The document discusses wordiness and provides examples of wordy versus concise writing. It encourages getting to the point, staying on topic, using plain language instead of fancy words, examining sentence structure, avoiding passive voice, and making writing concise overall. Some tips include removing extra words, shortening sentences, and focusing on the key ideas. The document provides examples for "making it wordy" and "making it concise" as practice exercises.

1. When Fewer is BetterWordiness

2. Wordy Example: In the case of Mais (TC, 1968), the taxpayer was able to exclude from gross income embezzled funds that were repaid during the year the funds were embezzled but the taxpayer was not allowed to exclude embezzled funds to be repaid in a subsequent year.Edited Example:In the case of Mais (TC, 1968) allowed the taxpayer was able to to exclude from gross income embezzled funds that were repaid during the same year the funds were embezzled but the taxpayer was not allowed to exclude embezzled funds to be those repaid in a subsequent later year.Better Wording:Mais (TC, 1968) allowed the taxpayer to exclude embezzled funds repaid during the same year but not those repaid in a later year.http://www2.gsu.edu/~accerl/wordiness/WO.html

3. Make Every Word CountGet to the point!BAD: In this essay I will talk about my opinions of the problems facing teenagers today.BETTER: Teenagers face problems.

4. Stay on topic!BAD: Trees are important to the ecosystem. They keep soil anchored so that other plants can live in it. They transform carbon dioxide into oxygen. And trees are beautiful, making everyone who sees them happy.

5. Be plain—not fancy.BAD: A college education makes one look forward to gaining sufficient knowledge whereby one can assist in the betterment of all in society. Enlightening the masses or utilizing the knowledge gained in a manner that assists others should be every graduate’s priority.BAD: The odors were sweet to his nose palate.

6. Re-examine sentence structure.BAD: The flavour of cinnamon tastes delicious to me.BETTER: Cinnamon tastes delicious to me.BEST: Cinnamon tastes delicious.

7. Avoid passive voice.BAD: The car was hit by the bus.BETTER: The bus hit the car.

8. Practice—Make it Wordy!Historically, women have been food providers.Alice fell down a rabbit hole.Edward and Jacob are competing for Bella.Popcorn is the best movie snack.

9. Practice—Make it Concise!It is important for persons to read the notes, advice and information detailed opposite and then complete all sections of the form prior to its immediate return to the agency via the envelope provided.High-quality learning environments are a necessary precondition for facilitation and enhancement of the ongoing learning process.At this point in time, our time schedules do not allow or permit further or additional work tasks.Staff members at all levels and in all areas possess the knowledge that our purpose and goal is to help consumers in the attainment of their needs.

10. Practice—Your TurnGo back to the writing you did earlier this class.Rewrite it so that it is at least half the length of the original, without losing any ideas.Staple the new version to the front of the old one, and hand it in.