3. Stephanie Green15 November 2012
03:46
Some of the shots are too noisey and need
refilming. The shot of Max where he says
'you sacrificed everything...' is cut too
quickly and some of his line is missing from
the beginning. Also to shorten your video
you could take out some shots and just use
the voice from one over another - where
Georgia is crying, max could be saying 'im
glad your crying...'
Editing is quick and percise making the
shots flow which is good

4. Max Hornby15 November 2012 03:52
Your trailer is missing background music so
does not fit the conventions of a scripted
reality trailer. During the first scene the
camera is not steady and the framing is
wrong this leads to the scene looking
unrealistic. You have used a variaty of
shots making the trailer interesting and
your sound is clear

5. harrietT15 November 2012 03:57
i like how the trailer has a good story line to
it just need to add music and out some
transitions in :)

6. Katie Fowler15 November 2012 04:02
The soryline leaves you wanting to watch
more and doesnt reveal too much! You just
need to add music and change some of the
shaky shots. Also there is quite alot of
backgound noise in some clips

7. Georgia Adams15 November 2012 04:14
Some scenes have too much background
sound and it is hard to hear characters
speaking, some scenes need quick cuts to
show emotion and exaggeration. The
storyline is good and works well in the
order you have put it in.

8. Aquinas College Media & Film
Dept16 November 2012 07:16
Good. Main issues are sound and shaky
camerawork which you and your group
have already picked up on. Needs a proper
ending- someone needs to tell your
character that Steph has already gone
when you get to the station so it's clear to
the audience that you are trying to catch
her.

9. Stephanie Green15 November 2012
03:46
Some of the shots are too noisey and need
refilming. The shot of Max where he says
'you sacrificed everything...' is cut too
quickly and some of his line is missing from
the beginning. Also to shorten your video
you could take out some shots and just use
the voice from one over another - where
Georgia is crying, max could be saying 'im
glad your crying...'
Editing is quick and percise making the
shots flow which is good

10. Max Hornby15 November 2012 03:52
Your trailer is missing background music so
does not fit the conventions of a scripted
reality trailer. During the first scene the
camera is not steady and the framing is
wrong this leads to the scene looking
unrealistic. You have used a variaty of
shots making the trailer interesting and
your sound is clear

11. harrietT15 November 2012 03:57
i like how the trailer has a good story line to
it just need to add music and out some
transitions in :)

12. From this feed back I learned that having shaky scenes is not
appropriate for certain scenes because it ruins certain moments
in the soap, however in some scenes it is ok to have the
handheld feel to the scene so the audience feels like they are
there in the scene. Furthermore for a trailer the soundtrack and
dialogue audio levels need to be mixed so that the soundtrack
has an effect to the audience but not so much that the audience
end up listening to the track instead of what is going on in the
trailer. Also the edits in a trailer should be quick and sharp so
that no time is lost that doesn't give out anything but information
about the soap so that the audience does not loose interest.

14. Aquinas College Media & Film
Dept13 December 2012 07:48
A good start but you've misspelt
"inspiration"! And with main feature can't
read the sub- heading and text needs to be
lower case to match the conventions of
Fabulous magazine. Maybe move main
feature to top left, above "50 soap
bloopers" so it's the first thing the reader
sees.

15. From the feedback on my ancillaries I have learned
that I should follow the conventions from my existing
product that I chose. For example I first used
capitals for the information below one of the
headlines and after the feedback I saw the mistake
and corrected so that it fitted in to the convention.
Also from the feedback I was able to develop from
the existing product and improve my product by
changing the positioning of one of the headlines.