Current development pro forma

1. Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
Liam Allan

2. Shape Task

3. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked the way I managed to merge in textures from the original image such as
grass and the back of the horse, all while keeping a very much cartoon
appearance/style. I also like the way I managed to edit the shapes to fit the
original image by firstly lowering the opacity of the shape and then erasing any
overlapping shape thus giving the image a cleaner look as appose to many shaped
clashing with one and another.
What would you improve if you did it again?
To improve I would finish off the fence in the background as at the moment it has
no support and appears to be floating mid air. I would also work on the tail more
than before as at the moment the black colour looks too random among the
brown body. Finally I would add more detail to the backgrounds as at the moment
the texture in the grass ends abruptly and the sky is just a bare blue to fix this I
would add extra detail such as clouds and or tree, as is seen in the original
picture.

4. Rotoscope

5. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the way I have used the colour range tool on the Robin’s head to add texture
but not reduce the cartoon quality of the image which occurred when I used the
same technique on the branch and Robin’s feet. I also liked the use of strokes on
each layer as this gave the image more definition and a cartoon look this is
because the use of strokes are very common in animation, comics etc.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would improve the shape of the body as it overlaps the branch on the right. I
would also get rid of the few marks around the picture to clean up the
appearance of the image. The eye also has slight slope at the top which gives the
Robin a more angry looking expression when compared to the original. Another
improvement I would make is adding some form of background to the image as at
the moment it appears that the Robin is merely floating mid air with no support

6. Text Based

7. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the way I have chosen an appropriate colour scheme to match the background and scenarios of
both quotes.
”Hey Listen!” is a quote from Navi in the Legend of Zelda series the colour green represents Link and the
red connotes the annoyance of most fans tied to this quote.
“What Is Game Night?” is a quote from Gavin Free, an internet personality, and I have chosen white to
reflect the simplicity associated with fans impressions of Gavin as he is know for his stupidity amongst
his fans.
I also like my use of the clipping mask on the “Hey Listen!” picture as I had to edit the image quite
considerably in order for it to fit, I firstly had to upscale the image as well as rotate it to fit the text, I
then had to alter the background of the image and give it a slightly darker colour tone as the original
was a white that was very glaring and took away the focus on the image of Navi and focused it on the
background.
What would you improve if you did it again?
To improve I would add more detail to the backgrounds such as add a certain texture to the
pictures as appose to only a colour being present to represent certain traits and themes, for
instance possibly adding some Hyrule scenery in the background of “Hey Listen!”. I would
also possibly consider a different image of Gavin Free for “What is Game Night?” as the
current image can be hard to make out due to the face being cut off slightly.

8. Comic Book

9. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
In the Baseball picture I like the way I have transferred the detail across from the original such as grass, creases
in clothes, etc. As these translate very well to add to a more cartoony/comic book appearance. The white lines
in the grass behind the batsman has come out with a more patchy appearance which helps toward the desired
comic book style.
In the Red VS Blue picture I am very fond of the the effects I used which were:
Poster Edges and ink outlines. Firstly I used poster edges as the original image had a more photo realistic look
as appose to a cartoon/comic and by adding this effect it gives the appearance of a stroke (as mentioned
previously) however I had to lower the edge intensity as on the default setting it took away the images original
appearance and give it a more gritty look. Next I used ink outlines to brighten up the image, by doing so it
made the image stand out more from the original by adding a neon-like effect to the red and blue armour
which draws more attention to the image and is more appropriate as the main focus of Red VS Blue is as it says
team red and blue.
What would you improve if you did it again?
To improve my images I would first focus on the baseball picture and possibly add some form of filter such as
ink outlines as at the moment the picture had a darker colour scheme than the original which should not
necessarily be the case as comics and cartoon tend to be made of brighter colours when compared to reality, I
would also lower the threshold as at the moment the face of both the batter and catcher is completely blacked
out.
Next I would look at the Red VS Blue image and possibly slightly lower the light intensity of the ink outlines as
at the moment the image is as I want it but is very glaring on the eye so by lowering it this will make the image
slightly less of a challenge to the eyes.

10. Photography
Happiness Excitement
Loneliness

11. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked the way each picture fits suitably into each theme not just with facial expressions and
placements but colour schemes, for example:
In the happiness photo we deliberately chose a white background closer to the light source
because this gave the photo a brighter feel which connotes happiness.
In the photo for excitement we took a shot from afar to capture the rest of the corridor this
shows how excitement can occur at any place, this place being a daily routine.
The Loneliness photo is noticeably less lit than the other two to reflect the dark feelings
associated with loneliness it is also taken from a higher angle to give the impression of the viewer
looking in as appose to being there to add to the loneliness effect.
What would you improve if you did it again?
In terms of improvement I think the excitement photo could have used better lighting to add a
happier appearance so if I were to do this again I would maybe experiment with different areas
to take the image, I believe a setting outside would have been ideal for this as it would greatly
fix the lighting and give off a happier vibe due to the wide open space as appose to a seemingly
cramped corridor.

12. Illustration

13. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the way I have used colour to match the original image such as the black on Geoff’s t-shirt, as well
as the yellow on his sunglasses.
I also managed to eliminate a few mistakes before taking the image such as the right hand being too
close to the microphone, so I made the hand a tad smaller than it was previously so that it would fit the
outline style of the original.
What would you improve if you did it again?
To improve I would firstly go over the outlines in either a harder pencil stroke or pen to give the image
more definition as appose to it just being there.
I would also add the gray background that is present in the original image as well as fixing the size of
both the hair and hand as in my image they appear much larger than they actually are in the original
image.
The shape of Geoff’s head could also be improved as in my image it is flat on the top where as in the
original it is rounded toward the top.

14. Initial Ideas

15. How the Laughingstock ship should vaguely Look
but with a face/mouth on the front for speech.
“Skin Taker” (name to be changed) should
still be a skeleton as this often appears in
children's media
Appearance of Candle Cove (pirate islands) base off
of Monkey Island style map (top right)
Still have swords but not use them in violence
“Pirate Percy” from the original Candle Cove I
will base the character off this image

16. The original character of Poppy. I will remake the
character but with a much brighter colour scheme in order
to appeal more to children.
I will need a Skull and Crossbones for the flags of the ship.
The bottom image is the original Laughingstock Crew flag
I will need a logo for the TV show “Pirate Islands” at the start of the story I
can take inspiration form many other logos of pirate based material
All pirate ships have a recurring layout which is two staircases either side a door so I will use this setup
to give a more recognizable appearance for the children reading.

17. Mind Map

18. Proposal
Dimensions
I will create a book of 10 pages at 2480x1650 pixels
Export Format
PDF
Advantages: Not directly editable, fixed images as appose to relying on assets to exist
on the computer, can be accessed on most devices
Disadvantages: May result in a large file size depending on amount of pages.
Story Overview
The story begins with a young boy watching a TV show about pirates. He wishes he too
could be a pirate someday, he then falls asleep as it’s late at night. He awakens aboard
a pirate ship amongst a crew of three other pirates. The child is overjoyed to be with
real life pirates, he discovers he is in a group of islands called Candle Cove and that the
ship he is aboard is called the Laughingstock. The crew tells the boy he is here because
of a skeleton who is the arch enemy of them and the rest of Candle Cove and that he
must help take down this enemy and the crew of the Laughingstock will help him get
back home in return.

19. Production Methods
For the first sequence of the boy watching TV I will take a photograph and then
rotoscope and colour it for a more cartoon effect.
For the rest of the book excluding the final page (when he returns home) I will use
internet images and rotoscope them and or use filters as well as colour range for
shadows and other details. The images will be sourced online because of the
theme being pirates and an adventure at sea, meaning these images will be hard to
capture in York as It is not a seaside town.
Audience
I will be targeting this book at younger children between the ages of 4-7 as at this age children
have a very heightened imagination at this age and pirates are a common theme in media for
younger boys.
The book will also be of interest to groups of parents who are avid internet users as the story
is based off an internet urban legend of the same name.
In terms of geodemographics this book will appeal to any young child who speaks English
because (as stated before) pirates often appear in younger children’s media and are often
enjoyed due to the enhanced imagination of children this young.
Deadline
16th October 2014

20. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The ideas and thoughts are exploding with
imagination and its clear the creator has a very
strong image of the book that is being created. The
ideas are relevant to the target audience and age
group selected. The book sounds both appealing to
children and parents.
I am concerned that the book will not meet the
deadline so either extra work is needed or some
ideas may have to be slightly scaled down, for
instance, the pirate ship is looking like it will be
difficult to create even though the ideas to create it
seem basic, I am also wondering if the piece is
actually the writers own work as it appears that
images are being taken off the internet and edited,
also remember how long a detailed rotoscope
takes, can you meet the deadline?
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
The strengths on the idea generation is that the
mood board is annotated so it is clear of the ideas
you are trying to get across, the moodboard also
helps someone seeing it understand in further
detail what you are planning on including in the
book. The mindmap is filled with loads of accurate
words that all link into ideas and its very direct.
There isnt much variety in the moodboard so the
viewers imagination is cut down.

21. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The story is well thought out (I have no idea
weather it is an adapted folk tale, or something of
you own creation, still good though).
You don’t specify what page size your going to
have….. That’s about it really everything else
seems top form.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Some clever idea’s which I think will work out well(
taking the pictures and making them cartoony,
shouldn’t take long and makes them look good),
and your audience part I agree with.
Not a lot, but if I may point out something for the
seaside pictures- trip to Whitby? Lots of genuine
16-17th century ships there, as well as obviously the
sea.

22. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
The story appears to be well thought out and
original. The advantages and disadvantages of the
export format are well considered. The story
appears to be well suited for the audience and the
parents are also considered within the target
audience which is important. Production methods
well thought of.
What are the dimensions you will be using for your
book. Will it be large or small, square or
rectangular?
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
A very detailed mind map full of a range of ideas
which then helped to create a good mood board.
The mood board is specific to your story and
annotated to inform us as to why you have
displayed the images you have chosen.
More detail could go into your mood board.
Consider the appearance of the child and the
setting of their home, what will that look like?
Collect a wider range of images that you can use to
rotoscope when you make your story. What will all
the pirates look like, will they all dress slightly
differently?

23. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
I am happy with almost all of the feedback I was given as it was straight to the point
about what should be improved and vice versa. I agree with the majority of the
criticisms as they are all commenting on clear rough edges of the story that I can take on
board and try to improve.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I agree with the comments made on the first page about the Laughingstock possibly not
being able to meet the deadline due to the detail included and this was rather helpful as
I didn’t think about the time frame of the project.
I also fully agree with me adding more detail into a concept of the appearance of the
child as well as their home.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I don’t really agree with the point of the mood board having not enflaming imagination
as I have clearly added text boxes to paint a picture of how the book’s characters and
contents will be represented, despite leaving a few out,.

24. Storyboard
1

25. Storyboard 2

26. Storyboard 3 (Final)

27. Original Script 1

28. Original Script 2

29. Original Script 3

30. Original Script 4

31. Original Script 5
From: http://creepypasta.wikia.com/wiki/Candle_Cove

32. Final Script
Page 1 – George is sat in his room watching a TV show called Pirate Islands when his mum tells him “Go to bed
now, it’s late!”
Page 2 - George get’s into bed and we see the rest of his room which has pirate themed posters, toys, etc.
everywhere. (No words on this page)
Page 3 - George then awakens in a ship amongst a pirate crew of three to which they introduce themselves:
Percival, Captain Silver and Poppy.
Page 4 - Silver then explains that George is in a set of pirate islands called Candle Cove because he was
summoned here by the Fun-Taker along with many other children never to return home.
Page 5 - “The Fun-Taker must be defeated in order for you and the others to return safely and for Candle Cove
to return to how it used to be before the Fun-Taker arrived.” explains Captain Silver.
Page 6 - Silver asks George to join the Laughingstock crew but as he is about to accept the Laughingstock ship
says that she thinks she can see the Fun-Takers ship
Page 7 - The Laughingstock set’s sail toward the Fun-Takers ship while Captain Silver tells George that a Talking
ship is perfectly normal in Candle Cove the Laughingstock says “You have…to…go…inside”
“But that isn’t very normal” says Captain Silver.
Page 8 - The Laughingstock crew then boards the Fun-Taker’s ship to find It is almost identical to that of the
Laughingstock only more worn and battered. George then asks “So where actually is this Fun-Taker?”
Page 9 – “How are you finding Candle Cove my boy?” whispers the Fun-Taker from behind the Laughingstock
crew. Percival gives the boy a sword “It’s dangerous to fight unarmed, take this!”
Page 10 – The Fun-Taker and the boy get close and closer to edge of the ship until the Fun-Taker falls into the sea
and disappears leaving behind only his hat and cape.
Page 11 – A portal opens up for the boy to go home “Thanks to you Candle Cove is safe again!” Percival tells the
boy, each crew member thanks the boy as he steps into the portal.
Page 12 – The boy wakes up in his room the next day and hangs his sword on the wall so he never forgets his
time in Candle Cove.

33. Digital Flat Plans
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34. Page 2

35. Page 3

36. Page 4

37. Page 5

38. Page 6

39. Page 7

40. Page 8

41. Page 9

42. Page 10

43. Page 11

44. Page 12