Development pro forma

Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
Oli Walwyn

Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like that this image is clearly recognisable as an elephant, as the shapes are accurate to the
original picture. Everything looks to be in the right place, such as the ears and tusks. It is a solid
shape, there are no gaps where they shouldn’t be or discrepancies. I also like how the
background is used to not only make the elephant stand out and clearly defined, but to show a
potentially nature environment for the animals. I like the different shades of brown to show the
shadows in the image, which are much better than if the elephant was just one colour.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I did it again, I would definitely take the time to give the elephant more distinguishable features
such as finer detail in its skin on its torso, trunk, legs and ear. I would also like to give it more
shadows on the ground, and on its legs to make the elephant look more realistic.

Evaluation
I like the simplicity of the pelican, it has a certain style that allows it to be clearly identified, but
also retains its cartoony feel. I like the use of the line tool (shortcut = U) to give the effect of a
beak. I like how the use of shapes shows the block colours of how the bird is; it has a unique and
friendly style.
To improve this image, I would definitely add more detail into the feathers as I had to cut corners
to be able to get the pelicans wing to look like a wing. I would also add in many more textures
give the bird a finished look. I could: give more shadows to show of the light is reflecting in the
original image, change the opacity of the beak to show how the sun shines through, and give the
pelican a reflection in the water to show that it is swimming.

Evaluation
I like the pop-art style of the image. I think that the monochrome scale of the piece works really
well to make the face look accurately shaded (generally darker on the left, lighter on the right)
which looks how the laws of light would shine onto his face. In particular, I like the shapes that
create the shadow on his hair; as although much of the image is created using blocky shapes;
they are spikey and jagged which have been created using the Polygonal Lasuo Tool (shortcut=L)
and works really effectively.
I would spend much more time with the shading by using smaller shapes to get a finer detail. My
only worry is that this might spoil or change the style of the image, which is meant to be edgy
and rough. I might also try to colourise the image which may be interesting as the image is
originally in black and white.

Evaluation
I enjoy the style of this image. I like how the variety of shades of blues and greens that are used
to create a pleasant environment. I also really love the jagged style of how it has been made, it’s
not rushed or careless, but stylised and interesting too look at. The clouds have been blurred
using the Gaussian Blur in Photoshop which looks really nice in the sky and is contrasting to the
sharp feel of the rest of the image.
To improve this image, I would experiment with the blurring of certain shapes such as all of the
shading in the image, in particular, the water shading. I might also spend more time making
shapes from the original photograph of individual shadows in the background and giving the
image finer detail. However, both of these things may ruin the style of the image, which is one of
the key features.

Evaluation
What I’ve changed from the original here is all of the shapes that create the shading in the image
have been Gaussian blurred which makes everything slightly out of focus. This gives the image an
almost realistic feel as the background of a photograph would usually be out of focus as it isn’t
the main subject.
It’s hard to decide whether or not this edit has ruined the initial style of the image that made it
standout. I much prefer this edit of the image. The blurring gives the picture a unique feel – a
kind of pop-out art that may be suitable for a children's book.
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Evaluation
I like the variety in the fonts and style. I love the way that some of the words are more striking
than others, and from afar, it just looks like a fusion of scribbles that are incoherent. I really like
how some of the words have been warped and stretched to make them more abstract.
I think this collaboration of words could be improved if there was a greater variety of colour. I
could also play around with the Stroke, Satin and Drop Shadow in Photoshop’s Blending Options
and see what looks good visually.

Evaluation
I like how well this image has been converted into the style of a comic book. It works really well
as there are only several primary colours in the original image, and so doesn’t lose much detail
when it has been converted in Photoshop > Filter Gallery, but still retains that cartoon quality. It
has been edited so that everything in the image is still recognizable, but only the main elements
have been emphasised: Quentin Tarantino and Samuel L Jackson. Thing such as the green bush in
the background of the original image can no longer be made out as a bush, but still adds to the
detail of the image.
To improve this image, I might open it in Photoshop and go into Image > Adjustments > Threshold
and see what looks aesthetically pleasing and fits the style that has been used. I might also
change the type of speech bubble, which doesn’t necessarily look good in this context.

Evaluation
I really like the use of shadows in this image. The way the light reflects off of Anakin’s face is really
cool. There isn’t a great variation of colour in the original photograph and so these are merged
into a clay-like brown colour, but the comic strip really captures the essence and anger of the
dramatic scene. The style looks as though it could be an actual comic book, which works really
well.
To improve this image, I could play with different settings in Photoshop such as
brightness/contrast, levels, curves and exposure and see if I can improve the aesthetic of the
image. I think that decreasing the darkness would make everything look much better.

Evaluation
I love how this image has been created using only two shades: black and white. The shapes that
white and the absence of white makes is really interesting. This is a really effective style of comic
that is pleasing not only from a visual perspective, but also from a conceptual angle. It’s really
fascinating that you can tell a story with only black, or only white.
I find this image really amazing, but I feel that many people wouldn’t be able to appreciate this
image, especially upon first glance. It might be too simplistic for some people or too abstract. This
could be improve by adding more shades into the image to make everything recognizable.

Evaluation
The Star Wars loving side of me really likes this image because of the of the whole Jedi (good) vs
Sith (evil) idea. Jedi Light Sabers are generally softer colours such as blue and green whereas Sith
Light Sabers are a harsh red colour. This image represents that conflict in the colours, which
compliments the scene really nicely.
This edit is probably my favourite as it still holds the comic book style, but also has a greater
meaning to it as well. To improve it, I might erase some of the detail in the background that
shouldn’t necessarily be there, but has been caught up in the filter. This would make Anakin and
Obi Wan the only things in the image (other than the colours and the speech bubble.)

Evaluation
I like how all of the images are in the same style. The shadow works really well with the setting of
the comic. I also like how the speech bubbles are all the same type, with the same effects. This
really gives the feel of a collection of strips, rather than just a lone image.
To improve this image, I might give it a greater variety of the shape of the images, and improve
the format of the images, rather than just being in columns and rows. I might also experiment
with different filters in Photoshop to change the style of the cartoon.

Evaluation
I feel that this illustration really fits the quote that I was given. I really do like this image; the pose
of the sergeant, the soldiers, the eagle and the background flag just work really well together. The
sergeant is intimidating as he’s pointing right at the view, breaking the wall between an image
and real life which is really effective. I also really like the cartoon style that has been used in the
sergeant, the eagle and the soldiers that makes them look realistic, yet animated at the same
time. I feel that this montage represents what is being said in the quote very well.
To improve this image, I might find more stereotypically American objects to put in the
background to show the sergeant’s patriotic attitude. However, this might also ruin the style of
the image and make it too busy and clumsy.

Evaluation
I think that the style of the image really represents the quote and Robert De Niro’s character in
the 1995 film “Casino”. I feel that the background image that I used is relevant and effective as
the film has strong references to mafia culture and the white on black looks dynamic. I also like
that the filter that has been used shows the facial expression, almost as if he is saying it. It
emphasises key features on a face such as the eyes and mouth; which make it recognisable.
To make improvements to this image, I might add more variety to the background and maybe
include a direct reference to love or trust. I might also change the font of the writing to
something that is even more bold.

Moodboards of chosen idea
The Poor Devil: The Peasant:

The Cow: The Swamp Scenes:

The Devil’s Bush Scenes The Field/Path Scenes:

Proposal
Dimensions
Number of pages: 8 pages
Dimensions: 22 x 0.3 x 22cm
Story Overview
• There was once a peasant that prayed to God to look after his cow.
• The Devil heard this from his bush and thought “When things turn out well, people thank God, but if anything goes wrong, then
they blame me!”
• The cow gets stuck in a swamp, the peasant sees and curses the devil for this misfortune. This makes the devil feel sad.
• The peasant goes out to seek help to get his cow out of the swamp, meanwhile, the devil comes out and helps the cow out by
himself. He did this because he wanted people to know that he wasn’t all evil. The devil then hides back in his bush.
• The peasant comes back and sees the cow and thanks God.
• The devil starts to cry as he wanted recognition for the act.
The end.
Export Format
JPEG
Advantages: Small file size.
• Good for use on websites where data usage is important.
• Widely compatible with most mobile phones, tablets, computers, cameras etc.
Disadvantages:
• Sacrifice image quality for file size meaning that the images produced will not be in the best resolution.

Deadline
15th January 2016
Audience
Age: The think that this book will be appropriate for ages 6-8. I think this because the moral of the story is
quite an advanced narrative that might confuse the minds of anything below that age.
Gender: This book will not exclude any genders and it is appropriate for both female and male readers.
Hobbies: The reader of the book might enjoy reading meaningful, yet unique and artistic children’s books.
Geo-demographics: The book will be written in British English meaning that it will be appropriate for
anyone in English speaking countries. If it is successful, it will be translated into many other world languages
so that it is accessible for everyone.
Production Methods
To produce my pages, first I will create all of the scenes in the story. The background areas such as the field,
the Devil’s bush and the swamp will be the priority to begin with as these are where the story takes place.
To create these, I will rotoscope photographs of how I imagine these places will look. I will make sure that
each one has lots of detail, especially in the shading and blurring, but also with a unique cartoon style. Next,
I will create four separate views of each of the main three characters: front, left, back and right. These will
be created; using the inspiration of my moodboards; with the shape tool in Photoshop and then warped
into an appropriate position. I will then arrange the scene, using the characters and background I’ve already
made, and do any necessary editing to the pose and position of the characters to suit what is happening in
the story. For example, I will need to edit the left view of the cow to show that she’s stuck in the mud.

What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The proposal is very detailed. I like how you split
the audience section into four different parts. It
made it clear and easy to understand.
To me the proposal is packed with relevant
information and it covers just about everything.
A slight mistake in the audience section when
saying ‘ confused ‘ instead of confuse, but that is it.
(amended, thank you.)
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Again this section is packed with great information
and is very interesting. Every relevant aspect of the
story is explained in great detail and it’s easy to
follow and understand. It has a very nice layout.
Possibly annotate the mood boards and say what
things you like about each photograph and what
aspects of each of the chosen images you intend to
use in your own interpretation.

You have a extremely detailed proposal with a
layout on how the story will unfold, you have
thought about what type of people would be
interested in your story and from this you have a
clear view of how you are going to develop you
book.
I could not find anything to improve.
further developed?
The idea is interesting and detailed you have a lot
of ideas in your mind maps and had a few other
ideas as well, which is good as you clearly thought
about which idea would be best suited.
May be a good idea to say why you picked certain
images on the mood board.

I think that the strengths of the proposal is that it
has detail and ideas to create a good story. It
includes lots of annotation on the characters and
images which can help create the characters.
Out of all the stories in the ideas page say why you
have chose to do this story.
further developed?
The strength in the idea generation is there is a lot
of information on the story. It has the different types
of scenery and characters in the story.

Feedback Summary
The feedback that has been given is very positive. They all said that my proposal and idea
generation was detailed and relevant. A grammatically error has been pointed out, which is
have since amended. Everything that was said has been useful to me and I will take these
into account.
I agree with the sections that say that I should annotate my moodboards and say why I
chose those specific images and not others. I also agree that I should say why I chose “The
Poor Devil” over the other folktales that I researched in my initial idea generation.
I don’t disagree with any of the feedback that has been given.

Original Script – The Poor Devil
http://www.readbookonline.net/readOnLine/62673/
Once upon a time there was a peasant, who led his cow to pasture in the spring, and prayed God to have
her in His care.
The evil one was sitting in a bush, heard him, and said to himself: "When things turn out well, they
thank God for it; but if anything goes wrong, then I am always to blame!”
A few days later the cow strayed into a swamp. And when the peasant came and saw her he said: "Look
at that! The devil has had his finger in the pie again!”
"Just what I might have expected," thought the devil in his bush. Then the peasant went off to fetch
people to help drag the cow out. But in the meantime the devil slipped from his bush and helped out
the cow, for he thought:
"Now he will have something to thank me for, too.”
But when the peasant came back and saw the cow on dry land, he said: "Thank God, she's out again!"

Once upon a time, a peasant was leading his cow to pasture in Springtime. He prayed to God to keep his
cow safe, as he was quite poor and didn’t have many belongings. “I pray to God to look after this cow.
She’s all I have.”
Close-by, the Devil was sitting in a bush relaxing, and overheard the peasant travelling by. He thought to
himself “When things turn out well, they thank God for it; but if anything goes wrong, then I am always
to blame!”
A few days later, the cow was wandering through a field when it became marshy and muddy. The cow
tried to get out, but couldn’t. “Moooo” she bleated in panic. She was stuck in the mud.
Hours had past when the peasant came along to check on his cow to find that she had become rooted in
thick, gloopy mud. “Oh no! The devil has had his finger in the pie again!” the peasant exclaimed. The
peasant went to get help from a nearby village.
The Devil overheard the calamity and grunted “Just what I might have expected. Maybe if I help the cow
out, people will see that I’m not that bad, and the peasant will have to thank me.” So the Devil did
exactly that and used his magical fork to pull the cow out of the mud.
After finding no one to help him, the peasant wondered back to where the cow was stuck. He saw that
the cow had been recused and shouted “Thank God! She’s out again”.
The Devil was deeply upset with this as he didn’t get credit for the good deed that he had done. He
woefully began to cry: alone in his bush…
Final Script Draft 1 – The Poor Devil

Once upon a time, there was a peasant named Jonathan who was leading his cow called Daisy to pasture
in Springtime. He prayed to God to keep her safe, as Jonathan was quite poor and didn’t have many
belongings. “I pray to God to look after Daisy. She’s all I have.”
Close-by, the Devil was sitting in a bush relaxing, and overheard Jonathan and Daisy travelling by. He
thought to himself “When things turn out well, they thank God for it; but if anything goes wrong, then I
am always to blame!”
A few days later, Daisy was wandering through a field when it became marshy and muddy. Daisy tried to
get out, but couldn’t. “Moooo” she bleated in panic. She was stuck in the mud.
Hours had past when Jonathan came along to check on Daisy to find that she had become rooted in
thick, gloopy mud. “Oh no! The devil has been at it again!” Jonathan exclaimed. He decided to go and
get help from a nearby village.
The Devil overheard the calamity and grunted “Just what I might have expected. Maybe if I help Daisy
out, people will see that I’m not that bad, and Jonathan will have to thank me.” So the Devil did exactly
that and used his magical fork to pull her out of the mud.
After finding no one to help him, Jonathan wondered back to where Daisy was stuck. He saw that she
had been recused and shouted “Thank God! Daisy’s out again”.

Once upon a time, there was a peasant named Jonathan who was leading his cow called Daisy to pasture
in Springtime. He prayed to God to keep her safe, as Jonathan was quite poor and didn’t have many
belongings. “I pray to God to look after Daisy. She’s all I have.”
Close-by, the Devil was sitting in a bush relaxing, and overheard Jonathan and Daisy travelling by. He
thought to himself “When things turn out well, they thank God for it; but if anything goes wrong, then I
am always to blame!”
A few days later, Daisy was bored and started wandering outside of her field. She found a mysterious
path and curiosity got the best of her… The path became marshy and muddy and she slid into a sticky
swamp. Daisy tried to get out, but couldn’t. “Moooo” she bleated in panic. She was stuck in the mud.
Hours had past when Jonathan came along to check on Daisy to find that she had become rooted in
thick, gloopy mud. “Oh no! The devil has been at it again!” Jonathan exclaimed. He decided to go and
get help from a nearby village…
The Devil overheard the calamity and grunted “Just what I might have expected. Maybe if I help Daisy
out, people will see that I’m not that bad, and Jonathan will have to thank me.” And so the Devil did
exactly that and used his magical fork to pull her out of the mud.
After finding no one to help him, Jonathan wondered back to where Daisy was stuck. He saw that she
had been recused and shouted “Thank God! Daisy’s out again”.

Page Structure:
Page 1: Shows Jonathan and Daisy in a forest with Jonathan praying to God to keep her safe.
Page 2: Shows the Devil in a bush wondering why people thank God for everything good and why he’s
always blame for things going wrong.
Page 3: Shows Daisy going beyond where she should be with a swamp close-by.
Page 4: Shows Daisy getting stuck in the mud trying to get to a nice patch of grass.
Page 5: Shows a shocked Jonathan coming by and seeing Daisy stuck in the mud, for which he blame
the Devil.
Page 6: Shows Jonathan running to go and get help from a nearby village to get Daisy out.
Page 7: Shows the Devil thinking in his bush about how he can clear his name. He decides to help
Daisy out himself so that everyone will see that he’s not so bad.
Page 8: Shows the Devil pulling Daisy out of the mud with his magical fork. She ‘moos’ in gratefulness.
Page 9: Shows Jonathan comes back after finding no one to help him. He sees that Daisy is out of
the mud and thanks God.
Page 10: Shows the Devil crying in his bush because no one appreciates him.

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