story Overview
The story which I am basing it around is Goldilocks story. As there will be twist into it by by not making into the woods it will
be based around Antarctica. As Goldilocks goes out on her journey with her dog she suddenly her husky dog called Bella. As
she loses her she tries to find her but she can’t as she becomes tried, hungry and sleepy. She finds a warm igloo which it is
smoke is coming out of as the air is filled with the delicious smells of what has been left in the oven. As she follows her
smells of where its has been coming from she sneaks in to the house of the penguins. As they have gone out of the hours for
a couple of hours she goes and digs herself in to some fish pie. As the first one was too hot, second one was too cold and the
last one was just equal on being both hot but cold. As she finishes the fish pie she goes up stairs to the penguins bedrooms
and lays down in there beds to see if which one is the most comfortable. As she had slept for some time the penguins come
in down stairs and they stay there food had been eaten and a chair had been broken. As they go upstairs to see that
Goldilocks is in there beds. The penguins snap at her and ran out out the door. As she had ran out she saw Bella again they
ran straight back home.
Export Format
PDF
Advantages: The advantages of using a PDF file is that when it comes to compressing images which have a high quality,
they turn into a smaller size file. As by having it made in to a smaller size then it is easier to be sent off into emails and also
another way to be easily to be saved. By having it made smaller file size it is able to fit a limited amount of storage space.
Disadvantages: The disadvantages by working with a PDF file is that when it actually becomes a PDF file it cannot
altered ever again to be edited again. As this is done when you think you have finished with it but as you have got more
things to do to it then it gets not easy to change it back and then to do more things which you wish to do it before.

Deadline
7th April
Audience
The audience which I am targeting at is 3 year olds to 6 year olds for children’s. As my book is specifically for children books
with a fairy tale with a big twist to it. As I am making it for both boys and girls who can read this book as it can have varied
for both genders. It can appeal to both genders. For the girls it can appeal to the girl reader audience is by having the main
character been played a girl it will make the girl readers more interested. By making the characters and animals in with it
makes it seem cute and adorable to interest them even more. However, with the boys on the other hand they will like that
the girl will get lost with in the story, the penguins seem angry at her when she wakes up. As this comes across as more of
an angry but an adventurous type of follow up of the story to make them go on with the story. The location of my book is
based in Antarctica. As this will give the audience a bit of of a difference of variety of style to this fairy tale story. Both of
my audience would like the types of animal characters which I have chosen to be within my story. As the cute animals
would appeal to the eyes of young children as how I would appeal the cuteness features with in the animals which will
project on to the children.
Production Methods
The methods that will use is rotoscoping. The reason that I will use this type of rotoscoping for my story is that I thought it
was a the best way to get my simple and visual look towards it with this style. As I would use this all over my story pages
going from characters and the backgrounds as well. However, the background I would use both rotoscope and filters. As
this will produce a different kind of effects for the various stages of the story which it will tell. As by having different kind of
effects of the backgrounds and the sky makes the character feel in different ways of how they are they going to be feeling
through out the story.

What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The story is well thought out and has a good twist
too it. The way you have changed the characters
and location the story is set is also good. You have
shown great detail in your explanations which will
help you develop the images if you need help. For
you Mood Boards I think you have considered lots
of different visuals and text fonts which will benefit
you when creating your book. You have kept the
story simple and easy to follow, this will appeal to
your age range very nicely. You have also
explained how your book will appeal to your target
audience very nicely.
For your story overview you could have explained
the difference between the original and the twisted
version by saying how you changed the scenery
and characters. For example, you talked about the
girl eating the food. You could have said this is
similar to the original as the girl eats the bears
porridge.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
The idea generation contains lots of useful ideas.
They are well thought out and are described in a
detailed way. The original story and twisted version
are both on the idea generation which provides a
good comparison.
For your idea generation, one improvement could
be to develop one more story instead of focusing
upon one individually. This will allow you to play
around with your ideas more giving you more
options to choose from. (if something goes wrong
with your first story you can have a backup)

One strength of this proposal is the storyline, this person
has clearly gone above and beyond when considering the
storyline and created a fresh and adventurous adaptation
that is really suitable for the chosen audience. Another
strength of this proposal is the production method, I think
this because due to the fact that this person has chosen to
use rotoscoping to create the illustrations for their book. This
is a strength because rotoscoping could be quite time
consuming.
In my opinion I don’t think that this proposal need any
further work because this person has clearly though out
every aspect of their book.
further developed?
One strength of this persons idea generation is that they
have again managed to cover every idea and part of the
book which they are creating. They have made their idea
generation very easy to follow and also clear for people that
might not know what the concept and intentions for their
book are. Another strength of this persons idea generation is
their mood boards this is because they have again managed
to go the extra mile and add a mood board for each feature.
No further development needed in my opinion.

creative adaptation of goldilocks story by
implementing an arctic twist, strong story overview
and export format advantage and disadvantage,
has elaborated well. Clearly production method and
their target audience is discussed well. Used a
simple story which will appeal well to your young
target audience.
Little development is needed on the proposal,
however the story could be developed on, for
example the changes done to your story could be
discussed and presented.
further developed?
The mood boards have been done in great detail,
presents a variety of different aspects of your story,
clear front type idea generation and also great
character visualisation with the picture in your
mood board.
Further location development could be shown in the
mood boards perhaps images of already existing
arctic scenery.

Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
The feedback that I got from all three of people who gave me. So firstly for my proposal they all thought that they all
liked that the way I had adapted me editions from the original story. Based as they liked the way I had changed the
background of where it it is meant to be set in the woodlands instead I changed to be set in ,Antarctica and also changed
the main three bears to be turned into penguins instead. Also they thought that my audience for my story was simple
and easy to understand what’s happening within this type of story. For the idea generations they thought they all liked
the way I have set out my mood boards for the various pictures that you would see throughout my book to capture every
moment. Like for instance the way I have got various images of of the individual characters of what they look like, which
have been placed in to different positions. However for the proposal they thought that I should have made more
information of where it was set. Also how I could have made the original story of how I had changed it to make the big
twist of how I had adopted it.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
The parts of the feedback which I do agree with what they have said. Is by firstly by them saying that my mood boards
look good and that they do consider what’s happening throughout my book. As if they have seen the book before they
could a sense of what it is about as have thought through out it. As this pictures in their minds what it will look like in
their minds of what I want them to imagine. I would say that agree that I would need to do more by placing more images
within my mood board for the backgrounds of how they can to look like. As they need more visual imagery with this part
of story. It would be kind of a good idea to have a backup to be put on to my idea generation of my mind map but
however it would made it more confusing because for the audience who where looking at my mind map. As I would have
to make a totally different type of mind map.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
The parts which I disagree with my feedback is that that I don’t need to do anymore work on my proposal as I think that
it doesn’t need anymore work doing to it. As I have already made it sound clear that what I have changed to my work
with the adoptions.

Original Script
Once upon a time there were three bears, who lived together in a house of their own in a
wood. One of them was a little, small wee bear; one was a middle-sized bear, and the other
was a great, huge bear.
One day, after they had made porridge for their breakfast, they walked out into the wood
while the porridge was cooling. And while they were walking, a little girl came into the house.
This little girl had golden curls that tumbled down her back to her waist, and everyone called
her by Goldilocks.
Goldilocks went inside. First she tasted the porridge of the great, huge bear, and that was far
too hot for her. And then she tasted the porridge of the middle bear, and that was too cold for
her. And then she went to the porridge of the little, small wee bear, and tasted that. And that
was neither too hot nor too cold, but just right; and she liked it so well, that she ate it all up.
Then Goldilocks went upstairs into the bed chamber and first she lay down upon the bed of
the great, huge bear, and then she lay down upon the bed of the middle bear and finally she
lay down upon the bed of the little, small wee bear, and that was just right. So she covered
herself up comfortably, and lay there until she fell fast asleep.
By this time, the three bears thought their porridge would be cool enough, so they came home
to breakfast.
“SOMEBODY HAS BEEN AT MY PORRIDGE!” said the great huge bear, in his great huge voice.
“Somebody has been at my porridge!” said the middle bear, in his middle voice.
Then the little, small wee bear looked at his, and there was the spoon in the porridge pot, but
the porridge was all gone.

Original Script
“Somebody has been at my porridge, and has eaten it all up!” said the little, small wee
bear, in his little, small wee voice
Then the three bears went upstairs into their bedroom.
“SOMEBODY HAS BEEN LYING IN MY BED!” said the great, huge bear, in his
great, rough, gruff voice.
“Somebody has been lying in my bed!” said the middle bear, in his middle voice.
And when the small, wee bear came to look at his bed, there was the bed cover
in its place, and the angelic face of a little girl snoring away, fast asleep.
“Somebody has been lying in my bed, and here she is!” Said the little, small wee
bear, in his little, small wee voice.
Goldilocks jumped off the bed and ran downstairs, out of the door and down the
garden path. She ran and she ran until she reached the house of her
grandmama. When she told her grandmama about the house of the three bears
who lived in the wood, her granny said: “My my, what a wild imagination you
have, child!”
http://www.storynory.com/2006/01/16/goldilocks-and-the-three-bears/

Story Breakdown
1. Goldilocks went for walk with her dog.
2. She finds a house that she comes across and so decides to go in.
3. She discovers a some fish pie and eats them
4. She sits on the three stools.
5. She gets tired and decides to sleep in their beds.
6. Penguins come back home.
7. She wakes up and runs back home with her dog again.

Draft Script
Once a upon a time there was a young girl called Goldilocks. She lived in Antarctica with her mum, dad and
friendly dog called Bella. One early morning as her mother and dad were asleep she sneakily crept out of the
house whilst they were all asleep. As Goldilocks didn’t listen to her mother that following evening. As she said
“Goldilocks, my lovely daughter listen to me please and don’t go outside on your own for adventures, as you know
what your like you will get lost so please stay inside with me and your father”. She didn’t listen to her mother that
following evening. As her mother had said to her to not go on adventures like these on her own but she didn’t care
she wanted to some freedom. So as she decided to take the adventure to her hands with her dog called Bella by
her side.
Goldilocks went for her adventures walk with her dog, as she travelled far and saw a in the far distance which was
light up, the house that had smoke coming out of the chimney that came with a strong smell of warm fish pie
wafting up into the air, as it touched her nose. This made her feel that even more hungry, plus she was so cold
from the storm outside from her far distanced walk she had travelled. Even that so tired to have a rest. She finally
got to the house she saw her eyes to spot a glimpse of the fish pie which caught her eye. Raced over towards the
food. She tried each individual of the pots of fish pies which were on offer to her. As the first she tried she said it
was to hot, the second was to cold but the last one was just right. As she devoured the rest of the pie that was just
right for her. As she was tired she decided to have a rest on the chair stools as the baby stool was small as so she
broke it. So she just moved on to see if the other two were better, so the dad one was was to big but the mum
penguins stool chair was just right. As Goldilocks sat here for a while she got sleepy and so comfortable so she
decided to go up stairs and to see where the bedrooms were. She finally found the beds she firstly tried sleep on
dads penguin bed as this was to hard, she tried to sleep on the mother penguins bed it was to soft and the baby
penguins bed was it was just right. Goldilocks, fell to sleep straight away. The penguins came back home, they
see that someone has disturbed there food, saw someone had broken there chairs and then they explored
upstairs to their bedrooms. They saw that their covers had been moved so they continued to look around they
eventually found Goldilocks in baby penguin bed. All the penguins over looked into the bed where Goldilocks was
sleeping in. She suddenly heard the growls of three penguins looking down at her. Then she suddenly screamed
with fright. Quickly dashed out of the house. Ran all the way home. With Bella the dog.

Final Script
Once upon a time there was a girl who lived in Antarctica, who lived with her two parents and her pet dog Bella. She was called
Goldilocks. As that following evening before her mother told her, “My lovely daughter, you shouldn’t go outside on those adventures
that you go out on, you scare me and your dad. Just listen to me please”. As from this she thought not much of it so she decided to
go an adventure with her and dog called Bella.
Goldilocks gets lost, its so blustery outside with the wind blowing in her face. This makes her even more and even more so cold, as
she starts to shiver she sees a igloo house far in the distances. She sees that the igloo has all of it’s lights on. Could even see the
smoke coming out of the chimney, as Goldilocks closer towards the smell of the smoke she could taste on her lips the delicious
tastes of fish pie. As she was imagining being inside that house being warm and cosy inside with warm food.
The young girl walked into the igloo, house she discovered the sight of the pot of bowls of three fish pies. She ran over, she tried
them all out, she tried the first one but it was too hot, as she tried the second one it was too cold but the last one was just right. She
stuffed her face with food until it was all gone.
As she got gradually full she decided rest on the chairs, as she discover these seats she sat down on each one. The first one was too
hard of dad penguins chair, the second one was too soft of the mothers penguins chair she broke this chair. Then she tried the baby
penguins chair it felt just right.
Goldilocks go gradually so tired after resting on the chairs for a while. She got so uncomfortable sleeping here. She decided to walk
up stairs to see where the bedrooms were. Young girl finally found the three beds as she tested them all out. To see which bed was
best for her. So the first one she test out was to uncomfortable for her, so then decided to try out the second one she came to. Which
was to soft for her. So she saw there was one left that had not been touched she went over and laid down on it. She said “This is just
right”. She didn’t move one bit.
Three penguins came back home to their igloo they saw that there home had been wrecked with while they had been gone.
Three penguins came upstairs and saw that someone was in their bed. As got ever so closer they saw that a young girl called
Goldilocks was sleeping in one their beds.
As the penguins crowded around her, she could hear the sounds, growls of the penguins at her, as she awakens by this.
She screams out of the house.
Runs back home.

Final Script
Goldilocks lived in Antarctica with Bella her dog and her mum.
Goldilocks mum warned her not to go out in the storm but she wanted an adventure.
Goldilocks got lost in the storm. She started to shiver. She saw a igloo far in the distance.
Goldilocks walked into the igloo. She saw three fish pies sitting on the counter. She tried the first one but it was too hot,
she tried the second one but it was too cold. The last one was just right. She stuffed her face with food until it was all
gone.
After eating, she decided to sit and rest. She saw three chairs in the living room. Dad penguins chair was too hard, the
Mother penguins chair was too soft. Then she tried the baby penguins chair. It felt just right.
Goldilocks became sleepy. She decided to walk up stairs to see where the bedrooms were.
The first one she test out was too hard. The second bed was to soft for her.
She laid down on the third bed. “This is just right”, she said.
Three penguins came back home to their igloo and they saw that their food had been eaten. They saw that their chairs
had been sat in.
The three penguins went upstairs and saw that Goldilocks was sleeping in one of their beds.
As the penguins crowded around her, the sounds and growls of the penguins woke her up.
Goldilocks screams and runs out of the igloo, all the way back home.

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